OS: 'Sahib, Biwi aur Dusri aurat'

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Ok I know this story wouldn't be much appreciated by the forum people, and I know nothing of this sort is going to happen in the show and sooner or later Sheetal would be established as a bitch. But this story is my take on this track, and also how I see life. Why is it important to be or to like one or the other? Well of what I have seen of life, it plays majorly in the grey shaded areas, wherein black and white both exist. A relatively new take on the 'other woman' after all every other person who is not Khushi is not necessarily bad or even evil😉

"So what did you tell them?" asked Rishab while sipping his coffee.
"I told them, Arnav is not the father of my child." Sheetal replied in a calm voice.
"And why would you do that, wasn't this Arnav-Aarav business the main reason for coming back to India?" Rishab's voice was tinged with apprehension. While Sheetal remained quiet, her memory trailing back to just about an hour ago.

The office was almost empty except for Arnav and Sheetal, and Sheetal was also almost done now so she approached her Boss's cabin to inform him that she was leaving. But as she neared his cabin, she could hear voices.
"Who is that? Probably Khushi." thought Sheetal to herself.
"How could you do this Arnavji? I love you more than my life, I love you even after all you did to me. I trusted you when no one else would and this is my reward? You betrayed me Arnavji." and this was followed by silent sobbing of a broken woman.

Sheetal decided to go inside, but as she pulled the door a little the sight stopped her in her tracks. Arnav was holding Khushi, it seemed as if the woman would fall if her husband didn't support her. He took her to the chair and settled her there and was now hovering over her. Arnav cupped Khushi's face tenderly and asked,
"What happened darling! Why are you so upset?" his voice was tinged with tension and nervousness, the state of knowing the answer and still not wanting to know it.
" Khushi, I have been noticing this since the last few weeks, you are not yourself anymore, you are not my pagal wife anymore. Please tell me darling, what is this about."
"How could you do this to me ..." but Khushi's complains were swallowed by Arnav as he took her in for a hungry kiss. Kissing her desperately, as if there was no tomorrow, as if letting go of her lips meant the death of his soul. And Sheetal saw this, not just the kiss, but what it meant for the two, how two souls were intertwined in such a way that separating them even slightly meant killing both.

Khushi broke the kiss first. Silent sobs still shaking her uncontrollably. Arnav saw her delicate figure, he noticed that she had thinned even more over the last few days. Of course he had noticed, she had not been eating well lately. She looked really weak, almost sick. Well he knew that she had been sleep deprived for sometime, he knew she had just pretended to be asleep by his side, he knew it because he had done the same. Her eyes looked hollow, shadowy rims surrounding the glittery depths. He wouldn't admit it ever, but even while others might have described her with adjectives like ghastly, to him she looked hauntingly beautiful, almost sublime.


The rest of this story has been removed for the reasons of plagerism. For the full note on it please check my Note in my index thread (pg-3)

Srija Singh






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redwine1 thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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very nice ... doesnt look like ur new to this ... pls do attempt more of this .. ur gud 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Ths was so beautifully written 👏

U presented d story very nicely..
Loved reading it 😳

Thanks 4 d pm!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Quite a refreshing take on the man, wife and other woman from the past story...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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loved loved loved it! The other woman deoesn't always have to be wicked.
Thank you for this. Now how much I wish the makers can inccoperate this theory and make the show realistic than go for the age-old she's the vamp line.
Sigh.
Loved the OS. You really should write more. 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: CDlove

loved loved loved it! The other woman deoesn't always have to be wicked.

Thank you for this. Now how much I wish the makers can inccoperate this theory and make the show realistic than go for the age-old she's the vamp line.
Sigh.
Loved the OS. You really should write more. 😊

Thanks a lot dear😊 such encouragement really means a lot😊
And though initially I had little hopes that the CVs might take the bold route but now that little hope is waning, so I thought why not write my take, and though I knew just few might like it but still I couldn't stop myself.
Waise, I guess we probably had very unrealistic expectations, this is Indian television after all and the audience here will probably need some more time to accept that a moral person, very much in love with his wife, could actually have a past and cld still be considered good in present...
Alas someday, I hope


Edited by srija.singh04 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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wow so this is what the other woman can be like too
wow these two are so in tuned to each other naa
that she realised that it is no good separating them
they need each other or they cant breathe
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Posted: 12 years ago
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First of all, that was very nicely written! Kudos for your storytelling.

Now the plot, thank you for such a different take. This is such a different scenario and something I would love to see. I'm one of the crazy ones that won't mind is Arnav turns out to be the dad...this track would keep most viewers who want sheetal gone fr good happy but make it a hatke story. Sadly, I doubt the cvs will show considering the general reaction on the forum to him being experienced.

But I digress...I'll be honest I haven't seen any serious indication from sheetal that she is a negative character. The only thing I've seen out of her is discomfort. People talk about "looks" She gives that totally show she's evil...and when i go watch the scene I only see discomfort/uneasiness. I wont be surprised if she turned out to be somewhat positive...sort of like La. Again, I don't know how the cvs plan to take it out but I will be praying someone from the team reads OSs like this for some ideas.

Do write more! It's nice to have a refreshing break from the forum.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: McNinja

First of all, that was very nicely written! Kudos for your storytelling.


Now the plot, thank you for such a different take. This is such a different scenario and something I would love to see. I'm one of the crazy ones that won't mind is Arnav turns out to be the dad...this track would keep most viewers who want sheetal gone fr good happy but make it a hatke story. Sadly, I doubt the cvs will show considering the general reaction on the forum to him being experienced.

But I digress...I'll be honest I haven't seen any serious indication from sheetal that she is a negative character. The only thing I've seen out of her is discomfort. People talk about "looks" She gives that totally show she's evil...and when i go watch the scene I only see discomfort/uneasiness. I wont be surprised if she turned out to be somewhat positive...sort of like La. Again, I don't know how the cvs plan to take it out but I will be praying someone from the team reads OSs like this for some ideas.

Do write more! It's nice to have a refreshing break from the forum.

Thanks a lot for your comment😊 these are desperately needed to boost up the confidence of people who write or rather want to write, like me😳

And yes as you pointed out even I haven't seen Sheetal throwing very obvious evil looks, it just looks like she is not very comfortable around her past, and who would be, really. But again I am pretty sure that the CVs won't go for the uncharted route over here, coz the unknown is just scary and more than that they must have been dead scared reading these multiple posts on the forum about how Arnav should be a virgin or his character is ruined.

Guess some of us 'crazy' people just tend to forget that this is Indian television and the creatives know that anything showing a positive other woman, even if she belongs to the past, wouldn't go well with the majority. But still keeping my fingers crossed until they show their cards😉
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Posted: 12 years ago
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awesome ...hope sheetal really is good

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