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Characters in this part

Prince Caspian



General Glozelle





Healer -- A very beautiful blue eyed girl ... she is a junior maid at castle


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--- CHAPTER # 2 ... Heir, General and Maid ---

In the absence of a true King, the land of Narnia was governed by a Lord Protector, the Lord Miraz. Lord Miraz was the younger brother of the late King Caspian IX, and thus Prince Caspian's uncle. Miraz had never been content with being a Lord or Lord Protector, though. He coveted his brother's throne, but without an heir of his own, and with the true heir still living, there was little Miraz could do to claim it. Miraz had a plan though, a plan which hinged on the birth of his first born. If the child was a boy, then Miraz would give "the order" and his loyal men would commit the highest crime of treason: the murder of His Majesty Prince Caspian X. Miraz, having years of practice, already had a cover story set to hide his crimes, and his wife was only moments away from giving birth.

Dr. Cornelius had been the Prince's tutor for nine years now. A few hours each day, the Prince would study grammar, mathematics, or history. His favorite lesson though was astronomy. For when he studied astronomy, the Doctor would take Caspian to the top of one of the towers'though not the tallest tower, but the one with six empty rooms below'and after doing a bit of astronomy, Dr. Cornelius would tell of Old Narnia. Caspian longed to hear these tales, tales his uncle, most certainly, would not approve of.

Narnia had not always been ruled by the Telmarine race and the Caspian line. Before Caspian I, came and conquered, Narnia was inhabited by talking beasts, Centaurs, Dwarfs, Dryads, and Naiads and other Narnian Cratures. And centuries before the Telmarines invaded, Narnia was governed by four sovereign rulers; the Kings and Queens of Old. They were High King Peter the Magnificent and his younger siblings, Queen Susan the Gentle, King Edmund the Just, and Queen Lucy the Valiant. Then of course there was the greatest Old Narnian, Aslan the Great Lion; the King over All Kings in Narnia and its creator. These Old Narnians were now thought of as nothing more than myths and fairy tales, even Aslan. Caspian X, Dr. Cornelius, and a few other Telmarines, however, secretly wished that Narnia would return to the way it had once been.

Prince was 16 and he is not very far from his throne and crown This was Dr. Cornelius' hope, that in feeding the Prince's secret desires and educating him on Narnia, Caspian X would do all he could to restore Narnia when he became king.

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Caspian

Gen Glozelle

Writer's POV
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Prince and General in Woods

It is the order from Lord Protector Miraz -- a part of woods about thirty miles west needed to be surveyed, the very fringe of it, a routine control for any signs of threat. As always, those signs remained nameless, imprecise, unspoken, but well named in the minds of all who concerned themselves with them.


The savage beasts of Old Times.

A bunch of superstitious old women, Glozelle thought with a flurry of anger running through him at the sight of the miniature regiment he himself assigned for the task. Scared of the woods in broad daylight!

The General sank his sword into the scabbard with a sharp, smooth slide, hilt hitting and locking on the metal rim of the sheath. One glance was enough to check his trusted weapon, left hand resting on the ornamental yet somehow ominous swirls caging the coarse handle. He was free from nervousness that seemed to beset one of the fourteen men standing before him ' the soldier was clearly inexperienced, though not in his first youth, checking his sword several times, fiddling with the buckle of the belt running across his chest.

Woods never breathed dread into him. He crossed the border into them without a touch of fear, but always with a tingle of reverence that came from some depths within himself that he did not yet identify during his life. There was life among the roots and branches, hidden and different from his own, and perhaps harboring a secret feared so by all the Telmarines.

The rest of his men seemed a tad on edge as well, clearly wishing they weren't the ones assigned to the mission, but he dismissed their fretting. Lord Miraz's orders were clear .

Glozelle exhaled a quiet, personal sigh of disapproval as he regarded the soldier. Nerves weren't an ally when exposed and allowed control over one's body. They could only be coined into aid when held by the reins and used to sharpen the instincts to deliver any signs of alert from the surroundings. Nerves had to be enslaved, otherwise they made the man their slave and led him into doubled danger.

"Ready, men,"

he more commanded than asked, the soldiers straightening before him with appearances of confidence that convinced him only halfway through. But he needn't concern himself with their fears ' the fear of Lord Miraz's wrath for disobedience was even greater than the fear of woods, great enough to goad them into the darkest parts of the uncharted forests.

He gestured towards the line of horses gathered near the exit from the courtyard, giving the silent command to mount and ready, stopping on the way towards his own mount to pull on his leather gauntlets.

The dark heavy double door of the castle opened, a tall, slender and armoured figure emerging, pulling on his own gauntlets, sword chinking by his side as the guards bowed low from the waist as he passed them on his lively but firm descent down the stone steps, onto the sandstone floor of the courtyard.

Prince Caspian approached without a trace of hesitation or doubt in his steps, yet somehow preserving the gentleness of stance that his dearly departed mother seemed to have passed onto him. While the steps of the future King were soundless due to his stealth and soft leather boots, matching his pace sounded a knock of horse hooves coming from behind, and Glozelle did not need to turn to see the Prince's magnificent stallion being led towards the gathered group.

"Your Majesty"!!

Glozelle bowed in curtsey to Crown Prince

"I'm coming with you,"

the Prince announced with slight node, slinging a leather bag over his shoulder in an almost nonchalant gesture.

"We are riding for the woods, My Prince,"

Glozelle said without the slightest intention of discouraging him. Had he had such intentions, he'd need to choose different wording to persuade him.

"I know,"

Prince Caspian replied, flashing a small smile while his dark eyes, so utterly and completely unalike to his uncle's, shone and flickered with sparks of overpowering intensity that was just as strong as unidentified in meaning.

"Do not think I'd miss an occasion to ride out of the castle,"

he smiled, his voice soft with sense of humor, yet beneath it taut with anticipation of change and adventure.

"Are you ready?"

There was a specific way in his addressing him. Glozelle often felt his words were informal, and the lack of his title as General, along with the tone in which the Prince usually spoke to him, suggested the 'you' in his speech was informal, addressing his name, and not dragging a figurative, merely omitted 'sir' behind it.

"What does Lord Miraz say?"

he only asked, hiding a smile in his short beard, turning to face the retreating Prince's back.

"Nothing that should worry you,"

Prince Caspian replied, looping his horse's reins over the animal's neck and nodding at the stable boy.

"He wasn't very against it."

Preferring not to wonder whether this meant the Prince managed to convince his uncle or came to conclusion his anger wouldn't be too great and sneaked out, Glozelle mounted his horse and watched Prince Caspian skillfully mount his own steed, a magnificent present on the occasion of his fifteenth birthday, though hardly a surprise as the horse was chosen for him as a foal and the Prince spent much time with it before first saddling it.

It seemed to him that the pats the Prince gave his horse on the neck were more affectionate than assuring, and for a moment he had an impression he leaned in and murmured something softly into the black, flicking ear. The Prince always was very caring of his horse and tending to it more than any royal to his horse (and rightly so, as any man would jump around such a splendid animal), yet talking to one's horse or any sort of animal was not well received among the Telmarines.

Within short moments, their party was on their way, exiting the courtyard and entering the long stone bridge in pairs, Glozelle riding beside the Prince. The wood of the drawbridge pounded and thudded deeply below the horse hooves before the clacking of stone followed, and soon they hurried along the road curving round the city, bypassing it and leading westwards into the open. There the horses were prodded into a faster pace between canter and gallop, for to provide quickness without overly large strain, thus resulting in durability of keeping the pace.

The Prince was a magnificent horseman, not only due to the training he received from the very best in the Telmarine army, but also thanks to innate skill he seemed to possess, just as he did with any sort of combat, be he equipped in any array of weapons or left with only his bare hands and reflexes to grant him victory.

It seemed with those values he'd make the perfect Telmarine Prince and King in future. Yet there was something about him that forbade to grant him that title, a certain kind of gentleness. Or perhaps, in reverse, lack of absolute ruthlessness that a Telmarine ruler needed to possess, an attribute as vital for survival as the cunning. The latter, by all means, the Prince possessed almost in excess. Yet he seemed too keen on mercy for his own good, and avoided cruelty which so often was a tool used to enforce submission among the subjects and some eager predators hunting for the throne.

It was not a judgment passed by Glozelle's morality but by his concern. The Prince seemed too kind, almost nave at moments, and yet a mind so cunning that impregnable at others. Such mixture, while surprising and confusing a potential enemy, could also prove lethal for the Prince. While his generosity with mercy and kindness was unsafe in the rocking, treacherous swamp of courtly politics, Glozelle personally found himself appreciating it after initial years of confusion and brief period of doubting the Prince's mental capability.

The concept of mercy was banished to such forgotten realms by the Kings of thirteen centuries of Telmarine reign over Narnia, that it seemed abstract and dangerously close to lunacy. And yet the subtle way in which the Prince operated with it, powered by his cunning and strong instinct that made him judge people with surprising accuracy of their character, slowly brought Glozelle to reconsider it's value.

They were making a good pace, riding along the dark line of arcane woods rising by their right side, intimidating even in the munificent light of the day. When they stopped for meal, it was in the afternoon and with the castle left out of the sight's range, only the grayish silhouettes of mountains climbing up in the distance marking it's location.
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Dryad

Queen Lucy

writer's POV

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Sweat Dreams of A Maid




"Come, Healer, dance with us!"


the Dryad exclaimed as she grabbed Healer by the hand.

"I'm not sure I know all the steps,"

Healer declared despite being drawn into the dancing circle between the Dryad and a Faun. Healer found however, as one often finds in dreams, that she not only knew the steps but was able to perform them with great ease. And it's a good thing too, because the dance was exceedingly intricate. Up she jumped and around she spun, under the arms of the Dryad and back around the Faun. Then with another jump and another spin, the Faun danced under her arms and back around.

Healer laughed with a bell-like tone as she looked around the Dancing Lawn. All of Old Narnia was in attendance for the great dance. There were Satyrs and Fauns, all the Dryads and the Naiads too. Great Centaurs stood around and the Dwarfs played their drums. Amongst the Old Narnians were a few human faces too. Healer recognized the lovely Queen Abrielle of Archenland, and His Majesty Prince Caspian of Narnia. Why even Healer's father was there. But Healer seemed most surprised when she looked to her right and suddenly saw a Queen of Old dancing next to her. Queen Lucy the Valiant.

"Take my hand, Healer,"

Queen Lucy said with a laugh. Healer laughed back as she took the hand of the great Queen and the dance continued.

When Healer opened her eyes she half expected and wholly hoped to find the Dancing Lawn and the great dance continuing. But as her eyes took in the grey dismal light of the early morning and the bare wooden walls of the servant's chambers, she knew it was time to wake up, time to stop dreaming, and time to get to work. With a despondent sigh, Healer threw back the single blanket and crawled out of bed. All around her, the girls who shared a room with Healer were doing the same; although, the term women would be more appropriate since they all had years of experience on Healer.

Healer stepped into her shoes and quickly pulled on her working dress and apron before heading off to her first chore. Healer was the youngest servant and as such she got the worst of everything. She got the worst bed to sleep on, the worst blanket to cover up with, the worst clothes to wear, though in all honesty, none of the clothes were all that great, nor all that bad and the worst chores to perform. Healer's first chore of the day was cleaning the horse's stalls while the stable boys took them into the field, and after that it was off to clean the chicken coup.

Now, Healer may not have liked her chores, but she was never one to voice her complaints. After all she knew she was fortunate enough to live and work at the King's castle, even though the King's throne was currently empty. His Royal Highness King Caspian IX had died before Healer could walk, a near sixteen years ago. And the King's son His Majesty Prince Caspian X was not yet old enough to rule according to ancient Telmarine Law. That would soon be remedied, however. The Prince's Seventeenth birthday was just a few days away and the coronation ceremony was set. Though, the Prince himself Unbeknownst to a danger lurked the grey stone halls of his father's castle.
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Thnx Radhi Dear...
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Finally got chance to read first UD 😳

great di i just loved Narnia n u added the pics too ,

i love all Siblings n Aslan is real hero hehe 😳

PM me for ur next UD too ,

will read the next UD n comment by Mon for sure 😉
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wow
Fewww finaly read 2nd UD :)
N its gr8 m off for 3rd n fourth ;)
Luvd THe Maid's dream
Gr8 writing Di ;)
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Characters in part 3

Prince Caspian



General Glozelle





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Caspian

Glozelle

Writer's POV


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Prince Caspian, and General Glozelle with fellow soldiers, were making a good pace, riding along the dark line of arcane woods rising by their right side, intimidating even in the munificent light of the day. When they stopped for meal, it was in the afternoon and with the castle left out of the sight's range, only the grayish silhouettes of mountains climbing up in the distance marking it's location.

As they feasted on the simple meal, Glozelle permitted himself to observe the Prince. The soldiers' food did not scare him off from eating ' like any future King, he had his half a year of training in hardship of soldier's life, sleeping on boards and eating the simple and rather unidentified mixture of foods the soldiers were fed during wars and campaigns, while every day being assailed with strenuous trainings and battle practices. The upbringing of a Telmarine Prince was a unique blend of spoiling luxuries and bare hardship, one that seemed to give fitting results.

Yet it was not what he wished to contemplate as he watched the Prince sit among his men, rather distanced from them though not by his own choice but by the reverence and respect of others. What he focused on in his analysis of the young man of barely ten and seven years of age, was the change that overcame him when ripping himself from under his uncle's presence. Around Miraz, the boy was quiet, distanced and almost shy, choosing rather to observe and defend than act and attack as should be expected from the heir to the throne. Yet departed from him, he stood even straighter, appearing stronger than just moments ago in the castle, bolder of nature and approach, daring at times and slipping into command involuntarily, actually obliviously, unaware when and how it happened.

The transformation of the Prince was just as subtle as it was overwhelming when pondered upon, and Glozelle chose to leave the subject. It made him uneasy with trepidation over the possibilities of events to come. Lord Miraz's wife was bearing a child, due with in a month or may be in few days. Should the child be male, a conflict of interests instantly would arise, and the Prince could find himself disposable in his uncle's plans' Even being the rightful heir to the throne and a King by law for ten years now that had passed since his father's dubious death, he would face his chances against Miraz.

And the outcome was what stirred Glozelle's conscience with dread.

Just as they mounted their horses after the finished meal, there was a snap of twigs, quick rustle of leaves and a flurry of movement and sounds rapidly disappearing within the bushes guarding the entrance to the woods. Glozelle quickly gestured at the three men wielding crossbows, with a silent sign appointing them to stand by, and with another gesture beckoned to two others to follow him.

"Stay, I'll go,"

Prince Caspian said, taking his horse's reins.

Glozelle stared for a moment, facing one of those extremely rare situations in his life where he sincerely was at a loss as to how to proceed next.

"Your Majesty"

He finally offered, trailing off as the future King shook his head.

"I'll go,"

He repeated.

"You three, stand down,"

He nodded at the crossbowmen who lowered their weapons with perhaps slightly more reluctance than befitting when receiving an order from the heir to the kingdom

Glozelle turned to the soldiers behind him.

"You two, guard His Highness,"

he ordered briskly.

"No,"

was the simple protest.

"I will go alone."

"Your Majesty-"

"I'm your Prince, do as I say,"

There was no arrogance or stubbornness of a spoilt child in his words, but a command of giving a true, simple order. There was steel in the Prince's eyes, but it was not a cold steel, no, it was a hot one, burning, white hot and freshly coined, not yet plunged into water, twice as lethal as a simple weapon it was to become.

Glozelle nodded.

"Yes, Sire,"

He said quietly and gestured for the men to stand back. The men themselves, shamefully, barely moved since receiving his initial order, clearly less than willing to accompany the Prince into the woods.

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Glozella watched with uneasy conscience as the possible future King rode into the bushes, shortly disappearing among the trees, the padding of his horse's hooves dying away completely.

As he immersed deeper into the forest, Caspian was mesmerized by the deep silence that was not made of soundlessness at all, but woven from various sounds and quiet noises echoing across this strange dimension, verifying it's endless depth and luring him all the further. Destrier's walk was quiet, and Caspian found himself slowing down his breathing just to better listen to the sounds that seemed to hang in the shaded yet strangely alit forest like fog after a drizzle, soaking the woods with themselves.

He slowly, quietly pulled back Destrier's reins, the crunch of leather almost making him wince, had he not been so mesmerized with the utterly new, enchanting realm he had just entered. It seemed a door was only one way, without granting him return, and Glozelle and the soldiers lay thousands of miles away, in a different world he'd left behind.

The stillness around was almost a deception, as within the depths of lush verdure and foliage, life pulsated and fluttered, invisible for him and glorious in it's unseen ways.

A flash of shadow and a quiet, quick and chuckling sound tugged his head sideways with enthrallment a blackbird flashed through the sunrays sifting down among the radiantly brightened maple leaves stretched regally high above.

Slowly, quietly, he dismounted, laying a calming palm on Destrier's strong neck. The enchanting, unexplored woods called to him, summoned him to immerse, tread and wander and never know each inch for sure, and he did not even try to resist. It was his purpose that stopped him from wandering away.

"H-hello?"

He asked, his voice quiet and sinking into the surrounding landscape as he felt sheepish for talking out loud. But then again, this was the very reason he came here on his own.

"Hello?"

He asked again, a touch louder this time, looking around after whatever it was that scurried away from him and the soldiers all those long, long ages ago, it seemed.

He looked about, meeting no response, not against his expectations though. Yet still, a string pulled in his heart and caused him to try again.

"Hello? It is alright. I come here to warn you,"

he spoke, emboldened, eyes flashing around shrewdly, having adjusted to the dazzling surroundings.

"If anyone is here, please flee. It is possible the Telmarines will soon come to inspect the surroundings,"

he spoke, words snagging in his throat as he felt the distance from his own race that overcame him when mentioning them.

A distance he sometimes craved to have between himself and them.

"It is not a trap,"

he found himself venturing on, unknowing to what point. He looked about, suddenly awkward and sheepish.

"Please run away. Just for today. Afterwards, it will be safe here."

He trailed off and cast a long look about. Suddenly the woods seemed almost dead to him as he realized how many sounds had suddenly disappeared since he started his cumbersome speech that under any other circumstances would have made him blush with the crudeness of it. There was silence, intense, wary, almost pressuring

And then he realized, in that one moment the epiphany had descended upon him, not from his mind but from his instincts and his soul that were greater than any form of reason. The forest was not dead ' it was holding it's breath.

It was listening.

An unknown power surged through him, with a bolt triggering courage he had never felt within himself. Not a coward in all matters he encountered, he still was breathless from the sense of bravery that flashed across his heart. The glimpse was short, like a flame devouring a fleck of paper thrown upon smoldering embers, yet it left a mark upon him, propelling him to continue.

"Please run, just for today' it is a warning,"

he said pleadingly, looking around.

A rustle tore through this ringing silence with such surprise that he nearly jolted a whole foot into the air, turning rapidly, right hand traveling to the ornate hilt of his sword, yet not pulling it out of the scabbard. A movement of cinnamon color caught his eye, and he stood still, flabbergasted at the sight of a fox that emerged from the bushes a small distance away.

He had never seen a live fox at such a close distance, and amidst the surprise, he regarded the animal as a strikingly beautiful one, and this particular one looking especially' clever, as simple as it was, might have been the closest counterpart of the unknown word he was fishing for within his brain.

He fox's amber eyes regarded him with scrutiny and an open, sincere expression that carried a feeling Caspian could not name. Never before had such eyes looked upon him, nor with such a blend of sensations evoking in him.

The lavish, fluffy tail swung slowly once from side to side, coming to a fluent halt, somewhere in the back of his mind Caspian almost expecting it to shed cinnamon dust in the filtering sunrays, the white tip seeming like a cap of leftover snow from the winter.

And then, the fox was gone, wandering away into the bushes, calmly, as if manifesting the peace of heart doled upon him by the assurance of Caspian's words.

The world round Caspian remained enchanting and dazzling, somehow still holding it's breath in his presence, as if the life hidden behind the leaves and within the shrubs was still uncertain what to make of his presence, whether to dub it a threat or help. Feeling complied by some sensation hovering round him in the air, Caspian bowed, slowly and sincerely, like a guest at the end of his greetings to his host, and left.

On the other side of the shrubs and bushes growing before the forest, Glozelle breathed a sigh of relief at the sight of the future King emerging from the woods in a state of perfect health. As he approached, there seemed to be a strange gleam about his eyes, a tad unearthly and unknown, but he chose to blame it on excesses of his tired mind.

"Any luck, Your Highness?"

He asked as the Prince mounted his prized stallion.

"I believe it was merely a pheasant or a quail, possibly nesting somewhere in those shrubs,"

Prince Caspian replied as he gathered the reins of his horse.

"We may go on."

"Yes, Sire,"

Glozelle nodded obediently, their small unit soon picking up their path along the line of the woods.

As they rode, an amicable discussion ensued between him and the Prince, initiated by the latter and concerning battle strategies
Unit soon picking up their path along the line of the woods.
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