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hi  guys!
i am trying to write a ff about maneet,maine pehle part ko unke nok jhok se suru kiya,bcs i dnt like sad sad baate,
pls comment and critisise

tere sang

ye shuuru hota hai maneet ke sagai ke baad se
jaha geet aur dev kaa saamna ho chuka hai aur geet ne maanke khusi keliye dev kaa naam use naa batane kaa faislaa kiya hai,par usne dev ko maaf nahi kiya hai aur use aapne aur maan se door rehneko kaha hai,dev v guilt ke maare geet ki baat maan liya hai,but wo nahi jaanta geet is pregnant.

one week after saagai

geet in office and trying to concentrate on her work,but couldn't bcs of stress

geet-  self talking- babaji! mai kya karu? jab itne dino baad mai khus hone lagi thi to aap firse      meri pariksha le raheho
kyu? mujhe is baat ka dukh nahi hai ke mera ateet aise firse mere saamne aya,par is baatka hai ke mai apne pyarse itni bari baat chupane ko majboor hoo,ab unhe batau to wo toot jayenge aur naa batau to dhokha hoga, main kya karu mujhe raasta dikhaiye babaji?😕

maan uske cabin me aya

maan- kya hua geet?tum kis raaste ki baat kar rahi ho?
geet- jee!!! wo wo kuch nahi main to bas wo__ wo haa! main to wo aapke gharke bahar jo raasta hai uske bareme soch rahi thi, chi chi kitnaa ganda hai,koi saaf nahi karta,kehneko to aap sab ameer laad saheeb waha rehte ho par koi aapne alishaan gharo se nikal ke us raaste par dhyaan nahi deteho!

maan- geeeet!! tum kehnaa  kya chati ho, main jhaaru daar lagta hoo jo main raate saaf karte firu,haa aur tum ye sab bakwas baate sochke kaam naa karne kaa bahana dhund rahi ho?😲😡

geet  - haa thik kaha aapne aap kisi jharu dene waale se kam thori naa ho? har waqt aapne guusse se har jo koi v aapke saamne ata hai use saaf kar dete ho,aur main aapna kaam puri thik se karti hoo,aap to sukr maniye ke aapko main mili, waarna aur kaun hota jo har pal aapki dadagiri sehtaa aur aapki is gariki horn jaisi laal naak ke saamne tik pata, haa boliye!!
 maan - geeeeeet tum!! tum accha to tumhe lagta hai ke tum koi bohot bari jaabaz ho jo mere saamne tik gayi,to thik hai main tumhe dikhta hoo ke tum kitni bebakuf ho,tumhe lagta hai naa ke tum har tarike se mera saamna kar sakti ho to thik hai,kuch nahi aaj tum bas ek asaan si chees me mujhe haraake batao,bolo kar paogi

geet - haa haa aap boliye naa aisa kuch nahi hai jo geet nahi kar sakti,boliye?😲

maan- to fir jyada kuch nahi dinner pe mujhse accha paasta banake dikhado,bolo dar to nahi gayi naa?

geet- self talking- hai babaji wo ghaas phooos wo to mujhse dekha tak nahi jaata ,to main banau kaise,aur mujhe to wo sab banana atahi nahi,naho nahi geet himmat rakh,too is pehelwaan dusht daanav se haar nahi maan sakti,

maan- kya hua geet?kya sochne lagi,nahi hoga to avi haar maan lo,main tumhe maaf kar dungaa😳

geet- haare mere dushman,aapne kya socha hai,aapna ye aloo jaise gusse waali ankhe dikhaake aap mujhe dara denge,main nahi darti aapse,tikh hai agar aapko haarne kaa itna jee kar raha hai,to main aapko aaj raaat dinner pe dikhaungi ke geet kis khet ki muli hai,haa😡

maan-self talking- sahi kaha tumne tum sachme kisi khetki muil hi ho!!😆

maan- to fir thik hai raat ko milte hai,best of luck

geet- aapko jyada jaroorat hai luck ki.



thats it 4 now,i will update later,pls let me know if u guys like this one,😃


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hi guy's i m so glad that tum logo ko mera ff thorasa accha laga,it's enough 4 me,i m so sad also kyunki main iske baad sayad bohot dino baad update kar paoon,mujhe kaamke studies ke liye out of station jaana paregaa 34 mahino keliye,mujhe ronaa araha hai ke is dauraan geet v nahi dekh paungi,aaj tak aisa hua hai ke me khaana aur sona vuli par geet dekhna nahi chora,par kya karoo kismat ne mere saath kya khel khelaa ke main majboor hoo,akhir career ko to nahi vul sakti naa,par main hamesha yahi koshis karoongi ke jab v thorisi free hou chahe vo half n our hi sahi main net se geet dekh paoon,pls guys mere liye duaan karna,ye raha mera sayad kuch mahino tak keliye akhiri update,mujhe voolnaa mat

part2


geet (ghar me) - he babaji, ab main kya karoo,aap ne to mujhe sher ke moo me dhakel diyaa,main kaise banaoo unkaa wo sab ghaas phoos,pls koi meri madat karo,
                        haa haa main pinky se poochti hoo paasta ki rcp.
she calls pinky

geet- hallo! pinky
pinky- kya hua geet is waqt kyu call kiya
geet- tujhe paasta ki rcp pata hai naa,mujhe bata naa
pinky- kya? ye too kaisi baate kar rahi hai,teri tabiyat to thik hai,tujhe to italiaan khaane se naafraat hai naa,to too uske bareme kyu pooch rahi hai?
geet- ab jo us pehelwaan danaav ko pyaar kar sakta hai,wo to duniyaa ki kisi v ajeeb chees se pyaar kar saktaa hai,hai naa
pinky- kya? geet too ye kya bole jaa rahi hai?
geet- are too wo sab chor aur mujhe rcp baata naa pls,i promise main kal tujhe 20 cheeps ke packet laa doongi,ab to baatade meri maa!!
pinky- accha note kar,
 geet - thanks yaar.

geet- are maine likh to liyaa,par fir v mujhe ye sab samajh kaaha ayegaa,par mujhe ye karnaa hi hogaa,aaj main unhe haraake rahoongi,barnaa main Maan sing khuraana ka pyar nahi(blushing)... mera matlab hai geet handaa nahi.

maan ghar ake geet ko bultaa hai

maan-geet! kaha hol,
geet- main yahi hoo aapke piche khari hoo,apne light bulb jaisi ankho saaf kijiye,main dikh jaoongi
maan- kya! abbi v bakwaas kar rahi ho,kahi darke maare tumhaara dimaag khaarap to nahi hogaya
          doctor ko boolaoon,

geet-kya? aapne mujhe pagal kaha,pagal aap,aap aap.. aap raavan,dusht pehelwaan ho,kharoos ho,samjhe kharoos rakshas.
maan- ab meri taarif karnaa khatam hua ho to ham chale,tumhe tumhaari bewakoofi kaa saboot v to dena hai naa,chalo kitchen main
geet- haa haa chaliye dikhati hoo main main kya hoon?
maan- self talk- tum to mere dilke dhadak neki wajaah ho(smile)
geet- ab aap mujh par hasnaa band kijiye
maan- aur tum paasta baanana sooroo karoo,sirf adha ghanta time hoga
geet-self talking- he babaji meri naiyaa ko doobnese bacha lijiye

aur wo dono lag jaate hai aapna aapna dish banane me
maan aasaani se aapna paasta baana leta hai,aur geet ko samajhme nahi araha hai wo kya banaa rahi hai,
udhar maan kaa dish complete hai par woo geet ko nahi batata,aur khare hoke uski harkaat dekh taa hai kuch der,aur manhi mann me muskura raha hai uski masoom aur sararati harkato par,
geetko aapni uljhano me kuch hosh nahi ke maan ka dish complete hogaya hai,tabhi geet nakul se sayad koi ingredint naa milne par pooch bahar jaati hai,aur isi beech maan apni banayi hui dish geet waali se badal deta hai,geet wapas ake dekhti hai ke maan kaam khatam

maan- lo' geet maine aapna dish complete kar liya ,tumhara v sayad hogaya hoga,waqt khtam chalo dekhte hai kiska dish best hai
geet-he babaji ek to ye daanav mere sarme pura din naachta rehta hai,aur upar se ye gaai bhais wale khaaana,pata nahi mere dish kaa kya haal hua hoga,babaji kuch miracle kar do,aaj aapni is betiko bachalo pls
maan- ab khare khare aapne babaji ko kosti rahogi yaa aaogi v
geet serves her paasta,maan too

geet-maan sir aap kabse itnaa taarka maarke desi types paasta khaane lage,baise testy hain,
maan smiles and says-geeet sayad tum sahi keh rahi thi,main haar gaya tumse isbaar,tumhara wala paasta to best bangaya,
geet shocked-kya ? sachme? dikhaiye,are haa ye to kamal hogaya,aaj to babaji ne sachme aapna jalwa dikha diya,matlab dekha sir aapne to aap haar gaye mujhse
aur wo khusi se jhoom uthi,pure kitchen main daurti rahi aise ke maanko use roknaa para
 maan-geet!aapna nahi to hamare baby kaa to khayal karo,band karo ye uchal kood'
         ab batao tum to bet jeeti naa ab batao tumhe kya chahiye inaam me,-
geet- itni asaani se nahi pehle aap apne kaan pakar ke mujhse suva keliye sorry boliye,fir main kuch kahoongi samjhe
maan- geeet!! maan sing khuraana kisike samne kaan nahi pakregaa samjhi tum
geet- abhi to keh rahe the ke aap mujhse haare to kyaa har maan nese sharam aati hai

maan gets very angry,aur gusse me geet ki taraf barne lagta hai
geet ghabra kar  wahase jaaane lagti hai,par maan use apni baahome kheech leta hai

maan uski ankho me kho jaata hai aur uskaa gussa maano uske pyar se haar kar un ankho ke gehhraiyome  kho jaata hai
maan-tumse to aapni saasen haar gaya,aapne aapko haar gaya,aur kya saboot doo tumhe aapni zindegi v haar jaoon kya?
geet stops him with her hand and says
geet- to fir aisi baate karke aap mujhe asoo kyu derahe ho
maan- nahi,geet tumhare  asoo mere liye sehna mumkin nahi hai
          tum yehi chahti ho naa ke main aapna kaan pakarke tumse sorry bolu,thik hai ye lo
geet use toorant rokti hai
geet- aisa karke aap mujhe khusi dena chate ho,par main to bas majaak kar rahi thi,aap mere khusi keliye khud hi mujhse haar gaye,hai naa?
maan- kya matlab,tumhe kaise pata
geet- jaise aap meri ankhe padh sakte ho,main v aapke dilki baat par sakti hoo maan!
        aap ko kya laga mujhe samajh nahi aya ke aap ke dish me desi  taarka maarke paasta kaise aya,wo to sirf geet kaa hi hosakta hai naa,she laughs
geet-kyu karte ho aap mere liye itna ke main khudko vul jaati ho,duniyaa ko vul jaaati hoo,bina aapke kuch nahi soojh taa mujhe
maan-kyuki main tumhe haarte yaa jhukte hue nahi dekht  saktaa,khudse v nahi
geet- aapki hi galti hai meri haalat aisi haalat aapne kiya, kyu aisa kiya mere saath ke main paagal ho gayi,aap jaise dusht ko bar bar dekhne ko pagal ho gayi,aapki daant khaana v accha lagta hai ab,kya kiya aapne ye
         kya kiya ke mujhe ek dusht khadoos se pyar hogaya?
geet-oops! geet ye tu kya bol gayi
aur wo wahase bhagne ki koshis karti hai par maan use pajar leta hai
maan- kya kaha geet firse bolonaa,jo baat mainn tumse itne waqt se sunna chahta tha aaj tumne wo aise bol diya,nahi geet mujhe firse sunna hai bolonaa,tumhara khadoos daanav tumse kuch puch raha hai,batao geet batao
geet-wo wo main .. main  ye keh rahi thi ke ke .. geet aapne sadoo dusht se.... bohot pyar karti       hai
maan-ye raavan v geet ko dilo jaan se chahta hai.

wo waqt maano wahi ruk gaya ho,sab kuch vul gaye the dono bas ek dusre ki aankhe parte rahe to kabhi gale lag ke aapne dhadkano ko sunte rahe.
jo baat itni koshiso ke baad v wo keh nahi parahe the,aaj najaane kaise uhi bina kisi jhijhak ke dilse jubaan par agayi,aur ye din dono ke liye larte jhagarte aur pyar karte hue yaadgaar bangaya.

thats it guys,good bye,dua karo ke main firse geet ke paas asakoo,kuyki valehi main door chala jaoon,mera dil yehi atka para rahegaa.pls comment
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hi
i really liked ur FF
and i really appreciate that maneet has not lost their charm even wen geet has already come face to face to dev.
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hey, nice yaar... i loved their nok jhok
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nice ff!! plz update soon......scared to read though..lol 😆
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