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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hey guys this is my 1st ever fic on the fiction plz tell me how is it and give ur comment
Geet come down running on stairs very fast and sit near her daadi
geet : dadi mujhe doctor banna hai
Dadi" kya karegi tu doctor banke haan
Geet: dadi main ghareeb logo ka ilaaj karungi
Listen thi dadi give a tight slap on her face and grab her hair in her fist
Dadi " sun ladki tu yaha ham sab pe ek bojh hai suna tune...
Geet: dadi ...geet screamed in fear and terror
Dadi: ja aur jaake bhains se doodh laike aa...aur kabhi sochna bhi nahi kuch banneka .tu bane gi to sirf ek biwi jo ghar ka kaam kare ya phir hamahre ghar ki ek naukraani .tera baap to mar gaya lekin tujhe hamre sar pe chod gaya...pata nahi tujhe paida hi kyun kiya tha agar marna hi tha to...said this dadi jerked her hard making her fall omn a floor
Geet look at the dusty floor and saw her tears dripping on it...she didnt dare to look up..may be babaji alway wanted her to see like this...may be thier is no hero fo her...she dont have any write to claim her family ...she dont have any writwe to saw a dream...she dont have any right to live her life.
Maaan look at the old aged man in sitting in front of him with his head down.
Maan chew his chwingum and rolled it in her mouth
maan" so /mr handa , aap yaha phir khaali haat
Handa: ji mr khurana mere paas paise nahi jhai wapis krne ko
Maan: to
:handa; meri haisiyat nahi hai paise lotane ki
Maan: to phir udhaar kyun liya hun
Hnada:wo main...plz...muhe...maaf..kardijiye
Maan laughed at his request did he mad really think he will leav him.
Maan come forword and hept his elbow over his table
Maan: kitne log hai ghar main
jhanda: ji meri beti heer aur bhanji geet
maan look at him for a long time
Maan: ok aapke saare paise main maas kardunga...ut ek shart pe
handa: kaisi shart ji
Maan: i want geet on my bed everynightt to warm it
Handa look at him shocked and think for a while
Handa: ji theek hai ab geet apki...
plz comment guys so i can update it
love u all

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Posted: 14 years ago
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add me...waiting for nxt part
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awesome intro plzzz update pretty soon n plz pm me
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Awsome start
Add me in ur pm list
Do update soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
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interesting
Plz continue soon dear
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awesome intro plzzz update n give intro of characters n add me to ur pm list plzzz
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Posted: 14 years ago
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owrme start...
Do pm me nxt tym...
Update soon...
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Posted: 14 years ago
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nice start. plz update soon
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Continue soon!!!!!!!!!!!!😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
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whoaaa.. y is maan doing this to our poor geet.. ab kya hoga.. jab hero hi pehle se villain hai.. nice start.. continue soon..

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