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Akankshaa.

@Akankshaa.

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Posted: 14 years ago

#141

Lizz , it was perfect. :D It was touchy, just at the right places. Nothing more .. nothing less. And the body heat part was alright, it was intense ..but yeah, the main highlight of the part was her concern for him. A special mention to the way you compared the pool incident with this track. *uses the blush smiley* :P

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Shreya(everyone call me Trisha)

@_SnowFlake_

Dazzler

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Posted: 14 years ago

#142

heya guys

did u read my ff?

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Akankshaa.

@Akankshaa.

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Posted: 14 years ago

#143

Okay, so yeah, I'm finally from my pc .. so lemme read the whole part again, without the distractions. 😃

I'm saying it again .. I loved it! 😳 He supposedly 'two-timed' her..and, yet, all the betrayal, the hard feelings, the icy-cold exterior goes for a toss when she sees Yuvi like that .. and when she knows that she is to be blamed for it .. all her hyperactivity meters are broken. 😳

I liked TiaRa's conversation .. Vrinda's a doctor? Oooh, that completely went over my head. 😆I liked Sanu and Tia's conversation .. For Sanu, Ashi's the girl who broke her best friend's heart, and it's perfectly obvious she doesn't like her, since she hasn't been around when they were together. And I loved the way Tia threw dirty dagger looks at her and insisted that AY are meant to be! 😳 Also, my another favourite part .. when Sanu bursts into tears over the phone, that says a lot about the bond SY share. 😳

And, yeah, my favourite part..when Yuvi opened his eyes. He knew what had happened. And, atleast he knows that she cares for him, despite breaking up with him ..And apart from that, Sanu and Kabir misunderstanding is gonna go on for a long time. 🥺 So .. Sanu sees them in that state, when she was sleeping with her arms around him? Don't let her blow a fuse, pah-lease.

Edited by _Akanksha_ - 14 years ago

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Meeko

@Meeko

Rocker

Posted: 14 years ago

#144

Originally posted by: _Akanksha_
Lizz , it was perfect. :D It was touchy, just at the right places. Nothing more .. nothing less. And the body heat part was alright, it was intense ..but yeah, the main highlight of the part was her concern for him. A special mention to the way you compared the pool incident with this track. *uses the blush smiley* :P

aww, all the POTS tracks are very close to our hearts, i found a chord joining both the incidents, so i had to get it na..

the body heat was wht is so didnt want to get, but then i read a lot on hypothermia, and then this was needed wen the body is still cold for too long.. so i just cut tht part into shor, as short as i could😆

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Meeko

@Meeko

Rocker

Posted: 14 years ago

#145

Originally posted by: 00123trisha
heya guys
did u read my ff?

haan haan, read and commented

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Meeko

@Meeko

Rocker

Posted: 14 years ago

#146

Originally posted by: _Akanksha_
Okay, so yeah, I'm finally from my pc .. so lemme read the whole part again, without the distractions. 😃

I'm saying it again .. I loved it! 😳 He supposedly 'two-timed' her..and, yet, all the betrayal, the hard feelings, the icy-cold exterior goes for a toss when she sees Yuvi like that .. and when she knows that she is to be blamed for it .. all her hyperactivity meters are broken. 😳

I liked TiaRa's conversation .. Vrinda's a doctor? Oooh, that completely went over my head. 😆I liked Sanu and Tia's conversation .. For Sanu, Ashi's the girl who broke her best friend's heart, and it's perfectly obvious she doesn't like her, since she hasn't been around when they were together. And I loved the way Tia threw dirty dagger looks at her and insisted that AY are meant to be! 😳 Also, my another favourite part .. when Sanu bursts into tears over the phone, that says a lot about the bond SY share. 😳

And, yeah, my favourite part..when Yuvi opened his eyes. He knew what had happened. And, atleast he knows that she cares for him, despite breaking up with him ..And apart from that, Sanu and Kabir misunderstanding is gonna go on for a long time. 🥺 So .. Sanu sees them in that state, when she was sleeping with her arms around him? Don't let her blow a fuse, pah-lease.

lol, u read this on the fone, aankh nahi dukhi?

and yeah vrinda is a doc😡 looks like ur forgetting the ff😕

okay am glad u liked it, and hmm, sany wnt say anything to ashi, she is more worried for yuvi... tia is my fav currently, she is the only one in the whole group who has full faith in ashi-yuvi.. she has faith in them even if they themselves dont. and thats wht makes me love her more.. love the glare she will keep giving sany. 😆

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Arpita Sarkar

@BUBLAI

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#147

@akshu : it was so sweet of Yuvi to go out in the storm even if he refused to do it earlier 😛

just loved these lines '
'' In all the years he'd known her, she'd never looked so helpless. He didn't notice it before, but when he looked at her now, the zeal, the passion, the liveliness Ashi always had, it was missing. Her eyes had a faraway look, she looked almost upset. Her face which was always curved in a smile that could light up the whole town, or sarcasm that could make you wanna do anything to prove yourself, was missing. ''

you have described it so beautifully ... each and every word of it reflected how well Yuvi understands Yuvi ... the change in her was keenly observed by him ... just loved loved loved these lines 😛😛 👏👏

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Akankshaa.

@Akankshaa.

Sparkler

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Posted: 14 years ago

#148

Originally posted by: BUBLAI
@akshu : it was so sweet of Yuvi to go out in the storm even if he refused to do it earlier 😛

just loved these lines '
'' In all the years he'd known her, she'd never looked so helpless. He didn't notice it before, but when he looked at her now, the zeal, the passion, the liveliness Ashi always had, it was missing. Her eyes had a faraway look, she looked almost upset. Her face which was always curved in a smile that could light up the whole town, or sarcasm that could make you wanna do anything to prove yourself, was missing. ''

you have described it so beautifully ... each and every word of it reflected how well Yuvi understands Yuvi ... the change in her was keenly observed by him ... just loved loved loved these lines 😛😛 👏👏

Thank you, Appy. 🤗 He understands her like no one else does, and you know it. 😳

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Arpita Sarkar

@BUBLAI

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#149

@ lizzie : tum bekar mein itni hyper ho rahi thi ... you have written an amazing part👏👏
from the beginning till the end it was just perfect ... there was no overdose and you have not overdone it at all ... ashi's concern for Yuvi was described brilliantly ... really liked sanaya's reaction too .... liked the way ashi kept her calm following all the instructions of Vrinda 😛 surely she will do anything for yuvi ...😛

😛