ArHiFF:A Heartening Journey Pt20 Pg147 PM's Later - Page 49

Dear Avi,

I am back with my comments for your worthy writing in Part 11.😊

You have ventured into a challenging realm of writing and come out with flying colors. I think I will use Khushi's words and say- "It was beautiful". The writing ventured into necessary details, was not very flowery and reflected the nature of the characters. Arnav was definitely in control of the situation while Khushi was spontaneous, responsive and enthusiastic.

Can we have Arnav do something sweet for Khushi on the morning after their first intimate night? I wouldn't want him storming off to work while she's still asleep…Would any woman want that? I know it's cliched but ordering a cup of coffee for her from Hariprakashji or doing something like that would be nice. In case you have planned something else like showing Arnav's bipolar behavior (Oh No!..He is still Arnav...How can I forget!), please do carry on with your idea. After all, it is your story and I would still be very happy to read it.

On a separate note, when Arnav saw Khushi by the pool, I was reminded of how John Cusack sees an image of a lady by the pool and realizes she is his soulmate in the movie America's Sweethearts. The situation and ideas are different, but somehow, I was thinking of that scene from the movie…I do hope Arnav realizes Khushi is his soulmate.

Now that I have devoted some time from my jobless Sunday writing this comment instead of napping, would you be so kind as to update soon? 😊😊😊

Originally posted by: Paarijat

Dear Avi,

I am back with my comments for your worthy writing in Part 11.😊

You have ventured into a challenging realm of writing and come out with flying colors. I think I will use Khushi's words and say- "It was beautiful". The writing ventured into necessary details, was not very flowery and reflected the nature of the characters. Arnav was definitely in control of the situation while Khushi was spontaneous, responsive and enthusiastic.

Can we have Arnav do something sweet for Khushi on the morning after their first intimate night? I wouldn't want him storming off to work while she's still asleep'Would any woman want that? I know it's cliched but ordering a cup of coffee for her from Hariprakashji or doing something like that would be nice. In case you have planned something else like showing Arnav's bipolar behavior (Oh No!..He is still Arnav...How can I forget!), please do carry on with your idea. After all, it is your story and I would still be very happy to read it.

On a separate note, when Arnav saw Khushi by the pool, I was reminded of how John Cusack sees an image of a lady by the pool and realizes she is his soulmate in the movie America's Sweethearts. The situation and ideas are different, but somehow, I was thinking of that scene from the movie'I do hope Arnav realizes Khushi is his soulmate.

Now that I have devoted some time from my jobless Sunday writing this comment instead of napping, would you be so kind as to update soon? 😊😊😊

Originally posted by: -MaanKiPari-

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