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Posted: 12 years ago
why do i get a feeling tht pari realized geet's affecton for maan and wanted to escape from her doomed life due to the obsession so chose this path by dedicating her love to geet!!!either this or u're thinking of geet as the poet which will b sooo not graceful!! any way waiting for the next part though not as eagerly as the earlier ones as i'm getting a feeling tht i'll not like the interaction bet maaneet in the next part.hope u prove me wrong!!
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: gudmeet

this is not fair

I am very angrt with u
you had written the story long time back but u deprived us of such woderful story
not fair at all
😡
so time for punishment
YOU HAVE TO KEEP WRITING SUCH EXCELLENT WORKS ON OUR DEAR MAAN AND GEET.
YOU GOT THAT
why did u keep urself away from writing
are colors and obsession ur only works here
i also used to visit this forum from geet days but would only read abt the show
its only a few months back i have started reading stories on maaneet
and now i have strated commenting too.
as u writers are working so hard to keep the memories of maaneet still alive in our hearts
I must thank the writer who inspired you to write
must thank ritzy for suggesting ur work COLOURS to me
and thanks to you too for such a brilliant story
keep up the good job
waiting for the monday update eagerly

I accept your punishment dear..actually i was little hesitant sharing my stories or you can say little scared to let myself enter in this world where many wonderful and brilliant writers are already showing their talent..May be it was because my stories are kind of different "mood"..Colors is a entirely different from what we can call a story..There is no "story telling"..Its simply the emotional conversation between maan and geet with a "color" theme...i was afraid of disappointment that one might feel reading it,though it did not happen and all of you liked it..i can't put in words how much i am thankful to all of you for this..My first work of IF was not on this forum.Its an OS on punarvivah forum..here is the link...
I was quite excited about gurmeet's new show..but the way it progressed disappointed me to no limits..I was frustrated like hell..and all my frustration is poured in this piece..i got quite good comments for this work of mine however my writing in this is quite raw but those comments gave me confidence to share"colors" with you all..Initially i have thought to choose "aarti" and "yash" for colors and post it on punarvivah forum as i already had readers there,but then my heart did not let me..I can't imagine anyone other than maan and geet in favorite work of mine and moreover mannet is my inspiration for"colors"..Hence i decided to write it in maneet version..and with trembling hands i posted my first maaneet story on IF...
Response that i got for this story overwhelmed me..and comments from "cloud9" encouraged me to complete this journey from "blue" tp "white"...
phew..i think i should stop my "ramkatha" now...
at last, again thanks for liking my work...
Edited by palindrome - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago

Its time to kill it

Its time to end it..

Only way left for this

is to finish myself with it,,!!!

So with you in my heart

I am ending my story..

I know i am killing two lives

but for fighting more

i am too weary!!!

Knife does not prick any more my flesh

when memory of pain and fear in your eyes covers my conscience..

Sight of blood dripping from my wrists does not panic me

when memory of your smiling face,fills my heart with joyance..!!!!

Believe me

I did not betray...

you will understand some day

that it was the only way..!!!!!!!

The poem was posted by her special friend who was he/her?

It clearly mention that that person committed suicide by telling her that he never betray her and he remembers the memory of pain and fear on her face which effect his/her conscience..and memory of

her smiling face brings Joyce in his/her heart-who can be the person

here it clearly stated that person whoever has written this poem was suicidal and by reading this poem pari committed suicide it means that person was very special person and was in contact with her for long time and when she has decided to stop reading poem this poem surfaced and she commited suicide.

My doubts are not going on geet but it can be maan but maan was not sucidal himself,

It can be Pari -but again 'I know I kill 2 lives' this line brings doubt

in my mind that how come pari can kill 2 lives may be she think she is pregnant and she is killing 2 lives ?and she wrote this poem or some one with whom she is in contact for long might have try to take his/her life and assuming he is dead pari took this step?

so in my suspicion list 3rd person who can be very good friend of pari and was in love with her has wrote that poem and pari followd her by

killing 2 lives-maan is also prim suspect due to her sickness he might have taken this step ?

may be kavita is lying to maan as she looked very quite and compose when he meet maan.

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Posted: 12 years ago
Hey dear me again
Thank God u wrote these stories on maan and geet and not on yash and aarti
I was also very excited abt gurmeet's new show and i was disappointed too
But i was really all praise for his guts to take such a role, father of two kids, and the character is so normal person not like maan
But i respect his decision he must have thought something before picking up the project and even if he is not successful in it he will surely learn something from it and will be more careful next time.
success and failure are passing phases but how u feel and what u learn from them is more important.
so even if sometimes people don't like ur stories or some other writers are writing more good work than u DONT STOP WRITING
for me u r a brilliant writer.
as for ur work colors it was just a perfect mix of poetry and story.
ur love for poem is evident in that story.
it was really so beautiful
i had commented on that story that it was a poetic story , that time i did not know abt ur love for poem
this mixing is really a pure talent.
always believe in urself and do what u love to do and the best will automatically come out of u
u may think so much GYAN
SORRY FOR THAT
but i really loved ur style of writing
and keep up the great job
P.S. I will definitely read ur os on yash and aarti but honestly i don't feel connected to them
there is no feeling for them neither good nor bad
sorry if i wrote something which i shoul not
I liked ur raam katha😊
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: gudmeet

Hey dear me again

Thank God u wrote these stories on maan and geet and not on yash and aarti
I was also very excited abt gurmeet's new show and i was disappointed too
But i was really all praise for his guts to take such a role, father of two kids, and the character is so normal person not like maan
But i respect his decision he must have thought something before picking up the project and even if he is not successful in it he will surely learn something from it and will be more careful next time.👍🏼👍🏼
success and failure are passing phases but how u feel and what u learn from them is more important.
so even if sometimes people don't like ur stories or some other writers are writing more good work than u DONT STOP WRITING
for me u r a brilliant writer.
as for ur work colors it was just a perfect mix of poetry and story.
ur love for poem is evident in that story.
it was really so beautiful
i had commented on that story that it was a poetic story , that time i did not know abt ur love for poem
this mixing is really a pure talent.
always believe in urself and do what u love to do and the best will automatically come out of u
u may think so much GYAN{your gyan is most welcomed now and in future too..keep dropping your precious comments...}
SORRY FOR THAT
but i really loved ur style of writing
and keep up the great job
P.S. I will definitely read ur os on yash and aarti but honestly 😊
is no feeling for them neither good nor bad{if you have a bad feeling for "buaji" on that show,then you should read it..Its a comic piece based on buaji's lovestory..🤣}
sorry if i wrote something which i shoul not
I liked ur raam katha😊

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Posted: 12 years ago
Nice update...will b waiting for next one...
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: palindrome

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i just looovvveee your comments...

NOOO😲😲 😲''''''''''''.aww Sachchi u lyk my blabber jaldi se jhappy de do🤗mommy ko batana hai she always says i talk nonsense 😡😆 bt d fact is she's cnt be wrong 😆

Rula diya na 😭 m emotional now n words aren't coming out of my throt'.atak gaye hain raastey mein😆'''' m felling like winning an academy award, standing on d stage of kodak theater, holding golden trophy in my hand😆 '"Ladies n Ladies(chances of gentlemen r vry less here😆) its an honor fr me to be here with u people. I want to thank my room, my bed , pillow, lappy, teapoy, curtains, toothbrush, comb, wallet fr showering all d luv n support to me p.s.s if I left anyone plz dnt be angry on me cutie pie things. its jst dat there r so many emotions crossing my heart n mind... u guys know vry well I luv u all😆. Thnk u sooo much"...m emotionally vry high so I cnt say anymore.🤣

C'mon its an intense psycho thriller, sometimes I really wonder wat m doing here n definitely wat else dan cooking ur brain wid my bak bak😳😆

I can assume wat is goin on in ur mind right now😉 n dat is " Diva7 r u going to move ur ass out of dis thread by urself or u r going to let me do d honor to kick u out of here"'.n wid dis thought of urs i jumped frm academy award's stage n now landing directly in frnt of u... on my knees, folding my hand n begging u 🤣 plz dnt do dis I'll nvr make circus of dis thread anymore sachchi Bua g k bhagwan ki kasam😆. dnt throw me out.🤢

P.S. on a vry serious note now I know u r nvr gonna say again dat u evr luvd my comments 😆 dats d enough of a torture fr u my gosh m pathetic🤣

Edited by Diva7 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
Chapter 22

"confession..."

He did not know how many times he had read that poem,since Kavita left last evening.He had lost the count long ago.Though it gave him immense pain everytime but he could not stop reading the words again and again.May be he was trying to find some clue about the writer of the poem,from the poem itself. But none fruitful did actually occur except the immense increase in his exasperation,which was not at all fruitful.He needed to talk to someone about all this. Only name that came in his mind was"geet".As soon her name popped up in his brain,image of him slapping her,chased it.He was little chagrined.But then her offensive words about pari reverberated in his ears.Before he could shut his brain from thinking about geet,his cell phone rang."hello.."he picked the phone.As the person on the other side spoke,his face showed surprise but soon his surprising face turned in to anxious one as he felt his heart beat rising with worry.He did not answer the caller as he started searching for his car keys among the mess on his study table.During his frantic search,his hand collided with hot coffee mug and hot liquid burned his flesh on hand making him hiss in pain.Finally after getting the keys,he ran towards his car.His anxious hands were torturing the steering and gears as he drove so harshly. He had to find "geet" who was missing since last night.Her land lady had called him to inquire about her.Sudden appearance of playing kid on the road,made him press the breaks very harshly.He closed his eyes in fear.When he opened them,he saw the kid crying in her mother's arms and mother giving him deadly expression.He sighed in relief as he tried to calm his heart and brain.He once again closed his eyes and breathed heavily leaning his head backwards on the seat.He had come for searching geet but he did not know where he would find her.It was not like he knew some of her friends or relatives.He even did not know her house address.Only thing he knew was her clinic address and her cell phone number.A loud honk from the car behind broke his reverie thus making him park his car on a suitable place.He was dialing geet's number continuously but it was coming switched off.At last he decided to call her land lady.

"hello ma'am..its maan here..you called me half an hour ago to inquire about geet.." he spoke rubbing his fore head in anxiety.

"Oh yes..sorry to bother you,mr.maan but i have found geet.."lady on the other side spoke.

He inhaled sharply as his heart felt at peace.."where was she???and how is she???" He asked.

"She is fine.Its just,she met with a small accident while playing with kids at orphange.She used to visit that orphanage but it was first time when she spent a night there and she did not inform me..I was little worried for poor girl hence i tried to call some of her friends whose numbers she had given me in case of emergency. You were one of them.."Lady explained.

"Is she hurt badly ,ma'am??"

"No no..Its just small wound on her left foot.I asked her to take a day off today but she did not listen.She is in clinic right now..If you want to meet her,you can go there..."

"hmm..thank you so much maam.."

"Its ok..I made you quite worried..You seems a close friend of geet"..lady inquired..

Her statement made him speechless as his brain analysed his behaviour in last half an hour.Why he was so much worried for geet??Why he felt same panic while driving the car he had felt the day pari committed suicide??Yes he had felt same anxiety but there was slight difference.There was slight hope in his heart that nothing will happen to geet,that she would never leave him..But why???

"hello ..you there???" voice from other side brought him out of his chain of thoughts..

"yess..ma'am..thank you for telling me about geet..bye" he cut the call before lady could ask that question again.

After knowing "well being" of geet,his brain instructed him to go back to his house but his heart urged to see geet once.He felt little hesitant to meet geet because of hospital accident.But he had to meet geet to solve this poem puzzle,he told his brain.."He was ready to face any kind of embarrassment to prove geet wrong.It did not matter whether it included taking help from geet herself or a face off with her after smarting her cheek." and there is no other reason" he tried to make his heart understand.

*************************************

He found himself standing near the window of her clinic with his eyes peeping inside.Geet was sitting on her chair fit and fine. He did not want to stare her stealthily but he could not remove his gaze.He saw her getting up from chair.She was lost reading some paper hence could not save her hurt foot from getting more hurt by sudden collision with table leg.Pain reflected on her countenance and he closed his eyes unable to see her in pain.

She sat on the chair once again as she opened her bandage to examine the wound.A smile crept across his lips as he saw her face.She was looking like a child who don't let mother touch the wound in fear of pain.With trembling hands,she cleaned her wound and bandaged it again.

"Any problem mister??" A random passenger on the road asked maan who was busy staring inside the clinic through window.Maan felt embarrassed due to his act as he spoke.."no,nothing i have come to meet doctor.."

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Geet did not believe her eyes as she saw him entering in her clinic.After hospital incident,she would have believed the sight of "the almighty,God"entering in her clinic but she could not believe that Maan would pay her a visit.She was too shocked to say something as her eyes followed his steps from the door to chair opposite her.He did not ask for her permission before settling himself comfortably on the chair.She was still standing,trying hard to making herself believe that all events were actually happening.

"I found "entropy entropy".He announced looking in her shocked eyes.

She did not say anything.

"Won't you ask 'who is she"??"

He waited for sometime still no words came from her side.He took her silence as a gesture of her anger and her unwillingness to speak with him because of that slap incident.With a tinge of disappointment in his heart,he got up from the chair to leave.He had never expected this kind of indifference from geet.He wondered since when he actually started expecting from her.As his footstep moved towards the door,a sudden realization of taking geet granted for all his jerking,dawned on him.First time,something,that did not include pari,had inflicted immense pain in his heart.

"Wait.."Her voice made him stop in his tracks.He turned around to see her limping towards him.After few moments,she was there standing before him.This was first time when she stood this close to him.She lifted her hand and her fingers grazed on his left cheek.His eyes closed for a moment as her cold hand made a contact with his warm skin.."Are you really here???"She asked in a whisper.With her hazel eyes boring in to his,he noticed her pink lips moving slightly when she had whispered.They were in such proximity that her breath fanned near his nose.Her hair were well braided,still some errant silky threads were poking near her right eye. He wondered about his mind,who was registering such small details about geet.May be this proximity was the reason. But for sure,this was not the first time when he had noticed such things about geet.He was well aware of her beauty but it did not effect him like it was doing now."Are you really here???"She asked again,this time leaning more close to him,especially the distance between their lips were minimizing.He tried to control himself..

"Yes i am here.."He replied louder than usual which was enough for breaking geet's trance. She immediately stepped back and turned her back to him.Embarrassment was understatement for her at that moment."Can we talk for a while???"he asked.

"Yes..."A meek reply came from her.."but after some time,please..you sit and wait for me.."Saying this she sprinted out from the clinic.

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Sudden lack of oxygen in the clinic after that little proximity act done by her,made her leave the place immediately.She needed fresh air to calm herself,before facing him once again.Apart from insulting his wife's love for him,she tried to kissed him today.Whatever she was doing these day,was making her more petite in her eyes.She inhaled deeply and her hand moved to her forehead to wipe the sweat beads.It was the same hand which had touched him,few minutes ago.His face appeared in her mind.He was looking week.He had lost weight.His soulful eyes were hidden behind the scarcity of proper sleep.His well kept stubble was turned in to the beard .With in such short time span,she was able to register such changes in him.Sometimes its not your mind but your heart works.She felt a flare in her heart because of his dishevelled state.It did not matter whatever wrong,wistful or embarrassing she had done in hospital ,she should have with him during past days.She should not have left him alone.As that thought crossed her mind,she became aware of the fact that whatever she was feeling was much more than an attraction.Wiping the wetness on her cheek,she made her steps towards clinic once again.

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"so kavita did not write that poem" geet asked after maan had told her whole story.

"no..she had not..and i believe her.."

"hmm..and you want to find who wrote that???"

"obviously yes..."

She paused for a second and then spoke.."look maan,if you want to find this,only to prove me that pari loved you..then there is no need..because i believe this fact as much i believe that earth revolves around sun,and delhi is the capital of India"

He smiled at her choice of words.."I agree that proving you wrong was my motive earlier,but now i want to do this for me..and only for me..no other reason.."

"Maan.."She said turning her back towards him..

"hmm???"

"I am sorry for whatever i said that day.."

He chuckled once again.."you don't have to..rather i should be sorry for slapping you..we get out of control when anger masks our rationality...anger made me slap you and the same anger made you say those words..."

"NO...I did not say all that because of anger.."She felt his eyes boring in to her back as she continued.."whatever i said was in my mind long ago..i believed that till you slapped me that day.."She sighed and closed her eyes,beside the fact he was not able to see her face now.But whatever she was going to say further,needed this.."maan..i was attracted towards you since we met first.My belief that pari married you because of a poem was a mere justification or excuse for my attraction towards a married man"

When he did not say anything even after handful moments,she turned around.He was sitting on the chair in the same position.

"You will not say anything,maan???"

"What do you want from me,now..???"he asked.

His statement startled her,,"no..no..i don't want anything from you ..I don't want any reciprocation..i know you loved pari and there is no space for anyone else in your heart.."

"Then why are you telling me all this now???"

"To lighten the burden on my heart"She answered looking straight in his eyes,She registered sudden change in his expressions.There was tinge of disappointment which got covered by subtle anger soon.

"ohh..so doctor geet was just confessing her wrong deed"He said now getting up from his chair.

"NO.."She screamed.."It can be wrong for you,it can be wrong for whole world,but it was never wrong for me.."She said moving towards him.

"Excuses and justifications are needed for wrong only"He said and took one step towards her."

When brain and heart battles,you need them badly.She answered moving more towards him.

"Only wrong deeds and crimes are confessed,geet..."He said now holding her from her shoulders.His grip was steel strong.

"No..Love is also confessed.."His grip loosened on her shoulders as he registered the moisture in her eyes.

They were standing there, facing each other from head to toe,trying hard to read each other's eyes.A little was told and a lot was hidden yet.His hand automatically removed the soft tendril from her fore head which he was noticing long ago.

"What is this for you..geet..crime or love???"He asked.

"I don't know..yet.."She replied.He smiled and turned to leave the clinic.She stopped him,holding his hand..

"What do you want "this" to be,maan???"

"I don't know..."He replied and hissed in pain.Geet was holding his burnt hand.As her gaze fell on his hand,she immediately left it.

"How did it happen???"She asked forgetting about her foot pain.

"Nothing..hot coffee.."He replied as she brought first aid box.

"You should be careful.."She said applying ointment on red skin and blowing it..He was looking intently towards her..

"Why did you give my number to your land lady for any emergency??"he asked suddenly.

She kept her gaze fixed on his wound but he did not miss the tremble in her hand caused by his question.

"Answer me geet.."

"Why were you so sure that i would save you that day in hospital??"She answered his question with another question as one tear from her eye fell on the burnt skin..Salty water drop increased the burning session on his hand but strangely it soothed his heart..He did not answer her and left the clinic. Geet was also left alone to witness the battle between her brain and heart,once again...

Edited by palindrome - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
geet confessed...now what...???
Maan loved pari for real or it was just his attraction is yet to know...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Diva7

NOOO😲😲 😲''''''''''''.aww Sachchi u lyk my blabber jaldi se jhappy de do🤗mommy ko batana hai she always says i talk nonsense 😡😆 bt d fact is she's cnt be wrong 😆

Rula diya na 😭 m emotional now n words aren't coming out of my throt'.atak gaye hain raastey mein😆'''' m felling like winning an academy award, standing on d stage of kodak theater, holding golden trophy in my hand😆 '"Ladies n Ladies(chances of gentlemen r vry less here😆) its an honor fr me to be here with u people. I want to thank my room, my bed , pillow, lappy, teapoy, curtains, toothbrush, comb, wallet fr showering all d luv n support to me p.s.s if I left anyone plz dnt be angry on me cutie pie things. its jst dat there r so many emotions crossing my heart n mind... u guys know vry well I luv u all😆. Thnk u sooo much"...m emotionally vry high so I cnt say anymore.🤣

C'mon its an intense psycho thriller, sometimes I really wonder wat m doing here n definitely wat else dan cooking ur brain wid my bak bak😳😆

I can assume wat is goin on in ur mind right now😉 n dat is " Diva7 r u going to move ur ass out of dis thread by urself or u r going to let me do d honor to kick u out of here"'.n wid dis thought of urs i jumped frm academy award's stage n now landing directly in frnt of u... on my knees, folding my hand n begging u 🤣 plz dnt do dis I'll nvr make circus of dis thread anymore sachchi Bua g k bhagwan ki kasam😆. dnt throw me out.🤢

P.S. on a vry serious note now I know u r nvr gonna say again dat u evr luvd my comments 😆 dats d enough of a torture fr u my gosh m pathetic🤣

your speech made me so emotional...otherwise who cares about mundane things like comb and toothbrush..It shows that you are a girl with heart of gold..I want to congratulate your mummy for giving birth to a daughter like you who is an academy winner and still so much down to earth that she did not forget to thank her curtains..I am sure all these things had played a great role in enriching your talent of adding your original dialogs in your comments like.."koi dooubt mat rakhna dil me...,thappad se dar lagta hai sahab etc etc...I sometimes wonder how your brain generates such original and creative lines..
Its an honor for a person like me to have a celebrity like you on my thread..ohh...i feel blessed..😆

ps-this is your best comment till now..love you dear!!!

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