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Posted: 16 years ago
#71
OHHH!!! That was ridiculously hilarious! I love how this has that shakespearian feeling to it. Don't ask me how lol, cause I don't know but still...it does. What was that one play called again, "Midsummer's night dream or something like that? (I'm seriosly half-dead atm, so sorry for the crappy comment...)
Anyhoo, I love YOU in this FF, and omg, the way you described the fairy having a crush on your dad was the funniest thing EVER! OMG! U evil evil EVIL princess! lmao And the poor son-in-law! *sniff...that poor turtured soul =P
Ohh and and the secret place, preens! I can totally imagine awesome potential scenes there! Good job! I can't wait for crazy magic to take placee lol ! Can't wait to see the ridiculous things the kings and princes do to woo you! =P In other words, can't wait till the next update, WRITE! lmao
PS: You and Kimz are extremely amusing...poor Akki, is he still mad at Kimz lmao?
PPS: I was imagining this FF to be about a princess how goes out to fight evil and discovers her magical powers with the help of an outoftheword handsome friend that she meets on the way lmao! I was expecting intense drama and stuff...this on the otherhand seems like a happy go lucky kinda thing! But then again, it has only yet started...oh man I'm so excited lmao.
PPPS: I know eh..so many but if you have a pm list u missy BETTER add me *hugs, I know you love me
-Avi
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: urworstnitemare

Unreserved on...page...1!!!! Aren't you glad lmao.


Always Avi, am always glad 😆
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: urworstnitemare

OHHH!!! That was ridiculously hilarious! I love how this has that shakespearian feeling to it. Don't ask me how lol, cause I don't know but still...it does. What was that one play called again, "Midsummer's night dream or something like that? (I'm seriosly half-dead atm, so sorry for the crappy comment...)

Lmao, i wnt Avi, i wnt. 😆 Yep thats the play..heh, Its okay 😉
Anyhoo, I love YOU in this FF, and omg, the way you described the fairy having a crush on your dad was the funniest thing EVER! OMG! U evil evil EVIL princess! lmao And the poor son-in-law! *sniff...that poor turtured soul =P
Ooh thank u, am glad to feel the love 😆 im using tht as the humor part in this fic...aha thank thee *bows* do come again for more evilness 😆 I know, the poor guy...hopefully his wife is nicer 😈 muahaha
Ohh and and the secret place, preens! I can totally imagine awesome potential scenes there! Good job! I can't wait for crazy magic to take placee lol ! Can't wait to see the ridiculous things the kings and princes do to woo you! =P In other words, can't wait till the next update, WRITE! lmao
Yes...the secret place 😍 oh u know it, tht spot is gnna be used for more than enuff scenes 😆 I cnt wait eithr! *squeals* hehe ooh wanna give me some ideas for tht? 😆 i have them acting like idiots and using their powers nd being rich to woo me so far 😆 I am writing woman! Goodness...its kinda hard to when im chattin wit farid 😆
PS: You and Kimz are extremely amusing...poor Akki, is he still mad at Kimz lmao?
Aha, thank thee. Oh no, he's happy shappy with her now. 😆
PPS: I was imagining this FF to be about a princess how goes out to fight evil and discovers her magical powers with the help of an outoftheword handsome friend that she meets on the way lmao! I was expecting intense drama and stuff...this on the otherhand seems like a happy go lucky kinda thing! But then again, it has only yet started...oh man I'm so excited lmao.
Aha no, im thinking of making it a princess who finds love but needs to give it up or lose everything she holds dear 🤓 still gtt wrk out some things 😆
PPPS: I know eh..so many but if you have a pm list u missy BETTER add me *hugs, I know you love me
-Avi
Its alrite, i love reading em. Heh. I do have one and i shall add thee rite away madam...dnt kill me 😆 Course i love u. 😆
-Rinkz

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Posted: 16 years ago
#74

Originally posted by: urworstnitemare

reserved reserved reserved...finally I find stuff by you...but will have to unreserve it ALL like next week...eeks sorry! *khan pakaring. (Copyrighted Maddy. Happy Mickey? lmao) *unreserved 😆

This still makes me laugh, reading tht 😆
Yay! My exams are finally ALL over...I got a big ass long list to do for the summer though😡 Yes I said 'ass' I think donkey's are cooler than bums (I've had this convo with Maddy yesterday..so yeah explanation was nessary.)
Yayy congo! Aha, its alrite, curse all u want. 😆 Hm...interesting convo. We shud have it someday 😆
I just realized that there is nothing to 'unreserve' about on this post of yours except that I'm super duper excited!!! If there was a overly giggly-hyper icon...it would go right about HERE! lmao
Haha true that. Someone is extremely hyper today 😉
Oh the disclaimer...🥺 you mean I ...can't bash your work?!?! Where is the fun in THAT!😆 Omg..now I can't see the people in 'action' just great..just great. Thanks bud! Love you too! 😆 anyhoo, I should go read ur first part and actually give a real comment 😆 except I like talking gibberish with you. 😛 It's YOUR fault lmao...for something *hides. -Avi (a bit out of it today so sorry!)
Arre u can bash at me if im writing it wrong or stupidly, not tht something cudnt happen when i've told everyone that its a fantasy, thats wht i meant with the no bashing. Cuz some ppl read the discalimer, still read the story and start bashing the writing even though they've been warned already. 😆 If ur bashing has something to do with me becoming better at writing, then by all means, go and bash. 😆 Ily2 Avi, sorry to spoil the action for ya. Im sure mine and Kimz talks will make up for it 😉 Aha another person whos blaming me, nice. 😆 its alrite, =]
- rinkz

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Posted: 16 years ago
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I- Dinner & Meeting

She stood at the window, looking out at the dropping sun, it hit just over the hilltop, shadowing everything around it in the orange and yellow rays. A sigh left her lips without her notice, how she would love to be out there rather than be stuck here inside with all these people. "Dreaming again?" a soft voice whispered alongside her and she turned to look at the owner. "No...merely reflecting on my day" she replied with a soft smile at her neighbor.

"Oh come on Rinki, we all know you don't want to be here, what did Prem say to you to make you not run off this time?" Meera asked with a smirk, gently rubbing her stomach. She watched as her nanand laughed softly and turned to look back at the sky.

"Really bhabhi, what sane girl would want to be here in the first place?" she rolled her eyes saying this, knowing the answer to that. "An-nd! Prem bhaiya did not say anything to me. I'm staying on my own will'" she trailed off as Meera stared at her with her eyebrow raised. "Okay fine, he said he would give me chocolate if I didn't run away". Meera laughed as she whispered the reason, as if wanting no one else to overhear.

"Ladies, the dinner is about to begin" a servant said before leaving through the doors to the kitchen. Meera looked at her sister-in-law and smiled as they walked towards the grand table that was filling up with people. The king, Suresh, sat at the head with Prem to his right side and Rinki to his left. Meera sat next to her husband and smiled as she felt his hand grab hers under the table.

"You look absolutely wonderful today" Prem whispered to Meera, keeping his eyes on his father who stood up to give a speech while the table was being filled with food. He turned slightly and winked at her with a soft smile. Pink hue stole at her cheeks as she glanced down at the table. She was dressed in a pale blue gown that complimented her figure. He smiled as he gently rubbed the bump that was her stomach at the moment.

They had been together for 2 years, and married for 1 yet she still blushed at the softest compliments he showered her with and the lingering gazes he sent her way made her shudder even to this day. "You don't look bad yourself" she replied, gazing at him in his white shirt and black slacks. He had folded his sleeves till his elbows and she shook her head at this, he had made this a habit and was unable to let go of it. Every shirt he wore had to have the sleeves folded; it was some sort of Prem code.

Prem sat up straight when he felt a kick and glanced across the table at his sister who was playing with her bracelet. She glanced at him and winked before nodding her head at their father who was lightly clearing his throat to get everyone's attention. He inclined his head lightly as thanks and smiled as he watched her shift in her seat. She was dressed in a forest green dress and her hair pulled up in a fancy twisted bun with some strands falling around her face. She hated formal clothing and styles.

"Ladies and Gentleman, if I can please have your attention" everyone turned to look at him, silence echoed through the room suddenly and Rinki still found herself getting surprised at the respect her father received from everyone. "Today is my daughter's birthday dinner party; she will be turning 20 tomorrow. As you all know that is the age of fairies coming in power to rule. My son and daughter-in-law rule here while my daughter shall rule in Orion, our other home" he motioned towards Rinki, who sat there staring at him with shocked eyes.

Everyone cheered and applauded as she turned her eyes to her brother's face, he only stared back with a soft smile and an encouraging nod. Her father continued, "tomorrow at her official birthday party, she will be crowned, so I ask you all to come and watch that...now let us eat and enjoy this dinner party" he sat down as applause ran one last time through the hall. Turning his eyes on his daughter while everyone else began to eat and talk amongst themselves, he was slightly surprised to find her staring at her plate without any emotion.

"What's the matter dear?" he asked her softly, attracting the attention of Prem and Meera. The three watched as she sighed and looked at them with sad eyes, "you're sending me away papa and didn't even tell me before hand?" Suresh was shocked to the say the least. "What? Of course not Rubina. Have you gone crazy? I would never send you away, my child. But Orion needs a strong leader, and I can see that in you. Besides you're only going to be a portal away" he assured her, patting her hand softly.

She only nodded slowly as music began to play in the background. They began to eat and watch as others began to dance and enjoy themselves. After finishing his dinner, Suresh decided to go and talk with other kings in his study, leaving the kids in charge. Prem led Meera to dance while Rinki decided to go to her room and get ready to leave for her spot. Saying one last goodbye to her brother and sister-in-law, she turned and left the room, smiling and waving at those men that tried to stop her with flirty gestures.

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She exited her bathroom, wrapped in her black robe with wet hair clinging to her face and neck. She walked over to her dresser and began to brush her hair when suddenly noises fell on her ears. Turning to the window and pushing it open, she leaned her head out of the frame and saw some soldiers with her brother running around, yelling to one another, with weapons in their hands. Prem glanced up and motioned for her to close the window, his face screwed in an angry expression, she followed his orders and pulled the curtains over the window.

A knock sounded on the door and Meera's voice came through "Rinki, I'm coming in" before it was pushed open and she entered. Still dressed as she was during the dinner, she moved across the room and hugged the confused girl. "Bhabhi! What's going on?" Rinki asked her eyes narrowed as she watched Meera sit down on the bed, wringing her hands nervously.

"There was another body found" Meera whispered through the silent room, as if fearing who might hear them. She watched quietly as Rinki's eyes widened and she gasped softly, her hand covering her mouth as she staggered back slightly. "Wh-who?" she asked, not wanting to know but knowing it was needed to be known.

"Mary-Ann, the Wither's daughter" Meera answered, closing her eyes softly. She knew that Rinki had been slightly close to the girl, they had been friends as little girls, though that friendship had died as they grew up, it still hurt to know that the girl you spent hours with was now gone. "How?" came a soft voice, cracking slightly before regaining the usual strength.

"Same as always--a bite wound on the shoulder, claw marks on the arms and neck broken'" Meera replied quietly, her eyes on the other girl whose face lost its color rapidly.

"You should get some rest bhabhi," Rinki said, leading Meera to the door and hugging her good night. Meera looked at her carefully, she seemed angry and sad, but not desperately that she would have to worry about her doing something idiotic. With a soft goodbye, Meera left for her and Prem's room. Closing the door and leaning her head against it, Rinki sighed sadly. This was the 5th body in just 8 weeks. It was getting almost frightening to go out without soldiers guarding people.

A few minutes went by, the curtains shuffled against the nightly wind and she turned around, her eyes on the ground. Trailing up, she focused on the window, the curtains were pulled open. She cocked her head to the side and wondered out loud, "I closed these, then why are they open again? If Prem bhaiya sees them, he's going to start screaming at me" she huffed as she moved away from the door.

Movement behind the curtains caused her to pause and glare slightly, "who's there!? I have a knife and I am not afraid to use it" she said, looking at the knife from her table where it lay in a plate with apples. The curtain was pushed to the side and a man stepped out from the dark into the light, his black hair tousled. His dark brown eyes stared into hers with curiosity, they ran over her body and a smirk came upon his lips as he tilted his head lightly to the side.

She stared at him with wide eyes, wondering where he came from, as his eyes trailed down her body, she realized she was only wearing her robe, her hair was still wet and trailing on her neck. She crossed her arms and glared at him with her lips stretched in a frown. "Who the hell are you and what are you doing in my room?" she asked, huffing as his eyes stayed on her lips rather than her eyes. "Hey! My eyes are up here genius, now answer me before I scream and call the guards!" she growled lightly as he finally turned his eyes to hers.

He didn't speak though, a wince came across his face before disappearing in a flash, making her wonder if it was just her eyes playing a game on her or he had really winced. Her eyes trailed over to his shoulder where the shirt was cut and blood stained the edges. Forgetting about everything, she wandered over to him and pulled him by the hand to the bed, pushing him down to sit. He blinked and stared at her back as she ran into the bathroom and came with a small bowl filled with water and some towels, she placed the items on the bed next to him before going through her cabinet for the first aid kit.

"Take your shirt off" she commanded him, standing in front of him with her bangs falling across her cheek. He raised his eyebrow while she placed her hands on her hips and nodded her head at his shoulder. "Take it off or else I will" she stated raising her brow back at him.

He shook his head and stood up, she stepped back to give him room as he placed his hands on the bottom of his shirt and pulled it over his head. She gulped lightly as his chiseled body came in view; smooth skin laid over muscles that stretched with his every move stared back at her. Looking up, she noticed him smirking down at her with amusement in his eyes. She barely reached his shoulder standing so she lightly placed her hand on his chest and pushed him back, he didn't move and kept smirking at her.

She rolled her eyes at him and said, "Sit down already, I don't have all day for you". He sat down while watching her with wondering eyes as she leaned closer and began to wipe the blood from the cut. Her bottom lip was being bit on while a crease came between her brows as she concentrated on her work. Soon she had bandaged his shoulder and began to put the supplies away; when she came back he was standing up and pulling the shirt over his head.

"Listen, get that checked over by a doctor...I'm not that good at bandaging people" she told him softly as he inclined his head to the side, still watching her with his intense eyes. Noises came from outside her door; she turned her head away and looked at the door which was shoved open harshly. There in the doorway stood Prem with some guards. "Bhaiya! What is the matter with you?" she asked him, glaring with her arms crossed at his disturbing entrance.

"I'm sorry Rinki. But did a man come in here?" Prem asked her, walking inside the room, relaxing slightly. She turned her head to the side and noticed that the man she had just bandaged was gone. "Erm, no. Why? Should someone have?" she asked turning her eyes over the room carefully, wondering where the man had gone and so silently too.

"Well I hope not. It's a man that we're trying to capture; we believe he is the killer. If you hear or see anything out of the usual on the grounds, find me quickly" Prem told her, softly patting her head before turning to leave the room. "'the killer?" she whispered, a flash of fear entering her. Prem turned back to look at her with confused eyes before they widened. "Don't worry, we'll catch him" he assured her before closing the door behind him.

She stood in a silent room, her eyes still wide with wonder, had she really just bandaged a killer? The killer that had taken lives of so many young women? A rustle alerted her and she looked to the side, where the man came out from behind her bed. His eyes were now angry and filled with something raw, something that scared her but also...also making her want to know more about him. She stared at him with accusing eyes, opening her mouth to scream when he crossed the room with long steps and placed a hand over her mouth.

They stared into one another's eyes, hers accusing while his were angry. Time seemed to stop around them as they became lost in another world. His hand slowly moved away from her lips, caressing them lightly without intention. She shivered slightly, not breaking her eye contact with him. What was this? Why wasn't she yelling for help? She asked herself mentally, her fear seemed to have left her.

He stared at the girl; Rinki that man had called her, why had she lied to her brother about him. She had protected him even if it was without knowing that he was the one who was the killer of those girls. But he could see the anger, mostly at herself for not realizing who he could've been, pain and fear in her eyes as he stepped away from her. Would she scream now? Let him get caught and possibly hanged for his crimes? No, he couldn't allow her to do that. But he can't hurt her, she had saved his life. He owed it to her now.

Walking backwards slowly, his heart ached as he took those steps away from her to the window. Not knowing the reason behind it, he frowned softly, wondering what could have caused this ache in his heart. She watched him as he turned and swiftly jumped from the window and ran to the window sill to watch him race away from the castle, the guards not noticing. His last words rang through her ears and she sighed softly.

"We will meet again...Rinki"

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Hey guys, sorry for the long wait. Was writing bit by bit for everything and finally got around to finishing this part. Hope you enjoyed.

Comment or press the like button, please.

- Rinki

Edited by ~Rinki~ - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#76
here!

*edited*

I had fun reading peoples shockingness. 😆 But yesh! Preet is the killer. ☺️ Don't you just love it when the hero is actually the villian? *muahaha* Just like always, this was a brilliant chapter. And I love the color, and the way you did the I - Dinner & Meeting. It was smexyyy!

You already know how good you are describingg stuff, so I'm just going to leave that part out... or save it for later when I feel like making you blush or something. 😆 Loved the convo between you and Meera, showed how well she knows you and all. She's kinda like your relief from all the royal-ness and all, rite? And that thing about Prem making you stay in that place is funny. You really don't want to be there, do you? So him kidnapping you will actually be a good thing for you. 🤣 Omg there should totally be a scene with him being like "go back you your place" and you be like "What? NO! I don't wanna go back, I'll be a good girl promise... but keep me kidnapped" 🤣

Prem's such a naughty boy, flirting with his pregnant wife. *shakes head* I seriously thought you would tease Prem instead of help him infront of his father dearest by not getting caught romanc-ing. And woot woot! Rinki's gonna be taking care of a whole place by herself! I'm so proud of you rinki *pats head* Even though I wouldn't live in that place. *aheemm*

Aww... poor Meera, she's all scared and then your scared and sad for your friend too. *hugs* Its kay.. I'm sure the girl actually enjoyed her death, I mean who wouldn't? Preet... claw mark on shoulder... ahem... ☺️ I would totally be ready to die by him... Argh, hate that he's my brother. 😆

OMG! How smexy what that? EEKKK!

Preet.
Rinki.
Robe.
Bandages.

LOVED IT!

Specially the way you were all attitudey towards him even when you were bandaging him. I could totally imagine him coming all cloes to you when he was taking his shirt off, I think I loved that gesture of his. *ahem* It was so smexxyy! Eek... The ending was so dramatic. "we will meet again" But you know thats what I love.

Go, write, more! 😃

kimz

Edited by kimmu - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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mine! 😛

*edited*

I've told you about a gazillion times that I loved this part yes? 😳 Cus I did! 😛 It provided such insight to the story! 😳

@Shabz: Yes...Meera bhabhi's very happy with the story! 😉 😳 I get Prem whose a prince! *swoons* 😳

Anyways...onto proper comments, I loved the relation between you and me! *hugs* So real! 😉 And *sighs* A bump on the stomach...😆 I feel cute with it in the story for some reason 😛 (don't ask!)

I loved the way you described the whole setting for when you went to your room, got all serious and tense and then of course I come in *rolls eyes* worrywort* 😆 Anyways...that's how I am....so you really got the gist of it! 😉

The entire meeting between you two though....HAD ME SQUEALING! 😃 I loved the tense-ness in the whole part and the attitude! 😉😳 I have to tell you just visually imagining it had me grinning like an idiot and when it's not me...or Prem even ....that's VERY hard to do! 😊 Anyways... I want more...AND AND AND..............................................


I want it soon!!! 😃 (wow...it's actually quite fun to do that! 😉

Love you loads,

Meera😳
Edited by indiandoll89 - 16 years ago
Posted: 16 years ago
#78
You just re-invented the name of cliffhangers. How could you leave it there? HOW?

Well I for one, know that Meera bhabhi *smirks* loved it na? 😆

RINKIIIIIII! Are you going to fall in love with the killer? Oh that would be so ☺️ Great concept - I LOVE I!

--shabz
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Wait, wait, wait... Preet is the killer? Preet?

I shall edit this.

*edited*

I'm still in a state of disbelief right now. If Preet has been killing people. Ohmygod, how is that possible? Unless those people deserved it, then that's okay. (Kinda, well, then I'm more likely to forgive Preet)

But why have people been dying? Why is RInki so sad? Where are the fun bits Rinkz?! I need The Prat and The Vixen. They're fun to read, this has been a bit too serious so far. 😆 I still love it, but come on, there have been no answers to any of my questions!

Love,
Radz

Edited by Anhdara13 - 16 years ago

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