'My life after death',(INDEX IN FIRST PAGE)Update in pg-100

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Ok guys this is my first ever story. Plz forgive me if i have done some mistakes in it. I am quite nervous as this is my first story writing. Well this is the continuation of the original story in the fashback. It deals with Abhay's life after his death and before Pia's entry in his life.
It was still dark outside when I opened my eyes for the first time in my new life. My eyes searched for the face I love the most but I cant see anything except two figures standing in front of me. I cant see their face clearly. After a moment of science one of them spoke to me in a low voice, it was the voice of a man and it said "Welcome to our world". I failed to understand what it mean to say and asked him where is my love, my life, my Maithili. He said that i must forget my previous life and go with them as now i am one of them. His words were too confusing for me. He finally gave me his hand to get up, i was feeling too weak at that time. I constantly asked him about Maithili. After pulling me up he said that my heart have stopped beating and now i am a still-hearted creature. Now all his confusing talks irritated me beyond a limit and i decided to go away from him as fast as possible. I was too weak to move around but still i gathered all my strength as i had to find my lady - love. While i was going he said me "You can run from me but you can't run from yourself, you have to come to me only".
I visited the place where I have seen Maithili last that is the stable where Maithili was locked & put into fire by her own father. I could see nothing but ashes everywhere. A fearful thought came to my mind and i thought "What if she is not alive?" Even the very thought of her death killed me a thousand times. Then I gathered strength and tried to make myself think positive. I decided to search for her in the stable i used to live.
When I went inside the stable it was already morning. The only thing i could see was my horse. It was happy to see me and this token of fondness reliefed me a little from my tension. I went towards it and put my face in its neck . My heart was too heavy at that time and i started thinking of my past happiness, how me and Maithili used to travel on its back for long hours. How she used to put her head on my chest while we were riding . A intense thirst took me back to my present situation from my beautiful dream. I saw some water in a pot and i tried to drink it. Instead of finishing my thirst the water almost chocked me. I started feeling more thirsty. Finally i have an strange urge from inside and i attacked my horse!!!! It step back from me and i finally regained my consciousness. I thought what am i doing, this horse is my favourite. Why did i attacked it for no reason??
After a moment i felt a burning sensation on my finger. When i look i saw fumes were coming out from the silver ring that Maithili gave me. I promised her never to open it from my hand. I tried to endure the pain and decided not to open it. The burning sensation started increasing and finally i have to open it, not to save my finger but to protect the ring from disfiguring. I carefully put it inside my pocket. When i turned a saw a woman wearing a black cloak standing in front of me. I was afraid for a moment. She spoke to me in the same whispered voice as that man whom i have met few hours back . She said she is sorry for what happened with me and they were left with no other alternative to save me. I begged her to tell me clearly as i can't understand her words. Then she said "You are dead and the life we gave you is not of a human but of a creature who lives on the blood of others, people call us VAMPIRES"!!
It seemed like a cruel joke to me and l said that i don't believe her. Then she offered me a pot which contains blood and it seemed irresistible to me and i drank it. Finally my thirst finished. I understood that whatever she was saying is absolutely true. Then i asked her about Maithili, she lowered her eyes and said "Sorry, we haven't saved her"!!
It was like a sharp blow to me and i felt down on the ground. I got furious and asked her repeatedly "Then why did you saved me? For what? I don't want to live without my Maithili. Plz kill me right now. I don't want your gift of living".
The woman came todays me and said in a heavy voice "Look, its not my decision. Its Chand who decides whom to save and whom not, we just follow his orders. He found you suitable so he saved you. Now come with me and it would be dangerous both for you and the people around you if you try to live by yourself, without our guidance. You need us as much as we need you."
I finally decided to go with her.
It has been two hundred years since then. I am like a block of stone now, i don't feel any emotions. Neither happiness nor sadness affects me. All these years we Kept on moving from one place to another. We never stay in any place for more than one year as my so called dad says it could be dangerous to our existence if we live in one place for a long time. Tomorrow we are moving to Dehradun. Many years have past, i have changed from the poor stable boy Abhendra Singh to the rich cultured man ABHAY RAICHAND, but from inside i am still the same. Nothing have changed in these years. I am still waiting for my true love to come back. I don't know when this long wait would end or it won't end ever? Do i have to live like this forever?? Or something might happen that will change my life forever.
ABHAY RAICHAND.
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Updates are in pg- 10, 15 , 21 ,26 , 32, 39 ,46, 50, 56 ,61, 68, 73, 77, 83, 89, 94, 100.
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...Seema... thumbnail
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Posted: 10 years ago
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brilliant👏
amazing start,abhay inner feeling n thoughts were written brilliantly.looking forward to da next updte
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: vmpy

brilliant👏

amazing start,abhay inner feeling n thoughts were written brilliantly.looking forward to da next updte

Thankyou so much, for liking it. I am soo happy. 😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
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mohana during original run of pkyek,while watching it,specially da scenes where abhay used to broke down remembering maithilli ,uss time i felt like crying n im so glad dat u started this story da title itself is much gripping,my life after death.
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Originally posted by: vmpy

mohana during original run of pkyek,while watching it,specially da scenes where abhay used to broke down remembering maithilli ,uss time i felt like crying n im so glad dat u started this story da title itself is much gripping,my life after death.

Same Pinch, i also used to cry at that time. Thankyou once again for liking my work. I was quite nervous about it.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Mindblowing start.thanks for pm and continue soon
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awesome and brilliantly written loved the starting story 👏⭐️aww i love My Abhay Raichand no one can be like him ever 😳 keep updating such interesting updates soon😉 !! keep it up mohana dear it's fabulous 👏!! Tfs for pm !! 😃
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Originally posted by: -Seema83-

Mindblowing start.thanks for pm and continue soon

Thanks a lot for liking it dear.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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WOW ! Amazing Start Mohana...Got your story link...and I have read it...fabulous stuff...and you have begun from the right place...My Life after death...the story of Abhayendra after his death...and being given a existence as a Vampire by Chand and Haseena...even when PKYEK was on air...I always wanted to know more about Abhayendra and Maithali's love story...and about his initial period as a Vampire...after coming to terms with the fact that he was dead...his life as a human was over...he was now a walking dead creature...and existed by sucking blood...and also the heart breaking fact that his love Maithali was dead...but PKYEK didnot devote much time to this part of the story...they did not show some epiosdes on Abhayendra and Maithali...Well you have begun well Mohana...continue the story...keep up the good work...you know what your story...your effort to write a story has infact inspired me to write a story by myself...now even I might write s story on this forum...but don't worry I won't copy your story...it will be an original story by me...but yes about a Vampire and a Mortal...their lovestory...I will have VISU in my mind as the leads...though I might change the names instead of Abhay and Piya...but nevertheless I wish you All The Best for your story...Go ahead and ROCK with your story and entertain us.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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wow
simply brilliant. abhay's feelings, his pain , his despair was well written.

do cont soon

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