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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: mitzification

Thank You all for commenting ... you dont know how much your comments mean to us.

Belive me they serve as inspiration to write further . So thanks once again :)

Absolutely guys . Mitzi and I are really very happy with your comments and appreciation . It sure is an inspiration and encouragement to us .
Thanks a lot
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Posted: 13 years ago
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ok, i am not going to comment on part 2 for it has SLD whom i dont like at all.. not because she came between A and N but because she was unreal... i have never seen a person like her so i cant relate to her.. and howmuch ever i try i just dont get that part of story line at all.

coming to part 3: i think you did amazingly well with elevator scene.. i remember, it was this time in dmg, it had started not going well with me, storyline was completely ruined, half of the scenes were unfinished and very badly edited and directed...

i like how you have filled in those gaps that weere there in the original scene.. the way you expressed hesitation on A's part an N's anger towards his actions.. that really makes the scene work.. then when A gets call from SLD, AN conversation is not left midway.. A doesnt just walkout, he does ask for N's help.. Great...

now how is N going to help.. ek taraf she has promised SLD to help get her to A and the otherside there is A asking N's help to get SLD away from him...can i express a little something i would have liked to see here? would have loved to see N hesitating before accepting to help A.. and then A's reaction for this hesitation..
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Posted: 13 years ago
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I finally done reading the first part. Though it took me whole day to read one part becoz i take sneak peak in first part whenever I get little bit off from my work. I love it.

Sorry Can't comment regularly. But I ll try to catch whenever I get time.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: anotheranfan

ok, i am not going to comment on part 2 for it has SLD whom i dont like at all.. not because she came between A and N but because she was unreal... i have never seen a person like her so i cant relate to her.. and howmuch ever i try i just dont get that part of story line at all.

coming to part 3: i think you did amazingly well with elevator scene.. i remember, it was this time in dmg, it had started not going well with me, storyline was completely ruined, half of the scenes were unfinished and very badly edited and directed...

i like how you have filled in those gaps that weere there in the original scene.. the way you expressed hesitation on A's part an N's anger towards his actions.. that really makes the scene work.. then when A gets call from SLD, AN conversation is not left midway.. A doesnt just walkout, he does ask for N's help.. Great...

now how is N going to help.. ek taraf she has promised SLD to help get her to A and the otherside there is A asking N's help to get SLD away from him...can i express a little something i would have liked to see here? would have loved to see N hesitating before accepting to help A.. and then A's reaction for this hesitation..

Hey there Pri , So happy to see your comment .
red part , Of course , can't argue with that 😊. We understand .
I am so glad you did not find any gaps in the scenes as I agree with you , AN story started going downhill from around that time . And now that you mention , I also sort of recollect how a lot of scenes were badly edited and directed .
hmm , about the bold part , yes , I see why you think she should have hesitated ; but then I felt when he asked her for help and that too in a perfectly business like manner as if nothing at all had passed between them for all this time , she felt a lot of shock and disappointment . She felt defeated and let down and continuing all that drama with Suman annoying him definitely did not make sense . It only proved to her that though she had felt that her childishness and immaturity was still not gone completely . The sooner she would end that mess and get Sumanlata out of the picture , the sooner it would be better .
In this part , we mainly wanted to concentrate on how Abhi had begun to drift away from her without her realizing it . Sumanlata just happened to be one trigger to make her aware of the same . We wanted to concentrate on his indifference , one option that she had never considered , thinking that he could only love her or hate her . And when that indifference , came forward , it broke her heart so badly that all she could do was let him have his way by agreeing to help him .
I love Gone with the Wind and what makes the love story so very special is how Rhett Butler ends up being so indifferent towards Scarlet , just when she ends up realizing that he is and always was her one true love . All the things he says to her on the last two pages , are so amazingly true , that you feel more sorry for him than for Scarlet , even though , she is the one being abandoned.
Wow , I have almost written a mini update and see this is why I love your comments . Always mentally stimulating .
I hope you like the rest of this FF . Mitzi and I are very serious about it 😊. Thanks
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Posted: 13 years ago
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@Shale , Thanks so much . We are so touched that you have been taking time out through your work , to read our FF . Definitely means a lot to us .
@cukish , thanks 😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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😃😆first of all thanks pra and mitz for amazing concept and writing 👏really really liking it now come to thiese parts once again very nice updates love each and everything in these parts but most importantly me loving sid entry i loved his and abhi scenes in the show but thy didn't showed much of their scenes stupid creatives 😡
"And if there's love, you can do without happiness too. Even with sorrow, life is sweet. "
- Fyodor Dostoyevsky
very true 😊

"I asked Dr Keerti for suggestions on who she thinks would be a good replacement and she came up with your name . She thinks though you lack the experience in total , you possess all the other capabilities and are mentally tough to take up all the responsibilities with interns . I wouldn't have said the same a few months back . But , I must say you have shown remarkable improvement with your duties in the last few months . So , after our discussions , we have decided that starting tomorrow you will be the in charge of all the new interns . Dr Keerti will brief you with all the duties and you can take her guidance as long as she is here ."

She nodded , deciding if she should be happy with those indirect compliments he paid to her work and dedication or feel sad for the impersonal and unaffected manner in which he spoke to her . But Dr Keerti was saying something to her . She snapped out of her reverie and listened to her . Dr Keerti was inviting her to her cabin . She nodded again and they both took Abhi's leave . He broke her heart yet again by smiling at Dr Keerti and presenting her with a curt and professional nod.

awww feeling so bad for niki stupid sadu abhi 😡


Dr Keerti's job had never been easy and Nikki could see that now . No wonder then, she rarely smiled , no wonder then , she disciplined them so frequently . Well , now she would have to do the same , specially since it was such an eclectic mix of interns. But , it turned out from her experiences for the first two days that with the exception of Sid , all the other interns had a fair amount of professionalism and seriousness with respect to their duties and much as she expected , Tamanna turned out to be the best of them all.

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"Sid , you idiot ! What on the heavens is this ?" , Abhi had entered his house to find everything in the living room in a complete disarray . His wide screen television was now connected to the playstation with some stupid video game playing on it . The music system had some loud and strange dance music playing on it . Banana peels were lying on the side table and to his utter disgust attracting hoards of flies . He walked a little further into the room and noticed that water had spilled out from a glass and created two small pools , one on the table and the other on the carpet on which the table stood . Abhi grit his teeth angrily . Agreeing to have Sid come and stay with him for that one month before setting up an accommodation of his own , was a terrible mistake . But then , having Sid with him was actually doing him good . If all that mess was set aside , Sid was actually quite a decent company to be with .

yeeyyy sid entry i m loving it thanks 😉😆

"Sid , Sid where the hell are you ? Get out here , right now'" , he screamed angrily and Sid came out , his hair messy , his eyes groggy with sleep .

😆😆

really liking sid character and his childish harkatein i'm sure he'll do more fun in the upcoming parts impatiently waiting for the next update plz continue soon 👏


Edited by jsdoll - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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No, I'm not really editing this.Just finished reading both the parts and I couldn't stop myself from mentioning how much I love you Pra and your writing and Mitzi's idea. I'm all in love with this ff. Looking at my previous comments you can guess that this is not all I had to say,😳 I've so many things that I need to say but not now as I'm a bit busy with assignment but I'll be editing this super soon, I promise. And I loved all the Abhi-Sid convo. Sid is such a sweat heart here. I hope you'll be using his character in a better way as I personally felt that there was so much of potential in Sid's character and how much he could do in AN's storyline and I'm not talking about only helping AN getting out of their problems. Did you get my hint?😉
PS Look, I was so desperate to read that I couldn't hold myself till the time I finish my assignment.😉
Edited by Nehu_1 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: pra19

"That means it happened . Wow , bhai . I am proud of you , because I also heard that you ended up winning that match . Now that is my brother . "

😆

And Abhi was not liked by his employees .

But now that he was in Sanjeevani , he would change it too. 😆

. This stint in India was going to be memorable , yes it was.😆

I am sooo loving SID ...more than Abhi even ...
pls tell me why do i like abhi again ... he's kinda fading in the background right now ... and all I can see is Sid ... ⭐️ like really ,,,,,,, and to think I dont think i even like Karan Wahi ...nor did i like sid in DMG heheheh

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