My Second fanfic : pyaar mein twist

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well guyz i promised i'd start my 2'nd fanfic after my exams so here goes... n its gonna b a long one...i'm free n all raring 2 go😃in fact i'l update it everyday n b regular unlike last time😉

It was a regular saturday morning at Maurya High. Students were hanging out at the canteen for a late breakfast ..making plans 4 movies,shopping,visiting family...sonal masi smiled at the non-stop chatter as she went to serve coffee to vrinda and ashi.

"sat. morning's always the same here,"she said with her trademark warm smile."u children speak more than u do all week." vrinda smiled at her but ashi seemed lost in her own world.in fact,her face waz rather sad."is anything wrong,beta?"asked sonal masi.vrinda shook her head at her,signalling sonal masi not 2 say ne more."i'm fine masi,"said ashi glumly but even as she said it it waz obvious she waz lying.her mind was somewhere else...based on last night's incident which had shook her in a way which was difficult 2 imagine.

It had been Yuvi's birthday treat in his room for his select group of friends...sid,varun,ranveer,tia, meher,pri,ashi,vrinda...n of course his latest girlfriend latty!ashi had known yuvi n latty had started going around...she evn knew dat latty had proposed yuvi 3 times and the 3'rd time he had agreed.but wot she wasn't prepared 4 waz the way she n yuvi were all over each other yest. latty constantly held his hand, and clung 2 him like he waz her sole property.she insisted he give her the cake first,she kissed him on the cheeck,she made sure she waz next 2 him 24/7 and the worst part waz...yuvi seemed 2 enjoy all the attention in an amused way.

"but why shud i mind?"thought ashi.after all,she n yuvi had broken up almost a yr back.or rather,she had broken up wid him.it waz just dat when she saw him with latty she felt sometimes--"waz i right?shud i hav given him a second chance?"the word 'second chance' kept revolving in her head.yuvi had begged,pleaded 4 a second chance...but she had never consented.how many times her hardness of heart had wrung tears from him... and yest. he seemed genuinely happy,if not delighted, to have latty. fawning on him.

why oh why waz life so hard...ashi sighed n something hade her remeber the way latty had kissed yuvi.in fact the way she said-"MY boyfriend" --putting all the emphasis on my.there waz a time when he had been ashi's boyfriend,when they had deld hands n walked on a balmy moonlit evening never dreaming of separation, of parting,of tears.when the moment had been everything,when 1 kiss had been worth more than words cud ever express.....there had never been any need 2 b possesive,2 say "MY boyfriend" bcoz they both knew they belonged 2 each other n never mind abt the world....

"ashi,plz have ur coffee,"said vrinda timidly.she had been watching ashi who waz in a state of mind which waz clearly distured."maate,plz mujhe akela chod do..." said ashi impatiently."c'mon,ashi,i'm ur friend..." "so when did i say we were enemies?maate,friendship ka yeh matlab nahin ki we hav 2 tell each other everything is it?"

vrinda smiled-"u acknowledge sumthing is the matter?ashi i know u r upset abt yuvi n latty." "vrinda plz!"ashi pulled hersled 2gether."main yuvi aur latty ke baare mein kyon sochoo?i mean,do u think i hav nothing better 2 do than worry abt a psycho n his loser girlfriend?in fact i wud hav said they r made 4 each other."at that moment she happened 2 look up n wot she saw made her choke on her coffee....

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Posted: 19 years ago
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nice 1 Neelakshi,

is it Yuvi??

waiting for u to continue SOON 😉

Divya
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Posted: 19 years ago
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hey its wonderful amaziiiiiiing and the best 😛 😛 😛 first part is really impressive 👏
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Posted: 19 years ago
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I am glad that you finally started a new fic Neelu. I loved the way you expressed Ashi's mixed feelings though I am not too fond of Yuvi-Latty as a couple.Continue soon.
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Posted: 19 years ago
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vry gud neelakshi but uv and latty 🤢
waitin 4 d next part 😊
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It was yuvi and latty...as usual hand in hand.She was looking up at him,her eyes fixed on his face,hanging onto his every word.she laughed loud enough for the entire canteen to hear.
"yuvi...u r so funny!"she cried in a delighted voice."where do you wanna sit?" "Anywhere you want,"replied yuvi and his voice sounded rather tired.There was a table not very far from ashi and vrinda,and the two sat there.Ashi's and yuvi's eyes met briefly for a second but yuvi quickly looked away.He tried to listen to what latty was saying but her constant babbling made him irritated.and really he couldn't fathom what was so interesting about EXACTLY why mitali and rahul had broken up...
He stole another look at ashi.she was nonchalenly sipping her coffee,but something in her face made his heart tighten.She looked so frail,so sad...almost as sad as she had when they had first met after their break up.There had been a haunting quality about her eyes that still tormented him when he thought about that day..."why,why can't i forget that?"he thought,angry with himself."its over...over 4 good.she trefused to forgive me...and we have both moved on."after all he had suffered enough-punishment for what he had done?-maybe.
There had been dark and dreary days...long nights...when all he had dreamt of waz her...of holding her so tightly that she coudn't go anywhere...couldn't leave him.but she had always managed to escape...and he had woken from his dream in cold sweat...trembling like a reed.and then he had actually cried,silent,heavy as lead tears which he would have been ashamed to acknowledge even to sid.It was then that he had wished he could turn back time...make amends...make her realize he loved her so deeply that it HURT...damn it hurt like hell.those tears hadn't lasted long...later he just felt a bitter resentment building up in his heart...as bitter as the silent agony which threatened to tear his world apart.
"yuvi?yuvi!"latty's voice broke in on his thoughts."yuvi,that's the 5'th time i called you.wot's wrong sweetheart?"she reached out to touch his hand.he aoutomatically drew his hand away..."oh nothing latty really.u were saying...?" "mitali,yuvi...she' such a loser.i mean she keeps crying like a baby.why doesn't she realise break up is not the end of the world?"latty smirked looking around to see if mitali waz around."C'mon,break up is painful,say wot u will,"retorted yuvi, n his voice waz loud enough even 4 ashi 2 hear.she looked at him,n so dis latty."are u thinking of sumthing in particular?"she asked and there was a sarcastic edge to her voice..
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Posted: 19 years ago
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CANT I THE FIRST ONE 2 REED IT .AWESOM WRK
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Posted: 19 years ago
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its awesome neelu 👏 👏 👏....loved it.....plz continue soon😃
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Posted: 19 years ago
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its very good..plesse continue soon 👏
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Posted: 19 years ago
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It's awesome 👏
plz continue soon........asap

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