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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: Deizy

before i even say anything let me just send lots of hugsssss to u ...

🤗🤗thanks so so much for this ff ..it's better than the story they are showing in kdmhd.......

loved the part....perfect...so happyyyyyy
ohh meher and sanjana were so cute,,,i love their intereactions and meher did good telling sanjana that she is going with vishal...so swweettt...
ohh myy..meher u are going to be very happy in comming day ss...atul is back
can't wait to see atul burning in jealousy .......'fryday ....will be waiting ..
Hey Deizy! 😃 You are so welcome...and thanks for reading regularly!! 😃 Yep, interesting things are happening...😉



Originally posted by: iditri

wow...another awesome update...LOL...waiting to see atul gettin jealous next... amazing...cant wait for friday...
Hi there! 😃 Thanks dear! I am so glad you liked it!!
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Originally posted by: bd670816

wow, again amazing update.Sanjana & Meher part was sosweet.Can't wait for Atul to get the shock of his life when he sees Vishal.
tc.
Hello! 😃 Thank you!! I am glad you liked it. Keep reading!



Originally posted by: janu_2006

hey

gr8 part..
cont.sooon
Thnaks 😃



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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: happybrar

awesomeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
Thank you. 😊



Originally posted by: Rehana86

you managed to bring a smile on my face YET again di......thanks for the wonderful part dear.....i loved each lines and everything that you have penned down.....meher-sanjana and then meher-vishaal.....SWEET!!!.......
Hey Rehana! 😃 I am glad it brought a smile to your face. Thank you for reading!!
looking forward to the next update.....i dont wanna talk abt the show di......i m cursing myself for even posting the 1st part of the essence of love as now i m completely broke and don't have the courage to continue it.....
No problem...next update is coming up! Oooh, I will read your story this weekend...no no...don't quit. You need to keep going ...it will help, trust me! 🤗
luv
rehana



Originally posted by: premeer928

hey
that was awesome. 👏 ahhh....cant wait to see what meher does with atul....plz continue soon. 😊
Thank you! 😃


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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: -Bee-

Di! I finally finished my exams, and caught up on all the parts of Destiny. I'm commenting for the first time, but I've been reading Destiny from the very beginning (sorry, just never got time to comment *kaan pakding*)

Hey Bee!! Good to see you here! 😃 And no need to apologize. I quite understand how difficult it is to always make a comment. You are here now!
Anyway, I have to start my saying that I WISH you were the creative of the show, and it was Destiny we're watching on TV. I gave up watching the actual show (and it's sort of a relief, to tell you the truth), and I'm liking just reading all the awesome Premeer fanfics. You have presented the characters, and the story brilliantly! I'm sure you're tired of hearing this, but I LOVE your Prem! His wit (which Heer matches quite well), his compassion, his love for his stubborn wife is just... *sigh* ... dreamy. Coming to Heer, the perfect match for our Prem Juneja. I almost don't feel bad that Prem is completely, insanely in love with her. Almost. But, her emotions, her strength of character came across beautifully in the whole miscarriage, and then pregnancy issue. This is really a match made in heaven.
LOL! That is really sweet of you to say that! 😃 I know...me too gave up watching the show. I read the updates. It has hardly been making sense and when they tamper with golden characters...like Gayatri...it really really put me off. Dunno what the creatives have planned next! I am glad you like the Prem and Heer charcters here! Thanks...😃
Coming to your other characters, if I sit here and write down the intricacies that endear them to me, and how much I love your story, I'd be up the whole night. Hmph. So, I'll just stick to this update. Boy, I wish I was able to see Meher's face when she heard Atul's voice. Atul (even though he has been quite a jerk in the past) is too smart for his own good. I just can't wait to see him become a victim of the green-eyed monster (eurgh! sudden Othello exam flashback) of jealousy. *rubs hands in glee* Hehe.
Oh, I know...don't worry about it!! I am happy that you liked all characters...coz they are all dear to me 😉 LOL! really? Ooh, yeah Atul is going to have some sleepless nights because of Vishaal...
The Meher-Sanjana convo touched my heart. Ever since Meher came back, I was wondering if Sanjana-Meher had the same kind of carefree, happy-go-lucky friendship they used to. I love how you've shown, that even though both have grown, the understanding and trust between them is still the same. Meher can't possibly tell Sanjana, because she'll get too personally involved, and Sanjana doesn't even pry. Once again, I want to thank you for the beauty you show in every relationship in this story. Be it between a parent-child, between husband-wife, or between friends. It is much more than we see on the show right now. Sorry, I'm still not able to get over how they butchered Gayatri.
I am glad you thought so...you were wondering about this? Glad I was able to answer that question for you! It is because Sanjana would be too personally involved that Meher has tried to shield the truth from her. 😃 Thank you...means a lot that you are saying it. I know...I feel the same about Gayatri!
Anyway, I saw that you've not been feeling well for some time, and I hope you're better now. Don't worry about the updates, we'll be waiting patiently. Take care...
Thanks for asking. I am feeling better now. The next update is coming up! 😛



Originally posted by: ashpush

Smithsie!

Im 'fashionably late'aint i?
I knw,u will say,im never late and all,but from my point of u, im extremely late...3 updates late!phew!
Was really busy..so cudnt read..How i missed 'destiny'*sniff* Hi Ash!! 😃 Ooh, no worries dearie!
And I must say,the last 3 updates were fabulous..the pace was so good..kept me wanting for more..
I wont comment on each n every update systematically..cant,cos im bound to jump...he he LOL!! You liked all of them that much, eh? 😉
that preet-lallu scene was so funny..had me laughing my air out...im laughin even now,thinking of it...😆
it wud have been quiet a handful for the junejas if Ash was really preggy😆not to say about the heart attack lallu will have....LOL! I knew you would get a kick out of the Preet-Lallu convo!! They are funny, aren't they?? I know...everyone would have been running around like crazy then! 😆
Wow! Wow!Wow!..the Meher Atul track is goin woderfully..*jumping around*
Atul is such a big chalak guy...and they are in Sydney*dancing*
and gud that meher told vishal that it wud not work...but i guess vishal's presence in sydney will make atul jealous😉
waiting with baited breath for the next update...
I know...some surprise no? 😆 He is chalak...but Meher is much better too...keep reading to find out! See you later!
love,
Ashie



Originally posted by: rdfan

Hey Smita

Whoaaaaaaaaaaaa !!!!! Atul u manipulative smart dude ...so far the score line 1-0 in favor of atul i guess but watch out dude its gonna get even once you no that vishaal has arrived as well!!!!Ouch!!!! its gonna hurt u big time..but i am sure the dude he is, he'll get arnd vishaal too....i like this devilish streak in atul 😈...and here i thought only akash had this irritating streak!!!!
Ooh, hey Pooja! So good to see you here! 😃 LOL! You are keeping scores?? Lage raho! 😉 Hmm, keep reading if Meher will even the score or not! And Akash is that way too....??? That is so so awesome...😆 Good luck, is all I can say!
Ok dont no what the general mood is ...but i am rooting for atul!!!!!!😉 I think the general mood would be that they are rooting for Atul too 😉 ....but then I knew you would!
Superb update as usual!!!! Fantabulously awesome!!!!! Will be looking frwd to yr next on friday.
You are welcome...thanks for reading and see you soon!
Tc n Luv,
Pooja


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Posted: 16 years ago
Hello!! 😃
How is everyone doing today? I did not watch the show...but did watch the Prem-Heer scenes....my...*fanning self* was I the only one feeling faint...?😉 I will have to see how they are going to spin the rest of the story!
And while we are all wondering that..read on for the next update of Destiny!

Chapter 107

Meher felt the edges of the card biting into her palm as fingers curled around it, before she held it up. "What is the meaning of this?" she asked with barely suppressed fury. The initial shock of seeing him was wearing off and coming fast at its heel was the realization that he was responsible for this fiasco. A dull throb began in the right side of her temple.

Atul watched her, hands tucked in the back pocket of his jeans. It irritated her no end to find him so nonchalant in face of her ire. "It seemed like a logical solution, considering we'd be...working together," he said quietly.

He had to be bloody joking, Meher thought. "When hell freezes over," she bit out, trying to keep her voice down, conscious of people milling about the lobby. "I need this changed'now." Meher held out the key. She could have tried it herself if she wasn't certain that her attempts would get her nowhere. And just how Atul would have responded to her demand, Meher did not know or find out, for the touch on the shoulder had her turning and shifting his attention at the same time. "All done...?" Vishaal asked, smiling widely. Meher's outstretched hand dropped to her side and she was appalled for having forgotten all about her companion. At what point he noticed Atul, she had no idea, but Vishaal extended him a smile, nonetheless. "Hello."
Meher slid a quick glance at Atul. As much as she absolutely loathed it, it was quite evident that an introduction seemed in order, to find him staring at Vishaal. He had gone very still, his lean frame tense and his gaze turned to pin hers'questioning. Her hackles rose. Atul had no right to expect anything from her, she thought and Meher glared right back at him. Beside her, there was a sound of a throat being cleared. "I am Vishaal," he said and held out his hand. If possible, the waves emanating from Atul turned colder. Was she the only one feeling it? Or was it all just her wild imagination, for Vishaal certainly found nothing wrong. With slow deliberation, Atul grasped the other man's hand into a brief clasp. "Vishaal, this is Atul. He is Sanjana's brother."

"And I am also Meher's boss," he drawled, making sure no one was left in any doubt. "Which brings me back to our earlier discussion," Atul continued, turning to her. "I still prefer the arrangement as it stands. Unless," his gaze held hers. "Your boyfriend doesn't trust you or," he held his hand out, "You are afraid."

Or that I can't stand the sight of you, Meher wanted to say, her grip tightening on the key. The gauntlet was thrown and damned if she was going to back out. She did not want to get into a slanging match in public with him, so Meher bit her tongue, promising herself that Atul was going to find out, just exactly what she thought of him soon enough. Hitching the strap of the case that held her laptop, Meher turned to Vishaal, who was staring at one from the other with a bewildered expression.

"I will talk to you tomorrow," she said. Her smile conveyed how glad she was to have him with her'especially now. "Sleep well," Meher said and without another word, stepped aside to follow the bellboy who waited with her luggage. Their entire conversation had probably lasted less than ten minutes and yet, she had never felt as livid as she did, just at this moment. The suite that Meher was to share with him was huge, with the vast expanse of living area, separating the two bedrooms. The drapes in here had been drawn back to reveal large windows, with breathtaking views of the Darling harbor. But Meher was too riled up at the moment to enjoy it. She took in the plush couches, the state of the art entertainment system and the elegant dcor with an air of indifference. By the time Atul showed up, Meher had unpacked, showered and staring at the flickering television without taking in a word of the news program she had been watching. The remains of dinner still lay on the table. Even that thoughtful gesture of his did nothing to abate her anger for him. It was the slight click of the door that had alerted her to Atul's presence and she stabbed the remote, throwing the entire room into silence. "Oh, you are here," Meher said getting off the couch and turning to face him. "Why, I thought you would be kind enough and let me stew here for a little longer." The words dripped with sarcasm, her eyes flashing with rage. "That was a very clever stunt you pulled off downstairs, I must admit," she went on, watching Atul as he walked over to the small fridge to pull out a bottle of water. "Then again, that is to be expected, considering how easily you manipulate everything to suit your selfish needs." His eyes were fixed on her, as he drank straight from the bottle. "But other than derive sadistic pleasure, I am not sure what else you are hoping to achieve." Meher hadn't been shouting and yet her throat felt dry and coarse.
"Feeling better?" Atul asked quietly. His reaction completely floored her.

"Not so that you would notice," she bit out. "Is that all you have to say...?"

"I was expecting to be called at least a couple names...which I am sure I deserve."

Her eyes narrowed. What new game was he playing now? "Some do come to mind," Meher said, watching him closely. "But they would be an insult to your wonderful parents, who had the misfortune to end up with a jerk for a son." Atul, who had moved closer to where she stood, inclined his head at that insult. Ok, so something was seriously wrong with this picture and till she found out what it was, Meher had to tread carefully. "So," she said casually. "Who sent you to check up on me this time...or should I not ask?"

"It was my idea," he said immediately. "I wanted to see you."

Almost against her will, she asked. "Why?"

"To apologize...to tell you how deeply sorry I was for behaving the way I did."

Her body tensed at the reference to their last meeting that had ended in such disaster. The topic was bound to come up sooner or later. Better to get it over and done with. "Amazing," Meher said in mock wonder. "So you cooked up this elaborate plan, just to apologize." She held his gaze. "If I tell you I forgive you, will that make you leave?"His brow furrowed slightly, but Atul did not answer. She forced herself to laugh lightly. "Funny, how it's taken you four months to decide that."

"And what would you have done, had I flown out to see you?" he asked curiously.

Meher acknowledged that Atul knew her well enough to know that she wouldn't even have deigned to talk to him. "You actually did me a huge favor," she gushed now with a wide grin, ignoring his question. "There's nothing like learning the error of your ways early. Anyway," she waved her hand, as if dismissing the past. "It's all water under the bridge." As far as Meher was concerned, it was. The throb in her head had turned into a full fledged headache. This conversation needed to end soon. She feigned a yawn. "Good night." Meher hoped that the fatigue from the journey would aid her in falling asleep.

"Wait," Atul called after her and she spun around. He went into his room and was back a minute later. "Here," he said, holding out a tiny packet of aspirin. He was standing close to her. Seeing the puzzled expression, his finger reached out to touch her brow. "It wrinkles when your head hurts," Atul said almost to himself. Meher, who had been holding her breath, jerked back from his touch. "Hope you feel better tomorrow," he said.

"I would," Meher said, taking the tablets. "But only if I wake up and find you gone." With that, she quietly shut the door, thinking it would not be as easy to keep him out of her head.

Ok, that was it for today. I know..not much fireworks...not yet at least 😉 See ya all Monday!

Edited by sshekar - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago

Smitha,

I was wondering what has happened to u. From evening I was refreshing Destiny to see whether u have responded or not & knew after that u would update. So finally! And even before I got ur PM I saw & read the update.
Overall today was fantastic, 1st the show which took me to cloud 9 & then ur Destiny. And u fanned urself after fainting, its been an ongoing cycle for me. 1st drool, then faint, then regain consciousness & again drool & faint. I did most of the fainting seeing the caps rather than the video. Look at their angles & positions & u will know. 😉😆 And oh u can see my profile picture??? I can't from my end, its blank. So no idea others can see it or not. Well I had to let Big B go after today, the way that scene played on my mind whole day was too engrossing to ignore. 😃
Now to ur update, it just seemed like a chapter out of a M&B. Seriously Smitha, it was that good. If I met a guy like Atul in real life god knows what I would have done to break his head into pieces but I am always a sucker for them in fiction, be it a show or books! I drooled so badly reading the update & kept grinning without reason. This faceless guy has captivated me so endearingly. 😃
I loved the body language of all the 3 characters u wrote. Atul as expected is too mature to let his inner feelings show. He would control himself just too well under that facade. Though his inside must have been doing a 'bhangra' but from outside he is all Atul, all calm & composed. Only when he saw Vishaal did the cold vibes start to flow. Smitha a humble request pls give us a Atul's POV next time. I so wanted to know what exactly he felt seeing Vishaal at that moment, what went through his mind, was there a shade of fear mingled alongwith anger & disapproval thinking there might be a chance of Meher slipping through his fingers again???? And his first reaction seeing Meher there! I would love to read that. Not everyday a guy like Atul falls in love & not everyday he schemes of a plan to get his girlfriend back after a life long denial of love & amore!!! And not everyday he feels like he has lost his love to another guy. Will wait for it.
And Meher's reactions was again prominent through her body language. 1st a shock, followed by surprise & then anger. And she knows him so well, immediately she could decipher it was his idea about those ticket changes & the entire trip. They r so made for each other. One can read the other so well!! And then she saw Vishaal & immediately gave a sigh of relief for his presence there with her. And she could feel the cold vibes from Atul for Vishaal as well!
And poor Vishaal, I felt sorry for him, totally unaware about all this & couldn't understand where he has landed himself into. Right now he has seen nothing but once he sees the true form & color of Atul he wouldn't wait to return back to India I guess.
And this man is so cunning, he knows Meher when riled up to a challenge never backs down & purposely played that stunt on her knowing she will accept his challenge head on. He got his way out with her staying in the same suite. And also he stayed out of her way & gave her time to settle down & calm her nerves instead of walking back with her. Maybe Atul himself needed to calm his nerves after seeing her & then Vishaal with her. He must have needed to chalk out more plans in handling the situation.
And Meher must have been fuming inside along with some apprehensions as well of what these weeks r going to hold for her with him in the next room!! I liked her confidence when he came back, to face him with square shoulders. I thought she would just ignore him & go to bed or something but she faced him with all the guts. And what a brave front she put up with laughing about her love for him, giving him a different notion altogether. Question here is did he catch her ploy??? Will w&r.
And their entire conversation right from the start to the finish was so logical, I could see it being played right there in front of my eyes, no melodrama, no over the top dialogs or situations but a typical logical, sane, normal situation which we could so well relate to. Thanks Smitha, no wonder we love u so much, not to mention ur writing.
I definitely smiled at some of what they said. Meher's retort at him after seeing him & how she deduced he was behind this planning of the trip, how he riled her into accepting the sharing of the room & his simple 'feeling better?' was awesome followed by I expected some names atleast was more than humorous.
And he had no issues in accepting that he had been a jerk & he deserved it, no wonder Meher was surprised!! And then came the interesting part of their conversation, his apology. No beating around the bush but a straight forward, unhindered, open apology for his behaviour. And I will say for Meher she acted very maturely without getting enraged at him. I liked the questions she posed at him, very sensible! Obviously it would come to mind that why did he wait so many months to apologise & why did he have to plan such an elaborate plot to just apologise??? And his answers were satisfactory as well as explanatory. Only I want to know did he catch her ploy to casually wave aside her feelings for him?? Oh and her reference of his parents for holding her tongue in name calling was very nice & worthy, I liked it a lot, showed the traces of her upbringing. And my Balbir was referred to as wonderful!! 😃
And the most touching thing was his giving her the aspirins, he remembered so much about her, how her brows furrowed when she had a headache. I liked it a lot, this little things shows the concern, care & love. She didn't need to say anything but his observation here was really praiseworthy.
And Meher's last retort I hope should make him understand she hasn't forgiven him yet. He still has to work wonders to get her adoration & love back. And that fleeting touch & her reaction to it said a lot, not all water is under the bridge after all!! 😃
Overall I simply loved it. Smitha seriously I am waiting for the day u r going to get this work published. It sure has the potential to be in the same league of some famous works. Its fabulous, fantastic, brilliant, excellent.
Again will find it difficult to hold on till Monday. So r we again going to read about them??? Oh pls pls pls, pls do write about these two. I am dying to know when & how will the ice break now between them. How & what has he planned to get her to swoon in his charms.
Simply amazing. Loads & loads of love for u & for this. Simple thanks is not enough!!
Take care & see u around, have a happy long weekend! Any plans, nothing for me. If u r around, will catch u then.
Lana.
PS - Smitha on mulling as usual with Destiny & reading it innumerable times I realised I forgot to mention a major point. Atul's deliberate emphasis to Vishaal 'and Meher's boss' which I am sure he meant in more ways than one, right??? 😃 I noticed it at the 1st reading itself but forgot to mention it, well it was past 2 am when I wrote my comment. Oooohhhh what an underlining authority in those 3 words, kind of putting a stamp on his property (sorry Meher, just a figure of speech to prove my point)! Whenever u bring such authority in Prem or Atul I just go 'oooohhhh lala'! 😆
Edited by lghosh - 16 years ago
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Hi smitha,

Very simple but yet very intersting and funny.


Mithiya
Edited by mithalio - 16 years ago
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Aw, I just feel so bad for Meher. Atul's an ass, and he needs to grovel. Though jealous Atul so hot. *swoons; fans self*

will be back.

*edited*

Okay, I'm rereading the entire part, and I cannot help but feel so sorry for Meher, I mean, she thought she'd be going for work, and spending time with a good friend, but instead, she's brought face-to-face with someone she has yet to get over, and who infuriates her to no end, because he's just so impeccably calm in every situation, and she cannot read him! And she has a hard time controlling her anger, which I believe is just an outlet for all the hurt he caused her, and he just stands there, completely nonchalent. Though her feeling the coldness in the air when Vishal came in front of Atul, well, darling, that was not your imagination. It's just that Vishal has no idea that Atul is your boss, in more ways than one. He staked his claim pretty well, though not so implicitly. 😆 (And I got that little snippet only after reading Lana's long comment, so thanks Lana! 😆)

I love how well the two know one another though. Atul challenges Meher, knowing she will not back down, and Meher accepts, knowing what Atul is doing, but not wanting to give him the satisfaction of her backing down, and thinking that he still affects her (which he knows he does, and she knows he does, but she doesn't know that he knows he does. That made sense to me, did it make sense to you?) But I especially love the fact that Meher and Vishal will bond quite a bit. I think Vishal will be the next person finding out about the whole MeherAtul story, and he will be there to help Meher as much as he can. He seems the sort. And, ooh, I'm going to Darling Harbour tomorrow, any chance of me bumping into one of them? 😆 For quatrro formaggi pizza. *drool* It's like amazing. You want any details about food in Sydney, just let me know, I'll be glad to tell you some awesome places to write them at. 😉😆

And that last conversation, Atul knows he deserves all Meher is saying to him, and more, and he will take it all, if it means that Meher will talk to him, will actually acknowledge him. But Meher, she just wants to forget that Atul was ever part of her life, so she wants him to be gone. And being there, having him in front of her, is hard, having to stay with him, even harder, and not being able to figure out why he's not reacting like he usually does to her sarcasm and insults is just plain frustrating. And she's had enough of Atul and his ability to hurt her, so she tries to write it all away, but it's not going to be that easy. That one little gesture of Atul, that he knows her well enough to notice the signs of her headache, really seemed to undo her. And her last sentence to him showed him that she hasn't forgiven him. It's not going to be easy, and I pity Meher, because she's been the most hurt. I want to see Atul hurting over the idea that his Meher could so easily become someone else's especially when he sees her so happily spending time with Vishal. But most of all, I pity Vishal, who has no idea what he's come in between. 😆 Let the games begin.

Love,
Radz

Edited by Anhdara13 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
the update was indeed very interesting...
Meher is all set to run away from Atul but Atul is in no mood to let her go... interesting....
Looks like he will have to fry a lot of papads this time to win Meher back as I am sure she is goin to use Vishaal as her life saver...
waiting to read the story ahead...
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Posted: 16 years ago
hey that was a great updte! so wonder what will happen next...hmm so he wants to apologise..but meher is not giving up..hope u continue soon!!!
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Posted: 16 years ago
veryyyyyy gggggoooooddddddd dear,loved it👏 now just hoping that atul and meher get together .
update soon 😃

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