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Posted: 15 years ago
Awesome Scene .. Fattu ..loved reading it thoroughly ..

so it was the attack of the Sonias .. hahaha.. poor Pri .. loved Damziee's reaction ..loved that Soho takes after her Mom ...


very nice song.. everything seems apt for PriDa..isn't it Fattu?? hahaha

keep writing such scenes .. and also update ur FF ..I haven't forgotten abt it 😃


-- Mru

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Posted: 15 years ago
sorry for late rply
love it as usuall
i like ending so cute prithvi wants a girl and damini so i m waiting for soha
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Posted: 15 years ago
Thanks again everyone for liking the last scene!!

Well here's another very silly and random one, have taken a different approach this time!!


Fiction 3 on Pg. 21...

------Fiction 4----------------

Disclaimer: This post is purely for fun, no intention to hurt anyone's feelings or to make fun of any dialect of speaking/language.

Kanfoosan and Jealousy

This takes place a few months after the PTC(boy I haven't written that in a while) have left and Dhruv(champ) is there, but yea no PriDa baby yet.

Ok so Savni need a nanny who can look after Dhruv and they have given the job of finding the right person to Prithvi and Damini.

Prithvi and Damini are in the living room playing with Dhruv and having a nice laugh! Dhruv is totally fascinated by Prithvi and Prithvi is cuddling him and tickling him and they both are looking just adorable and Damini is admiring how good Prithvi is with kids, thinking about her future and blushing.

Just then the guard informs of a lady coming for the job of the maid and they call her in. She is really the talkative type and starts right away.

Lady sees Prithvi with Dhruv.

Lady: Oh sahab aap ka beta to bohut pyaara hai. Bilkul appar gaya hai.
Prithvi and Damini look at each other and Damini kinds of blushes at the lady's confusion.
Prithvi: Ji, yeh mera beta nahi.
Prithvi and Damini @ the same time: Prithvi "Mere behen (since he considers Avni like his sister)" Damini:"Meri behen ka beta hai"
Lady pointing to each of them one at a time with a confused face:
Hain, aap ke behen ka, aapki bhi behen ka, matlab aap dono bhi bhai behen?
PriDa both jump: Kya? Nahin!!!
Lady: Par aap dono bhai behen nahin to…., choro, (looking towards Prithvi now) waisay sahab aap bohut chiknay ho, lagta nahi hai kay apki shaadi hui hai, to apka beta kaisay ho saktha hai!
Damini is now glaring at Prithvi.
Prithvi: ji, wo…. darasal…
Lady calls somebody from the back quickly and a young girl enters with 2 pigtails and a dupatta partially covering her head and holding the edge of it to her mouth and shying away when she sees Prithvi.
Lady- Sahab, yeh meri beti—Laali—yeh shaadi banana mangta.
Damini: (in her head)- Kya? What is this lady saying…acha lagtha hai is ladki ko apni shaadi mein bananas eat karnay hain—but why? Bohut ajeeb nahi yeh? But kya pata shayad aisa hi hota ho inkay village mein. But why is she telling Prithvi all this?

Prithvi understood what the lady was getting at and tried to say something but the lady kept going on and on.

Lady: Sahab, aap kaisi lugai (wife) mangtha?

Damini (thinking): Lugai? Ab yeh kya hota hai? Acha shayad iska matlab naukrani hai.

Prithvi, hesistating, looks towards Damini and smiles: Bilkul aisi hi.

Damini (thinking):Kya!! Prithvi tum mujhe naukrani bana rahay ho. Glares at him, tumhein to main dekhloongi, pehlay inhey yahan se bhagoon.

Lady: Sahab yeh apki behen nahi hai, to acha naukrani hai, aapke paas naukrani hai to humein kyun bulaya.
Acha waise koi baat nahi, yeh meri Laali hai na saare kaam jaanti hai, khooshurat bhi hai, khaana bhi acha baanati hai, app ka ghar bohut achay se chalaiygi.

Damini finally understood what the lady was getting at and she had had enough.

Damini blocks Prithvi protectively from the lady and her glaring daughter's view!

Damini: Ji main inki biwi hoon!! Samjhi aap, aur haan ab aap yahan se jashakti hain!
She shows then the door.

Damini to the guard: Make sure the next person that comes for this job isn't a young girl, if it's old lady with a young boy that should be fine.

Prithvi hears all this.

Prithvi: Damini, why are you saying all this? You don't trust me.

Damini: Touching Prithvi's face, I trust you, but not others. Didn't you see how that girl was glaring at you, hmph how dare she have the guts to look at you like that with me around. Sab mere pati ke peeche par gayain hain!

Damini's face was getting red with anger and Prithvi was just loving her jealousy.

He started moving closer and closer to her pushing her towards a wall, when Damini said: Dhruv! (Dhruv was there all by himself lying on the sofa)

Prithvi quickly turned away from Damini and went and picked Dhruv up in his arms. He then returned towards Damini.

Prithvi: Nice try Ms. Damini Saxena but don't think I am going to let you go this easily.

He comes back towards her holding Dhruv.

Prithvi: Dhruv bhi apni maasi ko kiss karna chahta hai, aura acha yeh kya kehraha hai (putting his ear towards Dhruv)- Oh kay pehlay kiss bharay papa karay.

Prithvi leans in and kisses Damini on her blushing red cheeks. Damini shys away and hugs him and the three of them hugging are picture perfect foreshadowing the coming future with Sohini there in Prida's arm instead of Dhruv!!

Well hope this is satisfactory! Have written it quite late at night, so don't hit me if it's not making sense!! Me and my randomness are best at late hours!!

~Fatima
Edited by desigirl_18 - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
Hi Fatima,
First of all, I loved the title "Kanfoosan and Jealousy"... 🤣
And of course, you lived up to it. 😆
Loved the whole confusion scene! In fact, I had to clutch tightly to my chair in order to prevent me from falling off... 🤣
And seriously, Dam's got a point, why are all the girls after her dear hubby?! 😆 (Ok, I think we know the answer... 😛)
The ending was great as well... Pri getting naughty again... 😆
And loved the way you related the last scene to what is to happen in the near future... 😳
Keep going, looking forward to more such scenes from you! 😃
- Ishaan 😊
Edited by ishaan11 - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago

heyy nice scene fatu di ... awesum ...

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Posted: 15 years ago
man it was hilarious.....confusion all de way😆

btw.....fab fiction sweety......
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Posted: 15 years ago
Fatima!!! 👏😛
That was hilarious!! 😆😆😆
Very well written and the crazyiness was fun to read!!
hehe 😆- Am waiting for another crazy idea to hit u some time
soon so that u can post that too! 😆😛
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Posted: 15 years ago
faatu ! u bk wth anodr awsm scene deary ?!!!!! 👏 👏 👏

aww.. i miss ur scenes n updates ! 😳

i liked this chweet part ! i cud totrally imagine d shok prida wud hv on theri face on being calld bro n sis ! hahaha ! imagine gaucha 's faces in dat scnes ! zillion dollar ex[ressions ! wowieeeee ! hahaha 🤣


hmm pri getn nauty ! hmm... me likey likey ! 😉

gv me mre !

-Luv Niki ! 🤗


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Posted: 15 years ago
phele yeh atao FF kab udate karo gi?
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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: pridafan

phele yeh atao FF kab udate karo gi?



*runs to hide* 😆 and here i thought ppl forgot about it!! ok will try to update that next week hopefully if things workout, right now just deal with the random stuff i am coming up with here and there 😛 😉!!

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