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-GayabCat-

@-GayabCat-

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Posted: 14 years ago

Hello SNSites

As we all know there is a weekend ahead and there is nothing to do.

Why not come up with something fun and practical work to do, all you need to do is write a short story, or a oneshot here. In shorts SS or OS

To alleviate boredone on the weekends, read below and there will be a task for the next person to. It can either be a OS or a SS. For SS you can leave it half way through and let the person know where to continue from to finish it off. Lets tick off right here just now.😉

...So here we begin ...

...Good Luck...

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Oneshot

Aehem had found out the truth. It was rashi who had made so many calls in Switzerland. He also found out the real story behind it, to kick out Gopi from the house and what they did to Gopi since childhood. He was convinced Gopi is innocent and because of them she was stammering in between and wasn't strong enough. His heart finally had a belief of sigh and accepted her. He had cheered up. But now he thought, he will bring their plans to an end, their plans will backfire in their faces by not Gopi leaving but rashi. He thought : it been terrible for me to be trapped in Urmi and rashi kalakarni, it had been terrible for me totally well its shit now he thought.

He had got home and found out Rashi has shouted at Hetal about the money thing in Switzerland. He started to boil up with anger. He shouted out: Rashi... Everyone staring at him...Glaring eyes at him in shock... After all he the owner of the Modi house and company.

He dropped his bag right there at the footsteps of the house and walks in. He held her arm tightly and moved her, he slaps her right there and spoke: next time 3 more slaps will happen, what do you think, I will tolerate you enough in this house do you. Do you think you keep on doing stuff which will make Gopi get my taunt, I don't think so. 80,000 bill who is going to pay it, no one, not even Jigar, infact its you who going to pay it, what happened on the marriage day, you made a pretense so that Sonal can decline the marriage, are u a women,

Rashi: whats it to you, you should be happy you divorcing Gopi so that you can get that anita back, ha anita your girlfriend, uft Umang sister, This is why Umang left kinjal and betrayed her. What do you think I won't know you, mein to kehti hu ha ha 80,000 spend kiye, vo ek maa hai, par what it to you.

Aehem: chup ek dum chup, What do you think, being nice to gopi, bringing us together and then do something and will make me chuck her out of the house huh. Shame on you. In fact a girl like you should be leaving, the one who had insulted everyone, and even the elders, chee shame on you. What do you think the paper Jigar gave you to sign, could you not even read them, you got divorced, both of you, now rashi leave the house, take that mangulsutra off, and go back to Rajpal Nagar and thank to God my sister is back here.

Rashi is shocked, Jigar dragged her out of the house and forced her to sit in the car while kinjal had came back to the modi bhavan. He drops rashi back to Rajpal nagar and spoke: do not enter modi house ever again other wise we will have to call the Police, and leaves from there.

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This point I wrote an short wee argument on Arrogant Aehem and the Phone addict Rashi as how she spent the phone call 80,000 in switzerland. Now at this point I want the newbie or our oldies to take up an challenge of writing a short story of Gopi getting remarried to someone else ( a natak) so that it could make aehem realize how much he loves her.(in red is the challenge) Get going and post in this thread only. Do Not open a new thread, this is simply a challenge for the weekends. Get along and good luck...

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xxDaydreameRxx

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Posted: 14 years ago

Hey everyone :)

I am new to this forum but I saw this "challenge" and I couldnt stop myself from writing something.. I just started off this as a short story and someone else can continue from where I left off... hope its not too boring to read 😊

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It was a typical morning in the Modi House and everyone was gathered at the dining table eating breakfast. Jigar continued to crack jokes and would get scolded by his Kaki, while the rest of men either ate quietly or had business talks. But things were not the same for one person: Gopi. She felt dejected. She felt lost. But most of all she felt hurt. But then there was nothing new about that either. Ever since she had gotten married to Ahem, things had just gone downhill. But now it felt extra worse. She wondered how her life would have been different if Kokila hadn't made her stay after Nani left. She would probably be lying in some corner in her mammi's house, or being tortured by her. But was this life any better than torture either? Kokila had trusted her. She had wanted Gopi to stay back to give another chance to her relationship with Ahem. But by now Gopi felt convinced that there was no point to it. Forget liking her, Ahem barely noticed her or acknowledged her presence around the house. And if they ever bumped into each other, he would just scream and shout at her as usual. Things seemed to feel a thousand times worse now than ever. At least before it was just her and her hopes, now it was her mother-in-law who was more than a mother to her.

As Gopi completed her daily chores, all these thoughts were rushing through her head. Just then Kokila approached her.

"Gopi bahu are you done with preparing the dinner?" she asked in an affectionate voice.

Gopi nodded her head yes and couldn't help notice an unusual gleam in her sasu-ma's eyes. Before she could ask what was going on, her mother-in-law dragged her to her room and closed the door shut.

"Gopi bahu, I have something important to discuss with you..."

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Ahem entered his house tiredly. He was not in a good mood at all and noticed that he was constantly stressed the past few days. Of course he thought, ever since SHE's here. Sometimes he even felt guilty about the way he was treating her and thought about saying sorry to her many times. But whenever he wanted to make it up to her, he found himself at a loss of words and didn't know where to even starts. Or she would just do something that angered or annoyed him even more. Ahem just shook his head clear. There I go again, thinking about HER again!

He entered the house and the sight in front of him made his jaw drop. Gopi was sitting on the coach giggling away. He had never seen her talk or laugh so freely. And who was that guy sitting near her, he wondered. He was young, tall, and good-looking and looked like he was in his early twenties. They seemed to be deep in talk, and he didnt even realize when his face scrunched up in anger.

"Arre Ahem dikra, when did you come?" He saw his mother sitting on the other side of the guy and wondered how he hadn't noticed her until she called his name. "Come sit and I will make Manni bring some tea for you. And oh I almost forgot to introduce you to someone. This is Rahul. He is Gopi's childhood friend."

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K I won't write any further and hope someone can continue from here 😃 ... in case its not that obvious, basically Kokila is going to use this Rahul to make Ahem jealous and yes I guess in response to the challenge they can push things to getting Gopi remarried (for fake though 😉).

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Traxy101

@Traxy101

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

Gopi's childhood friend? Ahem glanced roughly at Gopi noticing how close she was sitting to Rahul. Why does he even care? He asked himself, better him than me.

'Jai shree Krishna' Ahem said politely before heading up to his room to work. A while later Mani came up with his tea and for some reason this infuriated him. He stood up and began pacing his room, his fists balled.

Who did that illiterate girl think she was? He had never seen her laughing or smiling like that around him, yet around this person...

Quickly, he left his room under the excuse of needing to talk to his Kaka but as he reached the landing, he glanced down to see Rahul kissing Gopi's hand. Then her forehead before hugging her. Such a sweet and simple thing yet for some reason Ahem wanted to rip Rahul's head off for doing so.

What was going on with him? This wasn't the first time he'd felt like this. He didn't know why but he was possessive of her and that scared him.

With one final glance down he escaped back to his room intent on confronting his Gopi later on.

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"Ahem dikra. Come down it's time for dinner" He glanced up to see his mum smiling at him from the doorway, the sky outside the window had darkened considerably and he was surprised to see that he had been completely enthralled in his work that he didn't notice the time fly by.

"Ji Mum, lekin could you have a plate sent up. I really need to finish this"

Kokila smiled at him "You work so hard, you know how proud of you I am"

"It's all for you Mum"

"Ok, I'll have a plate sent up immediately" He smiled in response, he was absolutely starving seeing as how he hadn't eaten anything since lunch.

Not ten minutes later, he could hear the indistinguishable sound of Gopi's bangles before she appeared in the doorway with his tray. As always her eyes were downcast and he realised it was around him that she didn't smile or laugh. It was around him that she was never happy, never care free always scared.

And he realised that it was his fault.

Here he was getting annoyed, angry because she dare smile around someone that wasn't him. Yet when she did smile at him, he got angry at her, She was his wife, whether she liked it or not, whether he like it or not. They were supposed to spend the rest of their life together and she was too afraid to be around him.

He glanced up as she nervously walked towards him and placed the food on the table.

"Ji..woh...Do you need anything else?" Her sweet voice filled the room. He tried to see her face but was surprised to see her pallu covering it.

'What did you expect?' his conscience said to him 'That she'd forget and risk you shouting at her again'

"No, I don't want anything else" At his words Gopi quickly turned before practically sprinting out the room.

Away from him.

He looked at the food on the table.

He wasn't very hungry anymore.

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A while later he left his room, to look for Gopi and was surprised to see Rahul sitting down next to her, talking.

Just the two of them.

They made quite a good couple and it was obvious he'd treat Gopi better than he ever could. He was looking at her with such tenderness and Ahem watched as he gently tucked a loose strand of Gopi's hair behind her ear.

"Arre Ahem, come I need to speak with you in your room" Kokila said to him. Silently he followed behind her but couldn't help glancing back at the pair and was surprised to see Gopi watching him, sadness in her features.

"Ahem, I've been thinking about this for a while" Kokila immediately began "You see when I first picked Gopi to be your patni, I wasn't really thinking about you, I wanted a submissive bahu, who would work hard, never talk back and Gopi fit the picture perfectly. Unlike Rashi who is who I had originally gone to see"

This surprised his mum, he'd never known his mum went to see Rashi. He imagined being married to her and shuddered. She would have bled his bank dry.

"I wanted Gopi to first be my bahu before your wife and that is where I went wrong above all other relationships is a husband and wife relationship and Gopi became my bahu but never your wife." She paused "But now I have decided no longer will you and Gopi be married, she's already moved her things into the guest room and will remain there until the wedding"

"Wedding?" Ahem questioned uncertainly.

"Ji, Gopi's wedding to Rahul" Kokila said loking at him. The words rang in his ears. Gopi, remarried. No, how can that be, she was his wife. He couldn't think straight yet he couldn't help but see images flashing before his eyes.

Rahul putting sindoor on Gopi.

Gopi cooking for him, ironing his shirts.

Sleeping in his bed.

Rahul touching her-

"NO!" he shouted. Kokila's eyes widened as did his, he couldn't believe that he's said that out loud.

"No what Ahem dikra? Do you not want her staying in this house?" Ahem couldn't even look at his mum "Ji here are the papers to sign, give them to Gopi afterwards to sign" Kokila turned to leave but stopped after noticing their wedding picture. Gopi looked so happy in it, she glanced back at Ahem before getting ready to deliver her piece de resistance.

"Ahem dikra bring down that picture" confused Ahem looked at were she was pointing and was surprised to see her pointing at his wedding picture. He stood on the stool and gave it to her wondering what she wanted to do with it and was surprised to see her put in the bin.

"You were right Ahem dikra, she wasn't good enough to be your wife" and as his mother walked out those doors he felt his heart drop. She was good enough to be his wife, it was him who was not good enough for her.

Quickly he ran out of his room to the guest room only to collide with her. He watched as Gopi scrambled to pull on her pallu and listened as she immediately began to apologise when really it was him who needed to apologise to her. He grabbed her hand and pulled her back to his room and locked the doors behind them.

"Gopi, I don't even know where to begin but first please look at me" Hesitantly he watched as she raised her head but her eyes didn't meet his. He led her to the bed to sit down, before kneeling in front of her. "I have wronged you so much in the year that we've been married and you, you didn't deserve it. I blamed you when I should have blamed myself, I hurt you, I belittled you and made you cry,but still despite all of that you stood by me"

"Ahemji-"she began.

"Gopi let me say this" he replied calmly " I know I don't deserve you but please, don't end our marriage, don't marry Rahul"

"Lekin, I'm not good enough for you and at least this way you and Anita can get married"

"I don't want Anita Gopi, I only want you. I'm not confessing my undying love Gopi but I want us to make our marriage work because frankly I don't think I'll be as happy with someone else as I could be with you. So Gopi if you say can we stay together and fix our marriage"

"Woh...mein" Gopi stuttered.

"Here are the divorce papers Gopi, sign if you want us to end our marriage" he turned around.

"Ahemji" he heard Gopi say but still he didn't around. He watched as Gopi walked round and stood in front of him and was dumb struck as he watched her rip them in half.

A smile enveloped his face at the sight of her sweet smile. Remembering their wedding picture, he retrieved it from the bin and hung it on the wall where it belonged. He then walked up to Gopi and hugged her from behind and that's how they stayed looking at their wedding picture on their bedroom wall.

Hope you enjoyed reading that, guess I should leave a challenge now.

Gopi ran away from MM 3 months ago and by some stroke of luck Ahem see's her again in the shopping centre. What happens next?

Edited by Traxy101 - 14 years ago

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-GayabCat-

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Posted: 14 years ago

Gopi had to as Aehem had constant shouting at her for no reason but it was her fault though anyway, she was a complete an idiot falling in love with him. An idiot who was under control of Rashi, she kept on taking her taunts and listening to her and then she had enough.

Gopi had wished to see him again but this time as a married man to Anita. Of course to that mini gold digger.

3 Months had already passed by, she wished to see him somewhere. Gopi had slightly learnt basic grammer and started to worker in a orphanage as gradually she started to learn and work she and Kavya bought a shop and left the orphanage. . She had become stronger than before. She owns a cloths shop. A expensive sari shop which she is sharing the ownership with her childhood best friend Kavya. Kavya Shah.

Kavya and Gopi went to the shopping mall while Aehem Modi, Rashi , Jigar, Hetal, Koki and Chirag were driving down to the same shopping mall. Aehem felt some butterflies in his stomach. He felt something strange was going to happen. He missed Gopi and regretted what he done with her.

Gopi and Kavya had started to shop and bought few saries and guys sherwani for the shop while The Modi already arrived at the shopping mall.

Few hours later Aehem phone rang and started to talk tro his staff and walked forward while the Modi was behind him.

Gopi was walking towards him and bumped into him and his phone dropped on the floor. Gopi bent down and picked up the phone and gave him the phone. Both staring in eye to eye. The Modi behind stunned to see her all changed, makeover, plastic surgery everything. Koki had tears in her eyes.

Gopi looked down and said sorry its my fault, i bumped into you, I apologize.

Everyone again stunned by her saying it all in english.

Kavya called her out and asked her what she was doing here and come to the car as they need to go to work.

Gopi ignored them and left the shopping mall with a sorrow face.

Aehem who is shocked, tears running down his eyes, spoke up: i want to go home right now, meaning right now.

The Modi left and went home.

Gopi in fact was getting engaged to Kavya and had completely forgotten Aehem.

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I want the next person to write a short oneshot on Koki and Parag. it could be about anything

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Posted: 14 years ago

Kokila sighed as she entered her bedroom, closing the door behind her. It had been a hard day, once again Gopi had fallen for Rashi's tricks and Ahem had scolded her for it. Her bahu was so trusting but when would she learn that not everyone wished her well.?

She watched as Parag sat on the bed writing poetry, but for once she just didn't have the energy to say anything to him. She walked over to her closet and began taking out her night clothes.

"Kokila?" Parag asked looking at his wife "Are you okay?"

"Ji" she whispered her back to him "Why wouldn't I be okay?"

"You know, you can fool everyone by putting up a hard exterior but you can't fool me, you're still the same girl I married all those years ago. Now come and sit and tell me what's wrong" he said holding her hand and leading her to the bed.

"Ahem ki papa, I don't know why my Gopi bahu is being tested so, she's already proved herself time after time of being a good wife, a good bahu yet still Ahem won't accept her. Where did I go wrong?"she asked turning to look at him.

"Kokila you didn't go wrong, all you can do is lay the path for the children to follow, show them wisdom and give them knowledge and hope they do the right thing. You can't control him and you can't force him to love Gopi before he is ready" he said soothingly drawing circles on her palm with his thumb.

"It's my fault, I picked Gopi but because I wanted a daughter in law of my choosing, I didn't think about his needs or what he'd want" Tears fell down Kokila's cheeks.

Parag sighed wiping Kokila's cheeks. This was the vulnerable side of her that nobody saw except on a few rare occasions. "You did what you thought was right at the time but now you're trying and that's what's important now go get changed" Kokila got up and went to change, coming out a few minutes later.

"Come to bed" he said smiling at her. Getting into bed they lay in silence for a few minutes.

"Ahem ki papa" Kokila said into the darkness "Thank you and I know I don't always show it but I love you"

"I know Koki" he said taking her hand "I love you too"

New challenge, Gopi is avoiding Ahem in MM and not doing anything for him, how does he react?

Edited by Traxy101 - 14 years ago