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Posted: 13 years ago
Good going Suchi ! You are on a roll :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
Scene 13a

30 Minutes had passed

Things seemed a bit normal at the Haveli now. The tension seemed to have gone.

"Bade-bhaiyyahh!!!!" App unhay abhi neechay bulayiye. Maine bhi milna hai unsay whispered Ikshu to RIthul.

The one good thing about Ikshu was, his anger never stayed him longer than 5 minutes. He was very close to his siblings and loved them very dearly.

Rithul had filled him with details about Shiv's visit.

'SHHH'" Ma paas khadi hai' nudged Rithul as he hit his brother on his chest with his elbow,

Rithul was sitting in between Ikshu and Shiv.

Shiv who had now calmed down looked at his brothers lovingly. He smiled at him and wondered what they were discussing. He tried to listen in but to his annoyance RIthul pushed his face away with his palm, stopping him from listening into their conversation!

"Chachi, ye aapko kya sooji ki iska naam aapnay 'IKSHU" rakha? Kithna weird naam hai' Teased Shiv as he grabbed one samosa from the plate in front of him.

"Ikshu ka matlab hai, Mitaas. Aur ye naam mujhe bohot acha laga tha, aur iskay papa ko bhi' Said Shamita smiling as she savored the memory in her mind.

"Han shamita, yaad hai mujhe, waise thumhay tho ladki ki chah thi, Rithul kay baad, lekin ye ullu aa gaya" said Hansa holding Ikshu's ears

Ishika came into the room and she threw furtive looks at everyone. Ikshu went near her and pulled her hair

'OWWW!!!' shouted ishika

'Rukho thum, gadhe kahin kay!!' said Ishika as she ran behind him. Ikshu ran around the sofa and ishika behind him

Everyone started Laughing.

upstairs Anandi could hear the laughs and she wondered what had happened. Few minutes before she could sense a HUGE fight coming and now everyone was laughing. This confused her!

Ishika finally gave up and hugged shamita and said 'Chachi, aap nay na hospital main zaroor galthi ki hogi. Ye tho aapka beta lagtha hi nahi hai!

Dekhiye Rithul bhayya ko, kithnay achay hain , aur ye rakshas, chi'

"Chipkali kahinki, main bhi yahi sochtha hun ki tayiji nay bhi galthi kerdi' Said Ikshu making faces at her.

'Vaise bhi meray liye tho sabsey pyari Tayiji hai, thum jao udhar-ja 'ja' Said Ikshu pointing towards his mother, shamita

'Han tho teek hai na , main tho chachi kay saath hi teekh hun. Thum kyun apna khoon jalathay ho!' she retorted back

Shiv looked at them amused and said 'sabkay apnay apnay favorites hain, ek main hi hun jo kisi ka favorite nahi'

'oye, thu zyada natak mat ker han, agar kisi ko complain kerni hai tho mujhe kerni chahiye, Ma ko tho , Ishika, aur thum pyaray,

Tayiji , ko thum aur Ikshu pyaray, aur main? !!!!

ek min!' Said rithul looking around as if searching for something, han ye rahi,

Naina main thumhay tho pyara hun na?! he asked her innocently !

Naina had walked into the livingroom bringing in a plate of fruits.

She heard Rithul and turned red!, but she was used to his antics

'Oh wah bhabi! wah khulam khula! said Ishika teasingly

'Chup' mouthed naina

'Anandi kahan gayi?! asked Naina looking pointedly as Shiv

'Anandi kon hai?! asked Ishika, looking around confused.

'Ye lo! puri Ramayan ghat gayi aur ye puch rahi hai ki Raam aur seeta kay beech main relationship kya hai!' said Rithul

Then he looked at shiv and nudged him 'waise ...relationship KYA HAI?!

Shiv shook his head and nudged his brother back, looking at him and pointing towards his mother.

Naina thum unhay le ker aa jao. Kiyun shiv teekh hai na!. agar thum jana chahthay ho tho hum mind nahi karengay!

Ikshu and ishika started laughing out loud.

'Kya hua? asked Hansa and Shamita in unison. They were so engulfed in their own conversation that they completely missed the small drama that had taken place right under their nose!

Edited by Suchi-Virmanian - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
Wow Suchi, these family conversations are really interesting to read😊 Sab kuch aankho k saamne chalta hua nazar aata he😊
Bechari Anandi apne room me chup gai😆
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Posted: 13 years ago
Btw I like your style of writing😊...Its got a touch of professional writing😊 You know the kind we read in novels...Do continue😊 [ofcourse you would😉]
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Posted: 13 years ago
Excellent update suchi 👏
family conversations was written so well ...
Waiting for ur next update
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Posted: 13 years ago
Interesting. You sure have a way with story-telling. M enjoying your writing thoroughly. Thanks for the pm.
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Posted: 13 years ago
really both scene 12 and scene 13 are too good .ise kehten hain best joint family jub bhi koi aapas mein tension hoti hai to family ke log hi us tension ko sort out karte hain balki use bhadaate nahi aur aapas phir se hansi mazaak karte hain .kya baat hai anandi ki aisi ghar mein shaadi ho to anandi ki jeevan mein chaar chand lag jaaye
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Posted: 13 years ago
that was nice! loved the siblings bonding! can't wait for more scenes between anandi and shiv! excited... please update soon!
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Posted: 13 years ago
Loved both the parts dear...
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Posted: 13 years ago
thanks sooo much for d pm...& sorry for catching up late...

but i got 2 read d last few parts together...so here's jotting down my opinions...

  • d flow is just beautiful...as if u wrote all of it in 1 go...
  • i love dat shiv has recovered from his brief spate of majnugiri...i love dis more balanced persona of his...
  • finally anandi has put in rest sum of her inhibitions...
  • you have efficiently introduced a whole gang of characters...& thru ur small family moments we actually get a glimpse of d nature of d characters...
  • love how u subtly delve into shiv...d son...d brother...his strict & doting sides...
  • finally d comic touch is superb...never OTT...just d right amount of usual family banter...

a fab writer...kudos 2 u...


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