A Drunken Melody- AR OS ;)

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A Drunken Melody

Then there was complete silence

Emotions rose and flooded with hushed hindrance

A sad source of light blinded their sight

One that was confused and that sat in fright

And like every love story...

Both their hearts were broken and left in tragedy.

There sat a moon on the sky that twinkled as they laughed hard. The beach silent and weary of those around while the humble shores swished to the sound of battling waves that washed on to their feet. The night silenced by the voice of life, as a whisky laugh exchanged and shook their hearts.

"I hate him!"

"I hate her!"
They yelled after one another, a drunken melody to the moon that sat comfortable and mocked their broken hearts. Roars of wasted laughter unleashed upon them, as they chortled loud yet their voice trembled in melancholy, trying
and erasing any sort of emotion that embedded within.
Slowly and slow the colour of the sky darkened, further descending into the unknown. Their bottles clinched in palms while both drank away the pain that soothed their souls.
The day was lost and the moon had come out and under the stars and close to the wide sea Armaan and Ridhimma sat watching and laughing at nature that reminiscent their broken hearts.
Slowly and slow the colour of the sky darkened, further descending into the unknown. Their bottles clinched in palms while both drank away the pain that soothed their souls.
The laughs died down as sprinkles of water eroded their sight. Rain, now? Both turned towards each other's reach, confused, puzzled and drunk. Watching the rain jump freely into the pool of water, buried and forgotten feelings awakened in the cries of the rain.
Their eyes once more met but with an urge flickered by changing mood of the night. It stormed. Rained and washed their drunken breaths yet they sat still, staring blurrily and battling emotions that rose and flooded within the hushed hindrance. Echoing and deafening both with silence that shivered in their skin.
Sprinkles of water run down the curve of her face, delicately and innocently kissing the pale of her skin. The bright blue of his eyes warmed with a soothing light comforting her even in the dead of night. The desire to burn in each other's embrace had risen yet both sat lost in the depth of each other's souls.
Holding breaths intact, he leapt forward slow & frightful, and with caution their lips met. The night once again whistled and danced in heavy rains as their bodies collided in a warm embrace.
Then there was complete silence

Emotions rose and flooded with hushed hindrance

A new source of light poured in their sight

One that was dazed and sought to take flight

And like every love story...

Both their hearts and bodies met in beauty.

Heyaaa, just felt a bit poetic. I am sorry for the bad poems and the tragic attempt of ryhming by me. LOL! I started writing and then that something turned into something else and then it turned into this. I know I NEED to update my FF's and I will but IDK when, sorry Antara & Ashu, I know ur both waiting for Gangster and Guilty sensation. ;)
PS; ARGHHH I FORGOT THAT NOW I HAVE AN OS GALLERY- TOTES FORGOT TO POST IT THERE. *SAD FACE*!
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Aanya. thumbnail
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Posted: 14 years ago
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*EDITED*


Okay was this amazing or was this amazing? 😳

I loved it to bits! <3

Coming to the OS, WOW. You should write poetry more often, Trust me. I loved the beginning! And haha they were drunk?! Woh bhi because of their respective ex-es? Awesomee! *Barney Stinson style* 😆

And there weren't too many words but you brought out their emotions, the beauty of the night and made the whole thing completely ethereal <3 :)

I loved the slightly poetic edge to this OS! Write more stuff like this :D Title dekhke I thought sad hoga but this was just so dreamy <3 Especially the end. *Sigh* <3

Completely amazing!

Write more and remember to post it in your OS gallery the next time 🤣

xoxo
Aanya
Edited by Aanya_taanu4evr - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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nice os

poems r good too

keep it up
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Posted: 14 years ago
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very nice
keep writing...
thnx 4 pm
n plz updt ur ffs
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Posted: 14 years ago
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res

*Edited*

Hey Priyanka! Once again, you take my breath away! That was one hell of an ff. Lol! Your poetry was awesome, work a little on the rhyme though! Now, m mentionin the rhyme cuz u are concerned about it though I personally believe that the beauty of poetry never lies in the rhyme. Never. And it was so romantic, made my heart flutter. Ammy and Ridzy, both heart-broken, meet each other, and then things happen. Things. *sigh* *blush* :)))))))))) I loved, and as I always say, take writing as a career! And yeah, PLEASE UPDATE GANGSTER! Like please, before the essence goes off, not that it will, but yeah, it does make a difference. You, of all people, should know that! I am desperately waiting for an update.
Lots of love,
Antara:)
Edited by belle_moi - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Nice one buddy.
Thanx 4 d pm.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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wooow i loved it! :D you are not rubbish at poems your great at them! do write some more :)
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hey Pri
that was amazinggg
loved it
thanks for pm
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Posted: 14 years ago
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hey..
awesome os ..
beautifully written..
do write more
thnx 4 da PM!!
tc.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Awesome. Thanks for the pm

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