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Posted: 12 years ago
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sorry for the inconvenience.



the part 2 written by .aliyah. has totally destroyed the mood of the os.it has become comical when it was supposed to be tragic..i'm laughing hard everytime i'm looking at it.😆
so i'm removing the content.😉



p.s. Ana, you've killed my baby.so i've removed the dead body.😛

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Posted: 12 years ago
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PART 2 ON MY BEHALF 😉 BECAUSE ...

DISHA?! How many times do I need to tell you not to break my Viru's heart in your stories. 😡

Hmm... I don't want to see his heart break, so i'm going to pretend in my head that that a big poisonous frog jumped into the groom's pants bit his backside and he dies on the spot. Mwahahahaha, that's what he deserves for trying to marry my Viru's sweetheart. 😈

Then ...

Virat's POV

Manvi stood their numb at the sight of her to-be husband's life-less body. Her eye's didn't seem like they could handle it. I put the 'Stupid guitar' to the side and put my hand on her shoulder. "Manvi..."

"He's dead Virat." She whispered quietly. She was clearly in a state of shock.

One part of me was so happy to see Manvi free of a bond that could keep her from me, but it meant nothing because it hurt even more to much to see her heart-broken. She's too fragile to handle the pain of a heartbreak, the loss of a lover... I would know.

"It's OK Mannu, i'm here for you. Everything will be fine." I tried to reassure her.

"He's dead" she repeated again, "He's dead"

Everyone around us was staring at Manvi's gazed expression apart from the groom's family who was sitting next to the oaf-of-a-groom and mourning, and Manvi's mother who was crying next to her, cursing her fate.

"Manvi please, sambhalo apne aap ko" I turned her towards me and cupped her face.

"Virat! He's dead"

"I know Mannu" I whispered back.

"T..that means ..." She stuttered. Yeah, I know. It mean's you lost your pyara pati parmeshwar. Ugh!

"That means that now there's no one to stop me from being yours" She whispered into my ear with and I could feel her smile against my chest as I wrapped my hands around her petite-waist.

God! This was too good to be true but it was, my Mannu is mine. She always was, and now there's no one to stop us from being together again.

"Manvi, let's go from here." She quickly broke the hug and we crept out from the backdoor as everyone looked towards the dead groom and mourning family.
___

"Manvi.." I reached out my hand and held her near me as we walked into our bedroom beginning our beautiful new lives together.

Aakir shubh kam mein deri kaisi 😉

"Virat, today my life is perfect. I am so happy."

"Me too sweetheart" I pulled her closer to me and pressed my forehead against her's. "Now we're going to begin a new life together, just me and you, no stupid oaf in the way."

"What?"

"The oaf who got bitten by the frog" I laughed

"Haww... bechara" She said

"Bechara? Kamina! He tried to take my Mannu away from me"

"Aww.. but we're together now Virat" She smiled and kissed my cheek.

"I know, and you have no idea how much I missed you. It killed me to know that after going away from you for you, you still wouldn't be mine." I said tears forming in my eyes.

"Stop crying now. Tumhari mehnat rang layi.Tumhara pyaar rang laya." She said cupping my cheek and I nodded as she wiped my tears with her free hand.


"Now it's time to get that gift that I was promised" I said to her as I scooped her into my arms and walked towards the bed.

I rested my angel onto my... now our bed and caressed her cheeks slowly.

"Not so fast Mr Vadhera, first I want to hear that special melody"

I smiled and got off the bed and picked up my guitar .. my stupid guitar.

I'll write the rest of the comment later 😆
Edited by .aliyah. - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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OMG!!! this is soo heat touching n emotionalSUPERB SUPERB DISHA👏👏👏loved each n every bit of the update❤️❤️❤️this is soo soo beautifully written⭐️⭐️⭐️it really touch my hearti have no words to say how good it was~~~thank u so much disha for this beautiful n awesome os❤️
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Posted: 12 years ago
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This was so heart touching and Emotional..! Loved it! the blend of emotions in past and present was nicely written..hey will u continue..? please do..Want to read the next Part..:)!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Oh my Life !!!

so unexpecteddamn emotional - thank god nothin lyk that really happened bt must say its a very sweet n emotional OS actually n i really lyked it a lot bt i thought the ending myt be happy n im sad nw cuz they got seperated 😭
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Posted: 12 years ago
#6

Originally posted by: .aliyah.

PART 2 ON MY BEHALF 😉 BECAUSE ...

DISHA?! How many times do I need to tell you not to break my Viru's heart in your stories. 😡

Hmm... I don't want to see his heart break, so i'm going to pretend in my head that that a big poisonous frog jumped into the groom's pants bit his backside and he dies on the spot. Mwahahahaha, that's what he deserves for trying to marry my Viru's sweetheart. 😈

Then ...

Virat's POV

Manvi stood their numb at the sight of her to-be husband's life-less body. Her eye's didn't seem like they could handle it. I put the 'Stupid guitar' to the side and put my hand on her shoulder. "Manvi..."

"He's dead Virat." She whispered quietly. She was clearly in a state of shock.

One part of me was so happy to see Manvi free of a bond that could keep her from me, but it meant nothing because it hurt even more to much to see her heart-broken. She's too fragile to handle the pain of a heartbreak, the loss of a lover... I would know.

"It's OK Mannu, i'm here for you. Everything will be fine." I tried to reassure her.

"He's dead" she repeated again, "He's dead"

Everyone around us was staring at Manvi's gazed expression apart from the groom's family who was sitting next to the oaf-of-a-groom and mourning, and Manvi's mother who was crying next to her, cursing her fate.

"Manvi please, sambhalo apne aap ko" I turned her towards me and cupped her face.

"Virat! He's dead"

"I know Mannu" I whispered back.

"T..that means ..." She stuttered. Yeah, I know. It mean's you lost your pyara pati parmeshwar. Ugh!

"That means that now there's no one to stop me from being yours" She whispered into my ear with and I could feel her smile against my chest as I wrapped my hands around her petite-waist.

God! This was too good to be true but it was, my Mannu is mine. She always was, and now there's no one to stop us from being together again.

"Manvi, let's go from here." She quickly broke the hug and we crept out from the backdoor as everyone looked towards the dead groom and mourning family.
___

"Manvi.." I reached out my hand and held her near me as we walked into our bedroom beginning our beautiful new lives together.

Aakir shubh kam mein deri kaisi 😉

"Virat, today my life is perfect. I am so happy."

"Me too sweetheart" I pulled her closer to me and pressed my forehead against her's. "Now we're going to begin a new life together, just me and you, no stupid oaf in the way."

"What?"

"The oaf who got bitten by the frog" I laughed

"Haww... bechara" She said

"Bechara? Kamina! He tried to take my Mannu away from me"

"Aww.. but we're together now Virat" She smiled and kissed my cheek.

"I know, and you have no idea how much I missed you. It killed me to know that after going away from you for you, you still wouldn't be mine." I said tears forming in my eyes.

"Stop crying now. Tumhari mehnat rang layi.Tumhara pyaar rang laya." She said cupping my cheek and I nodded as she wiped my tears with her free hand.


"Now it's time to get that gift that I was promised" I said to her as I scooped her into my arms and walked towards the bed.

I rested my angel onto my... now our bed and caressed her cheeks slowly.

"Not so fast Mr Vadhera, first I want to hear that special melody"

I smiled and got off the bed and picked up my guitar .. my stupid guitar.

I'll write the rest of the comment later 😆






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i never in my life have laughed more than this.my parents r confused.o allah!!!what have u done ana????I.JUST.CAN'T.STOP.LAUGHING!!!!!

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Posted: 12 years ago
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i never in my life have laughed more than this.my parents r confused.o allah!!!what have u done ana????I.JUST.CAN'T.STOP.LAUGHING!!!!!


Hahahahahahaha 🤣 ... Good i'm glad that for once I made you laugh. What have I done? I just wanted my Viru to be happy 😳

You didn't tell me what you thought of PART 2? 😆 But first tell me what you thought of the groom's death?!! 😛

His death is my best work ... Meri creativity ko salam 🤣 🤣🤣🤣
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: .aliyah.



Hahahahahahaha 🤣 ... Good i'm glad that for once I made you laugh. What have I done? I just wanted my Viru to be happy 😳

You didn't tell me what you thought of PART 2? 😆 But first tell me what you thought of the groom's death?!! 😛

His death is my best work ... Meri creativity ko salam 🤣 🤣🤣🤣






her groom was shahrukh khan.🤣🤣🤣


now say this.


"His death is my best work ... Meri creativity ko salam "


this is an one shot.why would i think of part 2?😛😛😛😛😛
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Amazing nd very emotional update...
It touched my heart...
Heartbroken virat..
thanxxx for pm
Loved ur os very much
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Posted: 12 years ago
#10
amazing story
nice concept...
thanks for the pm dear😊

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