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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hi friends...
this is my first attempt on visa..
ive written one shots on arnav -khushi..
im not a very good writer..
But i hope u people like it..


I PROMISE!!!!

Just few days before raj divya marriage..raj is super frustrated..
"Ye sarita ji ko hua kya hai?sirf paisa paisa..rat din ek hi bat"
He thought to himself..
He was in need of fresh air..he decides to go for a drink..
Vikrant was with his clients in the same restaurant...
Raj sees him but decides to ignore..
By d time vikrant is done wid his clients..raj was heavily drunk and almost fighting wid d waiter..
Vikrant goes upto him "raj..kar kya rahe ho tum apne sath?"
Raj "vikrant..the vikrant suryavanshi ko isse kya farak padhta hai.?"
He almost tripped..
Vikrant holds him"tum sambhalo apne ap ko..apni zindagi barbad mat karo..divya se shadi karke tumhari life better ho jaegi"
Raj "hatt yaar..divya se shadi divya se shadi..nahi karni shadi mujhe ..mai sarita ji se pyar karta hun.."
Vikrant was irritated by now..
Raj continued "aur saritaji mujhse pyar karti hain"
There were alot of people staring..
Vikrant muttered but very firmly "shut up raj"
Raj "haan..mr.suryavanshi apki patni mujhse pyar karti hai.."
Vikrant slapped raj..
And he fell on the chair..
Vikrant made a call..and left from there..
He was very angry..his head was spinning..
He reached home..
Sarita opened the door..she was all smiles..
Sarita"are aj ap late ho gaye?"
He didnt answer and went to his room..
Sarita "are dinner?"
He went inside "abhi kaha hai?"
Sarita "aj apni nani ke pas so raha hai..apke liye khana laga dun?"
Vikrant "mujhe nahi khana"
Sarita "kyun?bahar khake aye hain?"
Vikrant "nahi..bas nahi khana"
Sarita "ye kaisi zidd hui..ap fresh ho jaiye..mai khana lati hun.."
She was about to leave..
Vikrant held her arm tightly "tumhe ek bar me samajh nahi ata ki mujhe nahi khana"
She tried freeing her hand but he was too strong for her..
Vikrant could see tears in her eyes.
Sarita "chodiye..mujhe dard ho raha hai"
He realised and left her hand..
Vikrant whispered a 'sorry'
But sarita was gone..
She got d food..
When she entered vikrant was on a call.."no problem divya..raj hosh me nahi tha..mai use us restuarant me aise chodke nahi aa sakta tha..ya gunnite.."
Divya had called him to say thanks..for sending raj with the driver and informed divya about it..
Sarita could not entirely understand..
But she went inside the room and kept his dinner plate there..
Sarita "apka mood itna kharab kyun hai?hua kya hai?"
Vikrant who was with his ipad now thought to himself "what is wrong with her..ye mujhe akela kyun nahi chod deti"
Sarita "acha chaliye..thodi der ke liye chod deti hun..mujhe pata hai ap yei soch rae hain"
Vikrant "huh..??(shocked)tumhe kaise pata mai kya soch raha hun..?"
Sarita "bataiye yei soch rae the ki nahi..?"
Vikrant "haan..I mean..nahi..mujhe kam karna hai" he said irritated..
Sarita left the room and decided to call up divya to find out wat had happened..
Sarita had a talk with divya and she told her how raj behaved with vikrant and said things about raj and sarita being in love..sarita was shocked..
And then divya told how vikrant got angry and slapped him..and then sennt the driver with him so hed reach home safely..
Sarita "vikrant ji ne raj ji pe hath uthaya?"
Divya "haan..par raj ki galti thi..par woh dil ke boht ache hain..unhone fir bhi raj ki help ki..sarita tum boht lucky ho"
Sarita "mai tumse bad me bat karti hun"
She went inside the room..vikrant was asleep with his specs on hugging his ipad..
She moved closer..took the ipad from his hands..and kept it on the side table..
She held his hands..she felt something for him..but what she wasnt sure..
She removed his specs too..and whispered "vikrant ji mai raj ji se pyar nahi karti"
Vikrant opened his eyes shocking her "sach?"
Sarita "ap jage hue hain?"
Vikrant "ye mere sawal ka jawab nahi hua"
Sarita "apne suna na..par apne mujhse pucha kyun nahi. .apke aur raj ji ke beech itna kuch ho gaya..apne kaha hi nahi"
Vikrant "mai dar gaya tha.."
Sarita "kya??"
Vikrant "agar mai puchta ki tum raj se pyar karti ho aur tum haan keh deti toh mai seh nahi pata.."
Sarita "pata hai vikrant ji..apse shadi karne se pehle mai raj ji ke sath 10 saal rahi hun..unhone woh 10 sal sirf divya ko chaha aur mai unke ghar me sirf furniture ki tarah thi..jab meri shadi hui mai choti thi..har ladki ki tarah sochti thi ki mera pati rajkumar jaisa hoga.."
She had tears in her eyes..which vikrant wiped off..
She continued "par mere sare sapne ,sapne hi reh gaye..mai sochti thi..mera pati mujhse boht pyar karega..pyar karna toh door..woh meri taraf dekhte bhi nahi the..bas woh mere pati hain ye sochke maine apni har duty puri ki.."
Vikrant held her hand reassuringly..
"lagne laga yei pyar hai..fir hamari dosti hui..fir raj ji ko mujhse pyar ho gaya..maine socha ab hamari duniya puri hai.. par fir ap aye aur mera punar vivah apse ho gaya..mai boht khush nahi thi..par mujhe dheere dheere ye ehsas hua ki jo raj ji k liye mehsus kiya woh kahin na kahin zabardasti kiya..woh insan bure nahi hain..par haan ye bat yakeen se keh sakti hun ki unse pyar nahi hai"
Vikrant gave her a side hug"im sorry sarita..mai tumhari zindagi me ek devil banke aya na"
Sarita smiled "haan..par ye devil mujhe itna bhi bura nahi lagta"
Vikrant gave her a smile..
Vikrant "tumse ek promise karun?"
Sarita "kya?"
Vikrant "tumhare ane se jo meri life me change aya hai.."
Sarita interrupted "ap is samay bhi ye bat kar rae hain..apka samaan nahi milta na..mai woh wardrobe khali kar dungi..fir apko apna saman jaha rakhna hai rakhiega.." she said angrily..
Vijrant kept his finger on her lips..
"Sshhh..meri bat suno.."he said in a husky voice..
Sarita didnt know his eyes..or his touch or his voice..something made her shudder..something she had never felt with raj..
Vikrant "tumhare ane se jo meri life me change aya hai..woh mujhe acha lagta hai..shayad chai me itni mithas ki zarurat hi nahi..meri full life me mithas aa gai hai tumhare hone se.."
Sarita smiled and looked down shyly..
His fingers still on her lips..
Vikrant "toh mai tumse promise karta hun...ki mai tumhari saari complaints jo bhi tumhe apni life se rahi hain..woh sab tum bhool jaogi..aur jaise tumne sapne dekhe the..waisi hi life jeogi.."
She was blushing red and got up to leave..
Vikrant held her hand..
She looked at him "i promise" he said..
"Aur ja kaha rai ho..mujhe khana toh do..sar phat raha hai..aj lunch bhi nahi kiya."
Sarita chuckled "abhi layi"
She got d plate and fed him with her hands.
The mr.suryavanshi and akdoo loved to be a kid in front of his wife..his sarita..
And tonight both of them felt an unknown happiness inside them..
Love was really in d air.:)

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Posted: 11 years ago
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awesome
i wish the CVs really include these scenes
haww me faint
write more
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Wow it's brilliant !!! 👏👍🏼
Love it . Thanks for the PM by the way ...
Do consider writing more stories on Visa if possible ...
Really love it...❤️
Keep up the good work ...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Lovely awesome dear fab is ...they are cute together
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Posted: 11 years ago
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It was a treat to read this... so beautifully compiled... keep going..
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hey this is damn good...loved your writing 👍🏼

Mrs.Jagdu feeding her Mr. Akdu...☺️...the conversation is simply awesome. If possible write couple of parts to this OS

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Posted: 11 years ago
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aw..It was super-duper cute.⭐️.so sweet and so romantic😳I loved it👍🏼..you should write more as you are really good at it👏!!..keep up the lovely work🤗
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Posted: 11 years ago
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very cute loved it 👏 keep writing
Posted: 11 years ago
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That was mind-bowing!!!
Incredibly perfect!
Thanks for the PM.

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