FF: Love You Chptr 7, pg4 updated

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PS:- I am not giving any introduction to any characters, as they very simple, one can understand their nature by reading the story ahead. If, this story affects any readers sentiments, for that am sorry in advance, it might have been done uintentionally.
CHAPTER NO. 1
It had been almost 3 years since Gopi had got married. She has everything which a maaried woman can ask for. She has a loving and caring MIL (Madhavi Shah); a FIL (Sunil Shah) who treated gopi as his daughter; a BIL (Rahul Shah) who was like an elder brother to her; a bhabhi (Durva Shah) who is Gopi's BFF and a nephew (Aman Shah) who considered Gopi to be his Choti Maa. Gopi, too had a husband (Rohit Shah), until a year ago, because he died in an accident. With his death Gopi's marital life bliss and life came to a stndstill. She had stopped living her life, but was just surviving for the aforesaid family, because she knew they loved her from the bottom of heart and so was the case with Gopi.
Gopi, durva beta are you'l reday?? Shall we leave?? Both come from the kitchen, fixing their respective sarees and durva answers jii maa, we shall leave. They were about leave, when they hear Aman where are you'l going?? and comes running from the staircase and stands holding gopi's hand, gopi lifts him and says we are going to the kanhaji's temple, to which aman says even am coming with you'l. Rahul comes from behind saying finally i have caught you, aman. you thought you run too fast, huh?? seeing the ladies of the house near the door he asks where are you'l going to which aman answers they are going to kahanji's temple and are taking me with them saying this he hugs gopi smilingly. Aman, if you're going to the temple then who'l be going to the school, certainly not me hearing about school aman frowns and says i don't want to go and again hugs gopi. Hearing this gopi says listen aman, if you go to school today, then i'll take you to the temple with on sunday. Though aman was not happy with gopi's suggesstion, but had to abide by what his choti maa said, so th eladies go the temple and aman along with his father goes to his school.
The ladies reach the temple and are praying. Once done with their prayers, they were about to leave, when suddenly a lady calls madhavi and they turn to see who was calling her. Maadhavi was overwhelemed seeing her long lost friend Kokila Modi. The two friends hug each other and kokila introduces her DIL Rashi Modi, and her son Jigar Modi and so does madahvi too. Before, parting their ways Koki invites her friend for dinner, this sunday in to their house and the Shah's agree to it and the ladies take the ways to their respective homes.
CHAPTER 2
Finally, sunday had arrived and aman was too happy because he was going out with his Choti maa. So as promised gopi takes aman with her to the temple. While she was praying, aman plans to a play a prank on her and runs away from and hides behind a car. A man wearing a golden kurta sees aman doing this and smiles at him.
Gopi, after finishing praying realises that aman wasn't standing near her. She desperately starts searching for aman and finally reaches the man who was standing there observing aman and enquires whether he had seen a small boyaound her. Initially the man thought of joining the boy in his prank, but seeing the desperation Gopi's eyes he tells her where aman was hiding. Gopi, in her desperation doesn't realises to whom she was interacting and finally finds aman and hugs him. Suddenly gopi hears a man calling her gopi she turns around to see who was the person and was thrilled, shocked an surprise to see him standing in front of her and says ahem!? exactly, so you still remeber me?? i thought you've forgotten about me and smiles at her and she hesitantly smiles and says ofcourse!! i still remebre you ahem, there is a silence between them. Ahem breaks the silence by saing gopi, you're son is too naughty and pulls his cheek gopi says ammm... ahem... he's not my son, but my nephew aman, but not less than a son for me and smiles at ahem. After awhile ahem asks her how is rohit doing?? hearing harish's name the small smile from gopi's face vanishes and her eyes start to brim with tears, she somehow manages to keep them away and says we both are no longer together pauses and starts again he sighs a little and says he.. he is no longer a part of my life.. before ahem could question her any further she says aammm... ahem.. am getting lte.. i think, i should leave saying this she walks to her car and leaves a shaken ahem. He was lost in the words which gopi said and was brought back when he heard his mother ahem dikra, lets leave to which he only nods a yes as his thoughts are pre-occupied with gopi's statement.
In the car koki tells him my friend madhavi and her family is coming for dinner tonight, i don't want to you skip dinner today ahem says mom, but i have a meeting to attend, once i get done with it il be home for dinner.. dont worry and drives back to MM.
PS:- I have introduced the characters in colour, because the respective colours indicate a converstional dialouge of that paricular character.
Read it, give me your thoghts and please without fail do let me know whether i should go ahead or stop here itself.
Suggestions, appreciation and critisim both are welcome..!!!
Thank you so much for reading it
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Posted: 13 years ago
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it was a great start😊
hope you continue soon and please do add some raji moments.😳
well done👏
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loved it dhruti!!!!! do continue soon!!!!!!!
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that was an awesome start...so gopi and ahem know each other from before...and who is harish...cant wait for ur next update...
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Originally posted by: varshu27

that was an awesome start...so gopi and ahem know each other from before...and who is harish...cant wait for ur next update...

i initially thought naming gopis husband as harish later i changed him to rohit.. mistake rectified... 😊
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Great start Cant wait too read the next part!
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Wow a fabulous start !!! Really liking the story line. Great job👏 . Continue please 😊
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Awesome!!! 👏 Continue pls!!! 😃
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This is really good. Thank god it is an ff..coz it will be longer than OS. Thanks for the PM dhruti, I wasn't in the forum after 6.30 PM IST so would have missed it today...So Gopi knows Ahem??? Old love or something???
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Chapter 3 Is everybody ready?? Shall we leave?? asked sunil, while reading a newspaper in the hall, dad, me and my son are reday since awhile ago, but the ladies are'nt i guess said rahul and they both laughed, excuse me my dear son, we ladies dont take much time to get ready, its that we have keep running behind you'l for little thing, that makes us late, got it said madhavi, your absolutely right maa added dhurvika from behind and said your cell and watch, you left them in the room itself. where is gopi?? asked sunil to which dhurvika added sadly papa she isn't coming. why?? came the question from aman. Before, dhurvika could answer gopi said with a smile thats because choti maa, isnt well. choti maa, if you're not going then even i'll stay back with you and will take care of you said aman, to which everyone smiled. Madhavi negotiated with gopi and said gopi beta, koki has invited the whole family and you're too a part of this family. so no arguments you're coming with us. Go and get ready, we'l wait for you. Gopi again said the same thing. dhurvika tried arguing with gopi and said gopi, stop confining yourself in the four walls of thi shouse, go out, meet people, you'l feel better to which gopi just smiled and continued thank you bhabhi, but am not well, my head is paining too badly, il rest for sometime gopi pauses and continues bhabhi, anyways there are few household chores to do, il manage that here and anyways i like being alone hearing this dhurvika said gopi, household chores, huhh?? we can manage it tomorrow. gopi still was admant on going out, finally everyone gave up to gopi and they leave. while bidding them away gopi says i want all of you'l to have fun. Before, leaving sunil places his hand on gopi's head and says it would have been wonderful, if you too would have joined us, beta do it yourself, we all have told that, you were not at fault, but the destiny was gopi just smile and looks down. Once, they all leave Shah House, gopi goes to her room and removes her wedding/honeymoon album and seeing those photos, she remembers every moment she had spent with rohit, a tear rolls down her cheek and she wipes it of, as she had promised rohit she'l cry remembering him, but will smile.
Sorry for the short update.. am still working on the story line..
sorry i couldnt thank each one of you'l individually, thank you everyone 😊

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