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jasmine ansari

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Posted: 13 years ago

#31

Superb intro buddy.
Waiting 4 d part.
Update asap.

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RITIKA

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Posted: 13 years ago

#32

congrats on d new ff ... awesum start ...

plzzz continue soon n do add me 2 ur pm list ...

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Neha

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Posted: 13 years ago

#33

Hey guys!

I know I said I wasn't supposed to update till after eons! But today was a near perfect day for me and I just couldn't help myself from typing this up even though I have oodles of HW to do!! I scored an A+ in my Adv Bio class and a 9/9 on my first English Essay this year!! So after jumping up and down and almost fainting due to an extreme overdose of happiness, I decided to write a small update just to control my "over-the-top" emotions!!

This would be less of a chapter but more of an insight about what the major plot is. I was going to write in Flashback mode but figured ou that it would seem monotonous with LOL having the same pitchground. Read it and please tell me if I should try and write this story in Flashback Mode too or just move forward!!

And yeah I'm still waiting for suitable titles!! If you can come up with any, please suggest!! Here goes the first installment:

___Still waiting for names guys!! And just like I said, I never keep up to my promises!! So here's another installment!! The installments are pretty short...I know!, but thats all I can manage between my hectic schedule!!

Three years ago, Armaan Mallik was a free man. A free man because life was easy back then. A third year medical student at a reputed university, a charmer with looks that could sweep women and men alike from their feet, an innocence but with such a perfect dose of naughtiness, that daughters and their moms, both would impressed!

Three years ago, Armaan Mallik's answer to the omnipresent question lingering in the air, "What is love?", would be the one every guy of his age would say. He would smirk, give his dimpled smile, looked straight into your eyes and say, "Four letters, two consonants and two vowels come together to form a word, easy to pronounce and just as easy to use- LOVE!" And if the person in front was a girl, he would put up his ever-ready flirty smile and add, "Wanna go out for some coffee?"

Little did he know that the "easy to pronounce and easy to use" word was just as difficult to do, to pursue.

God probably had his own way of telling Armaan what Love meant. Because if it would not have been for Riddhima, love would still be a non-existent virtue in Armaan's life.

A boisterous, flamboyant, loud person on the outside, Riddhima Gupta was never the one to stay quiet or unhappy for long. She could make and break, spread and remove, love and hate...everything in Riddhima's life was extreme. But no one knew Riddhima on the inside. Till she entered her freshman year at a medical university.

Being the outspoken person she was, she became a known figure in the Uni with just a day into her college life.

If you're wondering how an 18 year old could become popular in just a day, you just don't know Riddhima well enough! The only one out of the hundreds entering the college to have the power and brains to intimidate her seniors and escape ragging, Riddhima gained herself a definite place in the elite of the Uni in one day itself.

"The girl who silenced the Seniors in a moment", this phrase became the hot seller news in the corridors of the University from the day onwards. Though it didn't really change Riddhima or her attitude as she was already subject to popularity from the time she was born, her relatives' adoring the way she smiled, her elementary school friends loving her eyes, her friendliness, her great figure in middle school and being the popular subject among boys in high school.

Riddhima was least interested in the unwanted popularity she had gained. Jeez! She was just trying to escape ragging, not become the great savior Superman from Krypton!! She hated the way things began going because of this stupid incident.

But not for long because this was why the first person to know her inside out, Armaan Mallik entered her life!!

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On one hand, Riddhima was hating the special treatment she was receiving on account of her stupid stint and on the other Armaan was hooked'hooked to the girl who had shut up the seniors' big mouths!!

Armaan was a second year Medical student and what intrigued him was that a girl had the audacity to silence the seniors while HE, The Armaan Mallik had been subject to the same ragging!! Insanely enough, it was difficult for him to swallow his pride and accept that Riddhima had achieved something he had always wished he would have done!

He was in awe of Riddhima, long before he had knew who she really was. He was impressed by the girl who he had seen talking animatedly and quite openly to the children outside the college campus. And he followed her! Just like that! Somehow he felt the need to know the girl who looked from quite an affluent family and yet instead of acting like the usual snobby bi*chy way Daddy's-girls did, she talked to small beggar kids and played with them. So he stalked her. Though he would never agree to that! According to him it was called "Study of the intriguing characters of a specimen by observing its activities!!" For people like us, the normal people, it was stalking!!

Two days of "Studying" later, he had discovered quite a lot about the girl. She talked to anyone she saw, she could talk the entire day! And when she talked, she moved her hands quite a bit, making gestures at every single word. She was a teacher's pet and spent most of her free time in the library. What Armaan wondered was how she wasn't kicked out of the library because of the talent of chattering away to glory, she possessed.

But then he knew the answer to that question!! She had her own way of dealing with people. From issuing extra books in the library which meant dealing with a grumpy, hoarse voiced middle aged fat woman to getting free ice-creams for the kids outside from the vendor, she had a kind of magic which could make anyone do what she wanted. Many a times he had wondered whether she had some kind of magic in her eyes or words which compelled people to do what she wanted.

But all this time, she had been "a girl" for him. She was just a random stranger whose personality made him want to know more about her. So the biggest shock he received was when he came to know from one of the kids on the street that she was THE Riddhima the entire Uni was talking about.

He had always talked to the kids outside for the past two years, they were his "Gang" for whom he didn't mind spending tons of money he didn't want!! He had met them everyday, except for the past three days when he was busy in uhm.."Studying"! As he didn't want to interrupt her bonding with the kids, he had avoided being seen around the children. But when finally he came out of his trance and decided to meet up with his "Bachcha Party", he received a huge shock.

After persuading the kids into forgiving him in return for chocolates and a ride in his car, he was informed by one of them that there was a didi who had played with them for the past two days called Riddhima! That had left Armaan shocked'.he couldn't believe that although being an awesome detective-student he had not known her name!! And the name just got him more intrigued!

Now he knew why the seniors and in fact the entire student body found Riddhima interesting. She was a complex person to understand but had immense simplicity too! She was truly someone who didn't have an intimidating personality but still made you bend on your knees. She just had SOMETHING which everyone liked.

Yes, that was true for everyone'except for him. Because he wasn't just going to like it, he was going to fall in love with her.

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Riddhima's life was pretty smooth. If having a father who was so influential as to even buy her, her own colossal house was called happiness, she was happy. If having a father whom she saw, thankfully, once every week and if luck would have it, even have dinner with him sometimes was attachment, she was greatly attached to her dad.

If having a sibling who lived thousands of miles away and had never even talked to you except for a formal Hello was love, she was deeply loved by her sister. If living her life, inside a huge room inside an even larger house, under the surveillance of governesses was a normal life, she was normal.

If killing every dream of hers inside her, just to please and satisfy her dad's ambitions and suffocating the real Riddhima under her cover was a smooth life, Riddhima Gupta's life was smooth.

She knew her life was different. From early childhood, when her dad would not turn up at school events, to her Open-house meetings, to her drawing competitions, while her friends' parents pampered their kids, she knew something was different. As she grew up, she realized that the look of pity the parents gave her from kindergarten was not just because of the negligence of her father, but because she didn't have anyone else to count upon.

She had lost her mother two years after her birth and all she remembered about her was book she left her. An Enid Blyton book for small kids. She didn't know how she looked like, except for the pictures which hung in every corner of the house. The only reason she knew about that book was because one of the pictures showed her mom reading a story from inside the book to her. Since then, a small book for children had become the most priceless possession in Riddhima's life.

People would feel that this would make Riddhima a very sober and lonely kind of person. After all, with all these complications in life, anyone was bound to get intimidated and scared and would retire into a shell.

But Riddhima survived, and survived so beautifully that everyone was in awe of this girl who could befriend any stranger. Who could not just be happy and keep the world happy but also evoke such strong emotions in everyone's heart for her love that, once anyone met her they would remember her forever.

People who knew her by her life history and family ties could never figure out how she could be so happy in every circumstance and people who just knew her by her personality, could never figure out that such a difficult life existed beneath those jovial eyes of hers.

From the beginning onwards, she had heard various stances of people who would be sad because they never got love or admiration from their near ones. But she believed in another philosophy altogether. To say that her dad's indifference didn't affect her would be wrong, but she had learnt to overcome it at an early stage of life.

Her smile, her talk, her persuasion, her friendliness everything had earned her friends for life. What if she couldn't get love from her family, she had learnt to earn love from people. And that was the reason, she wasn't the sullen Riddhima people expected her to be, she was instead a fun-loving and friendly girl with the right proportions of maturity and immaturity, the kind of person people wished they were, or at least were present in their life.

Meeting Armaan was like a boon for Riddhima. She still remembered the first time she had met him, when she had gone to meet the "Gang" of children outside and had seen Armaan already playing with them. And seeing him, just made her want to see more.

He was everything a perfect guy could be. Handsome, more than needed, with a smile that could send out positive vibes to people sitting even a mile away. A kiddish nature, when he was fighting with the kids and convincing them that he wasn't out in the game of cricket they were playing.

All this from looking at him at a single glance, anyone would ask. But it was true! Riddhima couldn't help but drool over him and feel enchanted. All her life, she had been subjective to unwanted attention including the first week of University, but this time someone else was subject to her attention, which was a pretty huge deal.

Finally breaking off her reverie when the cricket ball actually hit her wrist, she looked forward to see Armaan looking at her apologetically.

Armaan couldn't thank his stars enough to have brought Riddhima to the kids' hangout spot, when he saw her in the middle of his annoying argument with them. But in his own dreamland, he had absentmindedly hit the ball in her direction and it hit her hand. All he could do as reflexive reaction was give her an apologetic look and move towards her with a sheepish smile.

"Ermm, I'm sorry. I didn't know you were standing here and I just zoned out and the ball hit you! I'm so sorry. I mean, I never intended to hurt you but then the ball just came flying towards you when I hit it. I don't know, I'm-!! Leave that, show me your hand, did it hit you on the wrist?", Armaan said in a trail of anxiety and apology along with a hint of care.

Looking skeptically at her wrist, he was just going to pick her wrist up, when Riddhima started laughing. He looked up at her confusedly and raised his eyebrows as a question. He had hit her with a ball and she was laughing...that was not normal. Had the ball hit her head and ruined her mental stability instead of hitting her hand??

"It's just nothing. This scene just reminded me of Harry Potter, when Professor Lockhart was going to fix his wrist after the Quiddich match and then he ends up taking away the entire bone itself!!", saying so she began laughing again while Armaan just stared at her.

She looked so delusional and surreal, that for a moment he was lost. But the moment he regained composure, he realized that she had just compared him to some crappy and stupid professor.

Offended, he said, "I don't think I'm so bad a doctor as of now. So I think I'll be able to take care of your bone without messing up your bone structure".

Riddhima smiled at that. This guy was so cute and childish, and going to be a doctor just like her., "Dr'."

"Armaan Mallik", Armaan replied to her question-like statement.

Raising her wrist, she brought it forward towards him and said "Dr Armaan, I guess I'll just have to take risk!!"

Sometimes, they say, it's better to take risks than be skeptical, because sometimes risks can be far more rewarding. Riddhima's risk was what led to the two people walking down the street with an irrevocably in love emotion reflecting in their eyes.

Finally the chapter's over!! Didn't turn out the way I wanted it to be, but hope you llike it.!!

And for the title I came up with three final choices, "In The Blink of An Eye", "A Beautiful Mess" and "An Escape to Paradise"!!

Comment and reply please!! Some people know and some don't, but those comments matter a hell lot to me!!

Not saying anything about when I'll update because as you can see, I can't even stand up to my words for a day!!

And NO, I haven't abandoned LOL or anything!! It's just that this story is fresh in my mind right now, so I'm just penning down everything coming into my brain!!

Oh! And I have decided AGAINST writing this in the flashback mode. The past will finish in 2-3 chapters and then it would be just the present and we'll finally come to the prelude I posted!!

Happy Reading!!

Comments please!!

Bisous,

Neha

Edited by SurrealFantasy - 13 years ago

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nyxx

@nyxx

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Posted: 13 years ago

#34

Wow!

First, NEVER in my dreams did i think you'd update soo soon! Usually, Id have to beg the writers or wait for atleast weeks for them to update bu for your update, Ill have to say thank you to you're english and Adv. Bio MARKS...😆 Im so proud of you nerdyyy! Congratss and keep working hard, and keep those marks high as well! They are always NEEDED! 😊

Second, the part was surely something. Well something as in the introduction of the characters. Armaan the charmer and just the whole flirt, yet innocent and naughty...very expected! and our Riddhima the smarty one who escaped all the ragging issues and truly became the popular gal...now that was unexpected. But Im just sooo glad and happy to be introduced to a character or wait...we can say a shade of Riddhima like that! I personally think Shes a very strong character with her own set of beliefs and she can bring anyone down ...like literally! Well atleast i can imagine that...ahaha!😆 Though shes avoiding the whole popularity issue...Im sure shes going to be more in the light now...well since...duh...Armaans going to enter her life?!?! LOL! Same goes for him as well. So is Armaan involved in the ragging too...im sure he is...and if he finds out Riddhima escaped..uh Oh A BIG TAKRAAR!

Third, regarding the flashback mode...well I do appreciate this way but youre the writer so its really upto you to decide. Do you think you can deliver the story better this way or going back and forth with flashback/present? Considering the fact that LOL is in the flashback mode...just see how it goes for you there and then decide :) Yeahh you're probably like...this girl is just blabbing and not giving any proper answer! 😆 But i cant say much...its too early to decide and though Im eager to know whats happening in the prelude...Im kind of exicted to see how theyre going to MEET. And sometimes, when we're in the whole flashback mode...you have to really strive to do justice to both phases and that must be tough...since greedy readers like me will demand for more updates on both phases! LOL I hope i made sense because...well yeahhh! LOL

Okies I think I blabbed ALOT already. And this was only like a quarter of the first chapter...OHH EEM GEE..Imagine when you update the full part whats gunna happen. lets hope im not busy with midterms and stuff. So yeah, Update soon duddette. And woah...you live in Italy? Sickk yoo! I might be visiting there this summer...well like a family trip. If i do come...i DEMAND to see you ahaha! Goodluck with school...you'll do well nerdyy im sure :)

Tc!

Edited by nyxx - 13 years ago

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Posted: 13 years ago

#35

wows great part! cont soon pleasee

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Simran

@kajenarshianya

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Posted: 13 years ago

#36

Wow. I really liked the plot of this ff. and the install was really nice

i liked the way armaan said what love was. that was funny

and riddhima omg she is sooo cute

i cant wait to read more. please continue soon and if possible, please PM me.

thanks,

Simran :)

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Aanya

@Aanya.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#37

Nehaaa! Itna jaldi update kiya! Weee 😆

And congratulations on your grades <3 :)

Coming to the update, it was so fabulous!! I loved loved loved it! I liked the beginning, where you described Armaan, it was perfect ☺️

As for whether or not you should do this story in flashback...I prefer not, because somehow I feel that not doing it in flashback gives more space to a writer...what am I saying? 🤔

Coming to Riddhima, I LOVED her character! Have you put a bit of yourself in her?? I'm kinda like that too...except I've never been ragged 😆

I adore the story so far, it's absolutely amazing <3 <3 :)

Continue soon!

xoxo

Aanya

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Neha

@SurrealFantasy

Dazzler

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Posted: 13 years ago

#38

Originally posted by: Aanya_taanu4evr
Nehaaa! Itna jaldi update kiya! Weee 😆

And congratulations on your grades <3 :)

Coming to the update, it was so fabulous!! I loved loved loved it! I liked the beginning, where you described Armaan, it was perfect ☺️

As for whether or not you should do this story in flashback...I prefer not, because somehow I feel that not doing it in flashback gives more space to a writer...what am I saying? 🤔

Coming to Riddhima, I LOVED her character! Have you put a bit of yourself in her?? I'm kinda like that too...except I've never been ragged 😆

I adore the story so far, it's absolutely amazing <3 <3 :)

Continue soon!

xoxo

Aanya

I know right?? I never thought I'll update in just a day!! But what can I say...I am TOO good..awesome, wonderful😎..uhm...running out of adjectives!!😆

And Thanks, that's the reason I updated yesterday itself...I'm gonna get my Precalculus grade today and I am a dud at Math!!😳

Ahh!Armaan is always perfect!! No matter where you go, which FF you read, Armaan is <3 Adorable in every sense!!

Flashback Mode is still an issue!! Depends on how much time I have for updating!! Flashback writing takes a lot more time!!😕

And Riddhima is a bit like me...not completely!! 😳Actually Riddhima has been this snobby, always in the wrong, shy girl, I just wanted to change that. Poor thing...She needs a transformation from other FFs!!😆

Thought of some titles yet???

Bisous,

Neha

P.S: Like I said, I'm gonna pester you so READ LOL!!!!!🤣

Edited by SurrealFantasy - 13 years ago

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Neha

@SurrealFantasy

Dazzler

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Posted: 13 years ago

#39

Originally posted by: nyxx

Wow!

First, NEVER in my dreams did i think you'd update soo soon! Usually, Id have to beg the writers or wait for atleast weeks for them to update bu for your update, Ill have to say thank you to you're english and Adv. Bio MARKS...😆 Im so proud of you nerdyyy! Congratss and keep working hard, and keep those marks high as well! They are always NEEDED! 😊

Second, the part was surely something. Well something as in the introduction of the characters. Armaan the charmer and just the whole flirt, yet innocent and naughty...very expected! and our Riddhima the smarty one who escaped all the ragging issues and truly became the popular gal...now that was unexpected. But Im just sooo glad and happy to be introduced to a character or wait...we can say a shade of Riddhima like that! I personally think Shes a very strong character with her own set of beliefs and she can bring anyone down ...like literally! Well atleast i can imagine that...ahaha!😆 Though shes avoiding the whole popularity issue...Im sure shes going to be more in the light now...well since...duh...Armaans going to enter her life?!?! LOL! Same goes for him as well. So is Armaan involved in the ragging too...im sure he is...and if he finds out Riddhima escaped..uh Oh A BIG TAKRAAR!

Third, regarding the flashback mode...well I do appreciate this way but youre the writer so its really upto you to decide. Do you think you can deliver the story better this way or going back and forth with flashback/present? Considering the fact that LOL is in the flashback mode...just see how it goes for you there and then decide :) Yeahh you're probably like...this girl is just blabbing and not giving any proper answer! 😆 But i cant say much...its too early to decide and though Im eager to know whats happening in the prelude...Im kind of exicted to see how theyre going to MEET. And sometimes, when we're in the whole flashback mode...you have to really strive to do justice to both phases and that must be tough...since greedy readers like me will demand for more updates on both phases! LOL I hope i made sense because...well yeahhh! LOL

Okies I think I blabbed ALOT already. And this was only like a quarter of the first chapter...OHH EEM GEE..Imagine when you update the full part whats gunna happen. lets hope im not busy with midterms and stuff. So yeah, Update soon duddette. And woah...you live in Italy? Sickk yoo! I might be visiting there this summer...well like a family trip. If i do come...i DEMAND to see you ahaha! Goodluck with school...you'll do well nerdyy im sure :)

Tc!

Even I didn't think I would update in a day!! But well...I was just a bit too high!!😆

Nerdy???😲 🤓You are the person who talked about photosynthesis when I used a literary device about flowers...you call ME nerdyy??🤣

Armaan is perfecto as usual!! <3☺️ And Riddhima NEEDED to be fun-loving!! I'm tired of the ever problematic Riddhimas!!😆

When I'll update is a huge question!! I am stuck in between these stacks of notes and textbooks, Writing is just the way I ease myself...when I have time to that is!!🤔

And and blabbing?!?! Go look at my comments on AWOTB...they turn out to be as long as the updates!!🤣 So when it comes to blabbering away to glory...believe me I completely get it!! In fact no one gets it better than me!!!!😎

Ahhh...School!! Just two words: SCHOOL.SUCKS.😳

Bisous,

Neha

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Zarqaa

@cant.be.assed.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#40

res! *edited*

Yes i know! i bet you are glad that i FINALLY edited! LOL i didnt before cause i was just being lazy hehe

But dont expect this comment to be long cause the part wasnt either! Thats the rule, the longer the part, the longer the comment🤣 I know it sounds evil but that how i am :P

Now coming to the part..i love this flashback mode, i think that you should continue most of it in to flashback mode and when it comes to a certain point in the story where it should go to the present then you should change it to the present :) But its entirely your decision, im just giving my opinion 😆

OMG im loving this Armaan! Hes so flirty and amazing! Dont ask me whether i like this Armaan or LOL Armaan, cause i dont know the answer to that yet but after reading this part im loving this Armaan for now but i will see how they both turn out to make a final conclusion on which one is better Lmao!

I love his flirty personality..and i couldnt stop laughing on how you wrote his answer to the question "What is love?"🤣 It was hilarious but true! Guys are literally like that! Especially the guys in UK

Wow Riddhima became popular on the first day! Does that happen in the real world?🤔 Coz it doesnt happen in our school😛😆 I love her nature, even though she never got the love from her parents shes still so cheerful and lively and she doesnt let the depressing things in life slow her down :) Its make her stronger and helps her face the things in life. LOL Armaan was stalking Riddhima...too early for being THAT crazy na?🤣 WOW even though Riddhima is so lively and happy she doesnt like the attention?! :O Her character is very interesting i cant wait to read more about it..

Aw even Riddhima is falling for Armaan, who cant go crazy over him? :P

🤣🤣 Harry Potter! Riddhima hasa unique mind! That literally cracked me up! I would never think of that and people call me weird and crazy but Riddhima takes it to a whole new level! :P Shes so random, im loving that about her now cause shes like me in that bit 😆

Aw i loved the last paragraph...i dont know why but i just did! :P

Phew! Finished!

^^^^ To think about it for a short comment thats pretty long🤔 Ehh the longer it is the more better :P

Continue soon x

P.S. NOW UPDATE! 😈

Edited by zARqaa_X - 13 years ago