Kriyaansh OS Come back, be here..

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hey there people!! 😃
For starters, my name is Gunpreet, n Im 15! :P
And, I was not able to come on IF for months at a go..!! And I'm really sorry I couldn't comment on your fantastic works!
Although my first work has not been posted, Im presenting this Kriyaansh OS to all those lovely KR fans!
Since Im back after my exams, I'll start checkin my PM box n comment too! Really sorry again!
But yes, abhi bhi I'll be slow, since its my 10th this year..I hope you guys understand!

This one's totally based on a song, if I'll continue it, I'll see if that would be based on a song or not! Till then, I hope you enjoy this and please comment! Criticism always welcomed sweeties!! ^_^ :*

For now,I'm back with this bang! :P
N I'd like to thank Tammy di n Cookie di
Seriously aap ni hote, I wouldn't have posted this! :* Love ya!


Guys, really dissapointed by the reviews..I'll only continue if you want to.. 😭
Thanks to those who read, liked n commented😊, but guys Ive seen people getting bout 100 like n pages over flowing with comments, not that I expect sooo much, but still dude, this is not what I expected.
If you people think this was a waste of your time, please tell me :/ I really feel like annoying people with the pms I sent </3 .


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Posted: 12 years ago
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Kaleyan reh gaye ah.. haye ni teri yaadan seh raye ahh
tenu ki kahiye.. roz thora thora marr raye ahh
Kaleyan reh gaye ah.. haye ni teri yaadan seh raye ahh
tenu ki kahiye.. roz thora thora marr raye ahh

Left far behind, Kriya was tired of de fake smiles...

He was no less...dying every moment just to be with her for once, just once...

Wanting to be in his arms, was all she desired now...

Her heavenly fragrance, her bouncy hair, her funky clips, her quivering lips, her cute, angry pouts...once, just for once..

His mere presence that made her blush, where was he now? Why did he not want her to pour her heart out to him now?? Why didn't her try just once more??

Why did she leave him alone?? Why did she leave ?? She could have come the next day to show how popular she was now...but she didn't... Why?? Why did she have to leave!!


aah ke tu milja.. vekh asi rab to mangde ahh
mangna ki kuriye.. roz kismat naal larr raye ah
aah ke tu milja.. vekh asi rab to mangde ahh
mangna ki kuriye.. roz kismat naal larr raye ah
kaleya reh gaye aa ohh
thak ke beh gaye ah hoo

kaleyan reh gaye ah ohh
dite gam nu seh raye ahh
haye ni tere gam nu seh raye ahh

Five years ago, they were each other's world...didn't confess, but still knew that they meant everything for the other...

And then, the ill- fated day, Valentine's Day, when the soul mates were separated

He tried moving on, but he just couldn't...agreed, she was de first love, but she was the last too, he knew it when he tried dating other girls, he knew it, cause he failed miserably...

She couldn't breathe at times, choked up, her tears flowing down her cheeks...she knew she wouldn't be able to move on, he was all she had ever desired in her life that bad...


jado ni tu kehna.. bas tuhiyo mera gehna
sanu sauna lagda eh mera yaar
kale nu satauna.. russ pava te manauna
sanu bhulna ni tera oh pyaar
kale nu satauna.. russ pava te manauna
sanu bhulna ni tera oh pyaar


She did not want the flashes that surrounded her now...she was the most famous choreographer and actor in the Indian Film Industry, soon she was planning to do a Hollywood thriller, but that fame was not what she had wanted...

He did not want all those fan girls to shout, cry n fall unconscious just by his mere presence, although they were really important, the biggest place in his heart was still occupied by his princess, Kria...

Rey, the name hadn't touched her lips since 5 years, even though he was all she had thought of all this while...

kaleya reh gaye aa ohh
thak ke beh gaye ah hoo
kaleyan reh gaye ah ohh
dite gam nu seh raye ahh
haye ni tere gam nu seh raye ahh

"Come back to me, please..."

Both of them whispered simultaneously.

With the tears still gushing out of their bloodshot eyes, they drifted off to sleep, an eventful day awaiting them...

Edited by gunnu1 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Res for my tweety šŸ‘šŸ¼



-Tammy ā¤ļø
Edited by Love_shantu - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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this was quite different and well written... loved it...
do continue soon and pm me
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hey nice start!!!!!!

pls do continue it soon!!!!!!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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It's awesum dear...
Loved d OS..

R u planning to write part 2..???
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Well guys, this was least expected.. :/
I mean I was planning to write a second chapter and a third too maybe, but with the response I've recieved Im actually heart broken :( 😭
I don't know wether to continue or not, and now its all upto you guys..
Cause I can't write if I don't have any readers hee :/

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