The Saree Shop :Part 3 Pg 22 20/06

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Sona

@mistyrains

Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

Part 1| Pearl Droplets & Love

PM me for chapter. taken off for personal reasons. Will be re-posted soon.

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INDEX

Pearl Droplet & Love (Above)

Zinnias & Heartache

The Doors & A Tale

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AngelTeen

@AngelTeen

Stunner

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Posted: 12 years ago

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So you did it again. Seeped me right through to your story and now I find my heart in the busy lanes of Gangtok traversing in and out of a Saree Shop, my eyes looking out for Arnav and his Khushi and of course a maroon kosa with black ambis...I have a feeling that these are the three main characters of this story, the saree no less than the two it binds.

As I said the time I read the preview of this story - I am in love with this Arnav and the setting and the butterflies in my heart which mirror the ones in Arnav's heart. Your sense of writing, timing, pacing, situating is marvellous Sona, simply stunning.

I can actually smell and feel the various intricacies in the story - its that good. I am in awe of your writing and the pictures you paint each time.

Loved it. And I will repeat what I said that time, this has the potential to become a novel and if and when it does, I would love to be its editor. :)

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vgedin

@vgedin

Rocker

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Your writing is like your name, Sona indeed, its pure gold.

How do you do this? Recreating everything about a city, a street in the city, a shop in the street, the man outside the shop, the shopkeeper inside the shop, his kurta, the customer, the customer's smile, the tinkling of her pearl earrings - every little detail infused with such beauty and tenderness. Genius.

I thought I could never imagine Arnav as someone who is not all powerful, affluent and commanding. But then you proved me wrong when I read The Dreamcatcher. And here it is, again. So beautifully sketched.

Mumbling the lyrics to an old Rafi classic, he slid his head inside the neck of a white kurta, letting it stick to his damp body.

Sexiness can never be too far from Arnav, can it ? :D

I have seen writers quote poetry when they talk of love. But you went deeper and spoke of things that inspire the beauty of a love poem - music, flowers, nature, smiles - the world as a whole becomes brighter, more colorful, more delighful. You captured that, and I felt I like was in love.

Only this time he stopped to notice the flowers on his way. He realised they were zinnias, the colours of carmine and ivory. One could see a shiny happy face smiling down the road to the old bazaar, today humming a Kishore Da's Khwab Ho Tum Ya Koi Haqueeqat.

Gangtok? Lovely! Refreshing. Also loved the quote in the end, so apt and insightful. Love can take you from the heights of bliss to the depths of despair in no time, and there is nothing you can do about it, isn't it?

Brilliant :) I want Arnav to find his Khushi, Khushi draped in the maroon Kosa silk with black ambis, and in Arnav's embrace. Shona, next update joldi, please?

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Japonica

@Japonica

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

WOW! That was a brilliant piece of writing, MR! 👏

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iwkknd12

@iwkknd12

Explorer

Posted: 12 years ago

Grr...I wrote a hugeee review and accidentally pressed back and it got deleted.

Ok, here we go again.

Cherished Wounds was one of the first fics I read when I first entered fandom. It was very hard to find stories that were on par with yours afterwards.

Your ability to create a whole new world/ setting, and describe the background surrounding the characters is phenomenal. In this story, for example, I can actually picture myself waking up, walking, talking to Manu, and going to the saree shop with Arnav and feel him pine for Khushi. And the fact that this Arnav is so not like the canon Arnav doesn't even bother me. Because your construction was that well done.

I can't wait to read more :)

Oh yea, I am a huge fan of all your work.

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the_breeze

@the_breeze

Voyager

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Posted: 12 years ago

This was simply STUNNING!!

I have been to Gangtok and believe me the details you have so painstakingly etched in the narrative reminded of me the local market...

Also the fact that the setting is a simple everyday saree shop with Arnav being one of the salesmen is just so endearing that I can't even begin to describe the warmth in my heart and the smile on my face as I read through your story...

The entire scene is just so perfect and beautiful that I hoped to find the next part below the first one, such was the frantic search of my gaze to continue reading more...

I was taken aback at the impact of your words on my mind and I kid you not when I say that this is one of the best short works I have come across...

My brain fails to come up with words to describe all that this one chapter has made me feel. All I can hope for is that you continue soon.. (and never end 😆)

BRILLIANT 👏 👏 👏

(p.s. can u send me a PM when you update this?? )