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Posted: 13 years ago
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👏👏...continue soon please...love your new entry.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: angl143

Wow love the girl's character!! Ur OS is awesome!!! 👏⭐️ Love it!!!


Thank you😛

Originally posted by: munnihyderabad

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Harini that was superly duperly fantastic start⭐️...loved it👏😃

-loved it preethi positive... Ahem's cousin perfect

-Preethi is a girl who irritates Ahem, befriends gopi, loves her maasi, teaches hetal what's right and wrong and got to know rashi's negative nerve - superb👏

will eagerly wait for the next update😃


Thanks Munni😃
I would love for Preethi to be positive in SNS too.. She has to be this person who can give us a third person view of everyone in the family including to each other.. 😛

Originally posted by: NazmaJ

Yay something new!!!

I am finishing off my marking but had to check in and saw this!!

Loved it and can't wait to red more!!

Want to comment in more detail but haven't finished my marking and it is way past my bedtime!!


Aww.. That was sweet.. Thank you so much Nazma😛 Your comment in itself is very sweet.. Thanks again😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: feviewer

👏A lot of time and effort seems to have gone into it...good one😊


Thanks Vidhisha.. Just some thoughts inspired by the promos.. 😛

Originally posted by: sbp1971

Another wonderful story Harini. This is so good, and it is very well written.

Loved how you are giving this new entry a positive twist. Frankly we need someone like Preeti in SNS to look out for Gopi and to make her stronger.

Just one request little more of Gohem please.

Thanks for this lovely SS, looking forward to reading more. Please update soon.


Thank you so much Shilpa😃
Would really love to have a positive person in SNS.. There are too many -ve characters already😕
Gopi is already being stronger in SNS. So I have tried to fit it in with the story. Preethi will support Gopi and do something more.. 😉

Aww.. GoHem.. Yup.. The next update has a little more and the further updates will have more and more of GoHem.😛

Originally posted by: Sandy914

harini... thats awesome loved it... Preethi is here to put some brains in evil Hetal's brain, which totally washed by her witch DIL..

I just loved , waiting for the updates :P


Thanks so much Sandy. 😃
Yes.. Preethi will make Hetal see some truths.. Her style. Will update soon😃

Originally posted by: Scarlet28

👏Wow great OS...I love the new entry already...I hope this the ultimate plans of CVs...please continue soon...👏


Thanks Scarlet😛
I am glad that you love Preethi. Hopefully the CVs also have something positive to show us.😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: Dhabu89

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👏Harini, I think I am going to do some big time prathna to make sure you OS is what we get to see in real on screen. It was just too damn good. You did a wonderful job in making Preethi smart and witty. She is exactly someone we need in MM right now. What with brain dead and her DIL, Preethi would prove to be an asset to Gopi and of course Kokila.

Another fantastic start to another wonderful SS. Thank you so much for making my sunday brighter...I had to do a lot of work and I was tired, so when I logged on and saw this, I was elated and that elation quadrupled after I finished. It is just plain old fantabulous.

👏 You are deserving of many thanks and many 👍🏼 for this kind of story. Please continue soon. I am eagerly waiting.

O and before I forget...I am so happy to know she has figured out the nature of Rashi and is standing up for her Gopi Bhahi. Thank God for small favors 😃

Thank you so much Rupal😛 You are so nice to comment in such detail..😃
Really, with Hetal and Rashi, I need a positive person in MB to help GoKi.. After writing this, the Cvs came with the beautiful idea of Gopi standing up to Rashi.
Preethi is smart. What took Gopi so many years to see, Preethi with her third person perspective has seen quickly. Now we have to wait and see what she does.😃

Originally posted by: sks21

that was awesome harini...

preethi is a very smart and fun girl...
loved it...continue soon


Thank you so much😃 Will update today😊

Originally posted by: taniks

Harini that was awesome , this is exactly what I want this girl to be like , a bit fiesty ,naughty ,confident, but honest with no airs about herself. You have done an incredible job wud her character , can't wait to read more .I wud luv her to play cupid for gohem as they can't do for themselves they need a push ,I am sure u have some kinda plan for this as ur ss moves along. Pls update soon ,can u pls pm me


Thanks Taniks. 😃
I would love to have someone help Gopi and Aham. They are too shy. Naani would have fit the bill but in her absence, I had to do with Preethi.. 😛 Preethi will do what she can and yes.. I will surely PM.😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: 5cents

Harini, this is exactly what I needed to read...PERFECTLY wonderful⭐️. A captivating start👏
WOW! Preethi, is super cool...you have shaped her just the way we wanted...a feisty, touching, endearing and realistic character. She is so in... I-will-help-Gopi Bhabhi-Mode.
Loved her and the flow of the story. Please continue...

Thank you so much Tina😃
I am glad you like Preethi.. She already loves Gopi.. Who would not😳
Will update today and I hope I can meet expectations😊

Originally posted by: navyab

Harini...how do you come up with such wonderful stories 😉 !!!

Loved every bit of it...loved preeti & her irritating Ahem...
Ahem is longing for Gopi's attention & Preeti is constantly taking her away...😛 ...he needs to step up his gear to ensure he matches Preeti 😉
The saree scene was cute...but does Ahem realise that he has gifted her only one saree till now & Preeti understood the family dynamics between Koki & Hetal...& Rashi's extra sweet nature...
Gopi gets along with everyone...thats normal...but will she be able to become frens with Preeti & will Preeti also become a fren with Gopi???
So what happened that Gopi was being blamed of the threat ???


😳 Thank you so much Navya..
The promo gave a small inspiration and I would hate to have another -ve person in SNS.. UrShi and now Hetal make up for -vety already😕
Preethi loves seeing Aham squirm. She does love him as a brother but both compete with each other.😉
You will soon see a little more of Aham and his possessiveness. He will realize that he has to match Preethi very soon. As for Gopi and Preethi being friends... Preethi already loves Gopi.. She will support her. 😛

Originally posted by: shruthi2010

beautiful story harini.
i love preeti, i love preeti.
oh how much would i love her if she is really there in the show.
but i will not worry. i have your wonderful story to read.
excellent


Thank you so much Shruthi😃
I am glad you liked Preethi.. Hopefully the CVs have better ideas for the episodes.. I would love for this person to be positive😛
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: abbay

loved loved loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! excellent


Thank you 😛

Originally posted by: X.Sisi94

Very nice os Love it


Thank you so much😃

Originally posted by: Rahul05

Its lovely harini
Loved it...


Thanks Rahul😛 Glad you liked it😊

Originally posted by: snsaufan

Exceptional SS 👏 .. soo glad that the new entry is there to help Gopi 😊 .. Awaiting next part ...


Thank you so much😃
Will update soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: Arnisha

amazin love it this preethi is gd plzz update n pm if u can cant wait to hear the nxt part. x


Thank you so much😛
Will pm on update😃

Originally posted by: aamirkhanfan

awesome ss

love preeti's character


Thank you😛 Glad that you like Preethi

Originally posted by: Xarina

Harini. That was out of this world. I am loving Preethi's character already. Please pm me when you update. Mucho thank yous.😊


Thanks Xarina😃
I am so glad you like the story. Will surely PM😛
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: SriB

Awesome Harini, your SS is way wy wy better than the show. Please continue soon


Thank you so much..😛
I hope SNS pans out better.😊


Thanks😃

Originally posted by: dhruti

⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Thanks so much😛

Originally posted by: ShaunSA

Hey I read this and loved it! Could have sworn I asked for Chapter 2 though... 😕


Can we have a Chapter 2! Please! Pretty please! 😃

Thanks Shaun😃
Will update in a few minutes.. 😊

Originally posted by: Scarlet28

👏👏...continue soon please...love your new entry.

Thank you..😛
Will update in a few minutes😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hi guys.. Lots of changes in SNS.. Gopi is standing up to Rashi.. So here goes Chapter II..

Chapter II

"Rashi Bhabi, we made the purchase and specifically told you to make the payment. Kaki, I know I am younger to you and should not speak much. But this time I have to. I saw Gopi Bhabhi hand the money over to the vendor and Rashi Bhabhi said she needed to get something more and will make the total payment. If the payment is only half done, it is not Gopi Bhabhi's fault."

Hetal stood speechless at the outburst from Preethi who was trying her level best to keep her cool and was failing miserably. Her Gopi Bhabhi had just been accused of theft, almost.
They had gone shopping for groceries and Rashi had insisted that she needed a few items that she needed. When Gopi had offered to pay for the first bill, she had heard Rashi say that she would make the payment in total. Gopi had joined her in selecting a few earrings and they had made their way home when Rashi was done.

After 3 hours, they had the shopkeepers assistant at the door asking for the payment and unfortunately it had been Gopi and Hetal who opened the door. When Gopi told the man that the payment had been made, the matter had blown up leading to the scene above. Hetal wanted to know why Gopi did not pay the bill when Kokila had given her money. So Preethi had stepped in.

"Rashi, what is this?" Preethi heard Kaki say in a barely controlled voice. "Mummyji, I think I said, I will pay for mine only. But Gopi and Preethi ben misunderstood. Gopi, you know right?" "Rashi, Just pay the man at the door. All go do your work"
Preethi looked disbelieving as Hetal walked away. Was that it? Why wasn't anybody apologizing to the poor girl standing there who was accused and not given a chance to explain?.. Preethi was angry, madly so.
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"Bhabhi, Why did you not say anything?" "Preethi ben, I wanted to but Rashi ben was so angry and Kakiji.." "So you let them accuse you. Come on Bhabhi, you should have defended yourself better."
Preethi was frustrated and she paced her room as Gopi looked at her and then put her head down.
"Preethi, Gopi does not say anything because she does not want any altercation." Her Maasi walked in purposefully. "I know. I just heard from Meethi." She replied to Preethi's questioning glance.
"Gopi vahu, Preethi is right. It is time to defend yourself. See I was not there today and if Preethi was not there.." Kokila looked pained at her bahu.
"But Maaji.. I explained. Rashi ben and Kaki were too angry." Gopi said. She had felt sad that her sister and Kaki accused her all due to a misunderstanding.
"She is right." Preethi told Kokila. Once Gopi went out though she turned to Kokila and said in a determined voice.
"Maasi, Bhabhi did defend herself but I do not think it made any difference. What happened to Kaki? She was hell bent on being unreasonable and when the truth came out she just left without attempting to even set the wrong right. I cannot believe it.."
Preethi saw Kokila looked pained for a second and then said in a sad tone. "Time changes Preethi and with it some relations. I will talk with Mota Bhabhi. This time Rashi needs to apologize to Gopi." "No Maasi. .Leave it. I think I understand a little now. But I need to understand better. What exactly happened?"
Kokila explained what she knew while Preethi listened wide eyed at the various things happening in her Maasi's family.
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"No. That is not her favorite color. Aham, you do not even know your wife's favorites." Aham shot an angry look at Preethi while he gave the box to his wife.

"She is my wife. I know her better. You like the color, don't you Gopi?" Aham asked Gopi challenging Preethi to say anything. He had bought a sari. His friend, the son of a retail shop owner had called and it seemed the least he could do after such a lovely lunch. Lunch had been delicious and Gopi needed to be appreciated. Aham reasoned that he wanted to show Preethi how much he appreciated Gopi but a part of him knew that he wanted to make Gopi feel special by appreciating her work and care. He wanted to see her smile. He knew she deserved that and it was long due.

Gopi found herself in a fix again. Preethi and Ahamji were always at loggerheads especially when she was around. She never knew who to support. But then Aham was expecting an answer.
To her, anything that her Ahamji gave was beautiful. He had got her a green sari with a lot of sequin work on the border. She really liked it and it was green. His favorite and she was partial to it.

"Thank you Ahamji. It is really very beautiful." Aham gave a triumphant look at Preethi who just stared back.
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"Gopi, you really do like the sari, don't you? If not, you can change it tomorrow. I will call the shop." Gopi looked surprised but then nodded no vigourously.
"No Ahamji, I love the sari. It is very beautiful. I do not want anything else." Aham nodded satisfied. Gopi never lied to him.

Preethi's stare had made Aham uncomfortable. To him it looked like he was being mocked about not knowing Gopi's tastes. Well I got her a beautiful sari that would make her look heavenly. He tried to convince himself. But remembering that stare was again making him squirm.

Aham stared silently as Gopi worked her way clearing the dressing table and arranging things. "What is your favorite color?"
He had surprised her. She turned around and looked like he had asked her a complicated question. It irritated him to see that she never expected such questions from him.

"Why are you so surprised? What is your favorite color?" He asked again not giving up. "Ji, Red. I also like blue." Aham nodded and returned to his file. She shrugged after waiting for him to give more explanation, then continued to complete her work.

"Ahamji, I will get your green tea." He nodded as she made her way to the door. "Gopi." He saw her turn around. "We will get some more saris in red or blue one of these days. I will take you shopping. Shanta Bhai said he has got a new collection of saris. You usually make the best choices." Her face glowed at his statement and he felt glad. Red and Blue. He stored the information for later use.
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"So Maasi, now I think we need to talk to Gopi Bhabhi too." "But Preethi, Gopi is not like you. She believes in Rashi totally."
Preethi nodded no. "No Maasi. That is where you are mistaken. Gopi Bhabhi loves her cousin no doubt, but she loves truth and her relations more. If explained to her properly she will understand. Let me. She is just like chiku." Chiku was her little sister. She adored Chiku.
Kokila nodded no. "Ok..I have tried before. But you can give a try again."

Preethi smiled. If she knew her Maasi, she would have ordered Gopi Bhabhi to not to listen to Rashi Bhabhi's words. Well that would never work. Gopi Bhabhi was stronger than her Maasi realized and what more, Preethi had seen a subtle change already.
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"Would you like one more roti? You eat next to nothing." Aham chided softly and placed one more piece of roti on Gopi's plate. He moved the Rajma bowl and served her himself. He then looked up to see her smile softly and eat shyly.

They had come to a restaurant. It was to be an outing with Preethi and she had insisted that Gopi join. He had accepted only because of that. Anyway his mom had made it clear that she expected him to take Preethi to the restaurant that just opened.
Aham had no idea how Preethi managed to convince his mother to have food outside. Maybe something to do with her not having a chance to visit Indian restaraunts if she went back. So he had to agree. Preethi had wanted Gopi which made this outing seem brighter to Aham and at the last minute Preethi had bailed out. She had excused herself due to cramps but it had been too late. Gopi was dressed and the reservations were going waste. So he had come with Gopi. Not that he had anything to complaine. For once Preethi had done a good thing.

This is nice. Aham thought as he sat back and enjoyed seeing his wife eat. He never usually got a chance to see her like this. She looked cute. She ate sparsely and was now playing with the spoon.

"Are you done? Should we order dessert?" He asked her and she looked puzzled."Some sweet to end the dinner. We can order whatever you want. Or should I order Kulfi?" He was rewarded with a huge smile on her face and a look of adoration in her eyes. "Ji, you remembered." He linked her happiness to its reason now. She had not expected him to remember their V'Day outing. How could he not. She had been his valentine.
"Hmm. I did remember. One malai Kulfi please." He ordered to the passing waiter and then turned to her again. She looked concerned and puzzled.
"Ji, you do not want one?" "I will share from your plate. I do not want another one separately . Plus it tastes sweeter this way." Her eyes widened and she smiled. He smiled back. There were no words needed.
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"Rashi ben, I will not talk to you from now on" Preethi stood on the terrace above the mandir hearing Gopi talk to Rashi and then move away. She felt the strength in those words and saw Rashi turn around confused and worried at Gopi's withrawing figure. She did not have to do anything. Her Gopi Bhabhi had taken a stand.
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"Oh Oh Rashi.. Cannot you do something carefully. Come on remove your hands off your eyes. Let me see. We will have to wash it with water. It will keep burning otherwise. Come on Rashi.." "Kakiji, it burns.." Preethi walked into Modi Bhavan and found chaos everywhere. She had gone to visit Naani for a couple of days and was back only to find the women in the hall..
Rashi was in tears while her Maasi was gently guiding her with one hand towards the kitchen while trying ot pry Rashi's hands from her eyes with the other. She was asking Gopi to run get the first aid box with the eye drops in it and was asking Meethi to run the tap of cold water.
Preethi dropped her bag to run forward to help. Her Kakiji was following Rashi with a worried look on her face. "Should I call the doctor Maasi?" Preethi questioned as she held the door open for the three. "Yes Preethi beta. You better. As a precaution." Koki answered and took Rashi to the sink coaxing her strictly to open her eyes.
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"Phew.. That was scary." Preethi voiced softly as they left Rashi sleeping in her room. Her Maasi had gone down to see the doctor out. Gopi was in the kitchen cleaning the water spilt when they had helped Rashi. Preethi walked slowly towards the stairs. "Meethi, Loi Pini difford, I told you to get these medicines first before doing any other work. Now go." They could hear Kokila's voice and Preethi smiled and turned to see Hetal give a thoughtful look and then shake her head a little.
"Kaki, what exactly happened?" Preethi asked as she walked with Hetal down the stairs. Hetal looked confused and then talked as she walked down.
"I do not know exactly Preethi. One minute Rashi was taking care of the groceries that had been delivered. Kokila had asked her to check everything once before putting them in their right boxes. The next minute, we heard her scream. When I rushed in all I could see was the packet of chilli powder opened and Rashi was screaming with pain. I think she tried opening the bag without the scissors. How can she be so careless?" "It happens sometimes Kakiji." Preethi intoned as she walked down with Hetal.
"Unfortunate indeed. This is the second time in 2 days Rashi has made some silly mistake" Hetal shook her head as she walked towards the kitchen while Preethi stopped to talk to Kokila.
"She is alright now. The girl has no sense. Can you imagine tearing a chilli powder packet like that.." Kokila sounded angry and concerned as she walked towards the terrace. Unfortunate indeed.
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"Jigar, Don't forget to use the drops once more tonight. The doctor said Rashi should be ok by morning." Kokila instructed to Jigar who nodded concerned and ran upstairs after dinner. Rashi's dinner had been sent to her room with Meethi.
"Mota Bhabhi, I think Rashi should rest one more day. Gopi vahu, you take care of breakfast with Meethi tomorrow. Understood?" Gopi nodded while Preethi watched Hetal nod again. Kokila walked away.
"Aah.. Maasi is concerned, as usual. She never likes seeing people in misery, does she? I think she is more worried for Rashi than she is showing. Remember Kaki, when Jigar fell sick with fever when he was 18, Maasi turned the house into a hospital for three days. No sound, no running and no talking." Preethi added quietly and smiled at Hetal. Hetal turned to look at her, then gave a small half hearted smile and left thoughtfully.

Preethi smiled. Things were slowly looking up.
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"No. Gopi is coming with me in this car. You better come with Jigar. With Mom, dad and Baa, I think there is no place in my car."Aham informed and got into the drivers seat without waiting for a reply.
"Preethi ben, you can sit here. I will come in the other car." Preethi smiled as Gopi offered her seat to her. Preethi could see why Aham was frustrated. Her Bhabhi was making it very difficult for him.
The family was going on a picnic on her insistance and Preethi had seen Gopi work non stop getting things ready including packing things to eat.
She had also seen Aham work non stop to get Gopi's attention. Preethi decided she enjoyed Aham's frustration. She could see that her Gopi Bhabhi was not doing this wantedly. She was just being responsible but she could see the effects of her absence in Aham.

"GOPI.. Come sit" Gopi started at Aham's voice and gave a worried look at her. "You go right ahead Bhabhi. I will join in Jigar's car."

Preethi waved and moved on to the other car. She sat down with Hetal in the back. "Rashi, come on upfront. Let dad sit with mom." She heard Jigar say and also heard Rashi reply that it would be easier if Chirag sat in the front and the three ladies in the back.

Preethi nodded her head mentally. Rashi Bhabhi was also giving Jigar a hard time. Preethi had noticed twice already. Rashi Bhabhi had run away from Jigar. Once she had seen Jigar try to catch her hand and Rashi had run hearing her phone ring and yesterday she had seen her avoid his offer to drive her to the doctor's for another checkup.

It seemed the Modi brothers needed help.
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I had to change the story a bit to suit what is happening in SNS.. Hopefully it did not come out confusing.. 😛
Edited by Justlikethat1 - 13 years ago
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Yay me first.

Harini fantastic update.

I loved the whole update. Not only Hetal but may be we will see change in Rashi too with Preeti around, sounds good to me.

I loved that Gopi stood up on her own without Koki or Preeti saying anything.

And it goes without saying, I loved all the Gohem scenes. How sweet of him to buy her sari for fixing him such a delicious lunch, not only that he is slowly learning her likes and dislikes and want to get her something in her favorite color also.

Loved the dinner scene, Awe..how sweet of him, as they say "Sharing is caring."😉

So Modi's are going on a picnic, looking forward to your next update.


P.S. I hope this new entry track is half as good as what you have written here.

Thank you for this lovely update. More please.😛
Edited by sbp1971 - 13 years ago

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