AsYa OS- Happy Birthday Mr.Khan *100+likes

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Hey guys...Ridz is back with her second OS... I have received a lot of love from you all for my first OS... I hope I will get the same for the second as well... I would like to dedicate this OS to Muski , my kamini dost... as because of her I got the idea...yesterday after KSG's birthday interview where they showed Surbhi feeding cake to Karan ... Muski was like I want Zoya to feed Asad like that and that's when I got the idea' thank you Muski... you know I love you... and all my gang at the AsYa AT Zara, Asma didu, rasu, Karu'and my sweet bachha Ankie..I love you all 😳 🤗

ll Happy Birthday Mr.Khan ll

Zoya was passing by and saw najma smiling to herself watching something... She went in and asked out of inquisitiveness what is the matter...Zoya " oh ho Tamatar what is it you are so much smiling about?? " ... Najma " Zoya it's old pictures of our family... my birthday pictures... Eid.. Bhaijaan's birthday pictures "... Zoya immediately took the album to watch how her Jahapana used to look when he was a kid ... Zoya " haww this is Mr.Khan ??? so cute " ... Najma " yes Zoya bhaijaan was really cute when he was small .. " ... Zoya in her mind said " he is still very cute " and she went on her dream ride ... which was stopped by Najma... as she went on with her nostalgia... suddenly something caught Zoya's eyes...the date on the picture of Asad's birthday... 5th july... " Tamatar...Mr.Khan's birthday is on 5th july?? That's tomorrow ...wow " ... Najma " yes Zoya its bhaijaan's birthday tomorrow " ... Zoya happily... "so whats the plan?? Did you invite everyone najma?? Wow I am so excited " ... Najma " No zoya bhaijaan does not celebrating his birthday " ...Zoya was shocked " what?? He does not celebrate his BIRTHDAY ??" you know what Najma your bhaijaan is super boring " ...Najma... " actually Zoya after what Abbu did to us 17 years back Bhaijaan has stopped to celebrate his birthday " and a tear drop fell from Najma's eyes... Zoya tried to console her " no tamatar I can understand... but you don't worry let's give him a surprise this year ... lets plan for his birthday " Najma " no Zoya bhaijaan wont like it.. " ...Zoya " ofcourse he will... leave it to me... we will bring a smile on his face as Jahapana smiles so less "

Next day morning Najma and Dilshad were going to Asad's room to wish him when Zoya interrupted them and took them to her room... Dilshad " Zoya whats wrong?? " Zoya over excitedly " phupi don't wish Mr.Khan... I have a plan...none of us will wish him... he will think that we all have forgotten...and when he will come back in the evening we will give him a surprise... whats say?? " Dilshaad was so happy that Zoya cares about Asad so much and is doing all these to make him happy... Najma " but Zoya bhaijaan will be sad if we don't wish him and he will be angry too on us for this celebrating thing " ...Zoya " No tamatar your... " dilshaad cut her " najma let Zoya do what she wants ... I am sure Asad will appreciate it " ... she somewhere knows her son has a deep rooted feeling for Zoya...Zoya " thank you so much phupi.. so remember nobody will wish him "'

In the mean time Asad had reached the break- fast table and was quite taken aback to see nobody was there...Zoya, Dilshaad and Najma came together and started their usual talks... Dilshaad served Asad his break fast... Asad was expecting Dilshaad and Najma to wish him but as per Zoya's plan they remained quite... Asad .. " Ammi where were all of you?? " DIlshaad was trying to find out an answer in the mean time Zoya butted in " Mr.Khan actually phupi and I will go for shopping today.. we were discussing that."'Asad ... " Did I ask you Ms.Farooqui ?? " ... Zoya ... " no I just said .. " ... Asad looked shocked as still Ammi and Najma have not wished him... Zoya started pulling his leg ... " what happened Mr.Khan why are you so flabbergasted?? " and gave a naughty smile... Asad " no nothing... Ammi I am going to office "...and Asad went out quite upset because it was impossible for him to digest the fact that Ammi and Najma have forgotten his birthday...

After Asad went out Zoya immediately started preparing for her jahapana's surprise...she went into the kitchen and started preparing a chocolate cake...and ran here and there to arrange things... Dilshad was really happy and smiling to herself watching all these... Najma " Ammi why are you smiling?? " ...Ammi " because I am happy to see someone other than us doing so much for Asad "... While Asad was having a bad day at office... one of his assignment got cancelled due to some legal issues...and he was hell frustrated and angry...at his home Zoya decorated the whole house with balloons and stuff... Najma laughed watching that " Zoya bhaijaan is not a kid... " ... Zoya replied back ... " we all should be a kid on our birthday "'

It was evening and Zoya was ready with her surprise... she dressed in a pretty white dress...Ammi and Najma were also ready... in the mean time Asad came back from office fuming due to the happenings in office...he entered and was surprised to see the lights were off.. " Ammi Najma ?? "' he called out...but no answer...suddenly Zoya came running out of the blue and put on the lights " SURPRISE " they said together... Asad was completely taken aback...Zoya shouted in her excitement " Happy birthday Mr.Khan " and burst a balloon... that was enough for Asad... " what the hell is all this Ms.Farooqui?? what do u think you are?? You think you can do anything in my house ... I don't like all this non sense'" dilshaad tried to stop him " Asad beta relax...she was just... " Asad... " no Ammi I am sure Ms.Farooqui is behind this rubbish... she has converted my house into a circus " ... Asad was already angry due to his office issues and all these ignited his anger to another level and he threw the cake ... Zoya was really hurt by all these... she had made the cake for him and he threw it away... it was bound to hurt her and also his words... she ran away crying...Dilshad got really angry " Asad this is not right... do you have any idea what you have done?? Zoya was so excited from the morning to celebrate your birthday... she made all the preparations, the cake with so much love and you threw it... she did this for YOU...to make YOU smile...not for herself'" ... Asad realized he vented his office anger on Zoya which was not correct...

" Ammi I am really sorry... my mood was off.." ... Ammi " don't say sorry to me...you have hurt Zoya..go and say sorry to her"...and dilshaad went away...

Asad went to Zoya's room...knocked and opened the door...he can hear Zoya was crying...he went and called " Zoya " ... " I don't want to talk to you Mr.Khan...please leave me alone "... " zoya please listen to me once.. " Zoya turned and Asad saw Zoya's red eyes and tears running down...he felt an unbearable pain inside his heart watching those tear drops ...he moved his hand and triedwiping them...Zoya was surprised by jahapana's gesture...he cupped her face and said " I am really sorry Zoya... I didn't mean to hurt you ... " ...tears rolled down Zoya's face " but you always hurt me... always blame me for everything... am I that bad?? " asked Zoya innocently... Asad's heart melt at Zoya's cuteness and he said " No you are not at all bad... I am very sorry for whatever I did...I didn't mean to... please forgive me "... "you threw my cake too... I had made it for you with so much hard work " she said in a baby voice...Asad smiled when he heard that...Zoya got angry " Mr.Khan you are smiling at me?? Now I will punish you..." Asad " really?? What punishment?? " he was still smiling... " you have to bring back the cake... " Asad.. " ok I will order it just now ... " Zoya " no... you have to help me making it "... Asad was shocked ... " what?? Zoya what are you saying?? "... " you want me to forgive you right?? " said Zoya naughtily... Asad realized he cant win in front of this one girl in the whole world...and he succumbed " ok I will help you out "' Zoya jumped out of happiness and hugged him... they shared a cute moment and Zoya felt uncomfortable and went running away saying " see you at the kitchen "' Asad smiled to himself'

They went to the kitchen to make the cake... Asad helped out Zoya in every possible way and was sometimes irritated since Zoya was messing the kitchen...but didn't say anything...after it was made...all four gathered and Asad cut the cake...he fed Ammi and najma...and then came towards Zoya to feed her... Zoya also took a piece and fed him... "happy birthday Mr.Khan...may all your wishes come true.." Dilshad knew only this girl can make his son happy...

Ok I am done'do give your valuable comments and toamatoes and eggs are always welcome..sorry for all the mistakes... I hope you will enjoy reading it' thank you 😊 😳

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Posted: 12 years ago
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First of all I'm extremely sorry for the delay bacha.
I have been unable to comment on this OS of yours.I've the first reserve here n I'm so late.
I'm really sorry for the delay bacha.I've been caught up in certain things.I hope u'll forgive ur di...
I'm glad that Muski gave u the idea and u wrote this OS...
I love you too darling..

Now coming to the OS...
You know I'm a fan of your writing skills jana.
Bacha you are just amazing...I loved the beginning where Zoe found Najma with old albums and got to know about Asad's birthday.Zoe is full of energy.I loved the way she tried to prepare a birthday surprise for Asad.
Ms. Farooqui's ideas are always awesome.It's just that Akdu Ahmed Khan is a sadoo to acknowledge her amazing ideas at times. 😭
Starting from Zoe's attempts to stopped dilshad and Najma from wishing Asad on his birthday morning followed by her usual habit of irritating jahanpanah by her cute antics and blabber was very nice.I liked it how Asad got irritated thinking that his mum n sis forgot his birthday.😆

Zoe's excitement for arranging the birthday surprise for Asad was written very nicely.Dilshad's dialogue about Zoe's attempts to make her son smile on his birthday was very heart touching.
Oops jahanpanah had a bad day and was upset.
Asad's comeback and then his outburst on finding the birthday surprise was described wonderfully.
Jahanpanah ke temper se toh devil bhi darta hoga.Baap re baap kitna gussa karte hain,bechari Zoe ko rula diya.
But the make up scene was just amazing.Asad was scolded by Dilshad and I really loved u for making dillu do so...He deserved it.
Uff I'm not getting over the make up scene.You have written it beautifully.
It was really a surprise to see Asad cupping up Zoe's face and wiping off her tears.Haye!!I'm totally flat.I'm imagining ASYA in the same state Riddha...
You have written the scene in a very amazing manner bacha..
Zoe's hurt and innocent questions were really cute and Asad's apology was a real fun to read.
And yes the punishment was the cherry on the cake.Only and only Zoe can make Zille ilahi help her in baking a cake for sure. 😆
I liked it how you showed Asad not losing his temper again by Zoe's messy nature.Finally the birthday cake was made.Phew!! 😆
Asad fed the cake to Zoe-sooo cute.I was day dreaming again jana...
All in all the whole OS was outstanding..
You are a marvelous writer bacha.
You write sooo well that I start imagining ASYA in my head...
Keep writing sweety
I apologize again for the extra long delay.
Take care!
love u
Muah!
🤗
Edited by crazy4KASH_AR - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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muski ko inaam milna chahie tujhe inspire karne k lie😃...par maine tera post muski se pehle reserve ki
cuming 2 da OS it ws so simple yet very sweet...ekdom roshogollar moto😊
zoya is such a sweethrt...she did so many things 4 his jahapanah's bday❤️
bt asad threw da cake away😲...zo k sath sath mera bhi dil toot gaya🥺
par da way he went 2 her room & wiped her tears😳
i luvd da punishment she gave 2 asad...it ws so apt👏
& OMG!dey hugged...me is on cloud 9...show mein aisa kyu nahi hota😔
den dey made cake 2geder...i want 2 eat dat asyalicious cake😆
on a whole u did a gr8 job⭐️...aise hi mujhko acche acche surprises deti raho...i luv u my sweet kamini🤗

Edited by ras224 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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OMGGG seriouslyyy you dedicated dis 2 ol of us...Hehehe how Cute <3
Really thankyouuu soo soo much for dis n yh it was really vry amazinggg a Cuteee one...asad ji akduuu huh gandeyyy itniii pyaar sey cake bnaaya tha...bt lovd it how zoya mde him mke a cak vd her in d kitchen...imagining asad in kitchn seriously rmynded me of armaan ki shahi kheer 😆ahhh loved it...do writeee more on asya wud lov readingg it...nd ideas oh baby my ideas toh wud never b normal yu know dat na 😆😆😆 dis one was normal n yu mde an OS of it...baaki you know my mynd...in Ankiez language its a Gutter Mind...if dose kinda ideaz yu get den olso do write an OS n share among our Gang ❤️ 😆

Lovee you Tamaatar yesss Ksgz Bday has really bot ol of us close sumwhere <3
Edited by Muski-sjm-SK - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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🥳 I'm the first..
YOHOOO [:D/]
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Posted: 12 years ago
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OMG!!! Ridu whats wrong with you! I cant stop blushing and smiling! 😳 You've made me crazy. 😆Loved your post to bits!!!! And by God if a scene like this occurs i'll end up killing myself u know why because I wont stop blushing and smiling! 😳😳
🤗🤗🤗 Loads of Hugs for you xxx
Edited by Nisbahx - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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yayyayyayya!! I feel like its my brithdayy!! Thank you didoo, it was worth all the awake-fullness till 2am :P

semi-res. am half alseep

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UNRES.

Here goes what happened. 😃

I was full on sleepy after 9pm total unlike me! 😃 And Didoo told me i am writing an OS but friends at AT were not allowing her to do so, and am like I WANT IT NOW!!! YOU CAN CHAT LATER WITH THEM!! I AM SOO SLEEPPYY!! 😆 😆

I then go off to sleep for a couple of minx jisska mujhe koi idea naa tha :P and then in the middle i remember that haaww there's Diddo's OS to read!! And i rush at 12:45 am to IF in my weary sleep stricken eyes to IF. 😆 😆

And a wait till 2:02am is just WOrth it.😆 😳

This is actually soo me!! I mean, i myself did this like Zoya more in-numerous times [naay i am not boasting 😆 LOL] and all the while i felt like Wooow Didoo just wrote the way i celebrate mostly celebrate my friends birthday. 😳

This was sooo goood. Sooo cute!! And a word to perfectly describe is A-D-O-R-A-B-L-E 😳 👏 👏 👏

i mean, why i am soo blessed to have you as my elder half, see, how adorably you write Diddoo, i am bound to write CUTE as you say :P 👏 👏

And it was just like



🤗
Edited by MisHumptyDumpty - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: MisHumptyDumpty

yayyayyayya!! I feel like its my brithdayy!! Thank you didoo, it was worth all the awake-fullness till 2am :P


semi-res. am half alseep


awee thank you baby... sleep now 😳
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Posted: 12 years ago
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awww its cutest 😳
but i was waiting wen zoya will eat cake from Mr Khanz face 😳😆
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Posted: 12 years ago
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hey

it was an awesome OS
and new concept too
hats off for ur creativity
u r good writer
loved reading d story
wish zoya had fed asad or vice verce😉
do write more stories
nd thnx fr d pm
Edited by youth_showsfan - 12 years ago

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