MG.. First Sight (SS) Part 9.. 5th Apr updated - Page 14

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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: preethia

loved the update

poor maan...
more to know abt geet's pov

Originally posted by: gargi12

awesome...
Maaneet sath ayenge kaise???
Cont soon

thankuuu 🤗
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: Saams

Its so beautiful.It was lovely to read about Maan's feelings.
Am proud of you sis ,oops..!! saalesaab🤗

Originally posted by: Maaneet099

bookmarking for now :)

thankuuu 🤗
shikx and saamu baba 🤗 ..
Maaneet99 waiting for ur comment ;)
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: sweetcherry95

main fursat se all 4 parts parhun gi kyun k adeena ne muje bata diya hai k ab app update nae karogi

Originally posted by: ramyayuppy

tu kamini aese koi 1month ka break leta hy kya?? :@
stupid duffer i hate u 😡
wese nyc update
y cant maan tell geet abt his identity and his love??
that way she can.understand him na
and geet in dat business party!!!!!
dont tel dat geet is here wid sumone else :/
and u it wil b nyc if u will update soon

@ bold .. thanku for making me realize that i was missing an important part of the story there 😆 i forgot to mention it 😆 and thankuuu ramya for hating me 🤣

Originally posted by: Remyapms

Nw only i opened my other id and found ds ss...

sorry for the late comment yaar..but it was just superb...
but y geet s distancing herself.. seems like she has some past!!

oh i didnt notice that i was sending pm to ur other id.. i usually dont send pm's to PM id's .. but thanku for reading and apprreciating.. this means alot when some other writer likes the work.. 🤗 thankuu
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: tushti-kiran


I have send buddy request...

please pm me whenever u update ur Maaneet FFs...

Originally posted by: swetha10

wonderful updates!!!
luv the story line..

continue soon

thankuuu 🤗
tushti_kiran.. i've added ya :)
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Posted: 12 years ago

Kia.. u always lobe the kissy parts.. Consider that from me ;)

Sweetsampa39.. glad u caught that part of the update :)

Ramya.. thankyou for reminding me that i have to put a little thing in the story which i forgot :P
Remya.. thankyou for the lovely lovely comment.. it meant alot coming from a writer
and EBRY BUN .. muaahhhzz for liking and commenting.. really guys you are the BEST :P ..
Part 5

As I was going inside, I froze at my spot. Was I hallucinating or was it really GEET..! I was as happy as a child who gets his favorite toy. She was standing by the pillar just infront of the entrance door. I kept looking at her and that's when a man came and tapped her shoulder from behind, and then they both went inside arm in arm. I became furious that why is someone touching MY Geet with so much authority. And YES she was, is and will remain MY Geet.

I went inside after them. I started to look for Geet as soon as I entered the party. A smile came to lips thinking of my condition that I had became crazy for a girl and she was no ordinary girl. She was my love and that's what made her special and extraordinary for me. I looked around as if I was losing my life.

My eyes caught sight of her atlast. She was sitting (again) by the chairs near the dance floor and the same guy whispered something in her ear to which she nodded and started to look at nowhere, like she was thinking or concentrating on something. My gaze then followed the guy, whom I recognized as one of our clients. What was Geet doing with him? E wasn't a one woman kind of guy and DEFINITELY not the guy Geet deserved.

Seeing her alone, I went towards her, hoping that she won't recognize me as Maan; her student. Keeping my fingers crossed, I walked towards her. I wanted to feel her near me, near my heart so she could feel and hear my heart beat for her. I was thinking of how to start conversation and how to ask her for dance. I didn't know when I was infront of her. I looked at her and saw her looking at me.

"Hey", I said. I became a bit nervous and looked behind at the dance floor. "Umm will you dance with me?" She kept on looking at me and I closed my eyes and kept my fingers crossed. "Yes" came her reply. I was on cloud nine on hearing the answer. I extended my hand to her which she held with a stronger grip than the last time she had held it for the dance. To my luck, the DJ was playing a slow song. I held her hand and placed the other on her waist. While Geet placed her hand on my shoulder and this time there was no hesitation in her eyes like the last time.

I was enjoying having her in my arms, so close. She was closer to me than the last time. Why? I don't know but I was having the time of my life which was interrupted by a phone call. I cursed the caller. And excusing myself, I went to attend the call. But when I came back, Geet wasn't anywhere to be seen. Looking at the time it was 11:46 pm. "She's gone" I thought and went outside, dejected.

I was strolling outside in the garden when I saw a girl sitting under a tree with her head on her legs and arms circled around them, holding her legs to her chest. I would've gone if she wouldn't've looked up. It was Geet. I stopped on my tracks, seeing me she straightened herself and smiled. I went and sat down besides her.

"You know I was thinking about you", I heard her say in her sweet voice, "so you remembered me?" I said with a small smile. "Why won't I? My friend brought me to the party but I'm not a party person and last time too, my colleague invited me". She paused for a while and then said, "May be I think too much. My life has been a bit rough lately. I don't go anywhere because I think I'm not supposed to enjoy. I keep on thinking about it."

"Every one has the right to be happy and enjoy. It's their will not other's" I said to her. "But this is not the case with me. I want to be happy and I want people related to me to be happy too and the person whom I'm attached to is not. The person whom I care about the most is not, and they say she never will"

I wanted her to forget her life for a while and talk to me. I wanted her to be carefree for just a few moments in which she's with me. I wanted her to be free of all the chains which bind her to her tensions.

"How did you remember me? You have not seen me. You've just seen me in my mask", I asked to which she said, "People are not recognized by their faces, it's their heart and their feelings that are remembered. And same is the case here, I remembered you, I don't know how but yet I did."

In the previous party I was looking at the couples who were happy and enjoying. I felt envious of them. But then you came and asked for the dance. I don't know why I said yes even though I've never danced in my entire life and that was my first dance. Dancing with you made me feel light. I thought that going and having a change would help and today I was here on my friend's invitation. First I didn't wanted to go but I wanted to feel happiness. I wanted to enjoy for some time. So I agreed. But I didn't feel the same as I did last time' with you. We were leaving but Rehan said that he had to meet someone and so had to go back inside. I wasn't enjoying and nor I was happy. It wasn't like the last time" and then she laughed and said, "You have a long life because when I was remembering you, you came"

She looked towards me and then stood up. I followed her actions and stood up and we started strolling. I was happy to have her by my side.

"May be it has something to do with you, I've never felt my heart so light before." She stopped and came then came in front of me. "Do you have magical powers?" she asked with seriousness in her voice. I laughed at her. "Hey, I'm serious!" she said, pouting. I felt like pinching her cheeks. She looked so cute like that. "No, I don't.? She looked heavenly when she smiled. Looking into my eyes intently she said, "Who are you and why are you here with ME?"

"You might know if you see my face". I replied on which Geet giggled. "Why? Is it written on your face?" I looked at her, "yes". She looked with her confusing eyes, "ok then take off your mask" she smiled achievingly.

I wanted her to take off my mask, "the thirsty comes to the well not the other way round".

Geet hesitated for a moment and then stepped forward; she raised her hands to untie the thread of the mask. Her hands in my hair felt so soothing. When she had untied, she looked at me and then started to take off the mask. Geet didn't look at me the whole time she was removing the mask. Instead she had her eyes fixed on the mask as if she wanted to keep the best part for the last and savour the moment. I wanted to see her reaction when she sees me. Geet looked at my face, I saw as her expressions changed from curiosity and anxiousness to surprise and recognition. She looked at me for a moment or two and slowly the zeal which was present in her eyes, evaporated and turned into horrid.

"Geet come on, I'm free now", shouted a man from behind us. Geet looked at me with longing in her eyes and then apology. She looked down at the mask which she was holding and then took a step forward and lifted herself on her toes so that she reached my height. Placing her hand on my left cheek, she brought her face near the other. I could feel her warm breath falling on my cheek. Trying to relish the moment, I closed my eyes and then I felt her soft supple lips on me and a moment later I felt lose of warmth. I opened my eyes in confusion and looked at Geet. "I'm sorry. I can't". That's all she said before she ran away from me and I just stood there trying to comprehend the words she said.

i really dont like this part and m not satisfied with it at all.. the part where geet takes off maan's mask was the thing i imagined and it was really beautiful in my imagination but i think i'm not good enough to convert my imagination into words.. i am totally unsatisfied with this update
and while i was writing shika's SS If It Wasnt For The Night came to mind.. i thought it was like that some how but i had this idea in my mind for over a year 😆 .. you guys should read this SS .. its amazing.. and you wont regret it :)

so updated :D and now i want atleast one line comments not one word or two word comments :| .. and now i just want to say that i will be disappearing again ;) dont throw chappals at me for that :/ .. i hate to gooo away :| ..

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Edited by NoorFatima - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
r
buahehe..
un res :P
awiee.. that was such a niceee part... <3
y u said that u were not satisfied wid it.. it was nicely described..
the mask part was so guud..
and whox dat rehan guy with maanu ki geetu??? moi not likey likey him...
love,
Ur wi.fi <3
Edited by ..Adeena.. - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago

bk to edit

the story is going beautifully chotu<3
u have only one more part to end dis nah?🤔
i love to read stories which have the character's POV😆and moi lubbing da story's pace...so peaceful n calm...<3
cumin to da story...it reminded me of Ram(SRK)of main hoon na...☺️
goin to classes...fallin for his chandni (sush)...
and da masquerade party...i loved the idea dat geet remembers this maan even now...😉
n da other maan at homesheesh...wat did he do???😵but still no negativity seen from geet's syd🤣...instead she kissed him n left wid dat man😲...😆
geet being a li'll open to maan...her lines..sumthin to do wid u...feelin her hart lyt...loved it all<3
wahi kaha tha...ur story takes me to sum serene land<3
mask removin part and till geet left was beautiful noorah!<3
k..so..nothin is clear now...😉
y did geet suffer from fever???😉wat does she think bot maan???who iz dat man in her lyff???dhuzzunnn...dhuzzuunnn...dhuzzuunnn...🤣
n ur tokin bot MR.Adams...wer is my MR.Adam?😒🤣
to get ur answerss...plzz tune to
MG.. First Sight (SS) Part 5.. 11th Nov updated
weneva noorah iz back!😎
Edited by gmsRk - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
yay!! update.. ;) 🥳
Edited by ..Adeena.. - 12 years ago

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