Encumbrance and Loving You *Anonymous*

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Encumbrance

"I stood on the plank awaiting someone's presence. No one was going come. The encumbrance of his love lay embedded on my soul. Even if god himself wished to free me of it, he wouldn't be able to. That for lone night we met, we sensed, we consoled, and then we touched. We touched each other's heavy hearted souls. The when I left; I left with that damned heart of yours; the damned heart which I can't help but cherish. Even after I perish, I will cherish it. For now I bid an adieu. I bid an adieu with the coward heart which has shamelessly become your possession. "

Loving You

Loving you is not a choice, nor is it my will. Loving you is the reason of my beating heart, and loving you is the reason I still breathe. Loving you was not in my plan, but now loving you is all I can think of. Loving you has become my only motive in life. Loving you is like wanting to fly like the wind. Loving you is like being free. Loving you is like living pure, and loving you is my chaste pride. If I were to have a choice, I would pick loving you, because loving you is what keeps me going. I Just Can't Stop Loving You.

Hello everybody.

I know, I still haven't written the epilogue for "Just Because" but now I don't think I will. I have hit the last stage of writer's block for that one and there are no chances of recovery. I had a little free time on my hands, today and so I wrote this down. "Encumbrance" is my first attempt at writing something along the grey lines and "Loving You" is just a little piece I had the urge to pen down. The last line is also a song by my very favourite MJ Sir.

I really hope you guys like this because after school has started I am barely getting any time for myself.

If I get a good response I may even continue writing anonymous things like this or maybe on KaSh and MaanEet.

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Jinszyyy 🤗

Woah, the lines are beautiful.. poetic and artistic <33
I wasin awe while reading them... such purity and bliss, they cast !
Its difficult to judge which one I loved more... Encumbrance, ur first try at cimmerian, was perfectly written.. and the alliteration in loving you is commendable !
Loved both.. they're short ,sweet and just 'perfect' ..need I say more than this now? 😃

Love
Vini

P.S: I cant believe I'm the first one to comment this time and that too edited comment! God, I feel awesome ☺️😆 .
Edited by coolvini4u - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: coolvini4u

Jinszyyy 🤗

Woah, the lines are beautiful.. poetic and artistic <33
I wasin awe while reading them... such purity and bliss, they cast !
Its difficult to judge which one I loved more... Encumbrance, ur first try at cimmerian, was perfectly written.. and the alliteration in loving you is commendable !
Loved both.. they're short ,sweet and just 'perfect' ..need I say more than this now? 😃

Love
Vini

P.S: I cant believe I'm the first one to comment this time and that too edited comment! God, I feel awesome ☺️😆 .


Vinszzyyy 👏 👏 👏

Three cheers for being first... AND edited HIP HIP HURRAYY HIP HIP HURRAAYYY HIP HIP HURRAYY...

I was in awee while reading your comment :D
Thank you so very much.. I am glad u liked it!

Jinszzyy :P
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Posted: 14 years ago
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jinilll...ur wriitng is so amazng that such small ones dishearte me..plz write onnng ones, on kash of course
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Posted: 14 years ago
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My dear you're simply amazing... Those pieces were just perfect. I have no other words, this is beautiful.
Thank you for writing this.

I'm sad but I totally understand your Writer's block as I'm experiencing one right now :s
Good luck fit school and thanks for writing this :)

Love you,
Laila
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Posted: 14 years ago
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simply beautiful!!!!!!!
all the best with your school.👍🏼
please do write epilogue ("Just Because") soon.
eagerly waiting for it.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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heyya jinszyyy

after so many days u wrote smthin

n hw it ws shld i nid to tel

it ws superbbb

encumbrance ws very hearttouchin

n lovin u depicts d pure luv of gal n guy

write smthin on Arsh kash yaar dyin to read ur writin on dem

thnx fr dpm

luv

Bipin

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Posted: 14 years ago
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It was simply amazing and beautiful...



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Posted: 14 years ago
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congrats !!!! 4 d new one ...

thnx 4 d pm ...

continue soon ...

interesting ...
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Posted: 14 years ago
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simply awsum..

beautifully written piece...

loved them alot...

all the best wid ur studies..

thnx for the pm,...

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