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ok i will wait...Originally posted by: Shagnika
Will surely read it as soon as i m a little free.. Dont underestimate urself... M sure its gonna b v good!😃
thank you so much for the comment shagee....Originally posted by: Shagnika
Okkay, m done reading it!! 👍🏼 Its good.... As ur first attempt its good. Since its in english, i always feel something is missing, but nevertheless, its good. Mostly daya the person highlighted... Which was done in a nice way. Was slight odd to imagine as never seen him so.but still, it shows u really like him a lot! A little more of suspense and investigation would have made it go to a diff level!
Would expect many more from u! 😃
hi sunny thanks for the comment...this is the only way i know...its tracitional but i like it....dont know abt suspense triller writing....thats why....any way i will try to add more suspense next time...thanks for the commentOriginally posted by: sunnyp1414
Different type of narration.So this was way you were explaining me. Liked it, read a new story way. But yes agree with Sagnika more of investigation and suspense would have made it wow. Still its very good. First attempt is good attempt.
yes jiya dee i will try and make it next time....hope soGood attempt chinnu...but investigation is less...I hope you will write good stories...you have a capacity and I know you can do it...all the best for next creation.
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