~~ *Door To Hell* ~~ - Page 8

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Posted: 11 years ago
#71
Nyce prolouge 😃
louisans already knw abt this trio . . . . . 😳
& cuming there to see them performing . . . cool! 😉
story to ab banegi . . . 😛
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Posted: 11 years ago
#72
Amazing prologue nimmi
loved it
its wonderful
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Posted: 11 years ago
#73
Hey Fantasticcc plz continue soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
#74
awesome story line...loved it very much
waiting eagerly for 1 chapter
continue soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
#75
nice prolouge...
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Posted: 11 years ago
#76
 Dackina Maliforia.. intrsting name.. i likd it!!
porologue reflcts sum tale like story .. i mean a story which is rili a fictious story read in books..
but i love it..😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
#77

Chapter 1

 

Sight of The Club..

 

As always the club was full of crazy people dancing like maniacs..

( Guyz I will nt tell again and again that this club isn't for everyone.. just some SPECIAL ONES )

But today something was different..


The whole club was stunningly decorated and there was hustle and bustle all over as if someone special.. more special was about to arrive..

 

Manager of the club was like about to cry at his state… decoration pieces all over him like he was been decorated.. his suit was torn into small pieces.. as this arrival of MidNight Madness was in a rush.. just few hours before he got the news and now just look at his state..

 

Manager : Go fast !! … Do this !! …… Do that !!

Wait.. wait a min! WHERE THE HELL IS THE HOST??

He shouted in frustration..

 

The Host *Poor Soul* reacher near the manager running and breathing heavily…

 

H : yes! Sir.. m here.. phewww

 

M : why r u so irresponsible??

 

H : sir emm.. wo.. actually.. I …

 

M : huh!! Stop blabbering and run through you notes..

 

Losuains

 

N : hey dude! U knw what ! I think there is a special event at Welcome To Hell club !!

He said excitingly..

 

Sw: hmm…

He said deeply engrossed in his thoughts about something or I should say someone and staring at the screen of his lappy.. *laptop*

 

N: dude kahan kho gaya..

He said waving his hand in front of him..

But no reaction..

 

N : dude…

He said and sits beside him and then his eyes went to the picture of a girl…

It was picture of his teenage friend and best friend ever…

 

N: woahhh ehm ehm swayam and staring at a girl..

He said looking dreamily at that picture..

 

All stared at swayam as if he had murdered swayam..

Swayam and that too staring at a girl's picture??

This was unbelievable..

 

But here swayam wasn't having any problem.. he know many eyes were on him but he felt too lazy to get his eyes off that picture…

He gently caressed the picture catching all the emotions he could..

 

The pure beauty of her face.. the twinkling eyes and the smile which was disappeared because of him..

He still remember that horrible night's incident..

 

 

Soon her eyes were watery.. these were the tears of pain.. he don't know why but he today after 3 whole years , he stared at her this much…  all these nights he wasn't able to sleep..

 

Tears rolled down his cheeks and he shuddered when he heard her scream and her last conversation ….

He was shivering.. all looked at him in surprise… all came to him to console her..

 

N : abbey ye teri purani girl friend to nhi jot u use yaad kar k ro raha he??

 

He said trying to make the atmosphere normal..

 

Sw: stop it nil… she is my life.. I love her.. and I just cant.. just cant control myself more..

 

He started crying badly… rey hugged him and asked..

*Rey didn't saw her face*

 

R : What happened bro?? tu kabhi itna synti nhi hua..

 

Sw : wo.. wo.. wo meru best friend thi..

He said sobbing..

 

R : to tu ro kyun rha he??

 

Sw : wo.. wo.. meri wajeh se..

 

R : swayam bolo kya??

 

Sw : wo uski meri wajeh se death hogaye..

He said in a go and started crying badly.. the guilt of losing her was there in his eyes..

Guilt… what is it?? No punishment is so terrible as prosperous guilt.

The difference between guilt and shame is very clear—in theory. We feel guilty for what we do. We feel shame for what we are.

 

 

 

 

 

MidNight Madness

 

: arghhh JUST STOP SHOUTING U IDIOT !!

 

: look ! tu uth ja warna u knw what can I do??

He said dramatically is if she will listen to her..

 

: Get Your butts off from here !!!

She again shouted..

 

V : oye teri to !! don't call me moron han !! m handsome hunk of Dackina Maliforia … the hottest dude han !!

 

This was when her sleep was totally gone..

She burst out laughing and rofling at his words…

Hahhahaha this was hell !!

 

: U and that too HANDSOME HUNK??? HAWWTT??

She said dramatically..

He just pouted.. and then acted like weeping like a new born baby ..

 

: awww ! huh .. I didn't feel pity on you !!

Now gets ur butts out from my room.. I want to change..

 

V: Kritz you u always make fun of me?? As if m nt h-a-w-t..

He said pouting…

 

K: oh yaa !! well its because u r my bestie and I can do whatever I want..

 

V : God where the hell am i??

He said praying to God for his forgiveness for sins of his 1st life. ( which u guyz called as pichle janam )

 

K : in Hell !!

She said casually while he was busy with making creepy faces..

 

K : Now don't create those sickening faces and GET OUT !!

 

V : hawww u..

 

Before he could say anything , they heard a shout from dining table..

 

: COME FAST AND EAT YOUR BREAKFAST ! KIDDO

 

K : lol.. OK GRANNY !!

 

The person groaned..

 

: Well I will love to be your granny but now come fast and eat your breakfast FOR GOD'S SAKE !!

 

V : as if I will not come !! cominggg granny ! and plz make some healthy food na… m too much hungry…

 

K : huh u r always greedy.. MORON !

 

V : well whatsoever u lizard !!

 

K : WHAT?? WTH! How dare you call me lizard??

Granny look he called me lizard!!

 

: WHAT?? VICKY U A** H*** COME OUT RIGHT NOW !!

 

V : but granny ! she called me moron !!

 

: WHAT?? YOU TOO ARE MAD!  COME OUT RIGHT NOW OR I WILL COME IN!

 

Both shouted : NO NO ! we will come out..

And then they sighed..

 

Phewww…




sigh... done with my update.. i know its not my best..

but m feeling so bad at what kind of reviews i m getting these days.. :( .. whatever !! i think my writing skills are going weak and weak day by day..


Hope u will like it..

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Posted: 11 years ago
#78
Awesome chapter...

wanted to know ki  kaun thi swayam ki friend.. and rey ne uski photo nhi dekhi.. sense something fishy...

loved kricky's fight...

bechaara manager.. afterall group inna accha hai yaar... toh usse bhi thoda sehna padega...

so finally the 2 groups are meeting yaayyy...

waiting for next part... thodi havayein toh chalni chahiye na...
Edited by kriyansh24 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#79
nice starting felt bad 4 sway am
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Posted: 11 years ago
#80
awesome update...loved it very much
it was superb hahah the poor manager...his condition is worth watching haa...loved it
and whose s swayam's best friend and what happened to her o gosh cant see swayam crying...
 
and kria and vicky are too good and funny
loved the update
waiting eagerly for next part
continue soon