Finished reading story no 1.
I had some difficulty in understanding it because of the grammar. Request the writer to give some attention to this aspect.
However the story was very good. π it was nice idea to take up the Zoravar track... π
Abhijeet remembering his past is tough to digest but we can assume that all his old friends have kept in touch with him and tried to tell him stuff about his past.
Then the thing about Daya's secret mission...was it linked to finding Zoravar's whereabouts? The reason why he was away was not clear. Maybe you could have connected it more clearly.
Overall I liked the story. Very nice attempt. You have some good ideas, so please try writing more stories.Edited by visrom - 11 years ago
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