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LooneyLuna

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Posted: 12 years ago

#101

Its high time

M stop talking

and start

SPAMMING.

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Aparamegha

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Posted: 12 years ago

#102

Congratulations..still feeling a bit dazed about missing the first tale...

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IronButterfly

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Posted: 12 years ago

#103

Akhir intezaar ki ghari kab khattam hogi!?

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EXPELLIARMUS

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Posted: 12 years ago

#104

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Chaitalee Ghosalkar

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Posted: 12 years ago

#105

Brilliant Juhi...just brilliant!

All I can say that the wait was worth it! (As also the series of wrong conjectures made by me😆)

Back to the story. you do have a knack of reverting soemthing that has left a bitter/sour/salty taste in the mouth by giving the particular scene a complete make over. Of course Khwahishein is all about it but this one is special because it was a part of the Sheetal track🤢 After reading this tale however I'm glad that there was one such track for we wouldn't have had this story had that not existed.

I'm a sucker for suspense so you can imagien the adrenaline flowing through me as you opened the scene giving several bumps; first through the real peon and then through the entry of Dr. Jha and the uniformed policeman. All the while me heart went...

DHAK DHAK...DHAK DHAK...

I must admit though that the sudden appearance of a uniformed personnel was unexpected and fishy as well and yours truly had immediately guessed what this was all about. But it only heightened the eagernss to go along with the facade that the two were projecting.

And facade it was...not just when it came to the rest of the world but also for their boss...this one was entirely different yet it somehow reminded me of Mr. and Mrs. Smith...two sleuths there were but working hand in hand makes it all the more fun, doesn't it?

That they got the required evidence, did their job and ended the day on a high couldn't have been completed if it had not been for the end parts of the tale. A ready admission of infatuation was a first I have read...blatant yet equally endearing I must say!

To carve a tale that keeps you entertained throughout itself is extremely commendable but then to culminate it with a zenith? That's what can be called as a perfect exemplification of a masterstroke👏

And a grin was placed on my face involuntarily (I'm hoping that's how the letter looked on Khushi's ankle..if only IF permitted usage of calligraphy...sigh)

Edited by Eccentrica - 12 years ago

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mbbsrocks

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Posted: 12 years ago

#106

I am so amazed..

From where you people get these interesting ideas..

Really...

You have totally changed the scene..

Now i can really enjoy thinking about Khushi,s disguise..LOL

Arnav would look so kool in a police man,s costume na..

😉

and the way they handled Jha..that made me rofl

and aman was the Boss..Dude I love this man but here he is keeping the Love birds separate..hmph

and their previous Jobs from where they were thrown out..hahahahah

really ROFL

🤣

that reminded me of Bunti aur Babli😆😆

Edited by mbbsrocks - 12 years ago

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meera30

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Posted: 12 years ago

#107

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Ah J! The Masked Tale was very much the combination of the intrigue, passion and thrill. It's a combination that takes a lot of creativity in writing to pull it off and see how well you have written to do that! I for one have always believed that this genre is best left for the big screen but you prove me wrong and I love it!!!

Btw, I don't really remember the original IPK scene - I had stopped watching by then but I am pretty sure it wasnt a patch on what you've written.

Oh and I pat myself (and you for the awesome clues). I was expecting Dhoom 2 and I got that and much more sans the highly annoying Sunehri like and the fact that this "robbery" had more of a positive Ek Tha Tiger-ish intent than anything gray like the heist movies.

You should be writing more of this, J. A full fledged FF perhaps? Steamiest could be a intrigue / suspense story ;)

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siamesecat

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Posted: 12 years ago

#108

Res...brbi

awesomeas expected. Loved the way you moved the story incorporating elements on of IPK.

Lovef it.

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IronButterfly

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Posted: 12 years ago

#109

Amazing once again.

This story gave a beautiful message to me.

It's sad how people give up their individual separate lives when they are in a relationship.

From me it becomes us. Though it maybe good for the relationship, i think a bit of me should remain or it becomes too suffocating.

It was wonderful to see how they didn't let go of their separate lives because their love was too strong to get effected by it and this gave me hope.

Hope, that if your love is strong and your partner is understanding then you don't have to give up your interests or identity.

For love and individuality can go hand in hand.

Love is not about finishing yourself, it's about appreciating the other.

For love can find it's way through anything.

Sorry i think i don't make sense at all and got carried away =/

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incarnadine

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Posted: 12 years ago

#110

This is brilliant Juhi!

When I read Shyam Jha was indirectly involved in this disguise of Khushi's, I understood quite a bit that she is on some kind of a mission trying to gather evidence against him. I can never imagine Shyam as a good person, that's why 😛
And I was pretty sure that the cop was Arnav, but I didn't expect the 2 to be together in this!
Lovely!

Loved the last part. A tattoo of the letter A on Khushi's ankle

Thank you for this tale! It has now slightly erased that cringeworthy episode of Khushi dressed as a peon 🤢
Couldn't digest that scene upto now!

Loved it! :)

Edited by .sobtian. - 12 years ago