Chalo Finally...Might not be a lucky night for KR... or was it...
Let them decide...
But it was certainly lucky for us... ;)
Becoz you gave out an OS so nice...
Honestly Shenz I point out some placement mistakes... I didn't find much..
Or i was engrossed in write up so much that conveniently ignored it... So chose whatever suits you...
Starting mein I was like this is the same concept I thought... :O
But then it changed... And I was glad...
Coz I wanted to write on that concept...
So the tease of dance you showed... Amazing,...
Just loved it how you showed their inner desires surfacing up...
And I certainly like you didn't show the L-word surfacing... And moreover it was another L-word..
*Differentiate within it*
And then how she wanted to up the game... Ah... Loved it...
I wanna know how was the guy able to dropofy the drink over saamne ki dress when she was conveniently busy snogging...
And then make out in the washroom... That was amazing.. So very well written.. The passion, lust.. the drive.. the force and everything..
And her commanding.. that has to be the thing I saw here first.. cool...
The thing I liked the most about the OS was that it was lust driven... I know it sounds weird.. But this scene kinda makes sense to me... I mean how you show they harbored something.. and they were aroused... so the desire makes sense... and moreover the common washroom thingy also does... coz lets face it... every time out of nowhere you cannot get a bed... now can you? :P
I really love the OS for the way you wrote it... And then how you kept it realistic in the way... Weird nah tharak wasn't my priority... this shows am not that big tharki... 🤣
Well you know that a good write up always ups my mood.. :D
Awesome... ^_^
Edited by -Vaish- - 10 years ago
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