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Posted: 16 years ago
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Well here goes nothing.....
Guzaarish.
Taqdeer kay korey panney per
Haathon kii lakeeron key ander
Kuch likha hai sab yeh kehtey hain
Jaaney kyun kehtey rehtey hain
Main laakh chahun per parh na sakun
Kiya likha hai in lakeeron main
Rekhaon kii zanjeeron main
Ik aas hai jagi, himmat hai bandhi
Kiya sunta hoga rab mera
Aankhon kii chubhan dil kii yeh jalan
Kiya dekh raha hoga woh sada
Jo raat aankhon main kat ti hai
Jo din chup chaap siraktey hain
Jo aankhain nam ho jaati hain
To dil sey aah nikalti hai
Jo saarey diye roshan hain kiye
Unki lou hai ik chehra liye
Woh chehra hai beynaam magar
Dil key ander kahin chup ker
Woh mujhko paas bulata hai
Merey saath samay bitaata hai
Yeh khuwahish hai yeh guzaarish hai
Woh chehra kahey "Main bas tera!"
Baarish kii thandi boondon main
Suraj kii pehli kirnon main
Jo thaamey haath chaley mera
Saaye kii tarah, badal kii tarah
Jo dil key raaz sabhi sun ley
Jo aankhon key moti chun ley
Woh meet mila dey mujhko bhi
Woh geet batla dey mujhko bhi
In aankhon main jo rahey sada
In honton per muskaaye sada
Woh naam ho mera or uska
Rishta ho itna pavitr humara
Keh dekh ker kahey yeh jahaan saara
Taqdeer ney likha hai yeh milan
Jo chaley ga ab janmo janam!
A seriously lame attempt at Urdu poetry all credit to Ghalib and Rimz.... thank you Rimz for making me think again.....
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Posted: 16 years ago
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What are you on about!?!?!? It is sooooo nice!! So beautifully written and the meaning behind it was so amazingly portrayed!! You are seriously talented!! If i were you, i would open a thread were you could post your poems!! I hope to see more in the future from you hun!!! Great job!!! *hug*
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Posted: 16 years ago
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OMG, Munee, from what I could make out from my tooti phutti urdu , the poem is soo beautiful! Esp the last lines, =lovely!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: blackdaughter

What are you on about!?!?!? It is sooooo nice!! So beautifully written and the meaning behind it was so amazingly portrayed!! You are seriously talented!! If i were you, i would open a thread were you could post your poems!! I hope to see more in the future from you hun!!! Great job!!! *hug*

Aw Maddy thanks a ton sweety I've written a lot of things earlier but never tried a hand at poetry in urdu... or hindi. Yes well I'm glad you got the meaning in the poem..... thanks for the hug... 🤗
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Yas-

OMG, Munee, from what I could make out from my tooti phutti urdu , the poem is soo beautiful! Esp the last lines, =lovely!

Yas I noticed you changed your Id... aw thanks for the appraisal and I'm so happy you liked it.... yeah the last lines were kinda hopeful.... 😊
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Posted: 16 years ago
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waah kya baat hain munee superb
i really love it
great job

anywways i have sent u a pm
did u read it????????
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Posted: 16 years ago
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aaww.. vaah yaar! ur gud at urdu aswell!! hehe Keep It Up!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: pyaar_siya

waah kya baat hain munee superb
i really love it
great job

anywways i have sent u a pm
did u read it????????

Thanks Siya and yes I have answered your pm.... 😊
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: xx-ReenO-xx

aaww.. vaah yaar! ur gud at urdu aswell!! hehe Keep It Up!

Thank you Reeno am happy to know my efforts are appraised. 😊
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Munee...Munee....Munee.... Just one word >>> Splendid!!!!
You truely r a gifted writer... That was so lovely n awesome...
Good job hun!!! Keep it up!!

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