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The first Shakkar scene was nice! It was a good scene with dialogues apt, making sense with the situation. Where Shantanu is worried of how he will bring the change in Dhulwadi for the better of the village!! Khanak right in extending her support to her husband...
Give and take everything... I still feel that it was not apt!! This is my take or say an OS for this scene. I for one cannot and refuse to forget the MMS issue so easily, what with Khanak being a woman of strength and dignity!! For that matter no woman with a strong will and sense of dignity will take such issues lightly or forgive so easily..
OS on Shakkar scene!!
Meethi shuruwaat
Khanak: Sitting at the chullah and seeing Shantanu pacing about with a worried expression in his eyes.. and she thinks.. 'Shantanu bahut hi pareshaan lag rahein hain. Mujhe pataah hain, woh sacche dil se Dhulwaadi ke liye kuch accha larna chahte hain, par main kis tarah unko bharosa dilaaon..' And then she remembers her adaa and the shakkar and rises and smiles softly encouraging him says to him
"Shantanu, mere adaa humeshaa kehte the.. koi bhi kaam karo to poore vishwaas se karo.. mehnat zaroor karo, par phal ki chinta na karo. Aur dar lage to ek chamach shakkar kha kar dar ko bhaga do"
Shantanu looks at her indulgently and hoarsely whispers, "Khanak, mujhe pataah hain, mujhe jab bhi tumhaari zaroorat hoti hain, tab tab tum mere liye maujood hoti ho!! Par yeh baat tumhe apne adaa ne bacchi samajh ke ki hogi! Main to bada hoon, main darta nahin?"
Khanak replies with a smile still holding the spoonful of sugar and tilting her head a bit, "Nahi Shantanu, dar sab ko lagtaa hain, chaahe woh baccha ho ya boodha! Dar ko dabaana nahin chahiye, bhagaa dena chhiye!! Par agar aap ko nahin chahiye to koi baat nahin" Turning away feeling bad she moves but ot very far as Shantanu holds her other free hand and stops her.. She shivers as the touch brings back memories and in spite of her resolve to remain neutral, a soft shudder runs down her spine, a little sugar sprinkling down from the sppon, but she has the nerves of steel and a strong resolve so compressing her lips she waits not giving in but also not able to shy away from his touch..
Shantanu grits his teeth as he can sense the resistance in her but tries to ignore that and turns her slowly. . She has her eyes downcast as they are full of tears, as the hurt from his doubting her came back rushing to the fore. He smiles clueless of her feeling hurt and still holding her free wrist with one hand holds her other wrist which has the spponful of sugar and rasing it eats the sugar. Unavoidably, an errant tear rolls down her cheek and as soon as he sees that, he frowns taking the spoon from her throwing it to the floor and grabs her shoulders and voices huskily, "Khanak!! Please, tum.. tum ro kyun rahi ho!!? Main.. nahin dekh sakta tumhe rote hue.. tum jaanti ho na?" Please mujhe batao!" Though he voices his concern he knows that somewhere the pain that he has caused ehr is responsible for her tears..
She does not reply and tries to move away from him. But he stops her again by grabbing he wrist and turning her tips her chin up.. the tears swimming in her hurt eyes speak their tale. No words are necessary.. He cringes and hurts too. He wants to ask for her forgiveness. He wants pardon, he wants to say so many things. But he hates those tears in her eyes, he wants nothing else but to soothe the pain away. Grimly he frowns and gritting his teeth he wipes her tears and then softly begs.. "Khanak, nahin... kuch mat kaho. Main samajh gayaa." Going down on his knees in front of her, and surprising her he sto[ps her from reacting and continues "Khanak, aaj mujhe mat roko please. Aaj mujhe maafi maangne do? Mujhe pataah hain jo maine kiya, woh maafi ke kaabil to nahin hain, par kya tum yeh meri ek sabse badi galati maaf nahin kar sakti? Jaanta hoon ke maine tumhe bahut badi thes pahunchaayi hain, aur mujhe ehsaas bhi hain us galati ka. Main us galati ko mita to nahin sakta, lekin yeh vaada zaroor kar sakta hoon aur vishwas dilata hoon ke dobaar aisi kpi galati nahin hogi... please mujhe maaf kar do please Khanak.. main.. main nahin ji sakta tumhaare bina. Tumhaare saath ki mujhe zaroorat hain!!"
Khanak is melting down, and seeing that, he still on his knees, hugs her middle and hides his head in genuine apology, "Tum theek kehti ho Khanak. tum humesha theek kehti ho, Dar sab ko lagtaa hain. Jaise ki ab mujhe lag rahaa hain, tumhe khone ka dar. Pease kHanak, mera yeh dar bhagaane ki meri madad karo! Please Khanak, maaf kar do mujhe!"
Khanak can't stop her tears and she can't always win over her heart. So she crumbles down and sobbing softly cups his chin prying his head and shakes her head at him chiding him gently. he reads her eyes, knows that even if she has softened and forgiven him, the hurt will remain for a long time and it will be his responsibility to erase that from he memory. And he promises to her and himself that how ever long it takes he shall do it. she raises him and he hugs her consoling her and feeling a relief that at least the spoonful of sugar did make a sweet beginning..
Ek meethi si shuruwaat.
I hope you like this meethi si shuruwaat friends. Do comment!😳 on my first OS😛
Enjoy😊
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