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Posted: 13 years ago

Like a storm, he arrived,

That boy next door

On troubling people, he thrived,

That boy next door

His temper quick to set fire,

His eyes brazen and bold,

Hid what his heart might desire,

Feelings and wishes untold

With that cold, uncaring smile

And the stubborn set brow

He targeted her with his guile

Making her hate him, till now

Till she managed a glance

Into what he called his "dead soul"

She saw within him, a chance

To turn diamond from coal

With her heart she tamed

That boy next door

With love she claimed

That boy next door

 

Just a quick and small attempt at penning some thoughts...

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Posted: 13 years ago
@ Wafah...πŸ‘πŸΌ
 
I πŸ‘ your quick attempt.... Very beautiful....you are a ⭐️.
 
If you have more...post them...
 
 
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Posted: 13 years ago
Awesome, Wafah!!!!πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘

Caught all the emotions beautifully!πŸ‘πŸΌ


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Posted: 13 years ago
wafah excellent penmenship  on Guddu, very well captured his true colours as the boy next door, dont we all wish we had a Guddu next door
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Posted: 13 years ago
Absolutely perfect!  πŸ‘
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Posted: 13 years ago
WOW, Wafah!!!
Such a lovely poem.  I love the last few lines.  You have captured the essence of this story we are all viewing at the moment.  Thank You for sharing.  
I have a question, do you think that boy next door might be playacting, he is living behind a mask where R is concerned, he deliberately wants her to hate him bc he feels insecure like he is not good enough for her??? Just a thought.  sry if posted in the wrong section.  
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Posted: 13 years ago
Awesome Wafah...you are amazing......
@ lilly i wish the same only if he lived right infront of my house like infront of pandey niwas
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Posted: 13 years ago
[QUOTE=EcliPSe_2010]WOW, Wafah!!!
Such a lovely poem.  I love the last few lines.  You have captured the essence of this story we are all viewing at the moment.  Thank You for sharing.  
I have a question, do you think that boy next door might be playacting, he is living behind a mask where R is concerned, he deliberately wants her to hate him bc he feels insecure like he is not good enough for her??? Just a thought.  sry if posted in the wrong section.  
 
@ Eclipse ........I loved this line of thought.... Can be so true...
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Posted: 13 years ago
My dearest Wafah ...... This is truly AWESOME ! 

Very wonderfully put, you've brought out every nuance of the Runjhun-Guddu saga till date !

Take a bow my dear ! ....

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PS: Hope you've added this to the Bhagonwali corner, I'd like to go back and read it again !
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Posted: 13 years ago


Really superb yarπŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘.........


Can u try another for our lovely Runjhun.....