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Melvina Preece

@angel-ki-shona

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Posted: 13 years ago

#161

Originally posted by: $ara_$hachi
*me pulling my hair*
yeh ho kya raha hai??

to all- have faith in her. she will not disappoint you. kai baar over dramatic ho jati hai but just like other writers, she too have freedom to write.

to Mel- humein pura haq hai tujhe tease karne ka, specially mujhe coz tu Anu ke saare pets mere piche chodti hai. we simply can't stop reading.

😆 love you sara itna dar wah😆

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Melvina Preece

@angel-ki-shona

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Posted: 13 years ago

#162

Originally posted by: Anu-Ananya
Chand se jo toote koi sapna
Jag soona soona lage
Jag soona soona lage
Koi rahe na jab apna
Jag soona soona lage!!
Goodbye Adieu Mel! It was great meeting you!

Anu goodbye my foot be a good girl and talk to me come on it was a stupid joke sorry sorry sorry like a ziliion times

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Melvina Preece

@angel-ki-shona

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Posted: 13 years ago

#163

Originally posted by: tushti-kiran

Hey Mel...

I am not giving any lecture...how can I...I am not a person to cross my limits...
I am just only conveying u what I feel when I read ur note...
if we find ur updates interesting and good...then I appreciate those...
so when I feel something wrong I am just telling u that...nothing less nothing more...
yes u r allowed to fight with ur friends and I am no one to say in between ur friendship...I know that...
but when u r conveying something through ur common note to ur every reader then that is not remain inside ur friendship boundary line...
I wrote what I felt after reading that note...u urself said in that note about AMAK FF...I read that FF also and when I read that note I was really upset...
just like I appreciate ur updates when I enjoy them like that only what I felt I wrote...

now if u have said that u will not play with ur storyline then I am thankful to u...I am concerned about that only...nothing else...u know my father expired in January...I was very sad,very upset but these FFs were the only solace for me...when I read them I am disconnected from the harsh realities of life...this much I am in love with them...
ok thanx for answering my post...love u

wow that means a lot sorry for all the mess I was just teasing Anu guess i went a bit to far it was stupid from my side. And I am sorry to you to if I said something hurtful

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Melvina Preece

@angel-ki-shona

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Posted: 13 years ago

#164

Originally posted by: ruchs
Me is so sorry dear because me is also somewhere responsible for your mood getting upset'.😭

My stupid joke has hurt you'.😭

Me very very shollly'.😭

Take your time dear'.😭

SORRY'.😭

No no I am even not a bit angry on you please Ruchs I am sorry for my stupid joke

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Ruchi

@ruchs

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Posted: 13 years ago

#165

Originally posted by: mel420

No no I am even not a bit angry on you please Ruchs I am sorry for my stupid joke

Ohh you are not… Me happy then…😃

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Melvina Preece

@angel-ki-shona

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Posted: 13 years ago

#166

part 44
When Geet left maan fell on the ground he felt like his whole world had ended. He screamed and sobbed for a while to get his pain out. But that wasn't working. So he stood up and started destroying everything in the room that came in his way. He trew the vase on the ground. He pulled the curtains and trew them on the bed. He grabbed the sofa and pushed is harshly away. the room was a total mess. But that even didn't calm Maan down. Geet words kept ringing in his mind. loving him was her biggist mistake.her wished she wouldn't be alive now. All thanks to him she was feeling like that.She was right he was egocentric, unsensible, heartless monster. He went to the gym and started exercising hysterically. He broke a tick ice brick with his bare hands. He kept thinking about the past. He didn want to do it. But Evelien and Mohinder thought it would be the logical thing to do now that everyone thought that she was no more. And he just did it to prove himself that he didn't loved her anymore. It pained him to go trough all that. He rememberd, how painfull it was for him. he used to exercise hours afterwards. But wouldn't admit that what he was doing was wrong.He rememberd one day he was so disturbed that he. he closed his eyes what happenend that day no one knew expect Emma. After that day he promised himself he would never let geet affect him in such a way.And he tried to forget geet by working harde and harder in his bussiness.He knew he should stop excersing cause it could be dangerous for him but he didn't care today. Maan broke another brick of ice Blood oozed off his hand but maan didn't stop. he broke a wooden brick this this. On the entire floor where blood stains. But maan didn't care he kept exercising but sudenlly Maneet face came in front his eyes. No he thought I can't do this. I have to life for Maneet. I can't give Geet and Maneet more pain then I already did. He made a maid clean the mess up and he cleaned all his wounds up. He needed to go tomorrow to the doctor. He knew what he did was dangerous for his health. Again he was being selffish.He cursed himself and decided he will tomorrow go and see a doctor and try to fix everything with geet. He wouldn't let her slip into a world of pain. She would be happy. He promised himself. No stupid things anymore Maan. .It's time you don't let anger take the better of you. He told himself. He walked towards the room to clean it up before geet would see it.

Geet was sitting in the lawn thinking how she was deceived time and time again but no tears fromed in her eyes. It was like her heart had stopped beating. How much she trusted him but he only gave her pain and broke her faith and trust time and time again. Geet looked at her bracelet and smiled sarcastecly. The bracelet that at one time used to be the sign of Maan's love for her was now the proof of his betrayel. It was the remind her she made the biggest mistake by loving and trusting a man because all they could give was pain and betrayel. Was it maan her husband or Mohinder her father. She smiled bitterly. But she would life with Maan she would act all happy infront of every one. She would lead a double life only and only for her son Maneet. he deserved all the hapeniss specially after all he did to see them as one. maneet was never aloud to now the truth and even Mohinder. She didn't want her dead to die. Just she had now feelings towards her dad anymore but that didn't mean she had become a heartless monster like he became once. She thought what did life gave her expect being deceived by her loves one time and time again. Be it Emma who she loved like and younger sister or maan and Mohinder. She didn't now how long she was sitting in the lawn. Geet stood up after a while and went to Maan and her room. When she enterd. She got a big shock. She fellt anger airising in her. Really would he always hurt himself and think she would come running in his arms asking or he was alright. Of course he was thinking right. Geet would defo do that because Geet couldn't see her Maan in pain. But there was one problem. Maan's geet died 12 years ago to be preciesly. She smiled sarcasticly. It was like a death soul was walking on earth claiming still to be alive only to find out it had died way back.

Geet started cealing up the mess. She was almost done. She just needed to pick up the glass pieces of the vase. When she picked them up one off the class piecies went in to her finger and blood oozed out. That's when Maan has just enterd the room. He ran towards Geet. He fell on his knees and grabbed her finger. Geet looked up to see Maan. She jerked his hand away and stoop up. So did Maan

M:Are you okay
G:How can I ever be when your around Maan.
M:Geet
G:What the hell was that huh what did you tried to prove. Why the hell can't you act normal huh. What where you thinking by hurting youself I would get hurt
M:No geet I
G:I would come running in your arms like last time. Then I'v e got news for you. Yes geet would defo come running into your arms cause she loves her maan and can't see him in pain

Maan looked up did his angel forgive him again. Maan felt like hugging her tight and he wanted to start his sorry song. But before he could do anything geet spoke again.\

G:There is a litle problem geet died to be priecisly 12 years ago
M:Geet ( between sobs)
G:What happenend you killed her. So I am sorry she is now more. The women standing infront of you is Maneet's mother who can do anything for the love of her son. Even if it means living with a murderer like you.

Tears fell from Maan's eyes. He fellt like killing himself. How much did he hurt his angel.

G:SO I don't care about your pain. Because I have no feelings towards kaatils. But I don't want a tamasha so don't act like this again get it.
M:yeesss ( between hicups)

Geet grabbed a blanket and trew it on the sofa. Maan went there to sleep but geet stopped him.

G:Go and sleep on the bed.
M:No geet
G:Listen I don't want a dicussion. I am not saying it because I care for you but you bigger so just go
M:If you don't care then why are you saying it geet what does it matter is kaathil can't sleep peacefully on the sofa huh.
G: Because I want you to be fresh in the morning to play with my son.

How are you fooling Geet you still care, you care a lot. And you stil love you maan. Maan thought.

M:But geet how will you
G:Maan deadboddies don't need a bed to sleep.
M:GEET Please stop it. Misty please.

Maan fell on his knees and cried

M:Please geet give me any punsihment but don't talk about youself like that. I can't take it please.

Geet picked him up.

G:I am sorry.
M:No don
G:Let me finish. I am sorry I keep reminding you about your mariwhi girlfriend. I won't do it again I promise now Let me sleep.

geet went a lay down on the sofa leaving a shocked and complety broken maan behind. Maan laid down but he couldn't fell a sleep. How could he, his entire world had ended and it was all his fault. After two hours when he thought geet was fall a sleep. He walked towards her. He tried to take her in his arms so that he could made her lie down on the bed and go on the sofa. But geet wasn't sleeping either. Her sleep was taken away from her after she came to now the bitter truth. She jerked maan's hand away. She stood up and glarred at him.

G:Don't touch me and I don't need you fake concern.
M:Sorry

Is all Maan could mumble before he left the room and went to his study. he started working in the hope his eyes would close out of tirredness but sleep was just not coming. Geet couldn't sleep either she stood up and went to Maneet. She hugged him. She fellt some peace and fell a sleep. Maan knew he needed to sleep it wasn't good for his health so he grabbed geet's picture and hugged it. He fellt some peace and fell a sleep.

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Edited by mel420 - 13 years ago

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Ruchi

@ruchs

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Posted: 13 years ago

#167

Me FIRST……😉

Me sandwiched your update….😆

Truly an intense update…😳

You really potrayed both Maan's and Geet's emotions so well….👏

Me literally cried in the first para….😭

Me could feel Maan's pain and emotional turmoil…😭

But he must understand what he did is something really unforgivable…

But am sure he received half of the punishment when Geet said that he killed her 12 years ago...😭

Poor Geet, me is feeling really bad for her….😭

Has she really turned totally cold…😲

Me can't see Maan-Geet like this dear…

Me is feeling so sad….😭

But yes lovely update dear….😳

You did a fantastic job and wrote the descriptions really well….👏

Me could connect to them…😳

Love you….😳

Edited by ruchs - 13 years ago

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Atiffa

@Atiffa

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Posted: 13 years ago

#168

awesome updates

great entrie truth is out

oh God poor Geet again deceived

Maan is repenting so much

i just hope nothing happens to him but Geet is fully broken now

Cont soon

Luv

Atiffa

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Melvina Preece

@angel-ki-shona

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Posted: 13 years ago

#169

Originally posted by: ruchs
Me FIRST''😉 yeah

Me sandwiched your update'.😆

Truly an intense update'😳

You really potrayed both Maan's and Geet's emotions so well'.👏 thx

Me literally cried in the first para'.😭 sholly

Me could feel Maan's pain and emotional turmoil'😭 wow really

But he must understand what he did is something really unforgivable'

But am sure he received half of the punishment when Geet said that he killed her 12 years ago...😭

Poor Geet, me is feeling really bad for her'.😭

Has she really turned totally cold'😲

Me can't see Maan-Geet like this dear' hmm can understand

Me is feeling so sad'.😭

But yes lovely update dear'.😳

You did a fantastic job and wrote the descriptions really well'.👏 thx

Me could connect to them'😳

Love you'.😳 love ya too ruchs

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Melvina Preece

@angel-ki-shona

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Posted: 13 years ago

#170

Originally posted by: Atiffa

awesome updates
great entrie truth is out
oh God poor Geet again deceived
Maan is repenting so much
i just hope nothing happens to him but Geet is fully broken now
Cont soon
Luv
TC
Atiffa

thx

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