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Posted: 13 years ago
No need for any apologies concerning the update time, sweetheart ... with you, the wait is ALWAYS worth it 😃 Wonderful update, and thank you SO much for the PM! Update soon, love!
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: Nikhi.

Just read HAHK Part 5, and I though it was really cute, though the ending does sound rather ominous...


As for your OS, Raat Akeli Hain, I thought it was brilliantly written. Obviously, I want it to continue, but I think you ended it in just the right place for it to be an effective piece of writing.


You've got a great style of writing - do continue to write! And thank you for the PMs! 😊


thanx a lot...😃
i'm glad u liked them...btw i wrote a sec part to d os since i thot there r some loose ends in d actual one...hope u like it too..😊
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: Pinam3

Heyy Awesome OS.. and thank you for the PM.. :)


thanx a lot...😃
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: soho19


No need for any apologies concerning the update time, sweetheart ... with you, the wait is ALWAYS worth it 😃Wonderful update, and thank you SO much for the PM! Update soon, love!


thanx a lot...😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
DS - Raat Akeli Hai - 2/2
Raat Akeli Hai,
Bujh Gaye Diye
Aake Mere Paas,
Kaanon Mein Mere
Jo Bhi Chaahe Kahiye,
Jo Bhi Chaahe Kahiye,
Raat ...

The song pierced the silence of the night and the sound of the wind. She moved uncomfortably in her seat while he tried to focus on the road.
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Manvi tossed around the bed for the next two hours. Alas, sleep was still miles away. And she knew why. How could she sleep in peace when she has to safeguard her secret from breaking many hearts ?
She gave up trying and sat up to check the time. " 3 am ! Ab main subah tak kya karu ?! Phirse baahar javu ? Nahi nahi, kahi woh Chep waha phirse aa gaya toh aaj meri khair nahi ! "
Manvi decided to satisfy herself with the window view. Sitting on the window sill, she tried to plan how to stay away from 'detective' Virat. After a lengthy session of brainstorming, she found a solution.
" Idea ! Main har waqt di ya Vanshika aunty ya Kadambari chachi ke saath rehti hoon. Tab toh woh mujhse sawaal nahi kar sakta ! Manvi... You are a genius ! " She patted herself on her shoulder proudly.
At the same time a knock was heard on the door.
She whispered to herself. " Ab yeh kaun hai ? Kahi bhoot toh nahi ? Kya Manvi, tum bhi na. Chep ke hote huye koi aur bhoot kaise aa sakta hai. Shayad di ho toh ? " The mere thought was enough to bring a smile and she pranced to the door. Alas...
" Tum ! Hai bhagwan, mujhpar reham karo ! "
" Reham karne keliye hi toh aaya hoon ! "
Response was a confused look.
" Chalo mere saath."
" Tumhare saath, iss waqt ?! Kaha ? "
" Pehle chalo."
" Kyu ? "
Virat shook his head and grabbed her by hand. Before she could open her mouth to protest, he continued.
" Aur chillavo mat. Sab jaag jayenge. Hum khulfi keliye jaa rahe hai."
Manvi gaped at him as she unconsciously allowed him to drag her to his car. ' Is he serious ?! I was just joking to get rid of him ! '
She silently thanked God that she was still wearing her salwar suit, instead of changing to her night dress.
She got back her voice once they sat inside the car.
" Par iss waqt kaunsi dukan khulegi ?! "
" Abhi pata chal jayega."
" Khadoos." She murmured looking out.
He drove the car through the empty streets of Mussorie. Manvi started to get bored seeing the empty roads and murmured again. " Ek toh raat ki teen baje mujhe baahar kheechke le jate ho, aur uparse yeh sannata ! "
Virat chuckled at her dialogue and turned on the car stereo in a small volume. Old songs were being played.
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" Tum kyu nahi so rahe the ? " Manvi asked.
" Neendh nahi aaya."
" Kyu ? "
" Tum kyu ro rahi thi ? "
" Pehle maine poocha ! "
Virat sighed. ' No pain, no gain.' He decided to give half-truth.
" Kuch purani yaadein taaza ho gaya tha..."
" Jo tumhe dard dete hai ? "
" Hmm."
" Don't worry yaar. Waqt ke saath saath sab theek ho jayega. Phir tum bhool ke bhi unhe yaad nahi karega."
But she made a mental note to quiz his mother and chachi about it.
" Hmm. Ab tumhari baari."
" Umm... Meri tabiyat phirse kharab hai. Par agar di ko pata chal gayi toh woh pareshan ho jayenge. Aur woh yeh sochengi ki unki jaane ki vachai se yeh hua hai.Kyunki unse behtaar ghar mein koi bhi meri khayal nahi rakh sakti." She too gave only the half-truth.
" I get it. Par tum dawai time pe leti hai ? " Virat asked suspiciously.
" Of course ! Nahi toh woh Dabbu aur Dr.Manan mujhe chainse rehne nahi denge."
Virat made a mental note to call up Dr.Manan soon.
" Chalo acha hai. Koi toh hain tumhe seedhe raaste pe laane keliye."
Manvi was about to retort when she noticed that they were leaving the town.
" Oy, hum kaha jaa rahe hai ? "
" Lo aa gaya. Wait here." and he got out.
He had stopped the car at the outskirts of the town. There was an icecream cart parked near a small house.
Manvi gaped again as he knocked the door and woke up the icecream guy. She couldn't figure out what he was talking, pointing to the car. But the guy was convinced by whatever he said and went to open his cart.
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Few minutes later, Virat was back in the car with a bunch of icecreams, having paid the guy enough for the trouble.
Manvi was still staring at him in shock. Virat snapped his fingers, bringing her back to earth, while eating a chocobar.
" Tumhara tabiyat toh theek hai ?! "
" Kyu ? "
" Kyu ?! Aadhi raat ko mere liye tumne icecream kharida ?! "
" Kisne kaha tumhare liye hai ? Mujhe khane ka mann kar raha tha, toh main jaa raha tha. Phir yaad aa gaya ki tum khulfi keliye marr rahi hai. Iss liye saath le liya."
" Acha ! Tumhe kabse icecream se pyar ho gaya ?! "
" Aaj se." He whispered almost inaudible, distracted by the melting icecream.
" Kuch kaha ? "
' Did I just say what I think I said ?! Oops.' Virat switched to damage control mode.
" Nahi toh ! Tumhe khulfi chahiye ki nahi ? Nahi toh main khalu ? "
Manvi snatched the khulfi before he touched it. " Mujhe kya icecream dikhane layi ho ?! " and started eating.
A peaceful silence reigned as they ate the icecreams, forgetting all their worries.
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As they started the return trip, Manvi curiously asked.
" Tum car ki taraf kya ishara kar raha tha ?! "
" Tumhe kya lagta hai maine kya kaha hoga ? " Virat asked back, with a mischief smile.
Manvi started thinking of all possible scenarios. She didn't want to think of the solution shown in the films; but nothing else came to her mind. She shuddered at the mere thought of what he might 've said. ' No way ! '
Virat noticed that she was shivering. " Are you all right ? "
He stopped the car and moved his hand to her forehead to check her temperature but she moved away. He stopped in midaction, confused by her reaction.
" What's wrong ? "
" Nothing. Can we go home now ? " She looked away.
" Pehle tum batao problem kya hai. "
" Kuch nahi. Chale ? "
' What happened suddenly that she is getting uncomfortable ?! ' Virat did a quick brainstorming and found the answer.
" Ek minute, kahi tum yeh nahi soch rahi hai ki maine waha tumhe meri...?! " Virat was stunned. ' Uh oh.'
An awkward silence followed and to make it worse came the next song...
Raat Akeli Hai,
Bujh Gaye Diye
Aake Mere Paas,
Kaanon Mein Mere
Jo Bhi Chaahe Kahiye,
Jo Bhi Chaahe Kahiye,
Raat ...
Tum Aaj Mere Liye Ruk Jaao, Rut Bhi Hai Fursat Bhi Hai
Tumhein Na Ho Na Sahii, Mujhe Tumse Mohabbat Hai
Mohabbat Ki Ijaazat Hai,
Toh Chup Kyuun Rahiye
Jo Bhi Chaahe Kahiye,
Raat ...
Sawaal Banii Hui Dabi Dabi Uljhan Siinon Mein
Jawaab Denaa Thaa,
Toh Duube Ho Pasiinon Mein
Thaanii Hai Do Hasiinon Mein, Toh Chup Kyun Rahiye
Jo Bhi Chaahe Kahiye,
Raat ...

' Uh oh.' Bad timing !
Which was why both were squirming in their seats as the full song played out.
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None of them had the sense to turn off the stereo. They were busy trying to compose themselves and clear the confusion.
As the song died out, Virat cleared his throat, looking out to the road. " Ahem. Tum jaisa soch rahi hai, waisa hai nahi."
Manvi neither replied nor looked at him.
" I mean... Maine bas yeh kaha ki mere saath mere paagal rishtedaar hai jo aadhi raat ko icecream keliye mere peeche padi hai."
After one long pause...
" Paagal ?! " Gone was the awkwardness and a war had begun. " Tumne mujhe paagal kaha ?! Kis angle se tumhe main paagal lagti hai ? "
Virat was relieved. ' Thank God for bringing us back to normal.'
" Tum mujhse pooch rahi ho ? "
" Arre haan, tum toh waise bhi paagal ho ! Tum kya kahoge ?! Waise bhi, ek paagal ko baaki sab paagal lagta hai." She said sarcastically.
" Jaise ki tum."
" Nahi tum."
" Tum."
" Tum."
Before they could continue their fight, Virat's mobile alarm rang. It was 5 am now.
" Oh no. Marr gayi. Agar beeji ko pata chala ki raat bhar main kamare mein nahi thi, aur woh bhi tumhare saath, toh main toh gayi kaam se ! "
" Chill yaar. Hum bas paanch minute main pahunch jaayenge. Apna seatbelt pehno."
Virat started his car after making sure that she obeyed him. Then he raced through the empty roads and reached the Vadhera house, as promised, in five minutes.
" Lo aa gaye. Ab agar kissine tumhe ghar ke baahar dekh bhi lee..."
" Toh main keh doongi ki main subah ki khoobsurati dekhne gayi thi ! Ab bye."
Manvi rushed out of the car but came back in the next second. " Khulfi keliye thanks."
He smiled. " You are welcome. Aur tumhare liye ek khush khabari bhi hai."
Manvi's eyes widened in surprise. " Really ?! Jaldi bolo."
" Bua aur dadaji aaj nahi teen din baad aa rahe hai."
Manvi couldn't believe her eyes. ' Three days more with di without any fear ! '
" Thank you." She gave him a full-volt smile and ran to her room.
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" My day couldn't 've started better. First khulfi, then this news ! Never thought Chep can be sweet too ! " She mused to herself in the privacy of her room.
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He didn't know why. Or he didn't want to know why. But the truth was that her innocent smile and childish acts always gave him a positive energy. So much that even the one month gap didn't diminish it. He just wished atleast now his life be full of happiness and positivity.
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Edited by ashred12 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
sorry for not sending pm to anyone...not feeling well atm...
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Posted: 13 years ago
awwh are u okay? GWS:)

Virat brings manvi out at 3am for ice-cream/ kulfi omgg how sweet!!! <3 pls continue the positivity and happiness *wink*( positivity) haha pls continue soon waiting for your next update..
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Posted: 13 years ago
so cute!
loved how you used the lyrics within your SS, it only made it better 😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
hey r u fine????
But coming to your update it was really amazing
U r such an amazing writer loved it a lot
Plz add me in your pm list
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Posted: 13 years ago
Aw, that was such a sweet part! It never ceases to amaze me just how cute Virat and Maanvi are together! Thank you for the update! 😊

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