Teri Meri Kahaani (Continued on pg. 2)

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Even though Saras is very upset with the fact that Kumud forgave Pramad so easily and is now believing him after everything he did to hurt her, he continues to support her. However, he does have his own doubts as to how Pramad can change so soon so fast and thus decides to keep an eye on him. Everyone in the family is a bit relieved that Pramad is showing the signs of improvement. They all credit this change to Kumud and her good values that she brought home with her. Kusum is also happy to know that her sister's efforts are finally paying off. Everything goes smoothly around the house. But Saras still feels something fishy in his guts. Even though he doesn't say anything, he decides to dig into the matter and find out what actually is brewing inside Pramad's mind.

In Ratnanagari, despite her family's anger towards Danny, Kumari decides to work with him and take his help to improve their financial conditions. She makes it clear to Danny that she will not take any money from him. Rather they both would work together to make Vidyachatur's business successful. Danny understands and assures her that they will make things work. She suggests that Danny should stay at a lodge so that no one finds out about them working together. Danny agrees with her. They start thinking about ways to get more clients for the factory. However, in a small village like Ratnanagri, it becomes hard for them to find proper business. After a few days, Kumari goes to Danny to let him know that they have to do something soon. She enters his room and sees him surfing on facebook. She gets angry at him and asks him if he seriously wants to help her out or is he just doing some time pass. Danny says that he was tired of thinking and thus wanted to take a break. Kumari gets upset and says, "Yahan humpe itani badi musibat aayi hai aur tum facebook pe timepass kar rahe ho? Hai kya isme aisa jo log ghanto tak ispe bethe rehte hai aur tasveere dekhte rehte hai? Pata hai meri ek saheli roz facebook pe kapde dekh kar kehti hai ki main ek din aisi hi ek dress kharidungi! Yeh dekhne ke chakkar mein exam me kam number aa gaye uske. Sab waqt barbaad karne ke bahaane hai aur kuch nahi." Suddenly Danny says, "Kumari yaar tune kya idea diya hai! Ab dekh mein kaise teri problems solve karta hu." Kumari is confused and says, "Meine kya idea diya?" Danny says, "Tune kaha na ke teri dost facebook par dresses ki tasvire dekh kar unhe kharidna chahti hai!" Kumari says, "Haan toh?" Danny says, "Toh yaha aur kitani aisi ladkiyaan hongi jinhe facebook pe se dekh dekh ke kapade kharidne hote hai. Sirf yahi kyun, facebook ko use karke hum Ratnanagri ke bahar bhi apne designs pohcha sakte hai." Kumari is still confused and says, "Matlab?" Danny says, "Aree meri paagal dost, hum ek facebook page banaayenge aur uspe factory mein banne vaale kapdo ki tasveere lagayenge. Log usse dekhenge aur kharidne ke liye order denge. Uncle ka business badhega aur teri family ke saare problems door!" Kumari gets happy and excited and says that the idea is great. Danny says that he will create the page right away and asks her to tell this idea to her family and convince them to put the photograph of the clothes on the page. Kumari thanks him and leaves.

At Kumud's place things just keep getting better and better in Pramad's matter. He not only behaves nicely with everyone but he also starts taking deep interest in his bapu's political party. Saras is still skeptical about this change of heart and continues to keep an eye on him. However, he gets happy seeing Kumud happy. Kusum witnesses this and goes to talk to him. She goes to his room and thanks him for his support. She says that Kumud wouldn't have survived if he wasn't there for her. She further adds that since things are now better between Pramad and Kumud, he should leave and move on with his life. Saras gets upset hearing this and is about to say something when he hears a noise outside his room. He goes to check and sees a broken vase near the door. He gets worried and looks around. He sees Pramad vanishing behind the curtains and suspects that Pramad might have come to know about him being Saraswatichandra and that's why he is behaving so good with him. Kusum comes there and asks him what is wrong and he says, "Kuch nahi. Mujhe aisa laga jaise yaha koi tha." and asks her to leave. She leaves and Saras gets into a deep thought.

In Ratnanagri, everyone appreciates Kumari's idea and decides to support her. Vidyachatur and Gyan get the clothes home and take pictures of them and give it to Kumari. Kumari takes the photos to Danny and says that the pictures are good but they need to shoot them with professional digital camera. Kumari argues that those cameras are very expensive and they can't afford it. Danny says, "Tu kabhi meri baat puri sunegi? Mere paas hai camera. Tu ek kaam kar, kal gaaon ki kuch khoobsurat ladkiyon ko leke purane kile pe aajana. Hum un ladkiyon ki tasveere lenge." Kumari gets furious hearing this and says, "Tum ladkiyon ki tasveere lena chahte ho? Tumhe sharam nahi aati? Aisi giri hui harkat karna chaahte ho aur uske liye meri madad maang rahe ho? Besharam, meine bohot badi galti ke tumpe bharosa karke." All this time Danny is trying hard to says something but Kumari gets up to leave. Danny stops her and says, "Meri puri baat sun toh le meri ma! Tu un ladkiyon ko factory mein bane hue kapade pehnake laana unhe models banake. Taaki hum dikha sake ki woh kapade ladkiyon pe kitane acche lagte hai! Tu bilkul paagal hai Kumari. Mein Dubai mein bada hua hu lekin mera dil pura ka pura desi hai toh aage se aisa sochna bhi mat." Kumari says, "Sorry.. Sorry.. galti ho gayi. Lekin mere desi dilwale, mama mujhe kapde lekar tumhaare paas kyun aane denge? Unhe pata chala na ke mein tumhaari madad le rahi hun toh sab milke maar daalenge tumhe bhi aur mujhe bhi. Ma ka thappad bhool gaye?" Danny puts his hands on his cheek and says, "Who toh mein zindagi bhar nahi bhoolunga. Kya zor se lagai thi teri khadus ma ne!" Kumari makes a face. Danny continues, "Tu unhe bolna ke sheher se ek photographer aaya hai jo unke kapdo ki tasveere lene ke liye taiyaar hai. Aur sab leke aa jaana." Kumari says, "Lekin sab mujhe akele kyun aane denge? Agar unhone mere saath aane ki zid ki toh?" Danny says, "Toh unhe bhi le aana. Tu chinta mat kar maine sab soch liya hai. Tu bas kal waqt pe pohoch jaana baaki sab mein dekh lunga." Kumari agrees and is about leave when Danny says, "Sun, ladkiya khoobsurat honi chahiye!" Kumari makes a face and hits him and smiles on her way out. Danny looks at her go and says, "Paagal!" and laughs.

Saras suspects that Pramad is in touch with Kalika and she might have told him the truth. He decides to put an end to this. He decides to find Kalika and bring her back so he can keep an eye on her as per the saying "Keep your friends close and your enemies closer." On the breakfast table, he asks Moorakhdas if he found out anything about Kalika's whereabouts. Kusum and Kumud are shocked to hear this. Pramad gets startled, too but quickly hides it from his face. Saras notices the change in Pramad and get assurance that Kalika definitely has something to do with Pramad's changed behavior. Moorkhdas denies any knowledge of Kalika. Saras sees him getting upset and feels bad about reminding him of the painful event. He says, "Mujhe maaf kar dijiye Moorakhdasji. Mera irrada aapko dukh pohchane ka nahi tha. Aap chinta mat kijiye. Who jald hi mil jaayegi." Kumud gets angry and makes an excuse to leave. Saras sees this and says that he also needs to leave as he has to go somewhere. Pramad looks at him and smiles.

Kumari convinces her family to get the pictures taken from the photographer from Ahmedabad. But as she suspected, they all decide to go with her instead of sending the girls alone. Kumari agrees and they all reach the venue. There is guy standing there taking pictures and Kumari says, "Suniye?" The guy says, "Yes?" and turns around. Kumari is shocked to see a bearded man wearing Dhoti-Kurta with a giant camera and a turban on his head. For a split second Kumari doesn't recognize that he is Danny. Danny comes forward and says, "Kumariji aap aa gayi?" Kumari smiles and is glad to see him in disguise. He looks at the family and says, "Jai shree krishna!" Kumari says, "Mama yahi hai woh photographer jinke baare mein mai baat kar rahi thi." Vidyachatur says, "Jai shree krishna.." Kumari realizes that they haven't decided a name yet and gets worried. But Danny says, "Shahrukh Khan!" Kumari is surpriced to hear this and makes a face. Danny says, "Woh kya hai na uncle, mere parents Shahrukh Khan ke bohot bade fan the. Issilye unhone mera naam bhi wohi rakha." They all laugh. Danny asks them if they are ready and they say yes. He points to the tent where they all can change. The girls come dressed up and the photography session starts. Danny puts on the music and asks girls to give good poses. Girls do so. Kumari and the rest of the family are happy to see all this. After the girls' session is over, he asks to take the family's pictures. Everyone is stunned to hear this and refuses. Danny says, "Aap logo ko apne banaaye hue kapde pehnkar tasveere khichani chahiye taaki sabko pata chale ke aapke kapde sirf jawaan aur patli-patli ladkiyon ke liye hi nahi par parivaar ke sabhi logo pe acche lagenge." Kumari agrees and makes them agree to it. They all give in. First, Daadaji wears a white kurta and dhoti with a turban on his head, a shawl on his shoulder, and a stick in hand and get the pictures clicked. Then badi kaki gets her pictures clicked in an off-white silk saree with golden border. Then comes Dugba in purple cotton saree with khadi print. Then Vidyachatur and Guniya and Gyan and Chandrika come and get their pictures taken in traditional Gujarati outfits. Yash also models for a Dhoti-Kurta made for Grooms. They all look impressed. Danny looks at Kumari and says, "Ab tum." Kumari goes and wears a red baandhani chaniya-choli with net oodhani. She has her hair open and has a kamarbandh on her waist. She comes out of the tent. Danny looks at her and is mesmerized by her. She walks towards him and Danny gets lost in her beauty. Vidyachatur praises Kumari's beauty and Dugba says that her choti si gudiya grew up so fast and soon she will leave her to make her own house. Tears roll down her cheeks. Kumari goes to her and says, "Mein kahi nahi jaa rahi ma. Mein yahi rahungi aapke paas. Aur vaise bhi abhi toh mujhe aapki Kumud ke jaise samjhdaar banne mein bohot waqt lagega. Filhaal mein apni photo khichalu?" Dugba smiles at her and nods. Danny is still lost in her beauty and takes her pictures as if he was only alive to take her pictures. After her photo session is done she looks at her family and smiles. Her hair fall on the side of her face due to wind and Danny secretly takes that one and the most beautiful shot of her and smiles looking at it. Vidyachatur asks if they are done and Danny says, "Nahi. Ab aap sab ki ek tasveer." They all come together and Danny takes the picture. They all are very impressed with him and thank him. Vidyachatur says, "Aapki fees?" and hesitates a bit. Danny cleverly says, "Photography mera passion hai aur mein apna passion kisiko nahi bechata. Balki usse khule dil se baantta hun. Aur fir aapki itani acchi family ko dekhkar meri kai purani yaade taaza ho gayi." He removes the SD card from the camera and hands it to Kumari. Kumari says that she doesn't know how to use it and asks him if he can load it in her laptop. Danny does so. Guniyal invites him for dinner and as much as he wants to eat their delicious food, he refuses and says that he need to go as he is getting late. Kumari sees him going and says, "Suniye?" He turns around and Kumari sweetly says, "Thank you!" with a cute smile. Danny looks at innocent and beautiful Kumari and says, "You're always welcome." and leaves.

In Suvarnapur, Saras is trying hard to locate Kalika. Kumud witnesses this and gets mad at him. She goes to his room and closes the door. She asks him what he is trying to do. He asks her to trust him. She argues that if he wants to bring back the one person who was the reason behind her miseries, then how can she trust him. Saras is hurt by this. Kumud sees this and feels bad for this burst. She apologizes and says that she didn't mean that and asks him to tell her the truth. He asks her not to doubt his intentions and tells her about his doubts and Pramad being near his room listening to him and Kusum. He also adds the fact that Kalika is aware of Saraswatichandra's truth. Kumud is shocked to know all this and gets extremely worried. Saras assures her that he will not let anyone ruin her happiness. Kumud looks into his eyes and his firmness gives her strength. She says, "Chahe jo kuch bhi ho, iss mein hum saath hai." He smiles and nods. She leaves.

Elaan-E-Jang Continued on Page 2... 😊
Edited by Mitsu91 - 11 years ago

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Awesome!!
So beautifully written... Love it<3
Please continue soon!!!
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wow danri in action...i too want this to happen
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How about telling this to the cvs?
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wow wow wowww👏
awesome meri jaan
loved it loved it loved it to the core...
plz continue

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At night, Saras goes to the kitchen to get some water. Everyone is fast asleep and there is pin drop silence in the house. Suddenly Saras hears a car starting. He goes out and sees Pramad leaving the house. Saras feels something wrong and decides to follow him in another car. This chase continues for a while and then Pramad stops infront of a bar. Saras is shocked to know that Pramad still drinks at night. His doubts become more and more firm. He follows Pramad inside and sees him in his old avatar. He gets mad at him for cheating Kumud like this. Pramad is about to drink when Saras stops him by holding his hand. He says, "Toh yeh sab ek naatak tha. Tum ab bhi wohi ho jo tum pehle the!" Pramad gets angry and says, "Tu kaun hota hai mujhe rokanewala? Mein jo bhi hun jaisa bhi hu isse tujhe kya matlab?" Saras immidiately replies, "Matlab hai. Apne parivaar ke saath aisa dhokha karte hue tumhe sharam nahi aati? Kumud ke vishwas ko aise dhokha kaise de sakte ho? Itana sab hone ke baad bhi usne tumhe doosra mauka diya aur tumhaare saath vaapas aayi. Uske saath aisa kaise kar sakte ho?" Pramad coldly says, "Meri biwi ki chinta tu kyun kar raha hai? Kya lagti hai woh teri?" Saras stays quiet hearing this. Pramad continues, "Bol na.. Kya lagti hai who teri?" Saras says, "Tumhe yeh sab nahi karna chahiye. Kumud ka vishwas toot jaayega." Pramad giggles and says, "Toh iss me itana udaas kyun ho raha hai? Agar Kumud ka mujh pe se vishwas uthh jaayega toh iss mein tere liye toh faayda hi hoga na Saraswatichandra?" Saras is shocked to hear this. Pramad says, "Tujhe kya laga mein andha hu, jo teri aur Kumud ki aankh-micholi dekh nahi sakta? Sharaab ke nashe mein rehta hu par fir bhi pyaar ko pehchaan sakta hu. Tum dono ki vajah se Kalika bhaag gai, jo mujhe pasand thi! Ab tu dekh, teri hi nazaron ke saamne tere pyaar ko chhin ke usse apna banaunga. Bohot maza aayega." and he laughs cruelly. Saras gets furious hearing all this and says, "Sachha pyaar paane aur khone se bohot upar hota hai. Sachhe pyaar ka ehsaas tujh jaise aadmi ko kaise hoga jo apne ma-baap tak ka pyaar nahi samjh sakta! Aur jis Kalika ki tu baat kar raha hai uske liye tu sirf ek bank account hai jise woh ab tak khaali karti aayi hai. Ha mein hu Saraswatichandra aur Kumud se bohot pyaar karta hu. Hamesha se karta tha aur zindagi ki aakhari saans tak karunga. Lekin hamaara rishta paane aur khone se bohot upar hai. Mar kar bhi zinda ho sakta hu agar woh ek baar mujhe pukaare. Lekin woh aisa kabhi nahi karegi kyun ki apni maryaada ko paar karna uske sanskaaro mein nahi hai. Itana sab kuch hone ke baad bhi usne har baar tujhe itane mauke diye; khud ke saath nainsaafi kar ke bhi usne har pal yeh koshish ki ke woh apne iss rishte ko bacha sake, tujhe badal ke tere ma-baap ko diya hua vaada pura kar sake! Kya kuch nahi kiya tune uske saath; usse jaanvaro ki tarah pita, usse zabardasti sharab pilakar uske saath zabardati karne ki koshish ki, uss do takke ki naukarani ke hatho uska apmaan karvaaya, yaha tak ki uske parivaar ke saath bhi badsaluki ki... lekin woh fir bhi tera saath dene ke apne faisle par hamesha atal rahi. Aur maine bhi uska saath diya iss umeed pe ki tu badal jaayega aur usse hamesh khush rakhega. Lekin aaj meri umeed toot gai. Aaj mujhe yakin ho gaya ke tu kabhi nahi badal sakta. Tu jo tha, tu who rahega, ek ghatiya-gira hua insaan jiske mann mein sivaay zeher ke aur kuch nahi hai. Aur ab mein Kumud ko tere ghatiya iraado ka shikaar nahi banne dunga. Issi liye mujhe tera challenge manzoor hai. Mere pyaar ko chhin ne ke liye tujhse jo ho sakta hai woh tu kar, iss jang mein jeet mere pyaar ki hi hogi!" Saras looks into Pramad's eyes with anger and leaves. Pramad gets mad seeing Saras's courage and strength and breaks a beer bottle and some chairs.

In Ratnanagari, someone from Surat calls the Desais. Kumari picks up and he asks for Vidyachatur. They talk on the phone for a while. After they hang up, he calls everyone and announces that the guy was a the owner of a big clothing store in Surat. He saw the designs on facebook and want to give us a very big order. Everyone gets happy. He says that the guy is coming to see the clothes personally next week and if he likes their work, he will give them 1 lakh rupees advance and the rest will be paid after the final delivery. Everyone gets extremely happy and praises Kumari for her efforts. She thanks Danny in her heart and decides to give him lots of sweets and a tiffin full of home cooked food that he likes so much.

On the other hand, Danny can't get Kumari out of his mind. He loads the secret picture of Kumari that he took on his laptop and keeps looking at her. He remembers all the moments spent with her starting from their first meeting and smiles. Suddenly there is a knock on the door. He opens it and there she is; the girl who now ruled his heart was standing right in front of him with the same cute smile on her face. He smiles at her. She looks at him and asks if he is okay. He snaps out of his thoughts and says, "Ha, mein theek hu. Kyun pooch rahi ho?" Kumari replies, "Kyun ki tum paagalo ke jaise muskura rahe ho aur mujhe andar bhi nahi aane de rahe." Danny realizes that he is blocking the door and moves aside to let her in. He quickly goes to his laptop and turns it off. She comes in and starts taking out the food. Danny sees this and says, "Yeh sab kya hai?" Kumari says, "Khaana.. aur sab tumhaari pasand ka hai." Danny says, "Aree wah aaj tu mujhpe itani mehrbaan kaise ho gai? Kahi fir se iss mein mirchi-virchi toh nahi daali hai na?" Kumari says, "Nahi baba, meine koi shararat nahi ki. Kasam se! Aaj mama ko Surat se ek bhai ka phone aaya tha. Unhone facebook pe hamaare designs dekhe aur unhe bohot pasand aaye. Woh agle hafte khud aa rahe hai samples dekhne aur agar unhe kaam pasand aaya toh woh hame bohot hi bada order denge. Yeh sab tumhaari vajah se hua hai. Agar tum meri madad nahi karte toh... khair chodo! Mein tumhaare liye ghar ka khaana, ghee vaali rotiya, aur dher saari meethai laayi hu! Jaldi se kha lo!" Danny gets really happy seeing her smiling and starts eating. He asks, "Tere gharwalon ne tujhe itana saara khaana lekar yaha aane kaise diya? Kuch poocha nahi teri khadoos ma ne?" Kumari hits him and says, "Meri ma ke baare mein aisa mat kaho. Tum jaanto ho woh itani naaraz kyun hai. Aur Chandrika mami ko maine tumhaare baare mein sab bataya hai. Hum dono factory ke workers ko khaana dene k liye nikale the. Woh factory gai khana lekar aur mein yaha aayi tumhaara khana lekar." Danny thanks her for the food and just digs into it as if he hadn't had food in ages. Kumari sees this and asks him to slow down as the food wouldn't run away anywhere. But Danny ignores her and just keeps eating. Kumari smiles seeing him this happy eating food.

Game on...

Edited by Mitsu91 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Simply wonderful update, I can actually visualise this happening.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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nice
beautifully written .
Update soon .
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Posted: 11 years ago
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wow yaar,hope cv's see this.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Awesome story
Will this be an FF? (I'm hoping yes)
I like the Danri scenes
And Saras' dialogue to pramad was good
Hoping you'll continue soon

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