Originally posted by: anotheranfan
ok, i am not going to comment on part 2 for it has SLD whom i dont like at all.. not because she came between A and N but because she was unreal... i have never seen a person like her so i cant relate to her.. and howmuch ever i try i just dont get that part of story line at all.
coming to part 3: i think you did amazingly well with elevator scene.. i remember, it was this time in dmg, it had started not going well with me, storyline was completely ruined, half of the scenes were unfinished and very badly edited and directed...
i like how you have filled in those gaps that weere there in the original scene.. the way you expressed hesitation on A's part an N's anger towards his actions.. that really makes the scene work.. then when A gets call from SLD, AN conversation is not left midway.. A doesnt just walkout, he does ask for N's help.. Great...
now how is N going to help.. ek taraf she has promised SLD to help get her to A and the otherside there is A asking N's help to get SLD away from him...can i express a little something i would have liked to see here? would have loved to see N hesitating before accepting to help A.. and then A's reaction for this hesitation..
Hey there Pri , So happy to see your comment .
red part , Of course , can't argue with that 😊. We understand .
I am so glad you did not find any gaps in the scenes as I agree with you , AN story started going downhill from around that time . And now that you mention , I also sort of recollect how a lot of scenes were badly edited and directed .
hmm , about the bold part , yes , I see why you think she should have hesitated ; but then I felt when he asked her for help and that too in a perfectly business like manner as if nothing at all had passed between them for all this time , she felt a lot of shock and disappointment . She felt defeated and let down and continuing all that drama with Suman annoying him definitely did not make sense . It only proved to her that though she had felt that her childishness and immaturity was still not gone completely . The sooner she would end that mess and get Sumanlata out of the picture , the sooner it would be better .
In this part , we mainly wanted to concentrate on how Abhi had begun to drift away from her without her realizing it . Sumanlata just happened to be one trigger to make her aware of the same . We wanted to concentrate on his indifference , one option that she had never considered , thinking that he could only love her or hate her . And when that indifference , came forward , it broke her heart so badly that all she could do was let him have his way by agreeing to help him .
I love Gone with the Wind and what makes the love story so very special is how Rhett Butler ends up being so indifferent towards Scarlet , just when she ends up realizing that he is and always was her one true love . All the things he says to her on the last two pages , are so amazingly true , that you feel more sorry for him than for Scarlet , even though , she is the one being abandoned.
Wow , I have almost written a mini update and see this is why I love your comments . Always mentally stimulating .
I hope you like the rest of this FF . Mitzi and I are very serious about it 😊. Thanks
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