Tum bin jiya jaye kaise....NEW FF...Epi 6-Pg 19

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Hiiiiiii frnds I m starting a new FF on tasha .Hope u like it. Plzzzzz post ur comments n suggestions .Don't mind the entry of new characters .

Click d like button if u like it.

INDEX

Episode 1= Pg 1
Episode 2= Pg 5
Episode 3= Pg 7
Episode 4= Pg 11
Episode 5= Pg 14
Episode 6= Pg 19
EPISODE 1

SCENE-1 NAKUSHA MANSION (U.K)

The sun has risen. Nakusha mansion is just d name ,actually it is a small flat 2 give shelter 2 nakusha.The door opens into a hall with well furnished furniture n dere on a table phone is ringing. After 5 min a maid cums n picks d phone.

Maid: Hello. Who is it?

Sum one replies back.

Maid: She is sleeping.

A harsh reply is made.

Maid: ok ok!!! I will just wake her up n send her 2 u.........ya sure!

The maid hurriedly puts down d phone and runs up d stairs n stops in front of a room. She hesitates a bit in knocking d door bt finally she knocks it n says "Tai, wake up . ur boss is extremely angry ."n knocks .She finds dat d door is already open n enters d room.

The room is full of pictures of nakusha's aayi ,baba ,sethji n her elder sister.

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D maid yells "naku tai wake up plzz its 8'o'clock".

Suddenly d silver blanket on d bed gets disturbed n we get 2 see b beautiful Nakusha with her hair open n in a pink night gown .She get tensed abt d time n shouts back."8 baj gaye aur tu mujhe ab utha rhi hai" n she runs to d bathroom n d maid gets busy in taking out Naku's dress n replies

"Tai kal aap raat mein der se aayi thi to maine socha........"

Naku -"kya socha....tu samajhti nhi h na.....achcha tumhe kaise pata ki Mr.Rao ka mood disturbed hai'..???"

"unka phone aaya tha ....unhone aapko bulaya hai" says d maid.

Naku gets ready wearing a black pant, white full sleeved shirt n a sleeveless jersey with a high pony tail (Guys her luk is so b'coz of her profession which u will know in d next scene...

She bumps into an auto

SCENE 2- CID OFFICE (U.K)

Nakusha reach d office panting. She calms down n gains courage 2 go in.She enters in d cabin.Mr.Rao is an old man .He hav a stern luk but he is kind at heart.He is strict abt work n want Nakusha 2 hav a name in dis world.

Rao: So u r awake now..?(*switches off his laptop n gav her an austere luk*)

Naku is a bit scared n try 2 make excuses"Sir wo.... I was...I had....ah...."

She doesn't know wat 2 say.

Rao:Naku don't try 2 make lame excuses ... u r so careless nowadays ....Is this d way an INVESTIGATOR OFFICER shud behave.....???

(So guys she is IO dats y I gav her dat luk hope u guys like it....)

Naku: sorry sir I was busy searching clues for d D'cruze murder case culprit.

Rao: ok den....now listen 2 me now....dere is a gangster who has killed 25 people in 10 days.

Naku listens attentively.

Rao continues:.....he had already been exploiting his country's treasury bt now he has also an eye on our money.

Naku is confused.....she ask;"our money????is he not from UK????"

Rao: no......he is from India.

Nakusha is shocked on hearing abt d gangster being an Indian .In these 2 years ,she had not discussed anything abt India bcoz of her ugly past .The word India brought back 2 her sum memories which she had buried. Her face was pale n has lost the valour wich it had.

She turns 2 Mr.Rao n says "Indian h....to....mujhs ..kya kam h....."

Rao: "Nakusha tum use janti ho....aur maine Indian CID office tumhara transfer letter bhijva diya h.....tum uske ghar mein rehti thin na...???".He enquired.

Nakusha tried to endure her pain n asked weakly:-k..k...kiske..ghar mein...

Rao: Dutta Shreeram patil ke ghar mein..

Naku closes her eyes n tears starts rolling down .(The screen blacks out)

Hope u liked it .I know u guys hav missed our Dutta bt i will giv him an entry in d next episode.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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OMG betty....👏👏👏 itz juz awesum yaaaar...am in luv wth diz story❤️...OMG..and Naku...d sherni iz an IO here...tatz awesum....and unlike d real story, dutta makz hiz entry in d 2nd epiz....🥳
awaiting ur next update yaaaar...hope dutta makz a smashing entry ...may be in a ship or...i really donno vatz on ur mind😆but am sure u r going 2 give uz a rocking entry of dutta....!!😍
luvd d way u hav made d scenez wth direct conversatin and made dem into scene 1 and 2....!!👏👏
betty ..u never told uz u hav such a fiction 4 uz d otherday...diz iz a surpriz 2 alll of uz...😛luking frwd 2ur next update...!!!😍
and i simply luvd ur titile" Tum bin jiya jaye kaise..."..itz my most fav song....!!😃keep rocking...!!!👍🏼
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thanx a billion shona.............ya i hav written it days ago bt i was afraid dat may b u guys dont like it.........n u hav guessed it half-right Dutta's entry is beside a see-shore
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Originally posted by: betty123

thanx a billion shona.............ya i hav written it days ago bt i was afraid dat may b u guys dont like it.........n u hav guessed it half-right Dutta's entry is beside a see-shore

oh betty...😃who wd not like diz fiction yaaar...itz so well written...!! 👏👏so u wrote it dayz ago😛!!!am sure nw u muz hav d complete story on ur mind...!!😳
So i guesd it right.... dutta make hiz entry beside d seashor...but i swear i won ask u 4 more detailz coz..am really luving diz...😳it wd b grt if u update it every day..!!😃
betty got 2 leave nw yar...tc...awaiting ur next update...!!😊
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Originally posted by: shonapinky

oh betty...😃who wd not like diz fiction yaaar...itz so well written...!! 👏👏so u wrote it dayz ago😛!!!am sure nw u muz hav d complete story on ur mind...!!😳
So i guesd it right.... dutta make hiz entry beside d seashor...but i swear i won ask u 4 more detailz coz..am really luving diz...😳it wd b grt if u update it every day..!!😃

shona........i m sad 2day.......😭...actually i m going 2 my grandma's place 2morrow.......n will return next Monday......n i wont b able 2 meet u guys.....😭.........bt i m insisting my mother 2 leave me at home ...if she agrees den i can b here................n i can update it den only....
Edited by betty123 - 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: betty123

shona........i m sad 2day.......😭...actually i m going 2 my grandma's place 2morrow.......n will return next Monday......n i wont b able 2 meet u guys.....😭.........bt i m insisting my mother 2 leave me at home ...if she agrees den i can b here................n i can update it den only....

oh betty.....so 1 week u won b able 2 cum online...😭nw am not insisting u 2 update diz week yaaar...take ur own time...v ll wait 4 u...but if possible keep in touch yaaar...!v ll miss u lotz betty...!!🤗
Edited by shonapinky - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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omg betty loved it👏amazing start cant wait 2 read da next part please update quickly😃
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Posted: 16 years ago
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wow! amaging start yaar. i can't believe tasha story could be like this. waiting for dutta's entry. update soon.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: shabaza786

omg betty loved it👏amazing start cant wait 2 read da next part please update quickly😃

thanx sana i will update soon...........
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: swati2008

wow! amaging start yaar. i can't believe tasha story could be like this. waiting for dutta's entry. update soon.

hiii swati........
in d next episode i will give DUTTa a grand entry.....hope u like it..........

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