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Posted: 13 years ago
sorry For late comments
Very good going Pra

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Posted: 13 years ago
wow.. that was amazing update pra.. I like how you show both of them are uncertain about the arguments they had last night.. Its kind of ignored in the passion they feel towards each other..

N begging A to not go to hospital and She not going but A going.. Perfect scene in my opinion.. Its true N can feel overwhelmed and decide not to do her duties.. and in one way its right as well.. if she doesnt go the patients arent going to go away.. she isnt running clinic :) She is working in hospital.. From A's stand point yeah he needs to go to work because there is hardly anybody to cover his work.. So he is right in his way but then his comment about N not being professional comes from expecting too much from her :) i like how there is that silent difference between what they do, what their reach of impact of day to day activity is so so prominent in that scene.. Just loved it.. i dont think i have ever seen a scene so casually pointing to these aspects..

I guess Sid not being able to talk to her at that point must have depressed N... She was already feeling let down by A when he went away when she didnt want him to and now Sid is not able to talk to her when she is thinking about him..

Finally she is thinking about her father.. I like how confused she is still not sure if A did meet him deliberately.. or it was her father who did this deliberately or it was coincidence.. Its a sensitive topic so trusting anyone but herself completely would be impossible.
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: anotheranfan

wow.. that was amazing update pra.. I like how you show both of them are uncertain about the arguments they had last night.. Its kind of ignored in the passion they feel towards each other..

N begging A to not go to hospital and She not going but A going.. Perfect scene in my opinion.. Its true N can feel overwhelmed and decide not to do her duties.. and in one way its right as well.. if she doesnt go the patients arent going to go away.. she isnt running clinic :) She is working in hospital.. From A's stand point yeah he needs to go to work because there is hardly anybody to cover his work.. So he is right in his way but then his comment about N not being professional comes from expecting too much from her :) i like how there is that silent difference between what they do, what their reach of impact of day to day activity is so so prominent in that scene.. Just loved it.. i dont think i have ever seen a scene so casually pointing to these aspects..

I guess Sid not being able to talk to her at that point must have depressed N... She was already feeling let down by A when he went away when she didnt want him to and now Sid is not able to talk to her when she is thinking about him..

Finally she is thinking about her father.. I like how confused she is still not sure if A did meet him deliberately.. or it was her father who did this deliberately or it was coincidence.. Its a sensitive topic so trusting anyone but herself completely would be impossible.

Hey Pri , thanks again for the lovely comment . I have been saying this over and over again , but for one last time , I'll say it one more time :) . I absolutely love them and wait for them.
Yes , the uncertainty is there and so is the attraction . And then our nice and sweet N suddenly does not want to go to work :) and instead wants to spend time with her husband . And love how you analysed that scene and the difference in their professional positions and responsibilities . And of course , A's expectation from N , even after she is married to him :) . Pleasure reading it Pri .
Yes Sid's hanging up in that manner only ended up saddening her more . And of course , as you rightly pointed out , her father is still an extremely sensitive and personal topic and she cannot trust anyone other than herself .
Though I have to say , resuming this thread (and not just the FF) was mainly a very selfish endeavor , as I definitely did not expect any readership , I am glad I did . I would have missed your observations if I hadn't :D , so thank you .
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: jsdoll

sorry For late comments

Very good going Pra

Thanks Jibsi and sorry kyu ? Its perfectly fine . Der aaye durust aaye :)
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: mitzification

What I like about this update is they are slightly angry with each other but still together . and both are forgiving also ... not geting offened by the others actions.

Mitzi , thanks and yes they are angry and yet together and ready to forgive . That is essentially AN , even though I wouldn't completely think they are not offended by the other person's actions , at least N is still not completely over her anger for him. But , she has forgiven him and is ready to move on .
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Posted: 13 years ago
Read the last 3 parts togeather. Really enjoying the story :)
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: Missy-rc

Read the last 3 parts togeather. Really enjoying the story :)

Hey Missy , thanks and good to see you :) .
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Posted: 13 years ago
aww so sweet ..but mujhe next part abhi padna hai ...will they fight ... will they understand each other , will he calm her fears ...???
jaanenge break ke baad ...heheh
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Posted: 13 years ago
Ok now i have to take a bow... Pra, I like your each update has atleast 1 scene that so subtly touches the emotions that seem way to genuine to think they are fictional :)

For me the highlight of this update was N realising how she is so dependent on A now ... For a person who has lived alone, and been so independent it sure is big deal.. esp when one starts expecting things from other as naturally as she is... And its that disappointment -- oh well may it be right thing to not do what she expected - it surely makes her think about all these thing... Loved it...

Another interesting thing that i liked was the way N wasnt in one instant happy that A went and talked to Sid... When Sid's phone call started i was really hoping N doesnt get all excited about it in one minute forgetting how A had reacted earlier.. And you gave us exactly that :)

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