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Anjali

@Pinkjali

Senior Member

Posted: 11 years ago

Fantastic blend of kggk and balh.. Chaya and kamal, i used to love them very much. Thanks for bringing them.. Raya bonding was also gud. And priya character toh was discribed very finely.. Hmm..!! Having little Suspense with small shruti. But the update and story concept is just too gud.. Update soon..

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luvbalh

@luvbalh

IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 11 years ago

just one thing i dont like is shruthi.. ram is already married, pihu hone chahiye na... mix kasamse too..will be fun...

plz continue will be pleasure reading

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jineejiggs

@jineejiggs

IF-Sizzlerz

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

Ram was already married and he has a daughter, and now he is getting married again, guys it seems very complicated yaar, yeh ho kya raha hain, I think I need to get more updates to get the clear picture, so update fast

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BawraMann

@BawraMann

Newbie

Posted: 11 years ago

All comments are welcome.. :) Do tell me what you think of my story :) I am sorry.. But I havent watched Kasam Se.. This is a simple love story of each one of the family members falling in love.. :) And yes.. Shruthi.. Guess.. :) Pihu ko aane mein todi waqt lagega ;)

Chapter 3: Mehendi hai gehera waali.. Haaton mein rehene waali..

Sab saath mein shaadi ka mahaul mein maze kar rahe the..

Priya sat with Natasha Chaya Rishab and Kamal.. Ram stole glances at Priya while Shruthi tugged his sherwani..

Shruthi: Papa..

Ram looks at her and smiles.. haan bolo..

Shruthi: Suyash uncle aaye hai.. and runs to Suyash Mehra..

Suyash lifts and urns her around.. Hi princess..

Shruthi hugs him.. Hi uncle..

Suyash lays his eyes on Priya.. She smiles to him.. He nods in aknowledgement..

Ram walks to Suyash.. Kaise ho yaar!

Suyash: Mein bilkul tik hu..

Ram: Woh Priya Sharma hai.. All of them including Priya look at Ram..

Chaya: Dekha bhabi... Bhaiya ne abhi..

Kamal: Correct.. Bhaiyaa aap chup kijiye.. Hum introduce karwaayenge..

Nutz: Haan all of them smile giggle and pull Priya along holding her arms..

Ram: Accha baba..

Suyash giggles..

Priya walks along.. with a smile.. with her hands full of mehendi..

Suyash and Ram look at her.. Her eyes twinkle.. Suyash puts Shruthi down.. As everyone bring her to them.. Rishab intterrupts..

Rishab: Arre mein bhabi ka sabse chota aur pyaara dewar hu.. Mein bataaunga..

Kamal: Chuupbe.. Mein bataunga..

Chaya and Nutz start.. Arre nahi.. Hum bataayenge..

Ram closes his ears.. hereas Priya giggles.. Suyash looks at Priya smile.. She was simple.. She had become the apple of everyones eyes even before she was a part of the family he thought..

Shruthi puts her tiny hands on her waist.. Chup!

Everyone looked at her..

Shruthi: clearing her throat.. She looked up at Priya.. Mumma..

Priya knelt down.. And smiled.. Haan bolo meri princess..

Shruthi kissed her cheek and turned to Suyash...

Shruthi: Yeh meri mumma hai..

Everyone giggled..

Suyash knelt down Oho! Namaste Shruthi ki mumma..

Priya: Namaste Mr.Mehra..

Ram looks at the way Suyash was looking at Priya.. Aakir mard hai.. toh jalan toh hogi hi..

Priya noticed this and she smiled..

Kamal: Shruthi maiyya.. Aapki hogayi toh chale.. Everyone burst into laughter.. And get busy..

Krishuji calls Suyuash who leaves..

Priya stands up as everyone leave.. and looks at Ram..

Ram: Looks at her with anger..

Priya smiles.. Kya hua Mr. Kapoor.. ?

Vikram walks with Neha..

Neha: Arre Vikram.. Tumhe nahi lagtha ki kahi se jalne ki bhoo aarahi hai..

Vikram: Looks at Priya.. Bhabi.. Neha tik keherahi hai..

They both stands with thier arms crossed beside Priya..

Ram: Looks at them angrily and storms..

Priya: Neha.. Yeh tum dono ne kya kiya..

Vik: Arre kuch nahi hoga bhabi..

Neha: Vikram tum Ram ko samhaalo.. Hum ladkiyon ko sajh sawarna hai..

Neha drags Priya.. And Vik goes in search of Ram..

In the evening..

Its a quiet wedding where Ram and Priya take saath phere and promise eachother of a journey of togetherness..

Scene shifts to Ram's room..

Natasha Chaya and Neha are Bring Priya up.. They Have decorated the bed.. They make her sit in front of the mirror.. And they pose behind her checking themselves..

Priya looks at herself in the mirror.. Her maangtika covering her sindoor.. and the mangal sutr dangling down her neck.. She notices Ram standing at the door.. And looking at her.. She looks at him and smiles.. He smiles back at her.. Natasha coughs.. Ahem.. Bhaiyya.. Aap yaha kya karrahe hai..

Neha: Oho fatty! yeh kya.. Wah.. Kya pyaar hai..

Chayya: Neha tumhe na mein nahi chodne waali.. Phire Ram bhaiyya ko mota kaha.. And Chaya starts running behind her.. nutz joins them and they run out of the room.. Ram and Priya giggle at them.. And Ram walks in..

Priya looks down and smiles.. In her soft voice.. Mr.Kapoor..

Ram: Ram.. Ram naam hai mera.. Ms. Sharma.. They look at each other in the mirror.. Ram comes and stands behind her..

Priya: She looks down and says.. Ms. Sharma nahi.. Mrs. Ram Agarwal.. Ram smiles putting his hand possesively on her shoulder.. Priya.. Tum jaana nahi chahogi ki Shruthi ki maa kaun hai..

Shruthi runs into the room.. Mumma.. Mumma..

Priya smiles and turns to her.. Arre.. Dheere Shruthi.. Ghir jaaogi..

Shruthi jumped nto Priyas lap.. And Priya hugged her..

Priya: Bolo.. kya baat hai..

Shruthi looks at priya.. Mumma kya mein aapke saath sosakthi hu aaj.. Priya laughed at Shruthi's questione.. While Ram scratched his temple.. Thinking.. Wah! Kya baath hai.. Mera kismat hi kharaab hai..

Priya: Haan bilkul.. Shruthi hugs her.. Ram fakes a smile..

Kamal and Rishab rush into the room.. They look at Priya and shruthi and look at eachother..

Shruthi jumps.. Chahu.. mumma ne haan kardi.. and happily runs out of the room..

Rishab looks at ram who looks at him furious..

Rishab: Bhai aap zara baahar.. and gulps.. Ram walks out with Rishab..

Kamal: Bhabi.. Aapne haan kardi? And walks and kneels in front of her.. Holding her hands.. Bhabi.. Sach mein aapko bura nahi laga..

Priya: Arre yeh kya hua tumhe.. Bura kyu lagega..

Kamal smiles with tears in his eyes.. Aap bohot acchi hai bhabi..

He puts his head on her lap.. Priya brushes his hair.. Kya hua Kamal..?

Kamal: Lifts his head.. And smiles.. He gets up and runs out..

Natasha makes Priya sit on the bed and hands a glass full of garam doodh..

Nutz: Bhabi.. Shruthi ko mein sambhaalungi.. And winks..

Ram: walks into the room and puts his hands on his waist.. Choti.. Out!

Nutz: Laughs and runs out switching off the lights from outside.. the room is lit by candles..

Ram locks the door and turns to Priya.. The bed is filled with Rose petals.. Priya looks beautiful in the red lehenga.. The flowers dangle down in strips around their bed.. He walks to her.. She pulls her legs closer to herself..

Ram sits beside her.. And says Ab.. He is interrupted with her fragrance.. The flowers around him smelt wonderful.. but her aroma was something else.. He was enchanted..

Priya keeps the glass on the shelf beside the head rest of the bed..

Ram thinking.. Aaj subah pata bhi nahi tha.. Ab shaadi bhi hogayi.. gulps as he looks at her..

Priya: Woh.. aap kuch keherahe the..

Ram: Shaadi hogayi.. Thinking.. Arre yeh itni khubsoorat kyu hai..

Priya: Umm.. Mein uss side pe sojau?

Ram: Haan.. He is lost in her eyes.. She slides to the other side and turns away from him... And is about to get down.. Ram holds her hand..He smiles thinking to himself.. Kitni komal hai.. Her heart beats faster..

Ram : Acchi lagrahi ho..

Priya smiles.. he lets go of her hand.. And both of them lie down beside each other..

Priya: Yeh shaadi..She Goes silent..

Ram: Haan itna jaldi mein hua.. Shuruwaat hum dosti se kare.. Turns to her.. He puts his hand forward..

Priya smiles and shakes his hand..

Ram gives his charming smile and says a fast Good Night Biwi..

Priya bites her lips as Ram adjust himself close to Priya and pulls the duvet on them.. She turns her back to him..And he conviniently puts his hand on her waist.. She smiles.. And they both dose off..

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Mani

@Mani-RK

IF-Sizzlerz

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

wow it was beautiful wanna knw abt shruti's mom cont soon

i think der r too many characters in the story but story is progressing in a good way👍🏼

Edited by ramsakshiroxxx - 11 years ago

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jineejiggs

@jineejiggs

IF-Sizzlerz

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

kabhi Mr. Kapoor toh kabhi Agarwal, yaar better let it be Kapoor, and it was nice update, but what abt Shruti's mother, kuch toh garbar hain, wanna know the secret so plz update ASAP

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Ananya

@anuraya

Senior Member

Posted: 11 years ago

beautiful yaar..kggk nd balh mix lvly updates..cntinue soon :)

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Raya_some

@Raya_some

Senior Member

Posted: 11 years ago

its magical i mean really very nice but pls let them be mr n mrs ram kapoor not agarwal ... its a very humble request pls :) ... and i'm very curious to know about shruti's mom as far story suggests i think she is not rams daughter that what i feel .. everything else was just flawless just make one change they sound better as kapoors not agarwals... else was just awesome update soon curious about shruti.. ?????

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shreya

@Ramdeewani

IF-Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

Read all the parts last night but couldnt comment

marriage part was fast but no issues

n is this suyash mehra has fallen for priya??😕

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BawraMann

@BawraMann

Newbie

Posted: 11 years ago

Sach bolu.. Apsab mein se bohot saare bole ki Agarwal nahi.. Kapoor banado.. Par. Yehi toh Raaz hai HumRaaz.. Waqt guzarthe hi aapsab ko patachaljaayega.. Abhi keliye.. Priya ne Mr. Kapoor kyu kaha.. Yeh baath ko.. Dimaag mein rakhiyega..

Chapter 4: Suhaag raath..

Ram lies in the bed with his handover Priyas waist on the duvet. . Ek ajeeb sa apnapan tha.. Kuch khaas.. Bohot bechaini thi.. Ram could smell her fragrant perfume.. It was tingling his senses.. Priya felt his breath on the crook of her neck.. The lights had dimmed and there was discomfort because of the distance.. There was a knock on the door. They could hear Shruthi say mama.. Darwaza kholo na.. Priya wanted move but to her surprise. Ram pulled her into his embrace.. And turned her to face him.. They were close to each other.. Rams action had moved the duvet away from them down to their knees.. The dark night had cold winds accompanying the moon light into the room.. Ram and Priya loked at each others eyes.. Ram said.. abhi nahi.. Priya looked at him… And smiled..

Priya: Shruthi hai..

Ram: Toh… ?

Priya bit her lower lip.. Mein Jau..

Ram made a pupy face… Lekin aaj raath.. He pulls her closer.. Priya places her palm on his chest.. He kisses her forhead.. And lossens his grip.. Priya gets up and walks to the door and opens it… It was as dark outside as it was in their room.. Shruthi smiled at Priya and hugged her knees..

Priya: Kaha the aap.. Mumma ke saath sona than a aapko..

Shruthi says.. Yes mumma.. And Priya locks the door as Shruthi runs to the bed And crawls up to her father..

Ram hugs her.. Priya walks to her side of the bed and slips in..

Shruthi: Mumma.. Aap lori gaona mereliye..

Priya: Umm.. Kaunsa.. ?

Ram: Grinning.. Bada natkat.. And tikles Shruthi.. She giggles..

Shruthi cuddles close to Priya hugging her by her stomach.. And Ram also cuddles close to them.. Priya rests her elbow on the pillow and rests her head on her palm.. Ram puts his right hand on her waist.. cuddling close to Shruthi.. Shruthi looks at Ram.. Papa.. tickle mumma.. na..

Both father and daughter naughtily grin at each other.. And start tickling Priya.. Priya giggles.. Ram looks at her.. Uff.. Her smile was out of this world.. Completely enchanting..

Shruthi hugs her.. Gaona.. Priya smiles to her.. And sings..

Bada natkat hai re.. She looked at Ram who smiled to her.. Her voice was melodious..

Krishan kanaiyaa.. Shruthi dug her head into Priyas belly And closed her eyes..

Kaa kare yashoda maiyaa.. oho.. Priya brushed her fingers through Shruthis hair..

Bada natkat hai re..

Mere jeevan ka tu ek hi sapna..

Joh koi dekhe tohe.. Samjhe who apna... Ram looks at her.. Her eyes overflowing with love for his daughter..

Aisa hi pyara.. She looked at him.. Banke sawariyan.. She looked beautiful he thought..

She looks back at shruthi.. Laage na kisikinazar.. Tum ho joh apna..

Lala la laa la.. Shruthi smiled as she slowly drifted off to sleep..

Ram: Wah aaj bohot jaldi sogayi..

Priya: Haan.. Who thak chuki hai shayad.. And places a kiss on Shruthi's forehead.. Shruthi stirs in sleep..

Ram looks at her lustfully.. Aur mereliye.. With twinkle in his eyes.. Priya blushes and lowers her eyes.. She looks at Ram who looks at her longingly.. She move her lips to his forhead and places a feathery kiss.. She looks at his eyes.. Which are fixed on her lips.. She smiles and moves back.. Ram shuts his eyes and turns to sleep on his back thinking.. Why am I so drawn to her..

Priya smiles.. Thinking.. Ram.. Mein aapki hu..

Ram looks at her in response.. She smiles.. He leans close to her.. His hand back on her waist with Shruthi in the minddle.. He looks at her lips.. Lush Beautiful lips with a small mole on the top.. of her upper lip.. He looked at her eyes.. The beautiful eyes neatly lined with kohl blinked in approval. And he placed a feathery kiss on her lips.. She moved back.. And smiled.. She pointed at Shruthi and Ram flashed a naughty smile.. They looked at eachother with love.. And slept..

Precap:

Priya: Chodiyena..

Ram: Kyu..

Priya: Ouch.. Yeh aap.. Who.. Kamal aajaayega..

Ram: Umm..

Priya: Please.. Chodiyena..

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