Distressed Soul....(poem)

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Distressed Soul

Words are muffled and tears are choked,
And a starry silence engulfs,
I try to run and escape en route,
But the more I try, the more lost I become.

Smile is not a facade and pain is not feign,
And my soul languishes in love,
I try to seek solace and calm,
But the more I try, the more ruffled I become.

Water seamlessly pours and brings mirth,
And I'm left in a cloud of steam,
I try to clear the mess and see,
But the more I try, the more shroud I become. 

Days roll by and seasons change,
And I'm left alone to reflect,
I try to cry and break the spell,
But the more I try, the more staunch I become. 


- Again a poem written by me but this time I guess my thoughts describe Maan's condition ! My current obsession with geet now-a-days !! 😳

Do give your reviews !!


-Fatima
Edited by -shabnoor- - 13 years ago

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Very beautiful.It expresses the emotions very well
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Posted: 13 years ago
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I am not much into Geet. The TV's on and I am technically watching it but somehow, I don't feel VERY interested or something.

Anyway, the poem's BEAUTIFUL! You are a true poetess because, indeed.. you know how to express your feeling in  just the right manner. It always struck a chord with me! Great job done, Fatima.

Keep writing!

-Kanky
Edited by -Kanky- - 13 years ago
Posted: 13 years ago
#4

Beautiful & lovely  poem, i must say!Thx  for the PM!^__^

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Posted: 13 years ago
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beautiful poem

even i like geet

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beautiful poem.
loved it
Edited by hazraluvarjun - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Its such a nice poem.How do u write so well. 👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hey thnx a lot everyone...for your comments and
also you took out time to read my piece of work !! :)

-Fatima

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Posted: 13 years ago
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lovely poem ... 🤗
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beautiful piece 👏