FF Turnaround-2. CH 30 Updated PG125 (14th Dec) COMPLETED* - Page 55

Originally posted by: Perfectionist2

Dear Aashna,

Here is some constructive criticism, Don't kill me just yet:

1. Do u want a SS a prequel to this story?? How Asad and Zoya came about...uptill their Las Vegas trip?? Lemme know...n if I get enough response on that I will..try to pen it down...The idea of their past is very colorful indeed...😆

Ans: Darling it is your story. Why do you need approval. Say I say yes great but don't like it when you post or I say no and you don't and tell you lose out on creating an amazing epic. A reader never knows what is in store it is upon the writer to grab attention. I would go with my gut. And I will read anything you dish out.

2. As for a new FF...I have this story in mind..which is kinda..umm..nt straight forward...is all I can say as of now..do u guys suggest I should give u somethin leanin towards..umm..a lil...not dark..but..findind love at the wrong time..and with the wrong person kinda thing?? Again lemme know..ur responses will determine..if I should invest my brain cells in this story's conception...

Ans: I will love dark or tortured, There is FF on IF called the Dark Passion, I am an ultimate fan of that. I count days for the update. So yes Dark can be good But if you show" Punar Vivah" or turn Asad into Akbar with his ballerina skrits in a harem. Count me out. This whole married to someone loving someone else or male got ballistic in the heat and sleeps around in hundreds and woman sulking at home. Not for me.

Also if you still care to read my feed back, then there is more. I hate Asad Crying. COme On! why should a man cry. Be a man not a wuss. So the day you have any update that says "And tears rolled down his eyes" - blah blah blah... I will roll on the floor and will not comment on that update.

3. Bout this FF now...how far do u wnat me to stretch this..cos m thinkin another..umm 5-10 chapters max...my ideal plan is to end it at 30..but the way I write...it ends up to be very long updates for starters..n then the storyline..adds on more chapters..so pls suggest..if my chapters need to be more compact rather than long...n will try to work around it..

Ans: Go for it! From what I know every one likes😃 your long. Me included.

4.Lastly..🤓😆.. I wanna try this concept I have in my head...n would make a post on it...depending on ur response (once again) and ur support to be onboard n contribute...

I dunno if ur aware of this kinda game..

you are to write a sstory...as a group.. 1 person starts..is allowed to speak/write one sentence of the story..n then the next one speaks/writes another sentence..in continution..and so...on...the story gets built..the end result unxexpected...n the journey of the story a fun one to read...so I was thinking...I start with a one shot...the intorduction of the story...and then...then next person..writes their bit...could be a para..could be a full 1shot..u decide...n then the next one adds on to it...leading up to an unexpected story...Kya kehte ho?? I hope m not confusing u?? Well lemme knw..bout this one..without fail..n accordingly..will create a post...

Ans: That is a great idea, I have seen that play in IF before but more like a question and answer. But you should know every one is on different time zones. So give it a shot and see how it works.

I may not be very active but will drop in from time to time.

I have this song stuck in my head:

Na na na...Na na na...Na na na...Na na nana na...

Give me some sunshine
Give me some rain
Give me another chance
I wanna grow up once again

Love

Juliet.

Originally posted by: Perfectionist2

And now as for ur...qualms.. I dont intend to go to either of the suggested routes...no infidelity..no hot pants on fire...man wh**e...LOL..and self imposed sati savitri...but I wanna try angst..I wanna try..forbidden of sorts...n wanna see that turn into a beautiful love story...IT CAN HAPPEN ..as the kid says in the movie..'Angels in the outfield'..n I doubt Asad will cry in the story Im haunted by...so ur safe on all fronts..so now do I have u aboard??😲😃...n ya have read that FF...love it too...but hasnt it been on a stand still???😕 I wanna read more of it😃

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Aashna Bhen! ( reference to you being Gujju )

My bestie is a gujju so Tharo Maro and Che! Su Che! Maja Ma Che is what I deal with very well.😆

Not you got my pants on fire. What is forbidden.

I would love to know. So make a post quick or PM me.

Is it BDMS kinds. Is it sexual forbidden. I like santity in a relationship. I love loyalty. I love impulse and bitter fights. I love make ups.

Is it Asad the pimp or bodyguard. Or is it Asad the business man who don't like a relationship.

Dude I am a sucker for romance. Such good stuff on IF and they don't update. see I get like only 2 hours in a day to be here so I either read or write in my little "ME time" I haven't had the chance to look at some other amazing FFs.

You know I move is steps. Like in my FF if you register, it moves in each chapter about different shades of being in love, like being thrown in a pot together to trying to make sense, then acknowledging or being physically smitten to being possessive and then comes obsession. Some understand your writing many don't. For many readers it is about the kiss and make up sex. Or confession. I find that boring. I like the building of anticipation that follows on a story and your current story does that to me.

Will you believe it I still haven't caught up on a few of your chapters before chapter 14. I do intend to soon though.

Dark Passion - I want to read more too. I want to read all of it. Then there is one that says Black - Amazing that one too. It is forbidden of the kinds.

Yes I am on board. Did I have to say that! You should know by now.

Originally posted by: starslinedup

So...yes m a gujje...n sure..call me behn😆..so now again..u didnt tell me nethin bout u...n u knw a lil bout me...so tell me is that fair??..😭 I have started looking at my inbox..already...😃

As for fobidden...hmm..unexpected I'd say...broken..needin some TLC i'd say...n maybe..look but dont touch its not urs I'd say...n then the lil twists n turns...😆😉

As for ur FF...love love love...it..n honestly..I love it for the progression..I dunno if I have used that word in my comments..but thats the word I use a lot..coz thats wat I am interested in...I love the build up of a relationship...the strength of their emotions...I dont seek instant gratification...I like the tease..the play...so ya..I guess we r the same in that refrence..the very reason...I guess y ur liking my story..n m likin urs...cos in my story..its not all about ...getting to the end..its bout the build up..of their relationship..n the waves in which it progresses...n as for the remaining chapters..honestly..had u read it frm the start..it mite have given u that anitcipation..cos u read the reveal n now u'll go back..😆..but all cool..as far as u like it😃..

Now go write a lil bout u n pm me...this gujju gal raah jove che..😆😉

N Black..is a fantastic story..😃 love that one too...misiing it😭

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Done!👍🏼 Send that PM.

And I think I might be getting somewhere with your forbidden. Will PM you to not ruin the fun.

But got to go now.

Talk later

XOXO

Juliet