kabira OS: Mere dill me bassti ho...Tum dono...

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Posted: 11 years ago
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hey guyz...
I writing this OS keeping the song Kabira as the concept.
I dnt knw how it will turn out.
Plz bear with it.

P.s last part on pg2

plz comnt.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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"RJ tu kuch gaa na!! Meri sagai hai bhai!!"
pleaded Sameer Rathor.
"Nahi Rathor, tu to jaanta hi hai, mujhe pasand nhi."

"Please sir!" pleaded shree chotu liza,

"Arjun gaa do na yaar" said sakshi,
he just glared at her.

"please sir gaiye na, aap dulhan ka kaha bhi nahi maanenge"
asked Aisha...
he gave her an apologetic smile...

he turned and was about to go away...

kaisi teri khudgarzi,
Na dhoop chune na chhanw,
Kaisi teri khudgarzi...
Kisi thaur tike na paanw,
Ban liya apna paigambar,
Tar liyaa tu saat samandar,
phir bhi sookha mann k andarr,
Kyu reh gaya...

Re Kabira Maan jaa,
Re Faqira Maan jaa...
Aaja tujko bulaye teri parchaiya...
Aye Kabira, Maanjaa,
Re Faqira Maan jaa,
Kaisa tu hai,
Nirmohi kaisa Harjaiyaa...

he turned around and saw it was his Riya, singing out to him...
Telling him to come to come out of his solitory,
To enjoy himself again.
She stood there, looking all beautiful, in her white dress...
He kept staring at her...

he closed his eyes.
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He opened them again only to find her gone...
How will she be there...?
She had left him all alone...
again.

Yes Riya was successful in her mission of making him smile, laugh out loud, enjoy life and also she made him fall in love again,
that too with herself.
but she too left him,
just like Roshni did...

Well,
when Roshni entered his life,
his heart was a green garden, pure fresh, blooming,
anybody could settle there.

But when Riya did,
his heart was a ruined fort,
surrounded by Huge, thick, unbreakable walls...
He was then an angry young man, with a lot of pain with no shoulder to cry upon,
a broken man needed to be fixed.

And Riya did that.
she turned him into a lively person again,
but she too went away, too far...

Lost in his musings he didnt realize that he had loudly taken her name...

Shree comfortingly placed a hand on his shoulder.
he just nodded.

he looked up at the stage to find Sakshi holding the mike.

She had sung it,
and he had visualized his Riya...

Sameer sung the next parts
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Tooti chaarpayi wohi,
Thandi purvaai rasta dekhey...
Dhoondho ki malaai wohi,
Mitti ki suraahi rasta dekhey...
Re kabiraaa Maan jaa,
Re fakiraa yu na jaa...
Aaja tujhko pukaare teri parchhaiyaa...



Riya,
his riya had also made him rekindle his friendship with sameer,
she had convinced him that Sam still cared.
She made him realize that their friendship wasnt so weak that just because the 2 now had a few differences
she made him go back to where his original roots laid...
To Sameer,
his best friend,
his most trustful confidante.
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Sameer got down from the stage and hugged Arjun...
Arjun smiled, as to say,
'buddy, i got ur words.'

Sakshi again continued, and this time she too had a message convey...

Kaisi teri khudgarzi...
Lab namak na misri,
Kaisi teri ye khudgarzi
Tujhe preet purani bisri...


was she mocking him?
For his bitterness?
His lack of warmth?
Or was she simply trying to say...
' your anger doesnt suit you, be my friend.'

where Roshni was an open book,
Riya was a leather bound diary...
Which could be opened, read and understood.

But Sakshi was something beyond his comprehension, and moreover highly irritating.

Well,
Roshni and he,
fit like two pieces of a puzzle,
and Riya tried to mould herself according to him.

But Sakshi was all set on changing him...
Which to Arjun was highly displeasing.
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He was again taken out of his trance when he heard Chotu and Shree singing the rest...

Mast Maula, Mast kalandar,
Tu hawa ka ek bavanddar,
bhujh k yu andar hi andar
Kyuu reh gayaa...
Re kabiraa Maan jaa...
Re faqiraaah Maan jaa,
Aisa,
Tu hai nirmohi kaisa harjaiyaaa...


Their voices held that admiration, brotherly affection, and somewhere a bit of reproachfulness, for Their Riya couldnt bear to see Arjun sad.

She wanted him to rejoice, to be happy,
to sing, to dance, to laugh...

And maybe he would do that,
not for his, but for her sake.

Pretending to be annoyed, he walked to door, so they would think in anger he is leaving now.
But actualy he went to the 'dafli wala' man to take the 'dafli'...
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he turned playing the dafli
and singing...

waaha waaha raamji, jodi kya banaai,
bhaiya aur bhabhi ko badhai ho badhai...
sab rasmoo se badi hai jag mein
dilse dil ki sagaai....

he tossed the dafli to shree
and started singing and dancing stunning them all
soon chotu, shree and a few other boys joined them...

mere bhaiya jo chup baithe hai,
dekho bhabhi yeh kaise aithe hai
waise bade hi bhaley hai...
Manaa thoda mannchale hai\
par aapke sivaa kahin na phisle hai

hearing the last line Aisha blushed...
liza and Sakshi took he chance to tease

dekho dekho khudpe,
jiji itraai.
jiju aur jiji ko...
badhai ho badhai
sab rasmoo se badi hai jag mein dilse dil ki sagaai...

suno suno jijaji aaji aap k liye,
meri jiji ne bade tap hai kiye
Mandiron mein kiye phere..
pooja sanjh sawere
teen lok taintees
devon k raahi ghere..

they twirled and hugged Aisha she hugged them back
Arjun came forward and cupped aisha's cheek

jaisi bhabhi maangi thi,
waisi bhabhi paayi
Sammy aur Aisha ko
badhaai hai badhaai
sab rasmoo se badi hai jag dilse dil ki sagaai......

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he hugged both Sam n Aisha,
soon the other 4 joined..
they shared a group hug and clicked photo's
all the while Arjun was smiling...
they jnew it wa tough work for him...
he turned to sam..
" kyuu be, ab khush hai?"
"bohot yaar"

they again shared a hug

he saw his Riya showing him the 'thumbs up' sign..
she was happy now,
and he too.
*************************************

he was sitting alone,
around him he saw everyone was happy, busy with their partners

Sameer n Aisha on the dias recieving well wishes..

Liza n Shree, bickering as usual
this time because shree had complimented a girl.

Chotu n his 11.30wali romancing in a corner...

seeing them a smile crept up his face,
and pain too...

he felt 2 persons sitting beside him on either sides and hugging him tight.

they were his Riya and Roshni.

Riya: Arjun sir aap dukhi ho?
Roshni; Jun!!! jhoot na bolo, tum tanha ho na?
Arjun; nahi to. jab tum dono mere dil mein ho, yaado mein ho, main tanha aur dukhi kaise ho sakta hu?

he wound his arms around both and gave each a peck on their cheeks

Arun; i luv u both, riya, roshni.. khudse kayi zyaada..
Roshni; we too Arjun,
Riya: haa sir.. par koyi hai, jo aapko ham donose bhi zyada chahti hai..

both of them pointed towards her,
she was standing all alone,
looking at him mesmerised..

Arjun; Sakshi?
he asked shocked...
'yup!! "Roshni said with a wink
Riya just smiled and said " Arjun sir, its time for us to handover the custody of your heart to someone else..'
she and Roshni looked a eachoter and pulled him up, and pushed him towards her, not before whispering..
"Go, give her a chance."



he went to her and asked her to come the corner with him.
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Though in his 'Arjun' mode, he was feeling nervous...
he turned and saw...
she was still rooted,
he went back to her and pulled her with him...

"Arjun?" she asked, suspicious.
Without no further ado, he just blankly asked.

"Do u love me Sakshi?"
gauging her reaction,
she first went into shock, then smiled, then did a angry look, and finaly that poker face.

"Ha! In your dreams Arjun."
"Sakshi, your not that good enough k tum mere sapno mein aa sako."

He glanced towards Roshni & Riya.
Riya was smacking her head,
and Roshni pulling her hair in exas peration.

he quickly modified his words.
"Matlab k jo sapno mein aate hai wo haqiqat mein milte nahi.
Samjhe ya..."

"Samajh gayi Arjun, bohot ache se. Akhir tum chahte kya ho?
Jhoot bolungi to pakar loge,
to sach hi suno.
ACP Arjun Rawte, I luv u!! Ab khush?"
saying so she turned to leave...
"Mera jawab nahi janna tumne?"

"Nahi Arjun, i know, Its a no."

"Sakshi, what if its not a no?"

She looked at him as if in shock!!

"What do u mean Arjun?"

she stammered
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"I... mean, i mean"
this time Arjun was also out of words...
He did not love her,
what would he say then.
He looked towards Riya and Roshni,
asking for their help.
They just grinned,
as if to say "Sorry but no sorry, u get no help"

"aage kuch bologe bhi?"
asked Sakshi.
"um... Idhar aao"
he puller towards a chair, made her sit and he himself kneeled in front of her, holding her hand.

"Sakshi, khushkismat hote hai wo, jinhe dusra mouka, dobara mohabbat milti hai, aur badnaseeb hote hai wo jo unhe gawa dete hai.
Sakshi, meri kismat kis category mei hai ye mujhe nahi pata,
mujhe to do aisi larkiya mili jo mujhse behad pyaar karti hai, aur dheere dheere mujhe bhi unse mohabbat hui,
aur phir dono hi mujhse bicharh gayi...
Meri Riya aur Roshni. "

he glanced to where they were standing
both had tears at the solemnity of his love,
the urged him to go on

"Sakshi, u might be thinking that i'm so fickle-hearted,
but no,
i have always been loyal,
Sakshi,
jab Roshni meri zindagi mein aayi, baraf ki tarak tha, usk pyaar ki halki si aanch aur mai pighal jaata tha,
Par Riya meri Ibadat karti thi, mera kaha jaise patthar ka lakeer tha us k liye,
to bolo mai kaise na majboor hou usse pyaar karne k liye...
Ek meri Radha, aur ek meri Meera...
Ek thi meri Roshni, jo apne Jun pe jaan lutati thi,
aur ek thi meri Riya,
jo apne Arjun sir pe marti thi...
Par Sakshi mai..-"

"Ssh!... Arjun, kuch na kaho."
Edited by Sumu4JayD - 11 years ago
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