part 1...what do you think?

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Posted: 19 years ago
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ok, TD is going nowhere, so i'm writing my own version...please tell how it is and rate it out of 10....so here it goes...

i'm starting from where we are now...2D's penniless, Dish living in PK's house with the rest of her family...

America...

Mr. Mehta quickened his pace as he walked along the corrior...he knew that miss. Natasha wouldn't like it if he didn't get the file to her in time... he looked at his watch and breathed a sigh of relief, precisely 1:30...he wouldn't be late.

Natasha (N): Come in...

she answered to the feeble knock on the door...

N: Mr. Mehta...file please...

an elegant hand , recently manicured, indicated to the sleek black file in Mr. Mehta's hand...as she took it her minds raced with a million thoughts...wondering how her family would be at this moment. crossing her fingers she opened the file and scanned the first page.

that was enough...it gave her all the news she needed, she stood up abruptly, her long tresses falling over her shoulders,

Mr. M: Natasha ji...aap teek tho hai?

even before he had opened his mouth he knew how stupid the question sounded... Natasha's lively face was now pale...her eyes which always carried sadness were filled with horror and grief...

this coudn't be...she must have read wrong...but what other explanation could there be...she hadn't been able to gather any information about her family...and know she knew why...

N: Mr. Mehta...abhi jaye aur mereliye ticket book karvaye...meh aaj shaam hi india bhawaz jaa rahi hu.

MR. M: madam, aap yeh kya ker rahi hai...india?...par aap ke appointments..meetings..in sab ka kya hoga?

Natasha turned to face her personal assisstant, her eyes now held fiery anger...

N: Mr. Malhotra, ab kab se mujhe jante hai?...sare meetings, sare appointments cancel kejhiye, martha ko phone kar ke kahiye mera bag pack ker ne ke liye, aur abhi jakar ticket book kar wiye...mere parivar ko meri zaroorat hai!...

she yelled...it was time for her to go to her family...her birth place which she had left all those years ago...it was time for Natasha Bhosle to go back home...

ok... the startings a bit rubbish..but please read and tell how it was!

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harsy thumbnail
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Posted: 19 years ago
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arey yaar story tho achi hai....lekin yeah Natasha Bhonsale kaun hai....? 😕 Ohhhhh......so its a fan fiction.....nice......continue ur version...it was nice..... 👏 👏 👏
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Posted: 19 years ago
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Nibbles, achha laga,thanks.

Please let Natasha remain positive, Guhas ki tarah usko flip-flop mat karwana. Dk ko jaldi jail se bahar nikalo.
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Posted: 19 years ago
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Thanks, it was fun reading it.
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Posted: 19 years ago
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that was brilliant!! 👏 👏
You should definitely continue!!
And yea, like mona siad, let this Natasha remain positive...and let her be a clever one..not a dumb and easily-taken-for-a-ride type..
But your version is definitely good!! 👏
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Posted: 19 years ago
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it was really gud! continue 👏

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