Created

Last reply

Replies

287

Views

25.1k

Users

13

Likes

44

Frequent Posters

*Nishi* thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: _.serendipity._

Hey Nishi, I went through part of your story. It looks like such an interesting story. I'm sort of new here, so I have lots catching up to do. I will definitely read through the whole story when I have some time. I don't want to rush through and not be able to do justice to it. So that would be for later.
But the little I've read, I must say, it is lovely. Really. You write very well! I can totally see the stuff happen in my head as I read. And I'm really looking forward to being able to read it properly 😃

yeah dont rush.. its not good 😆
thanks.. 😳 im looking forward to more criticism cause i really want to improve my writing.. i feel like im doing well enough expressing what i actually see in my head. thanks again 😃
NIDIZ thumbnail
16th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 15 years ago
Thanks Nishi really missing it
had not read it scenes ages really nice one
*Nishi* thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: NIDIZ

Thanks Nishi really missing it
had not read it scenes ages really nice one

thanks 😃
Girl_2007 thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail
Posted: 15 years ago

*sighs deeply* did u kno that ur story has got a nostalgic feature and sweet dots at the same time?

*Nishi* thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: Girl_2007

*sighs deeply* did u kno that ur story has got a nostalgic feature and sweet dots at the same time?


thank u 😳
*Nishi* thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 15 years ago
So it all started with Jo finally getting the guts to ask Nadia out. They were texting each other other ends of the bus on the way home from a trip they took during school..

"Sooo.. you wanna go out?"
"Out where?"
"Outside.. the bus.."
"Oh for a sec I thought you were tryna ask me out"

(yeah just wanted to add that for fun.. that was a joke at our school... 😆😆😆)

That weekend Nadia happened to see Jo at the library. They say hi and stuff and decide to get icecream..
Now they're sitting around a bug circle like table (made out of stone) outside in the middle of the day. The sun is so hot its almost melting them too.. 😆

So why are you here? Jo starts off
You mean why did I move here? Nadia laughs
Yeah exactly
Well my dad got another job offer.. and we needed a place new. She said slowly.
What do you mean a place new.. Jo said not looking at her. Hoping to get more information. Instead, Nadia doesn't directly answer the question.. avoiding it like she always does.
People get tired of living in the same place for a long time, she finishes.


They talk for a long time and not noticing the time fly by. They finish their ice cream cones (which were pretty much melted by then) and sit back and look at the sunset. Jo has his arms behind his head and his legs on top of one of the benches. Nadia just sits back against the shop window and tilts her head. Then she takes out a camera and takes a picture of the sunset.

Sensing the sad quietness Jo thinks, This would be a perfect time to ask her whats wrong.

Nadia thinks of how it would be with Rina right here next to them. She would really like Jo's personality. Much different than the guys they knew back home. She puts her camera back and thanks God for the quietness of this evening.. The redish-orangish light is shining at them with the soft sound of the sea and some birds singing in the background.. She closes her eyes for a second. Then opens them again afraid that even though it's been a few years since Rina, she might cry again.
Jo looks over at her and stops. Maybe her secret isn't even that great. Maybe she's just a lonely person who just needs someone to talk to. She's probably just quiet cause she's the new girl here.. what's the big deal.

You know there's a beach nearby here He says.
Really? We should go sometime. I've never really been to a beach before.
You haven't??? 😲
No.. haha. at my old place there was just a lake with sand around it.
Hahaha.. I see. Well I think you're gonna really like this one.


P.S just so you know this story takes place in our time.. there are gonna be cell phones occasionally but I want this story to be pretty much technology free 😆 I want it to seem like they're just normal kids that live in this awesome place.. without having to worry about computers and cell phones and all that junk that makes u miss out on life 😛
Girl_2007 thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail
Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: *Nishi*

So it all started with Jo finally getting the guts to ask Nadia out. They were texting each other other ends of the bus on the way home from a trip they took during school..

woah realli! 😲

"Sooo.. you wanna go out?"
*shock*
"Out where?"
...😳
"Outside.. the bus.."
😕😆
"Oh for a sec I thought you were tryna ask me out"
😆😆😆😆 woah

(yeah just wanted to add that for fun.. that was a joke at our school... 😆😆😆)
😆 lolz u kno i was like realli surprised at the beginning of this chap coz the first thing i heard was Jo's proporsal 😆😆


That weekend Nadia happened to see Jo at the library. They say hi and stuff and decide to get icecream..
Now they're sitting around a bug circle like table (made out of stone [😆😆i idk why i find that funny but anyway.. ]) outside in the middle of the day. The sun is so hot its almost melting them too.. 😆 me too!! 😆 but not coz of the sun coz its cloudy here..

So why are you here? Jo starts off
You mean why did I move here? Nadia laughs
Yeah exactly
Well my dad got another job offer.. and we needed a place new. She said slowly.
What do you mean a place new.. Jo said not looking at her. Hoping to get more information. Instead, Nadia doesn't directly answer the question.. avoiding it like she always does.
People get tired of living in the same place for a long time, she finishes.


They talk for a long time and not noticing the time fly by. They finish their ice cream cones (which were pretty much melted by then) and sit back and look at the sunset. Jo has his arms behind his head and his legs on top of one of the benches. Nadia just sits back against the shop window and tilts her head. Then she takes out a camera and takes a picture of the sunset.
a camera..? what about her cell..? oh ya she had the camera wid her coz they came back from the trip. 😛

Sensing the sad quietness Jo thinks, This would be a perfect time to ask her whats wrong.
yup... awwwww!! 😳

Nadia thinks of how it would be with Rina right here next to them. She would really like Jo's personality. (me too 🥱😆)Much different than the guys they knew back home. She puts her camera back and thanks God for the quietness of this evening.. The redish-orangish light is shining at them with the soft sound of the sea and some birds singing in the background.. She closes her eyes for a second. Then opens them again afraid that even though it's been a few years since Rina, she might cry again.
Jo looks over at her and stops. Maybe her secret isn't even that great. Maybe she's just a lonely person who just needs someone to talk to. She's probably just quiet cause she's the new girl here.. what's the big deal.
yep yep.. that's how guys mite think.. 🥱 well done Nish😃

You know there's a beach nearby here He says.
yay aw! so instead of asking he thinks of cheering her up in some random way? 😛😆😃 kewl
Really? We should go sometime. I've never really been to a beach before.
You haven't??? 😲
No.. haha. at my old place there was just a lake with sand around it.
😆😆😆 lol! here's a big salty swimming pool wid sand around.. in Madrid..
Hahaha.. I see. Well I think you're gonna really like this one.
m gonna like it too 😛


P.S just so you know this story takes place in our time.. there are gonna be cell phones occasionally but I want this story to be pretty much technology free 😆 I want it to seem like they're just normal kids that live in this awesome place.. without having to worry about computers and cell phones and all that junk that makes u miss out on life 😛
🤣 wow, btw i like that 😃 and yah agree wid u about the last sentence

thnx for updating update again soon! lol
*Nishi* thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 15 years ago
thank u for ur comments arch 🤣 🤣🤣
well i meant by rina would like his personality cause Jo is like.. laid back and funny type roight 😎
anyway thank u again 😃
curledup thumbnail
16th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 5
Posted: 15 years ago
Hey nishi
never knew you owned a story
just read the whole thing!......its amazing.....desperately wanna know how Nadia's and Jo's story proceeds!
and a very happy late new year to you!
-aashifa-
Rafa.LunaPotter thumbnail
17th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 15 years ago
Chands..
Me read all the parts today!!
They are brilliant!!!
Loved reading them!!!
The next time u update..just PM me!!!
Thanks
love
Aranya

Related Topics

Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".