FF: Yeh Naseeb Ka Kaam Hai

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Posted: 15 years ago
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Okay so I've been told that I should write a fanfic. I'm terrible with coming up with names so am open to suggestions.


In my fanfic, I'm not going to focus on just Saalekh or Ragvir, but both. I kind of want to include as many people as I can, but mainly both the couples. I hope you guys like it. And I'm carrying on from the actual Bidaai. My story starts after the Radha-Krishna performance.

Part 1

Saalekh's room

 

After the disaster play, Aalekh is really upset and is sitting on the bed waiting for his dost to bring him water.

 

Sadhana: Aalekhji, apka paani.

Aalekh: Thank you dost, thank you. Dost?

Sadhana: Hm?

Aalekh: Pata hai, yeh ba-badi ma jo hai na, bohut buri hai. Tum wrong thi. Woh achi nahin hai. Ab kya hoga, dost? Ranvir ne tho, Ranvir ne tho sh-shaadi karne se mana kardi.

Sadhana: Aalekhji, mujhe bhi kuch samaj nahi aa raha hain lekin Papa ne aaj Mummyji ke saath galat kiya. Mummyji ko kitna dukh mila hoga.

Aalekh: Wrong! Tum har bar wrong bolti ho. Da-Dad ne jo kiya woh sahi kya. Pata nahin yeh Ranvir us badi ma ko kyon roka. I don't like it! I don't like it!

Sadhana: Par Aalekhji..

Aalekh: Chup ho jao. Ab mere sone ka waqt ho gaya aur tumhari wrong baat sunne ke liye mera mood nahin hai.

 

Sadhana looks on at Aalekh lovingly as he looked very irritated and she thinks to herself how lucky she is to have him with her and how unlucky Ragini jiji and Ranvir ji are.

 

Aalekh: Dost? Dost?!

Sadhana: Jee?

Aalekh: Kaha kho jaati ho? Ab late ho gaya, na? Mera sone ka waqt niqal ja raha hai!

Sadhana: Haan, aap soh jaayeh.

Aalekh: Dost, tum bhi mere pass soh jao na, please. Mujhe bohut darr lag raha hai.

Sadhana: Kyon Aalekhji, kya hua?

Aalekh: Agar woh woh badi ma tumhe mujhse door karde jaise woh Ranvir aur uski dost ko door kiya hain, tho? Tum tum mujhe chor ke tho nahin jaoge na dost?

Sadhana: Mummyji aisa kabhi nahin karenge. Wahi tho theh jissne mujhe aapke pass le aayi. Aap fikar maat kariye. Main hamesha aapki pass rahongi.

Aalekh: Promise? Paaka wala?

Sadhana: Haan paaka wala promise.

Aalekh: Good good. Lekin ab tum woh sofa pe nahin rahogi. Yahan mere pass rehna, okay dost? Aao, yahan soh jao. Mera bed kitna barah hai. Hum dono yahan, woh kya khete, haan, hum dono yahan aaram se rehe sakhte.

 

Sadhana smiles. Aalekh grabs her shoulders and makes her lie down on the bed. Then he looks at her smiling up at him and gives her a kiss, wishes her goodnight and holds her hand as he goes to sleep. He holds her hand close to him and slowly dirfts off to sleep. Sadhana thinks that today Aalekh has brought her into his bed and thanks God for the change in Aalekh. She makes a promise to herself to make Aalekh normal again even if it is slowly.

 

The clock has struck 2AM. Aalekh wakes up and sees Sadhana sleeping. He thinks about the performance and is very agitated. He slowly gets out of bed and walks towards Ranvir's room. Ranvir's door is open and he sees that Ranvir is still awake and is crying. This further angers Aalekh who goes downstairs and is thinking of what to do to make things better when he sees a knife and walks towards it..

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Posted: 15 years ago
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excellent!!!! that was great....cant wait for more....cont soon
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Posted: 15 years ago
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great start๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘... want to know what exactly aalekh does with the knife (it would be great if he kills vasu)...
please update soon... waiting for the next part...


*~VASUNDHARA~*
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Lol, thanks guys.

Part 2

Aalekh walks towards the knife and picks it up. His hand is shaking and he looks terrified, but determined. He walks towards Vasu's room.

Vasu is in her room thinking about everything that just happened and especially about how Aalekh had said "good good" when Indrajit had pretty much kicked her out. There's a knock on Vasu's door. Vasu start wiping her tears and goes to open her door. When she opens her door, she is shocked to see Aalekh standing there with a knife looking very angry.

Vasu: Aalekh! Tum yahan.. yeh kya kar rahe ho? Tumhe yeh choori kahan se mila? Aalekh?!
Aalekh: Aap bohut buri hai.
Vasu: Aalekh.. dekhno, yeh choori mujhe de doh.

Aalekh starts walking towards Vasu with the knife in his hand. Vasu in the mean time starts backing into her room.

Vasu: Aalekh, yeh kya kar rahe ho? Aalekh!

Aalekh raises the knife and comes even closer to Vasu. Vasu screams Aalekhs name out loud. Choti Ma hears this and runs towards Vasu's room.

Aalekh: Main aapko nahin maaroongi. Pata hai meri dost kehte hai ke kissi ko maarna buri baat hai, issi liye main aapko nahin maaroongi, lekin aapko main yeh choori dene aayi kyon ki, aap-aap Ranvir ko na, maar daalo aur uski jo dost hai na? Meri dost ki Jiji? Usko bhi maar daalo. Aap har waqt buri kaam karte ho, toh maine socha yeh buri kaam toh aap hi karengi. Ranvir jo hai na, woh meri dost ki jiji ke biger nahi jee payeega. Aapne dekha usseh, kitna bura haal ho gaya hai. Kitna happy thi woh jab hum log us din dost ki Mamaji ki ghar gayi thi.

Vasu listens to all this and starts crying.

Aalekh: Aap kyon roh rahi hai? Chup ho jaaye! Aapko toh sirf rulana aata hai. Mere dost ko rulai aur ab Ranvir ko.
Vasu: Aalekh, tum humein galat samaj rahe ho..
Aalekh: NAHIN! Galat main nahin, meri dost samajti hain. Woh samajti hai ke aap ek achchi Ma hain lekin aap buri hain. Aap meri Ma nahin ho sakte. Meri Ma toh meri Choti Ma hai jo hamesha meri khushi chathi hai aur mere dost ka aur Ranvir ka bhi. Woh kitni achchi hai. Sabki khushi ka kitna khayal rakhti hain. Aap ko toh sirf rulana aata hai. Aap Ranvir ki Ma bhi nahin hai. Kissi ki bhi Ma nahin hain.

Choti Ma meanwhile came and heard all this. She walks up to Aalekh and holds his shoulder.

Choti Ma: Aalekh, aisa nahin karte. Yeh choori mujhe de do.
Aalekh: Dekhiye na Choti Ma, unone ne Ranvir ka khushi cheena hain aur meri dost par chillati rehti hain. Ranvir ne kyon unko roka. Chali jaati toh accha hota.
Choti Ma: Aisa nahin bolti. Tum yahan kya kar rahe ho? Aao, chalo, soh jao.
Aalekh: Choti Ma, ab kya hoga? Ranvir ko kya hoga?
Choti Ma: Sab teek ho jaye ga. Main kehti hoon na. Ranvir bhi teek ho jaye ga. Usko thoda waqt ki zaroorat hai. Hum usseh badh main baat kar lenge, okay?
Aalekh: Okay, okay.

Choti Ma escorts Aalekh back to bed where Sadhana was still sleeping. Choti Ma lays down Aalekh and Aalekh puts a finger to his lips to indicate to Choti Ma to be quiet and then he points to Sadhana. Choti Ma sees that Sadhana is sleeping in the bed and smiles to herself. She then walks to Vasu's room who was sitting on her bed crying.

Choti Ma: Vasu..
Vasu: Aalekh mujhe itna naafrath karta hain. Mujhe? Main uski Ma hoon lekin woh kehta hai main uski Ma nahin hoon.
Choti Ma: Vasu, dekho, aaj jo bhi hua teek nahin hua lekin tum agar tumhare galati sudar deti ho toh saab teek ho sakta hai.
Vasu: Maine hamesha apna sab kuch dekar Aalekh se pyaar kiya aur wahi Aalekh aaj mujhe hi itna naafrath karta hain.
Choti Ma: Vasu, tum sun rahe ho na main kya keh rahi hoon?
Vasu: Main har gayi. Aaj sab kuch har gayi. Mera pati kissi gher ke liye mujhe ghar chorne ke liye kaha aur ab mere apna koon, mera beta kehta hai ke main uski Ma nahin hoon. Main har gayi. Ab main kya karoon? Mere apne hi mujhe galat samajte hain..
Choti Ma: Kyon ki tum galat ho! Vasu, tum galat ho! Kitni bar tumko hum sab yeh kehte rahenge? Tumko main samjhane ke liye aaya tha lekin tum meri baat sunne ke liye tayar hi nahi thi. Tumne bohut pehle har gayi thi. Bhagwan ne tumhe jeetne ka mauqa diya aur tum woh bhi har beti. Tumne bohut pehle tumhari apni hi sab ko tumhare se door kiya sirf ek Ranvir bacha tha, usko bhi door kardi. Kya tumhe uska dard, uska pyaar zaara sa bhi dekhai nahin di? Tumhe yeh sab karke kya mila? Kya tum samajte ho ke Ranvir kissi aur se shaadi kar legi? Kabhi nahin. Woh Ragini se itna pyaar karta hai ke kissi aur ladki uski nazar main bhi nahin aaye gi. Ranvir ki zindagi barbad ho jaaye gi. Aur rahi baat Sharmaji ki, toh woh tumhe neecha dekhane ke liye woh shart nahin rakhi thi. Woh issi liye rakha ke woh log tumhare marzi chathe hain. Haan, Vasu, itna ho jaane ke bavajut, woh log tumhari marzi chathi hain kyon ki woh log ko pata hai ke Ragini yahan khush nahi reh sakti tumhare ashirwaad ke biger. Itna accha parivaar humein aur kahin nahi mil sakta.

Vasu is just sitting there crying and listening to Choti Ma. When she doesn't respond, Choti Ma turns around and leaves as there's no point in talking to Vasu.


Next morning, Vasu with a determined look, calls up Mamaji.


Mamaji: Hello
Vasu: Namaste Sharmaji, hum Vasu bol rahe hain
Mamaji: Jee namaste.
Vasu: Hum aaj abhi aapse milna chahte hain. Kya hum aaye?
Mamaji: Jee zaroor. Koi kaam hai kya?
Vasu: Darasal, Ranvir aur mera parivaar ne agli bar jab aapki ghar gaayi thi toh bohut galatiya ki thi. Main un galatiyon ko sudarne aana chahti hoon. Teek hain toh main rakhti hoon. Bye.

And with that Vasu hangs up on Mamaji leaving him confused as to what she's talking about...

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Posted: 15 years ago
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wowww awesomee๐Ÿ‘ it really looks like a rea written update of bidaais upcoming episode hehe..greatt i hope aisa hi hoo =D
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Posted: 15 years ago
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wowww awesomee๐Ÿ‘ it really looks like asif em readinng the written update of coming mondays episode hehe..greatt i hope aisa hi hoo =D
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Posted: 15 years ago
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OMG!
What can i say?!
Brilliant! Brilliant! Brilliant!!!๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ
Your FanFic is really good... are you sure you're not actually a writer for the show?๐Ÿ˜† But no seriously, if this actually happens in the show i wouldn't be surprised and you'll start getting hundreds of PMs asking about what's going to happen next๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†
Already can't wait for the next part, updates soon.
 
Oh, by the way, i love that Sadhna is sleeping in Aalekhs bed now. That's been bugging me in the show for ages so thankyou and lets hope your predictions come true๐Ÿ˜‰ (hey maybe that's a good name for you FF, 'predictions' ๐Ÿ˜†)
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Posted: 15 years ago
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This is really nice.. amazing story ..  keep it coming :)
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Posted: 15 years ago
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OMG, Rahm! This is amazing!
Did you finish your exams already?
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Thanks you guys. That means a lot. :)

Sonal, lol, yaar, I can't handle that many PMs and lol @ the name. And no, i'm not a writer on Bidaai, though if I was, i'd have seriously injured Vasu by now and also would have given her shock therapy.

Shumi, no, due to the heavy snow here in NYC, my classes got canceled so I will be taking them next week. I had a lot of free time today and so I ended up writing.

I will update part 3 soon. Hopefully by tomorrow. I want to update it before Monday. The problem is on Sunday, my parents are coming back (they were out of the country) and I have tons to do, but I will try to make some time for this!

I'm actually loving writing this.
Edited by Rahm - 15 years ago