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Posted: 11 years ago
#21

Originally posted by: saveeta24

Archu first sorry for late reply and of course will not miss reading your beautiful SS..


Very well written with a blend of past and present.loved the flow of the story..๐Ÿ‘

Agni moment where agam asking nimrit to open her eyes so heart touching..could feel wat's agam going through seeing nimrit in coma..

Their beautiful moment also is so beautifully penned down.love reading the SS ..do continue..

You doing a great job..๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ






a big thanks savee mai jaanati hu tum bahut bussy rahati ho so no sorry ok. Tumhe pasand aaya jo khud hi itani achhi writer hai so that i m glad. Will continue tommorow. Thanks.
Posted: 11 years ago
#22
 
thanks a lottt...
 
 
what's ur name??
Posted: 11 years ago
#23
                                                                    
here is the part 3 of my SS---
                                               hope ki sabko pasand aaye...
 
 
 
                                                 PART -----3
 
 
 
  PREVIOUS:- 
 
Agam nimrit ke khayyalo me khokar ye soch raha tha ki jab wo MANAALI gaye tab unhe kitana mazaa aaya tha aur ek naye ehsaas ka ehsaas bhi unhe kis tarah hua tha...ab aage...
 
 
  CONTINUE :- 
 
                                
                                   "to ye aa gaya aapaka khana dr.agam, waitor TEJ aapaki khidmat me haazir hai"  ,  tej ne khane ki thali ko table par rakhate huye kaha.
 
                                   
 
                                    tej ki awaaz s agam jo abhi tak apane aur nimrit ke khayaalo me kahi door tak khoya tha waapas apane present me chala aaya...
 
 
                                    "hmmm,  kuch kaha tumne tej??" , agam ne aashchary se pucha.
 
 
                                      "sirf kaha nahi , kiya hai ,  tumhare liye waitor ka bhi kaam kiya hai maine aaj samajhe...dosto ke liye bhi kya kya karana padata hai aur tumhe hai ki kuch  pata hi nahi hai !!" , tej ne nakali gussa   karate huye agam se kaha.
 
 
                                      " i m sorry tej wo..wo ..mera dhyaan nahi tha".
 
 
                                       "arrey budhuu its ok.  sorry kahane ki koi jarurat nahi hai !! kya mai kabhi tumase naraaz ho sakata hu bhala ?",      tej ne smile dete huye  agam ke kandhe par apana haath rakhate huye kaha.
 
 
                                       "achha chal ab khana khaa le, tab tak mai apani shift khatm karake aata hu thik hai ! "  ,   aur phir tej waha se chala gaya...
 
 
                                          agam ne jaise hi ek niwala todkar muh me dalane jaa raha tha waise hi achanak usi aankho ke saamane   nimrit ka maasoom chehara aa gaya   aur use khayyal aaya...ki   nimrit ne itane dino se paani tak nahi piya hai ...sirf medicines aur injections par hi wo zinda hai itane dino se... 
 
 
                                        agam ne nimrit ki bed ki taraf dekha aur usaka saara dil dard se bhar gaya...usaki aankho me na chahate huye bhi aansu bhar  gaye aur dheere se usaki aankho se bahane lage...
 
 
                                         "mai us manhus din ko kabhi nahi bhool paunga nimrit , jis din tum mujhase bichad gayi thi , mujhase door ho gayi, jis din maine tumhe kho diya , aur tumhari ye haalat ho gayi... mai kabhi nahi bhool sakata...mai kuch bhi nahi kar paaya isake liye mai khud ko kabhi maaf nahi kar paaunga  nimrit .kabhi nahi..."
 
 
                                 ek din pahale tak sab kuch thik tha ...kitani khush thi tum MANAALI  aakar...par dusare hi din sabkuch badal gaya...sab khatm ho gaya...
 
 
 
 
         FLASHBACK  :---:--:--:---:--:---:--:--:---
 
 
                                      Agam aur nimrit dusare din bazar jaane ka sochate hai...morning me thand to hoti hai par saath hi suraj ki mhakhmali , gunguni dhup bhi khili hati hai...jisase mausum aur bhi beautifull ho jaata hai ...
 
 
 
                                           "Nimrit tum chal rahi ho na  ya phir mai jau ??" , agam ne jor se nimrit se kaha.
 
 
                                             "shayad nahi !!",  nimrit ne apane room se bahar aate huye kaha.
 
 
                                               usane shwall odhake rakhi thi apane chaaro taraf...
 
 
                                                "par kyu ?? " , agam ne shocked hakar puchha.
 
 
                                     "wo kya hai na ...akkchhiii ..."
 
 
                                       "arrey nimrit tumhe to bahut sardi ho gayi hai..."
 
                          "haan wahi to mai kahana ...akkchhhiii..."
                          
                           " mai samajh gaya, nimrit .  tumhe sach me bahut sardi ho gayi hai aur aaj to thandi bhi jyaada hai baahr...tum yahi par aaram karo...mujhe  bazzar  jakar kuch medicines laani hai ...wo hume yaha ke paas ke gaao me jakar logo ka chekup karana hai na isliye...thik hai..."
 
 
                             "thik hai par jaldi aana agam ,,  wo  bahar bahut sardi hai na ...kahi tumhe bhi sardi ho gayi to??"
 
                             nimrit usake baare me itani chinta karati hai ye dekhakar agam ko achha laga..
 
                             "thik hai jaldi aaunga par tum apana khayaal rakhana. ok.'
                              "ok"
agam ke waha se jaane ke 15 min baad nimrit ke guest house mein ek villagear ( gaav wala) aata hai...wo bahut ghabraaya hua tha aur usaki aankho se aansu bah rahe the...usaki aisi haalat dekh nimrit ne usase puchha ki hua kya hai...
 
                   "dr. sahiba mere bete ko bacha lijiye...use bahut dino se bukhaar hiai aur thik hi  nahi ho raha hai...par aaj to usaki haalat bahut kharaab ho gayi hai...wo aankhien bhi nahi khol raha hai...aap jaldi chaliye na mere saath...
 
                     "par meri..."
 
                      "saare doctors ne mana kar diya hai...ab sirf aap hi ek umeed hai...mere bete ki jaan bacha lijiye..."
 
                       use u rota dekh nimrit ka dill pighal gaya...usane usake saath jaane ka faisala kiya...apani tabiyat ki parwaah kiye bina...
 
                       "par agam bhi yaha nahi hai ab kya karu ??" 
 
                      nimrit ne ek paper pe note likh di aur us villegear   ke saath usake gaon ki taraf nikal padi...
 
 
                      aadhe raaste me unaki gaadi barf ki vajah se kharaaab ho gayi...
                         
                   "ab kya hoga !!" , nimrit ko kuch sujh nahi raha tha.
 
                    "dr. sahiba mera gaav bas kuch hi doori par hai...aap chahe to hum paidal bhi jaa sakate hai ..."
 
                     "thik hai chalo"
 
                     tabhi achanak waha bhaari  snow fall shur ho jaata hai...waha barf ka tufaan aa jaata hai...
chaaro taraf  barf hi  barf  hawa me bikharne lagati hai...wo itana bhayaaanak hota hai ki aaspaas tak ka  kuch bhi dikhayi nahi deta hai...jaise barf ka  ghana  kohara  sa  cha  jaata  hai...jisaki vajah  se  nimrit  apani   jagah  se  bhatak  jaati  hai...
 
                     nimrit ko kuch bhi samajh me nahi aa raha tha  ki  kya  kare wo...pahale se hi usaki tabiyat kharaab hone ki vajah se wo kkamjoor ho chuki thi...
 
                     itane me use kuch zor se tutane  ki  aur  usaki taraf  koi  cheej  speed se aane ki  awaaz   sunai  deti  hai...kyuki  kohara  itana  ghana   tha ki nimrit ko kuch bhi dikhayi nahi de raha tha  aaspaas ka...
 
                     achanak koi cheej usase jor se takrai aur nimrit ke aankho ke saamane andhera chaane laga aur wo behosh ho gayi...
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
                   udhar tufan ke  aane ki vajah se agam jaldi  guesthouse  luat aata hai.
        
                   "nimrit kaha ho tum ? tunhe pata hai bahar kitana bada barf ka tufaan  aaya  hai ?"
 
                    nimrit ke kamare se koi awaaz na sunakar wo andar jaakar dekhata hai , to waha par bhi use nimrit nahi milati...jaise hi wo peeche mudata hai  use table par ek paper dikhata hai jo nimrit ne likha hota hai...wo padhane ke baad to usake pairo tale  zameen  kisak jaati hai...wo kisi statue ki tarah khada ka khada hi rah jaata hai...use samajh jaata hai ki nimrit usi  disha me gayi  hai jaha wo tufaan  aaya hai...
 
                      wo jaldi se  nimrit ko dhundhane ke liye akele hi  nikal padata  hai...tab tak wo tufaan  kamjoor hokar  tham  chuka   hota hai...
 
                       raaste me use  wahi  gaav wala milata hai jisase nimrit bichadi thi...wo agam ko batata hai ki wo kis  disha  me bhatak gayi  thi...
 
              agam ko khud ka koi hosh nahi tha wo bas nimrit ko kaisi bhi haal me dhundhna chahata tha...use  sahi salamat   dekhana  chahata  tha...
 
               agam nimrit ko  jor jor awaaz dekar dhundhata  hai is umeed mein ki shaayad wo kahi se use waapas reply de...par  aadha ghanta dundhane ke baad bhi use nimrit nahi milati...nimrit ka kahi pata nahi chalata...
 
                "nimrit kaha ho ...kaha ho tum?? awaaz do mujhe" , agam jor jor se nimrit ko awaaz de raha tha...
 
                "kya tum sun rahi ho nimrit ??? kaha ho tum ???"
 
                "please mujhe reply do...please mujhe ekbaar  reply do..."   ,    aisa kahate huye agam zameen par dono ghutno ke bal baith gaya aur usaki aankho se aansu nikal pade...
 
                  tabhi use side ki jmi huyi barf me kuch hulchal mahasus huyi...
 
                  usane dekha ki barf me se kisi ka haath  baahar  nikala hua  hai jo  barf me dab gaya hai., par zinda hai...
 
                   agam ne jaldi se apane haatho se waha se barf ko hataya aur dekha ki wo aur koi nahi balki nimrit hai...jo  himskhalan (barf ke tufaan) ki vajah se barf ke andar dab gayi thi... 
 
                      
  
 
  to be continued...
 hope ki thik thak ho.
  thoda emotional hai pata nahi sabko achha lagega  ki nahi ???
                     
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
                               
 
                                            
 
                      
                              
                                
 
                  
                                                
 
 
                                             
 
 
 
                             
                 
 
 
 
                            
 
 
                                           
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
    
 
 
 
                              
 
                       
Edited by Anurna - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#24
thnk u soo mch fr d wonderful update archu๐Ÿ˜Š its reely nyc !!!...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Such a wonderful episode๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ. Anxiously waiting for the next part and I love emotional scenes ๐Ÿ˜‰
Posted: 11 years ago
#26

Originally posted by: lakshmi42

Such a wonderful episode๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ. Anxiously waiting for the next part and I love emotional scenes๐Ÿ˜‰

thanks a lot. Will write soon.
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Posted: 11 years ago
#27
That was a very emotional update dear.

Can't visualize nimrit in that condition , my heart cries visualizing it.
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Posted: 11 years ago
#28
read both parts 2 and 3 in one go... just cudnt stop reading... very interesting and well written archu...
 
so Nimrit had an accident in an avalanche ,,, and this entire episode has brought agam n nimrit closer and made them reaise their feelings for each other ... now they will know that jo ehsaas woh ek doosre ke liye mehsoos kar rahe the woh Pyaar hai...๐Ÿ˜‰
 
wonderful FF... do update soon...
Posted: 11 years ago
#29
@krithi- thank u very much. Ya it was emotional one par dard ke baad marham bhi to milta hai . Ye dard hi dono ko paas layega.       @ charu - thanks a lot. U like it i m so happy. Next bhi pm kar dungi.
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Posted: 11 years ago
#30
very sad, yet very heart touching! nicely written archu. liked the part where agam remembers the doomed day. emotional rollercoaster :)