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Posted: 13 years ago
dutta irritated with nakku's words

poor dutta badly in love with her

thanks for promo rose

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Posted: 13 years ago
what a new twist just in last ud they shared a meal n now this . waiting for friday
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hi rose
you just keep on writing 😊the promo got me worried are they drifting apart specially naku .hopefully i 'm wrong waiting for the ud tc😊
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Posted: 13 years ago

Hey rose! Main bhi aa gayi!

Now, you know na how weak my heart is, tell me you know or not? I know you know! Still, you're hell bent on giving the poor little thing shock pe shock shock pe shock! I mean my world came crashing down at the mention of her puking! To vomit in dutta's bathroom, ye sirf mera haq hai!😆 I was on the verge of having a stoke but then remembered about the golgappe! You know, when she had five plates tabhi, I was having doubt, she ate purposefully to fall sick, he has got duttta na for TLC!😭 And who faints after having golgappas? It must have felt heavan landing in those arms! 😍Koi foreign return hai jo 20- 25 golgappe nahin digest kar sakti, hain? I'm telling you… natak sab natak!😡 She wants me to believe she's weak, when she almosted snatched and tore the button of sweetu's kurta, and now tailor mastarni will sew it back too

Okay, now time for some serious stuff!

Hmmm…a sick naku and a nursing dutta! Thank you, coz most of time it's my sweetu who bears pain! All thanks to your marham patti romance fantacy😛. Well according to me, when one has to show characters like dutta "concerned" it's a bit dicey, coz if you underplay it, the character is accused to be insensitive and just a li'l bit of more concern the character starts sounding chessy and of course go out of character. And you did a perfect job here, bingo! I could totally imagine him with a concerned full eyes, grim and worried face yet solidity in the appearance! Assuring his woman that no matter whatever worse comes, he's there, who samhal lega! Unlike what I get to see mostly in the name of romance, the heroine sneezes and the hero starts bantering "if something happens to you, I'll die" with rabba ve or mahiii playing in background!😆 The only thing that surprised me was how calmly he said "must be coz of golgappas" even I was expecting a scolding (damn no such luck..lol) But it was nice for a change. And thank you for making her condition go worsened once he returned, in your previous FF, even with her pregnancy she managed to stay fit and fine most of the time! You know until he hadn't returned from the work the sequences were nice esp. the hospital one but from the moment he returned, the update reached sky limits! LOL, when she got up in the middle of the night, I thought the bed covers are gonna be in mess😆, but thankfully she was hungry! And what happened next was just lovely, of course I loved the hug, I mean who doesn't but moreover I loved the way she wasn't ready to leave him even for a sec, that was more romantic for me, even than the hug. And now the best part candle lightmein damakta chand sa mukda…muah!❤️ Who said your previous update would have been a visual delight, it's this one actually, hayee if that scene would have picturised, meri toh death hi ho jati bye God!😆 And, did they ate the toast together? Wow yippee…….you were right when you said that when they'll share their meal for the first time, I'll be more occupied with the surroundings, yes I was, but look I did noticed! Okay fine in the end you mentioned it but I've noticed it before reading that…sacchi!

There were quite a moments in the update which could be considered as the high point of the update, but I'd like to chose a rather underplayed sequence as my favourite, the scene where naku gazes a sleeping dutta! Everything about that sequence was hearttouching to me and heart fiercing too, poor gorl, she's really suffering a lot, I hope things go happy to her once again. And, now, why I have a feeling that she'll attend the baby shower, if yes please plan a humili..errr I mean a confrontation *civil muh*

Some special mentions:

Even though in this FF naku is the one more reserved, yet you have showed her some where attracted towards dutta's persona,it's a very important trait of naku as a charcter!

Language…..the words you chose for your charcters to use, just like mombatti instead of candle, big deal if he had said candle, but when he says mombatti, the whole thing gets so dutta with a LTL touch! Bravo!

And the end note, it clicked something in the heart!

Rose, graet great great job, with evry update Iget a feling to discard my previous statemaent and announce the current one being my fav, I don't know what's in the store, nor I want to bother coz it's absoulletly a delight saitting back and enjoing . Reading this one was very soothing and when I say SOOTHING I actually mean it!

Thank you for the update

Waiting for the next!❤️

@promo: as always confusing and requires a lot of thinking but saanu ki anyways you're gonna update today:P

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Chapter 14 : Kuch Toh Hai Zaroor

It was his 30th birthday and a huge yagya was organized at the patil vadi temple. I sat next to him as purohit ji along with five more priests chanted various vedic mantras. A holy fire was lit in a square made of bricks and several offerings like grains, pulses, fruits and ghee were offered to please Bappa who is considered as the remover of all obstacles. Aayi sahib, Baaji, roops and my parents were also present and sat there with folded hands as purohit ji recited sansksrit verses. I held his hand as he added honey, jaggery and ghee from time to time to the holy fire. The puja lasted for more than four hours before purnahuti which means giving away full heart and soul to the gods to seek their divine blessings was offered. Towards the end aarti was offered to the gods and then to the family members. AS had a satisfied and calm expression on her face seeing that everything went off well, however what purohit ji said next worried her," humne bhau ki kundali dekhi hai ..aane wala samay unke liye theekh nahin hai..unke jeevan ko khatra ho sakta hai." The worried expression now spread across all the faces except him, as if all these things didn't matter to him.

" toh koi upaye (solution) batayiye." AS asked hurriedly.

" bhau agar apni kuldevi ke madir mein jaa kar shivji ke aaghe 5100 baar mahamrityunjaya ka jaap karein to yeh sankat tal sakta hai." Prurohit ji replied. AS looked at him with the expectation that he'd say yes but he refused out rightly saying," in sab cheezon ki koi zaroorat nahin hai..kuch nahin hoga mujhe." I knew he wouldn't agree, convincing him for this yagya itself was such a daunting task for AS, her emotional blackmailing had worked once but not every time it would work. Purohit ji glanced at me and suggested," waise toh yeh puja bhau ki jagah aap bhi kar sakti hain ..aap unki patni hain." I nodded my head atonce and said," theekh hai main chali jayegi." The very next second he interrupted and said," koi nahin jaayega ..na main ..na yeh." His stubbornness irritated AS who raised her voice a bit and asked," dutta agar tujhe puja nahin karni toh mat kar ..par agar nakku karti hai toh ismein kya takleef hai?" he rolled his and shook his head," pehli baat ..mujhe In cheezon mein bilkul bhi vishwas nahin hai aur dusri ye akele kaise jayegi?" now my aayi for the first time dared to open her mouth in front of him," nakku akeli nahin main chali jayegi uske saath." His gaze shifted from aayi and stopped on my face, clearly he was angry because he couldn't disapprove the idea suggested by her and there was nobody to support him. Purohitji now appeared calm and told me," kal bahut accha din hai shivratri hai toh kal jitni jaldi ho sake aap mandir ke liye jaana ..aur haan beti jab tak ye jaap (chanting of mantra) chalega apko nirjal upvas (fast in which not even water can be taken) rakhna hoga ..puja karne ke baad hi kuch kha sakti ho." I shook my head in agreement and parted my lips to say yes but before that he declared," agar upvas rakhna hai phir toh nakku bilkul nahin jayegi." He glanced at AS and continued," aap toh jaanti hain iski tabiyet pehle bhi kharab ho chuki hai." The fact that I'd fallen ill due to severe food poisoning slipped out of everybody's mind but not his, AS agreed with him and went silent. I looked at him and said softly," par sahab woh toh.." he didn't allow me to complete and showed me his palm indicating me to keep quiet. The way he was glaring at me I decided not to discuss the issue now.

He began stepping down the stairs to distribute shawls and sweets to the people of patil vaadi who had gathered in huge numbers to congratulate and bless him. It felt really nice to see him loved by one and all, he indeed meant a lot to them. The whole car journey was silent, whenever I stole a glance at him he had a serious expression on his face which stopped me to speak up. It was late in the evening when we reached home. He went to his study while I to the kitchen to prepare the dinner.

They say the way to a man's heart is through his stomach so I did just that made all his favorite dishes even though he never tasted food made by me still I dared to take this step without taking his permission not because I wished to make a place for myself in his heart but I wanted him to cool down and spend a nice evening with his family on his birthday. Two hours later the cooking was done and he sat on the dining table quietly along with others as I laid down various dishes. I began serving everybody starting with AS, when his turn came I stopped , didn't know whether to offer him myself or not. Keeping the service spoon in front of him I turned to leave when madhu asked," vaheni aapne itna accha khana bhau ki pasand ka banaya hai..toh kya aaj bhi aap humare saath nahin khaogi." Lowering my head I stole a glance at him, he picked up the service spoon and began serving himself, I smiled inwardly at least he didn't refuse to have what I'd prepared. Still standing there I began coiling the dupatta around my index finger when AS said," haan nakku ..tu bhi beth humare saath." Lifting my head I looked at AS and then at him, he was silently digging into his plate but didn't protest to what madhu and AS had suggested. I slowly walked towards the dining table and pulled the chair next to him. There was no reaction from his side, I poured a glass of water for my nervous and dry throat, gulping it down I started eating slowly, glancing at him from time to time maybe this issue like others had finally begun to settle down between us. I lifted my hand to have some dal when he too did the same and our hands touched each other, I looked at him, our eyes met briefly before I moved my hand back and dropped my gaze, it felt so nice to see him enjoying the food, my stomach was half full just by this. Madhu after finishing her dinner brought a bowl of kheer which I'd prepared in the morning, not much was left coz a huge portion of it had been fed to the people who had gathered in the temple nevertheless she served everybody on the table including him. I don't know why but I couldn't stop myself from remembering the first day of our wedding when I'd made kheer for the family, he'd thrown away the bowl in the air. Still trying to finish my plate with my eyes fixed on it suddenly I felt him coming close and whispering," agli baar kheer thodi zyada banaiyo." My head shot up at once and I smiled in delight, he too stretched his lips a bit before leaving for the room.

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I was taking out my wallet and watch to prepare myself to sleep when she came into the room, opening her cupboard she took out a small box and gave it to me, my gaze travelled from the box to her face and I raised my brow questioning her," janamdin Mubarak ho sahab." She said with a smile, I shook my head thinking what was the need for her to get me a gift, I am not a child anymore, moreover from where and how did she get it," yeh kab aur kaise laayi tu?" she crossed her arms in front of her chest and with her head held high replied," aapne jo paise diye the nah mujhe padai aur hostel ke liye ..usi mein se thode bach gaye the toh main ye le aayi." I wished someday she spent the money on herself instead on me," kabhi khudh ke liye bhi kuch le liya kar." I smiled and said. She stared at me with warmth filled eyes and answered softly," ek hi baat hai." Her simple and sincere words always managed to touch me more than anything else nevertheless I unwrapped the gift, I had to seeing her looking at me expectantly. It was a nice simple watch with a black leather strap reminding me of my younger days when I was dutta and not dutta bhau," acchi hai ..par mere pass toh pehle se hi hai." I said knotting my eyebrows, she nodded her head in agreement and replied," jaanti hoon apke pass hai ..magar kal agar hum dono saath na ho..ye apko humesha yaad dilayegi ki main apke saath hoon." Ironing out my brows I looked at her in confusion, what is she talking, why will we not be together tomorrow? I failed to understand and asked in irritation," kya matlab hai tera?" taking deep sigh as if trying to gather her courage she said," sahab ..kal jab mein aayi ke saath jayegi puja ke liye..toh.." I glared on hearing her, when I have made myself clear that under any circumstance she will not go for that puja then why is she raising that topic again? Is she so careless about her health? My mind questioned," tujhe ek baat samajh mein nahin aati? Teri tabiyet kharaab ho sakti hai phirbhi tu zid kar rahi hai." Licking her dry lips she came close to me and held my hand to calm me down," sahab ..meri tabiyet dus din pehle kharaab thi ..par ab mein bilkul theekh hai ..phir kyun nahin jaa sakti?" I know she had fallen sick ten days back and now she was quite better but still this whole thing of her going for that puja was disturbing me, I couldn't pin point the exact reason but this idea was making me uncomfortable moreover why all of a sudden she had turned all religious, I had hardly ever seen her praying then why now? I wondered so asked her," tu kabse puja paath mein vishwas karne lagi?" slowly she moved her hand and lowered her head before saying," khudh ke liye na sahi par apke liye toh vishwas kar sakti hoon." All of a sudden there was a hint of sadness in her tone which caught my notice, raising her head she continued to make me understand," sahab aap bahut khaas ho ..is parivar ke liye ..patil vadi ke liye ..agar ek choti si puja se apke bhala ho sakta hai toh kya harz hai?" sometimes I really disliked her for cooling me down so easily, for convincing me in such a way that I am left with no option but to give in to her wishes. Seeing my eyes and expressions soften towards her words she added further," yahan sab aapse bahut pyaar karte hain ..koi bhi apko khona nahin chahta ..toh.." before she could complete herself I asked her promptly," aur tu ..in sab mein tu kahan aati hai?" she was talking about others but in all this where did she stand? Why was she so eager to perform that puja on my behalf? I wondered. My one simple and direct question caught her off guard, her eyes scattered the floor as she began fidgeting with her dupatta, I watched her intently for a few seconds before she gulped the lump in her throat and said nervously," main..main bhi chahegi ki aap humesha sahi salaamat rahein." I smirked inwardly on seeing how badly she was attempting to hide her true feelings from me, there was definitely something between us, something that had been affecting me for so long that same something was now beginning to cast a spell on her and she was fighting hard not to accept and acknowledge it. I asked her one more time," soch le ..jaana zaroori hai kya?" she nodded her head and replied," hmm..zaroori hai..bahut zaroori hai." Rolling my eyes in defeat I turned towards my bed, there was no point in arguing with her, she wouldn't listen.

I glanced at the couch where she was sleeping peacefully, she will be out for only a day and that is not what is worrying me, its something else, something that is forcing me to stop her from going away but I don't have any valid reason to do so, I told myself. Restlessly I tossed and turned on the bed several times before going off to sleep.

Couple of hours later I woke up when the bathroom door banged open. Squinting my eyes I glanced in that direction, she was coming out after taking the shower, I looked at the bedside clock, it was 5.30 and she was all ready. Sitting up I asked her," tu itni jaldi taiyaar ho gayi."

She smiled and nodded her head," mandir pahunchne mein do ghante lag jayenge..phir puja bhi lambi hai ..toh."

" waise tu bina wajah khudh ko pareshaan kar rahi hai?" I said one more time. She lowered her and turned towards the cupboard then took out my clothes and said softly," aapne jab taiyaar hona ho ..ho jaiyega." A little miffed with her I got off the bed and left the room to tell Baaji to accompany her and her mother to the temple, if he'd be with them I would be less worried. Coming back I picked up my clothes and went to the bathroom without looking at her. When I came out she was standing with a cup of tea then kept it silently on the table.

" sahab ..aap bhi puja ke liye chalet toh accha hota." She said standing behind me as I brushed my wet hair. Gazing at her image in the mirror I replied," mujhe in sab cheezon mein vishwas nahin..pehle supriya ke waqt bhi kiya tha..toh kya hua..kuch bhi toh nahin." I know she's doing it all for me but when I don't believe in all this then why is she taking so much pain? My mind questioned. She didn't force me further, probably didn't wish to bring up supriya's topic again.

" sahab aap mujhe chodne toh chalenge nah?" she asked with the hope in her eyes that I'd say yes but I shook my head in negation," nahin..baaji ko bol diya hai ..woh rahega tumhare saath." Disappointment clearly spread across her face which she tried hard to hide but failed miserably," hmm apko aur zaroori kaam honge."

I turned around and said," nahin ..mujhe koi kaam nahin hai." This made her more grim, that inspite of not being busy I still refused to drop her off but she didn't ask why, instead lowered her eyes.

" nakku mere liye tujhe chodna itna asaan nahin hai..kal bhi nahin tha ..aur aaj bhi nahin hai." I don't why but its really difficult for me to leave her and go away, even if its for few days or hours. Just the thought of coming back home alone without her disconcerts me. She lifted her head and stretched her lips in a relieved smile then said," chai?" shaking my head I said," baad mein pee loonga." She played with the bells of her dupatta, she wanted to say something more but was feeling a little hesitant. Pulling out the drawer I took out the watch that she'd gifted and wore it.

" sahab..woh kuch ..paise chaiye the..puja ke liye." Rolling my eyes I thought, I should have known that she must be needing money for carrying out this puja. Picking up my wallet I opened it then stopped and outstretched my hand and offered it to her. She appeared a bit surprised seeing me handing her over the wallet nevertheless she lifted her hand slowly and took it from me, I cant put it in words how happy I felt seeing her for the first time asking something from me even though it wasn't for her own but still when I gave her the right to claim my things to which she was freely entitled to, she didn't decline or move back which she used to do earlier. Taking out a few notes she gave it back to me and kept the money in her purse along with her cell phone.

Baaji knocked at the door to inform," bhau ..nakku ki aayi neeche aa gayi hain." and left. She lifted her purse and said softly," sahab..apna khyal rakhna." I blinked my eyes, she turned to leave when I caught her dupatta and said," mujhe tera intezaar rahega." She looked over her shoulder and smiled," apka intezaar khatam hone se pehle .main wapis aa jayegi "

As she stepped out of the room, I don't know what but something else was also slipping out of my hand along with her dupatta, something which I really wished to hold on to.

thanks for reading

lots of love

Rose

Edited by stranger2rose - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
Woww... I luv the update.. I wish nakku ko kuch na bcoz dutta was feeling uneasy to let her go, anyways thnx for the update rose!!
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@ yuvi ...chapter 8
great update
awww distances always makes u see things u otherwise never realise... they indeed miss 1 another...esp dutta.hmm he is missing her terribly ..i guess naku is stil sumwer stuck in her past wer as dutta unknowingly has moved out of it...(thts hw i c it anyway)
oh poor naku, her lover died in a car crash...gosh he mus hav changed a lot...4rm sum1 tht was a complete nerd 2 sum1 tht changed his appearance and began drinking says a lot..yup she changed him a lot but still somethings she couldnt ..i guess ppl do change and so did he... nw if this was an ekta shw we'd c him return 😆 thank god it aint..lol..i swear that guy would have definitely made a comeback
i loved the ending..me too .naku saying they'd eat 2geva, knowing full well tht he hadnt eaten! despite the lack of communication the 2 lonely souls hav developed an attachment with 1 another n knw 1 another pretty well😳very well said

chapter 9

as daya rightly pointed out it says a lot hw dutta came 2 pick her up bt didnt go 2 drop her off...i guess its the excitement 2 c her... it always harder 2 let go than receive sum1.absolutely ..its very tough for me to say bye to anybody ....so thts y he probz decided 2 go n pick her up.bingo ..or mayb he cud very wel understand tht she was upset tht he didnt drop her off so thrt myt as well go pick her up... and bless him he reali wntd her 2 talk 2 him during the journey bt both r too quiet...the silence between these 2 needs 2 exit nw..agree with u ..dutta is still trying to open up but nakku is kind of reserved ...they need 2 start opening up...lets hpe we c sum development in tht angle
oh subho tai getting a bit personal...gd job dutta wasnt in a mood 2 tel her 2 stop interferring... lol..btw 1 thing i noticed was dutta noticing tht naku signed onli as naku...i guess he is w8in 4 her 2 sign as "naku dutta patil" one day😳yes deep down he wishes that she accepts that now she is nakku dutta patil .. it was gd 2 c hw dutta didnt wna hear naku's past 4rm a third person...he does wnt 2 knw it bt onli thru naku and onli wen she's ready
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😆😆 hehe sz cudnt help it...typical hubby dutta is.i know all boys are like this .... luk @ the state of the cupboard..u knw it reminds me of "KZK--dey had a scene wer prerna goes away 4 a few days onli 2 return 2 c her hubby rishabh bajaj turn their bedroom in2 a dump"😆😆 makes me wonder r men reali tht lazy n laid back after marriage? poor wifeys hav 2 do al the jobs... bt naku isnt 1 bhooli bhali wifey tht wil do it al without making her irritation visible.yes n no wife should tolerate this silently ..lol...haha n she gt dutta 2 promise nt 2 make a mess agen! gosh u gta love these 2.thanks so much .their interactions like this r rare bt cute😳
😲 naku eating her food so fast 2 avoid dutta? oh gosh y? if he was gna hav a problem he wudnt hav cum down n sat nxt to her.agree with u .she needs 2 start 2 read between the signs n c tht he no longers h8s her or has a problem with her presence like he used 2
omg sups re-entry...ari yaar u reali r turning this in2 ekta shw😆 lol.sorry yuvi cant help it ..i have grown up watching ekta shows so its difficult not to get influenced .. onli joking... hmmm toh sups is preggy wel she didnt w8 long did she? lol...wen wil tasha hav their baby😳..there's still time for that .. i loved naku's response... and kinda knw tht dutta wud probz hear their convo...bt onli half n b worked up abt it.seriously yuvi sometimes u predict so accurately that i am left amazed .... i hpe sum1 hears the 2nd part of the convo or mayb naku herself tells him (nt tht she wud...dnt c her doing tht so hpefully sum1 hears it all n tells him...) oh wow naku came 3rd thts very gd...mayb dutta had come out 2 tel her bt stopped wen he saw sups use such colourful language i loved hw naku sed tht evn wen he's nt around he's always der 4 her.things turned out exactly the way u thought ..lol....did she realise tht she spoke as tho she's already in love with him?

ch 11

gr8 update..jus as expected dutta had heard the convo.lol...bt onli half thts y he's stil tryin 2 ans sups questions... if onli he had stuck around a few mins he wud hav seen tht naku had al the ans he was tryin 2 find.but dutta is dutta after all ..impatient n impulsive .. aww bless naku...her sis gave the wounds bt naku's acted as the healer and is stil doing the job...damn cnt this sups jus go n die...i knw its harsh bt she's reali annoying.she will exit soon ..dont worry ...she acts as tho she knws dutta 2 well wen infact she neva did...i dnt think she eva made the effort 2 gt 2 knw him

oh wow so i was right.ur most of the time rt ..AS heard it all n thank god she tld dutta...knw he wil knw tht naku is the ans 2 all his ?s...hopes..wishes and dreams... they both wil complete 1 another n giv 1 another anew reason 2 live for
oi hoi naku and the rooti hui biwi act?😆😉... she shud do tht mre often.glad u liked it .. haha love naku man first asking wt clothes he wil wear n thn criticises tht he duznt hav enuf😆😆 mayb its time she went out shopping 4 him😃..one day she will go .. oh i was hping she would wear the saree..lets hpe 1 day she does jus 2 pls him😳.that would be wonderful..hayee loved the final scene😳😍 dutta tying her pendant n being so close..thanks so much ..its my fav scene as well ... cud pic it so well...his presence indeed does summut 2 hear... the total opposite 2 wt sups was claiming... did he notice the effect he has on her? it might help him change his own opinion abt himself😆😳..thanks again yuvi for appreciating the updts ..it means a lot to me

@ bharti ..

Hey Rose,Apologies for the late comments.ohh no need to say sorry ..i can understand ... was tied up on many fronts, 😃 huh!Wow! the title inspired me to post this song n i remember u telling me in ur last annotations of my dp apt with ur next title, so here it is.thanks so much for it ..i love this track ..😉



Gosh! golgappas showing their ill effects on naku,yes so next time u better watch out before having them ..lol.... to top it dutta's absence that should be double pain😆. So the two have managed til date the knowledge of their strange relation from the family, hmm.intelligent couple . very tactful they are as a couple 😉 Have to agree with naku about her parents making up with sups but not her forgiving so easily the person who had caused much misery to her husband, 🤗
Aise pati hai toh saat mein baar baar behosh honeko man karega😆😆..absolutely ..u dont need a reason to faint ...lol..just the thought of him picking u up will make u faint .. lucky naku! loving husband, MIL, n SIL ... phirbhi she is not happy what an irony?her past doesnt allow her to be happy Aaaww! naku full of guilt n remorse for not being honest with him, n rightly so.
When her tummy rumbled in the middle of the night i was like ye lo ab ulti ke saat saat woh bhi🤣 but luckily for naku she was hungry n what timing for the blackout..lol.., kayanat bhi saat deraha hain miya biwi ko jodne ke liye😆 kya baat hai.. aur dutta ke guards ka toh bas kab kiya hain kuch bhi?😉 good for nothing Rose, you have beautifully written how naku is fighting her own emotions, fighting to stay away yet bein constantly drawn to the magnetic aura of this person thanks so much ... he is truly the light of her life n incidentally my siggy pic also somewhat depicts the sam.i did notice n like it.😉,
umm beautiful!!! cannot put to words how wel u have put to pen the turmoil naku is goin through.
Wow! the ending was dreamy, yipee i am really happy that u liked it so much ..thanks a lot for the appreciation ;mere haat mein tera haat ho, saari jannate mere saat ho'...👏 Thanks Rose!
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Originally posted by: aishwish

Hey rose! Main bhi aa gayi!..finally ..i though i will see u after ur results ..

Now, you know na how weak my heart is, tell me you know or not?.i know baby .. I know you know! Still, you're hell bent on giving the poor little thing shock pe shock shock pe shock!..sorry really sorry ..next time i will give u a statutory warning before hand ..i knew those loving caring moments between them wouldnt go down well with u ...I mean my world came crashing down at the mention of her puking!..OMG u were talking about vomiting ????????here i was thinking something else ... To vomit in dutta's bathroom, ye sirf mera haq hai!..ROFL 😆 I was on the verge of having a stoke but then remembered about the golgappe! ..aish this was certainly not expected of u ..u are intelligent enough to know that she cant vomit because of THAT ..coz that (SR) hasnt happened yet ..imagine what will u do when it will happen 😲..(tell me how do u wish their SR to be ..hot .(though i will collapse after writing that), subtle ..or thanda like the show) 🤢.You know, when she had five plates tabhi, I was having doubt, she ate purposefully to fall sick,..aish u suspect her a lot ..not done ..he has got duttta na for TLC!😭 And who faints after having golgappas?...i did although i didnt have golgappas ..stop before u start thinking weird ..i almost fainted out of food poisoning ..one really get weak n pale It must have felt heavan landing in those arms!now what should i say that she is one lucky girl .. 😍Koi foreign return hai jo 20- 25 golgappe nahin digest kar sakti,...excuse me ...can u digest 5 plates of golgappas ?? hain? I'm telling you' natak sab natak!😡..trust me shes not acting ..how do i make u believe .. She wants me to believe she's weak, when she almosted snatched and tore the button of sweetu's kurta..now this is not done nakku ..dont get so excited ...we know that the man is really hot n he picked u up coz u were abt to faint , he didnt have any other thing in mind ..naughty girl , and now tailor mastarni will sew it back too..woh toh hai ..

Okay, now time for some serious stuff!...whats the hurry baby ..u continue with ur nakku bashing ...i love to read it ..😆

Hmmm'a sick naku and a nursing dutta! Thank you, coz most of time it's my sweetu who bears pain!...and then u dont like nakku going close to him .. All thanks to your marham patti romance fantacy...seriously when will i get over this ?😛. Well according to me, when one has to show characters like dutta "concerned" it's a bit dicey, coz if you underplay it, the character is accused to be insensitive and just a li'l bit of more concern the character starts sounding chessy and of course go out of character....honestly speaking he went out of character a little bit n i should be blamed for it ..And you did a perfect job here, bingo!I could totally imagine him with a concerned full eyes, grim and worried face yet solidity in the appearance! Assuring his woman that no matter whatever worse comes, he's there, who samhal lega!..till here he was fine but afterwards he went a little overboard esply while removing that ivy or should i say whenever he asked dard hua ..tu theekh hai ..those parts i wasnt convinced but i had to coz these scenes cannot be seen ..in the show his subtle expressions convey his concern but here becoz of the medium being used he has to be more vocal ..Unlike what I get to see mostly in the name of romance, the heroine sneezes and the hero starts bantering "if something happens to you, .i'll die..lol..not die but they tend to overreact .. with rabba ve ..btw i love this rabba ve track 😆or mahiii playing in background!😆 The only thing that surprised me was how calmly he said "must be coz of golgappas"..he could see that she was already suffering so didnt scold her then ..sometimes he gets a little soft ..even I was expecting a scolding (damn no such luck..lol) But it was nice for a change. And thank you for making her condition go worsened once he returned, in your previous FF, even with her pregnancy she managed to stay fit and fine..i know that but honestly speaking i dont like to see husbands going crazy when their wives are pregnant ..its another turn off ..lol..so kept nakku fit n fine ..also these vomitings n fainting spells during pregnancy are very boring n predictable ..they have been done to death .. most of the time! You know until he hadn't returned from the work the sequences were nice esp.how sweet of u to say that they werent boring ..lol..the hospital one but from the moment he returned, the update reached sky limits!..so did your drama queen in his arms.. LOL, when she got up in the middle of the night, I thought the bed covers are gonna be in mess😆,..god what were u thinking that she will dirty them n then both of them will land up on the couch ...gosh ..what imagination girl ..chee chee chee ...but thankfully she was hungry! And what happened next was just lovely, of course I loved the hug, I mean who doesn't but moreover I loved the way she wasn't ready to leave him even for a sec,..who would want to leave him even for a second ...ek baar haath toh aaye ..lol.. that was more romantic for me, even than the hug. And now the best part candle lightmein damakta chand sa mukda'muah!❤️ Who said your previous update would have been a visual delight, it's this one actually, hayee if that scene would have picturised, meri toh death hi ho jati bye God!...so true also the one where he casually wipes off the butter..i was like god how can he be so sweet ... 😆 And, did they ate the toast together? Wow yippee''.you were right when you said that when they'll share their meal for the first time, I'll be more occupied with the surroundings, yes I was, but look I did noticed!..m impressed u remembered what i said ...good girl ..Okay fine in the end you mentioned it but I've noticed it before reading that'sacchi!

There were quite a moments in the update which could be considered as the high point of the update, but I'd like to chose a rather underplayed sequence as my favourite, the scene where naku gazes a sleeping dutta!..so dreamy nah 😍 Everything about that sequence was hearttouching to me and heart fiercing too, poor gorl, she's really suffering a lot, I hope things go happy to her once again. And, now, why I have a feeling that she'll attend the baby shower, if yes please plan a humili..errr I mean a confrontation *civil muh*..lets see how civil can we get with her

Some special mentions:

Even though in this FF naku is the one more reserved, yet you have showed her some where attracted towards dutta's persona,...aish who wouldnt be attracted to a man like him ..it's a very important trait of naku as a charcter!thanks so much for noticing

Language'..the words you chose for your charcters to use, just like mombatti..candle wouldnt suit them ..isnt it ?instead of candle, big deal if he had said candle, but when he says mombatti, the whole thing gets so dutta with a LTL touch! Bravo!...thank u so very much ..sometimes i feel u should go on n on ( self obsessed rose 😉)

And the end note, it clicked something in the heart!.mine too

Rose, graet great great job, with evry update Iget a feling to discard my previous statemaent and announce the current one being my fav..dont worry the next one is a thanda updt as per my standards ..lol.., I don't know what's in the store, nor I want to bother coz it's absoulletly a delight saitting back and enjoing . Reading this one was very soothing and when I say SOOTHING I actually mean it!..sweetheart i know EXACTLY what u mean 😉

Thank you for the update..thanks for the awesome feedback

Waiting for the next!❤️

@promo: as always confusing and requires a lot of thinking but saanu ki anyways you're gonna update today:P..thats why u have commented today ..i know

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Posted: 13 years ago
Thanks 4 PM rose...
gr8 update... aww dutta's bday...haha it mus hav been dif 4 him 2 sit in puja for 4 hrs despite nt believing in these kind of things... i reali liked dutta's concern 4 naku throughout this update and indeed ur title sums it all...ders defo something der...and they both knw it n indirectly hinting 2 1 another too...i liked hw dutta asked naku wer does she cum in2 this all? and she was like i want u to b safe too... we al knw the reason... and wow he actually admits 2 her tht he doesnt like 2 drop her off becos the thought of having 2 leave her disturbs him...aww come on tasha read between the lines u both hav fallen 4 1 another...with regards 2 the ending..yes dutta she's taking ur heart with her...LOL...
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Posted: 13 years ago

Awsome Update 👏

Love it 😊
I hope Datta Naku ko Mandir se wapis lene jaye.
Eager to know What Next?

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