Res.. eee sorry.. this one last time..
unres
With this u completely thwarted my plans on going slow with unresing.. how cud i read this n nt comment right away is beyong me..!!😳 But i can't delay this further!! U hv no idea how amazing this one is!! all the OSs are so different from one another that we can't really compare but this one was a bold attempt at an OS as the title suggests and u hv done the best u cud hv done with the concept!! U hv written it so well that it hs already made it to my list of favourites.. No not bcos of the content😛 but for the writing style and the overall appeal!!
I don't know if u made a conscious effort to mk it seem dat way but this one here is very balanced in its approach.. at first glance it seems wat its meant to be.. a fun read, highly enjoyable n very engrossing for obvious reasons!! but in between we hv few swaron bits that'l nvr fail to demand serious attention and tug at a swaronians heart regardless of the mood set by the os..
But the truth was that they enjoyed keeping it a secret. There was an odd thrill to it, a contagious excitement. But the still deeper truth was that they were scared of what it would do to them. There would be no more privacy, they would be compelled to share their intimate moments. And the thought of sharing even a single memory of theirs with someone else was unacceptable by both. The fact that only the both of them knew about it, lent a certain charm to each memory. It was their own little world where nothing else and no one else mattered. And anyone intruding upon it felt hurtful.
Beautifully put.. this is our swaron..!!
As his eyes began to widen, he clenched his teeth, to stop them from widening anymore. His hands curled up into a fist, to quiet his heart which had began singing a rapid, intense tune. He put all his mental energy into stopping his breath from dancing a fast paced dance to the rhythm of his heart. But he couldn't stop the heat wave that her hand send through his body, directly towards his heart, as if fuelling it on.
No amount of words cn appreciate how how amazing u are with such descriptions so i'l kp mum..
of crs i hv other favourite bits as well but i won't quote them.. i think i'l read them again!!
P.S as meera said u don't need to be conscious about ur writing.. u can never really go wrong with any storyline!! 🤗
Edited by lyfisbeautiful - 11 years ago
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